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#595543
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How do I start living life?
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I am 20 years old and have been going to an engineering college in the Southeastern United States for the past two years.

I am a commuter student. This has severely hampered my ability to make friends or get to know people on campus because I can only really pop in there for the duration of my classes and then head back home (which is about 15 miles away). I have never been a fan of playing sports because I have never been any good at them.

I have been trying to look for a job around where I live...as an unskilled young person with essentially no previous experience and no real references to vouch for me.

Also, I am a virgin. I've never even kissed a girl before. I am not willing to hire a prostitute because from every account I have ever heard, that does not really change anything besides the size of one's wallet.

In recent months I've improved my appearance with vigorous exercises and changing to a more stylish wardrobe. I am by no stretch of the imagination "fat" like I used to be, though I still think I am most of the time. I am told that I fret too much about my appearance, or that I have the bodily self-image of an anorexic. I call BS on that. I am not anorexic. I don't skip meals.

The only times I really have any fun are once every couple of years when I visit siblings who live abroad and once every couple of months when my two best friends from high school come back here for a few days whenever they take breaks from their college classes. I've only ever been to a single party at my college and that felt like a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity for somebody like me. It led to nothing.

The only person I've lived with for the past ten years is my dad. And he's gone through a lot of personal shock and has just been working a home business where he doesn't really have any constant circle of friends or acquaintances around him either. I was separated from the rest of my family at an early age. I don't live in the dorms on my campus because of expense reasons.

I've spent basically my whole life watching others have more fun and get more real-world exposure than me. I feel like I am waiting to actually start living my life. I was under the impression that college was gong to be better than high school, but now I am actually wishing that I could go back to high school. At least then I had three or four people I could call my friends. When I see on Facebook that people I knew, or at least saw a few times, in high school moved into their colleges' dorms a couple of years ago and now have lots of good times to tell stories about...well I honestly want to snap their bloody necks because I have *zero* stories to tell about wild, crazy fun times I've had at college. All of *my* drinking is done alone in front of my computer playing games on Steam or with myself.

To boil things down, here is an average day in my life at the moment...
Wake up-----Work out------Commute-------Classes------Home----Get hammered and please myself-------sleep

I've tried to join a clubs on campus but none of them have panned to anything worth remembering because they either haven't been that interesting or they have been disbanded for various reasons. I am very hesitant to join any club on-campus that involves physical activity like HvZ, Nerf club, or some similar sport because I have a serious mental block about physical competition with others my own age due to my extreme ineptitude in the past with sports.

When I say I am no good at sports, I am not exaggerating. It's not a case of "oh he lags a little bit behind so he might need an extra push every now and then, but otherwise he is competent." It's more like if I am on your basketball team, you team *will* lose. You will lose so hard that your head will explode in a shower of gibs and every member of your family will spontaneously combust. At least that's the impression I got from middle school sports; I haven't tried playing any sports since then because no-one has forced me. I keep fit with stationary bikes, ellipticals, weights, treadmills, etc. The only kind of recreational physical activity I have enjoyed so far has been martial arts. I haven't had much practice at any of the styles, it's just that I prefer hitting people to hitting anything else.

How do I break all of this? I ask that no-one give me any religious answers.

 

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#595473
Topic
How do I start living life?
Time

 

I am 20 years old and have been going to an engineering college in the Southeastern United States for the past two years.

I am a commuter student. This has severely hampered my ability to make friends or get to know people on campus because I can only really pop in there for the duration of my classes and then head back home (which is about 15 miles away). I have never been a fan of playing sports because I have never been any good at them.

I have been trying to look for a job around where I live...as an unskilled young person with essentially no previous experience and no real references to vouch for me.

Also, I am a virgin. I've never even kissed a girl before. I am not willing to hire a prostitute because from every account I have ever heard, that does not really change anything besides the size of one's wallet.

In recent months I've improved my appearance with vigorous exercises and changing to a more stylish wardrobe. I am by no stretch of the imagination "fat" like I used to be, though I still think I am most of the time. I am told that I fret too much about my appearance, or that I have the bodily self-image of an anorexic. I call BS on that. I am not anorexic. I don't skip meals.

The only times I really have any fun are once every couple of years when I visit siblings who live abroad and once every couple of months when my two best friends from high school come back here for a few days whenever they take breaks from their college classes. I've only ever been to a single party at my college and that felt like a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity for somebody like me. It led to nothing.

The only person I've lived with for the past ten years is my dad. And he's gone through a lot of personal shock and has just been working a home business where he doesn't really have any constant circle of friends or acquaintances around him either. I was separated from the rest of my family at an early age. I don't live in the dorms on my campus because of expense reasons.

I've spent basically my whole life watching others have more fun and get more real-world exposure than me. I feel like I am waiting to actually start living my life. I was under the impression that college was gong to be better than high school, but now I am actually wishing that I could go back to high school. At least then I had three or four people I could call my friends. When I see on Facebook that people I knew, or at least saw a few times, in high school moved into their colleges' dorms a couple of years ago and now have lots of good times to tell stories about...well I honestly want to snap their bloody necks because I have *zero* stories to tell about wild, crazy fun times I've had at college. All of *my* drinking is done alone in front of my computer playing games on Steam or with myself.

To boil things down, here is an average day in my life at the moment...
Wake up-----Work out------Commute-------Classes------Home----Get hammered and please myself-------sleep

I've tried to join a clubs on campus but none of them have panned to anything worth remembering because they either haven't been that interesting or they have been disbanded for various reasons. I am very hesitant to join any club on-campus that involves physical activity like HvZ, Nerf club, or some similar sport because I have a serious mental block about physical competition with others my own age due to my extreme ineptitude in the past with sports.

When I say I am no good at sports, I am not exaggerating. It's not a case of "oh he lags a little bit behind so he might need an extra push every now and then, but otherwise he is competent." It's more like if I am on your basketball team, you team *will* lose. You will lose so hard that your head will explode in a shower of gibs and every member of your family will spontaneously combust. At least that's the impression I got from middle school sports; I haven't tried playing any sports since then because no-one has forced me. I keep fit with stationary bikes, ellipticals, weights, treadmills, etc. The only kind of recreational physical activity I have enjoyed so far has been martial arts. I haven't had much practice at any of the styles, it's just that I prefer hitting people to hitting anything else.

How do I break all of this? I ask that no-one give me any religious answers.

 

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#595472
Topic
How do I start living life?
Time

 

I am 20 years old and have been going to an engineering college in the Southeastern United States for the past two years.

I am a commuter student. This has severely hampered my ability to make friends or get to know people on campus because I can only really pop in there for the duration of my classes and then head back home (which is about 15 miles away). I have never been a fan of playing sports because I have never been any good at them.

I have been trying to look for a job around where I live...as an unskilled young person with essentially no previous experience and no real references to vouch for me.

Also, I am a virgin. I've never even kissed a girl before. I am not willing to hire a prostitute because from every account I have ever heard, that does not really change anything besides the size of one's wallet.

In recent months I've improved my appearance with vigorous exercises and changing to a more stylish wardrobe. I am by no stretch of the imagination "fat" like I used to be, though I still think I am most of the time. I am told that I fret too much about my appearance, or that I have the bodily self-image of an anorexic. I call BS on that. I am not anorexic. I don't skip meals.

The only times I really have any fun are once every couple of years when I visit siblings who live abroad and once every couple of months when my two best friends from high school come back here for a few days whenever they take breaks from their college classes. I've only ever been to a single party at my college and that felt like a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity for somebody like me. It led to nothing.

The only person I've lived with for the past ten years is my dad. And he's gone through a lot of personal shock and has just been working a home business where he doesn't really have any constant circle of friends or acquaintances around him either. I was separated from the rest of my family at an early age. I don't live in the dorms on my campus because of expense reasons.

I've spent basically my whole life watching others have more fun and get more real-world exposure than me. I feel like I am waiting to actually start living my life. I was under the impression that college was gong to be better than high school, but now I am actually wishing that I could go back to high school. At least then I had three or four people I could call my friends. When I see on Facebook that people I knew, or at least saw a few times, in high school moved into their colleges' dorms a couple of years ago and now have lots of good times to tell stories about...well I honestly want to snap their bloody necks because I have *zero* stories to tell about wild, crazy fun times I've had at college. All of *my* drinking is done alone in front of my computer playing games on Steam or with myself.

To boil things down, here is an average day in my life at the moment...
Wake up-----Work out------Commute-------Classes------Home----Get hammered and please myself-------sleep

I've tried to join a clubs on campus but none of them have panned to anything worth remembering because they either haven't been that interesting or they have been disbanded for various reasons. I am very hesitant to join any club on-campus that involves physical activity like HvZ, Nerf club, or some similar sport because I have a serious mental block about physical competition with others my own age due to my extreme ineptitude in the past with sports.

When I say I am no good at sports, I am not exaggerating. It's not a case of "oh he lags a little bit behind so he might need an extra push every now and then, but otherwise he is competent." It's more like if I am on your basketball team, you team *will* lose. You will lose so hard that your head will explode in a shower of gibs and every member of your family will spontaneously combust. At least that's the impression I got from middle school sports; I haven't tried playing any sports since then because no-one has forced me. I keep fit with stationary bikes, ellipticals, weights, treadmills, etc. The only kind of recreational physical activity I have enjoyed so far has been martial arts. I haven't had much practice at any of the styles, it's just that I prefer hitting people to hitting anything else.

How do I break all of this? I ask that no-one give me any religious answers.

 

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#595471
Topic
How do I start living life?
Time

 

I am 20 years old and have been going to an engineering college in the Southeastern United States for the past two years.

I am a commuter student. This has severely hampered my ability to make friends or get to know people on campus because I can only really pop in there for the duration of my classes and then head back home (which is about 15 miles away). I have never been a fan of playing sports because I have never been any good at them.

I have been trying to look for a job around where I live...as an unskilled young person with essentially no previous experience and no real references to vouch for me.

Also, I am a virgin. I've never even kissed a girl before. I am not willing to hire a prostitute because from every account I have ever heard, that does not really change anything besides the size of one's wallet.

In recent months I've improved my appearance with vigorous exercises and changing to a more stylish wardrobe. I am by no stretch of the imagination "fat" like I used to be, though I still think I am most of the time. I am told that I fret too much about my appearance, or that I have the bodily self-image of an anorexic. I call BS on that. I am not anorexic. I don't skip meals.

The only times I really have any fun are once every couple of years when I visit siblings who live abroad and once every couple of months when my two best friends from high school come back here for a few days whenever they take breaks from their college classes. I've only ever been to a single party at my college and that felt like a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity for somebody like me. It led to nothing.

The only person I've lived with for the past ten years is my dad. And he's gone through a lot of personal shock and has just been working a home business where he doesn't really have any constant circle of friends or acquaintances around him either. I was separated from the rest of my family at an early age. I don't live in the dorms on my campus because of expense reasons.

I've spent basically my whole life watching others have more fun and get more real-world exposure than me. I feel like I am waiting to actually start living my life. I was under the impression that college was gong to be better than high school, but now I am actually wishing that I could go back to high school. At least then I had three or four people I could call my friends. When I see on Facebook that people I knew, or at least saw a few times, in high school moved into their colleges' dorms a couple of years ago and now have lots of good times to tell stories about...well I honestly want to snap their bloody necks because I have *zero* stories to tell about wild, crazy fun times I've had at college. All of *my* drinking is done alone in front of my computer playing games on Steam or with myself.

To boil things down, here is an average day in my life at the moment...
Wake up-----Work out------Commute-------Classes------Home----Get hammered and please myself-------sleep

I've tried to join a clubs on campus but none of them have panned to anything worth remembering because they either haven't been that interesting or they have been disbanded for various reasons. I am very hesitant to join any club on-campus that involves physical activity like HvZ, Nerf club, or some similar sport because I have a serious mental block about physical competition with others my own age due to my extreme ineptitude in the past with sports.

When I say I am no good at sports, I am not exaggerating. It's not a case of "oh he lags a little bit behind so he might need an extra push every now and then, but otherwise he is competent." It's more like if I am on your basketball team, you team *will* lose. You will lose so hard that your head will explode in a shower of gibs and every member of your family will spontaneously combust. At least that's the impression I got from middle school sports; I haven't tried playing any sports since then because no-one has forced me. I keep fit with stationary bikes, ellipticals, weights, treadmills, etc. The only kind of recreational physical activity I have enjoyed so far has been martial arts. I haven't had much practice at any of the styles, it's just that I prefer hitting people to hitting anything else.

How do I break all of this? I ask that no-one give me any religious answers.

 

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#591963
Topic
A Post-ROTJ Trilogy: What's To Come for the Big Three, And More
Time

Jeni's lightsaber is blue. Primarily to differentiate from her uncle Luke's green lightsaber and the orange lightsaber used by the trilogy's ultimate antagonist.

Leia never uses a lightsaber, though she has substantial Force experience by this point in the series. Her Force-sensitivity manifests itself as telepathy, empathy, and meditation. She takes the "Professor X" approach to her powers.

As for the protagonist's name, I decided on Jeni (at least for the time being) because it sounded "normal", like Luke. Though I see where you are coming from, DuracellEnergizer. Again, like I said, it's open to change! 

Admittedly I was being a little lazy with her name. "Jeni" was my name for Anakin's wife and the mother of twins back when I was attempting a prequel re-write.

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#591920
Topic
A Post-ROTJ Trilogy: What's To Come for the Big Three, And More
Time

How are you folks finding it so far?

This is only a first draft of my outline for ROTJ2; there is some wiggle room in terms of characters and the nitty-gritty of events, but the overall route that I want to take towards the movie's end goal is pretty much already formed. The other two films to come, however, are not quite set in stone beyond a few basic plot points that I want to have happen in them.

The only existing Star Wars element that is completely canon with this trilogy is the OT. I don't want to get ahead too much, but there are certain revelations later in this trilogy that contradict the events of the Lucas PT to the point that those films could not possibly have taken place in the same canon as this trilogy.

Some parts of the EU are "broad strokes" canon with my trilogy. 

Any suggestions or questions would be welcome!

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#591144
Topic
A Post-ROTJ Trilogy: What's To Come for the Big Three, And More
Time

Cut to the planet Raxus Prime. It is a junkyard world. Vast industrial complexes belch noxious gases into the atmosphere, blanketing everything on the surface in dust and soot. Endless tracts of land serve as dumps for scrap metal and obsolete technological artifacts, such as wrecked ships. A fortune can be made in these fields by an opportunistic scavenger with a death wish.
 
A distant cloaked figure watches from a rocky outcropping as Jeni lands her fighter at a spaceport.

She pays the stationmaster a fee and, with Zero trailing close behind, proceeds into the polluted cityscape with her eyes focused on her tracking beacon locator. When she gets to the neighboring port, the one where her target landed his vessel, Jeni observes the Talon Strider merchant, Dagman, leaving his ship with a bag of Isis crystals slung over his shoulder. With his other hand, he examines the coins kept in a pouch slung on his belt. It is obvious that Dagman intends to sell the crystals at a market.
 
Dagman goes to a pair of Weequay security guards at the entrance of a cantina. He mutters something to the two goons which waives the entry fee. Jeni appears from an alleyway and tries to pass by the pair, but they detect her and brandish their vibro-pikes. In the Weequay language, the guards yell an angry curse at her and demand an entry fee. She cannot afford it and tells them that she “knows the boss”. The guards won’t have it; they laugh at Jeni’s attempt at subterfuge. Then they tell her she can come into the pub if she forfeits Zero, an offer she sternly refuses.
 
Jeni decides to take a detour through a field of wreckage. With her lightsaber she cuts a hole through a security fence large enough to allow her and Zero to pass through. They navigate their way through a windswept landscape, their view of the horizon blocked by battered old landspeeders and piles of deactivated droids. After a while she is beheld by a familiar sight. Ruins of a ship with a semi-circular engine section and docking clamps on the front end, complete with a sensor dish extending upwards on the port side. The hull is dotted with dents and blaster marks.

 

Jeni realizes that she has found the remains of the Millenium Falcon.

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#590672
Topic
A Post-ROTJ Trilogy: What's To Come for the Big Three, And More
Time

 

Lando tells her not to pursue the Striders, out of fear that she will encounter the same fate as her father. Jeni nods assent, actually intending to pursue the pirates and destroy them down to a man. Later she goes to the capitol building’s command tower and obtains information regarding the location of one of the Strider vessels. During the battle above Isis, a Republic starfighter had attached a tracking beacon to one of the pirates’ ships shortly before it jumped into hyperspace. It is Jeni’s only lead.

She downloads the information into her droid agent “Zero”, pointing her to the planet Raxus Prime. It is listed as a junkyard planet, mainly used as a refuse bin by other wealthier worlds. Jeni docks Zero into the back of her fighter, a vessel she acquired during her training as a Jedi apprentice, and enters the coordinates for Raxus Prime into the navcomputer. The glint of Isis’ crystal mines can be seen even as her craft breaks atmosphere. She jumps into hyperspace.

Meanwhile, on a lush jungle world, Tyrhevius sets his personal gunship down on a landing pad of a spaceport. Tangled masses of vines and nests of local fauna can be seen on the outside of the structure. The brigand greets his superior Hossk in the master's quarters. The reptiloid boss bares his razor-sharp fangs in elation at the news that his men have obtained a large batch of Isis crystals. He tells Tyrhevius that their long-pursued plan is finally coming to fruition. 

 

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#585363
Topic
A Post-ROTJ Trilogy: What's To Come for the Big Three, And More
Time

The two Jedi dart about between crystal formations, expertly gunning down pirates with their blaster pistols. The pair enters close combat range. Luke chokes a Duros mercenary with the Force and kicks him at his comrades with a burst of incredible strength, knocking several Striders out cold.

Jeni charges the leader of the pack, deflecting blaster bolts with her lighsaber. She leaps at Tyrhevius, her blade clutched in her right hand, but Tyrhevius swiftly whips out a sonic rifle and fires a full-power burst. Jeni misses her opponent upon landing, clutching her head in deafened agony. Taking advantage of Luke running over to attend to his niece, Tyrhevius beats a hasty retreat.

Soon after, Republic guardsmen enter the area, securing a way for Luke and Jeni to exit the caves.

Later, in Isis' capitol building, Jeni and Luke are healing in the medical center when they are greeted by Lando Calrissian. Being the governor of the Anoat Sector (the area of the galaxy containing Isis), Lando has come to oversee the recovery efforts from the Talon Strider attack. After a warm greeting from his old friend Luke, it is revealed that the Talon Striders have been stepping up their efforts in the sector. Jeni is able to use her developing Force abilities to sense that Luke and Lando have a strangely specific apprehension of the Talon Striders. With recoveries complete, Luke tells the two that he will be on Corellia, where he will continue his own meditations as well as Leia's training in advanced telepathy.

After Luke leaves, Jeni asks Lando if there is anything in particular she ought to know about these bandits. Following careful deliberation, Lando reveals the truth to Jeni. Her father Han did not die in his sleep of Verdanthian Splitroot disease...as her mother Leia had told her twelve years previously. Rather, he and the other three crew members of the Falcon fought against and were all killed by Hossk's Talon Striders.

For a few moments, Jeni is unable to process the gravity of what Lando has told her.

But it is not long before her spirit develops a fiery and vitriolic thirst for revenge, the first tinge of the Dark Side.

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#584038
Topic
A Post-ROTJ Trilogy: What's To Come for the Big Three, And More
Time

Somewhat-important retcon: Leia isn't Chief of State until Episodes VIII and IX.

Here is the first part of the film's opening sequence. It cuts off in the middle of the action, which is why it might seem to end abruptly. I'll add more in further posts. 

 

The film opens on a pirate cruiser belonging to the syndicate called the Talon Striders. In an interrogation room on the vessel, Hossk, the Trandoshan leader of the Talon Striders, interrogates Magah, owner of a crystal mine on the planet Isis. Magah pleads for his own life as Hossk beats out of him the reason why he has skimped on protection payments. Just after executing Magah with a blaster pistol, Hossk gives an order to his second-in-command: the Talon Striders are to raid Magah's mine on Isis for any and all crystals.

Cut to the planet Isis. In a subterranean cave, with glittering crystals jutting out at odd angles on all surfaces, Luke Skywalker, stands besides Jeni as she telekinetically pieces together her lightsaber. As the final piece locks into place, Luke congratulates her, telling her that she has taken a great step forward in the path of the Jedi. He is about to knight her with his own lightsaber, when suddenly a tremor reverberates through the walls of the cavern and many crystals are seen shaking. The sounds of blaster fire are heard in the distance.

Two of Hossk's agents, Dagman (a greedy prospector and merchant of the Talon Striders) and Tyrhevius (a tough-as-nails mercenary employed by Hossk), lead a group of Talon Strider mercs into the crystal mines, gunning down any opposition they find and stealing valuable crystals. The pirates use their vibro-weapons to strike down any New Republic troopers in melee range. 

Tyrhevius receives a message on his commlink from Hossk: a New Republic battle group has been dispatched to deal with the Talon Striders. The time has come for the Striders to leave with whatever they have taken. Dagman stuffs his knapsack with valuable crystals when he and Tyrhevius and their escort confront the Skywalkers. Dagman immediately cowers off and runs away while Tyrhevius orders his escort to deal with the threat.

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#583589
Topic
A Post-ROTJ Trilogy: What's To Come for the Big Three, And More
Time

@SWPurist:  I've always held that title in special regard! The film that never was, in a sense. My only gripe is that using such a title here will create the abbreviations "RotJ1" and "RotJ2", which sound more like the names of jet skis than Star Wars films. But it is a nice fit for the story being told in my Ep7 (with young Jeni Solo being the film's vengeful Jedi). I'll post a proper introductory passage soon...

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#581998
Topic
A Post-ROTJ Trilogy: What's To Come for the Big Three, And More
Time

I have scrapped my prequel rewrite idea in favor of an approach that allows me to run off the rails a bit more: a sequel trilogy. I pay no attention to post-ROTJ EU continuity outside of references to it that I have heard on forums and the Kyle Katarn PC game series (Dark Forces II in particular), so I am by no means an EU connoisseur. The only existing elements of Star Wars that would be canon with this are the Original Trilogy films. Any similarities with EU plotlines, settings, characters, or ideas are coincidental.........-ish.

To start things off, I have made the assumption that the Rebels form a government called the New Republic soon after the Empire's defeat at Endor. Its primary opponents are rogue Imperial warlords, isolationist planets, and bloodthirsty collections of pirates, mercenaries, and other cutthroats. Despite a slew of potential threats being present on many fronts, most of the Republic has become peaceful under the new democratic system of government.

Our heroine is Jeni Solo. She is the only child of Leia Organa and Han Solo, born in 4 ABY. Han's death in 8 ABY was the first seed of unrest in Jeni. Though she excelled in her Jedi training at the hands of her uncle and mother, she never could settle into the duty-driven, monastic life Luke had devoted himself to, nor could she stand the thought of spending her life in politics like her mother, Chief of State of the New Republic. Jeni always had a rogue streak about her, partly having to do with the suspicion that her mother was lying to her when she told Jeni that Han died in his sleep.

On the crystal-covered planet of Isis, a meeting with her father figure Lando Calrissian reveals the truth about Han's death. This sets Jeni off on a journey of revenge against those who killed her father, filled with twisted intrigue, shattering revelations, and powerful new allies. But as Master Skywalker is apt to warn Jeni, revenge is one of the many fangs with which the Dark Side can poison the mind of a Jedi...

Twenty years after the Battle of Yavin, the new trilogy of Star Wars begins.

 

How do you folks like the idea? There is more to come if you are interested!

Though it might sound like a petty revenge story now, the story does eventually get to the point where Jeni's actions affect the fate of the galaxy. 

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#575374
Topic
New scenes for "Avengers prequel"... Looking for talented voice over artist(s)
Time

I'm going to be honest and say that these sound like bad ideas. Actors change between movies all the time. Yes it's a little jarring, but resorting to hackneyed plots involving plastic surgery doesn't do anything but put salt on the proverbial wound.

I do think you did a good job integrating the clips from those different movies in the Norton-Ruffalo scene. What movies did you use? I only recognized "The 25th Hour" and Ang Lee's "Hulk".

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#571376
Topic
Should Anakin/Vader have been at Padme's funeral?
Time

Palpatine RSVP'd "Maybe" just to be polite, but everybody at the home knew he was a pretentious ponce who didn't actually care about his own daughter-in-law. Well that's if you believe the whole Palpy-was-Annie's-dad-all-along thing, but whatevs.

 

As for Anakin, well...he was being encased in black armor. What do you think happened? He *couldn't* kriffing go.

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#570822
Topic
In light of the "Plagueis" novel, how would you rewrite the prequels? *SPOILERS*
Time

I've got an original backstory for the entire galaxy that channels into the prequels I am writing and is (hopefully) a better prelude than anything made under Lucas after 1999. This even applies on a technological level; such elements we took for granted in the OT like lightsabers, hyperdrives, and sentient AI simply did not exist until late in the Republic era.

So basically nothing before ANH matches the canon of the Lucasverse. Some things like Coruscant have been retooled somewhat, and certain background elements like the Trandoshan race and the planet Taris also factor in. But anything that is directly and specifically reminiscent of any of the three PT films or anything that branches off of the PT films is a no-go for my rewrite.

Though I must admit the basic concept of Plagueis has some merit, the grand-daddy of evil if you will. Or was that supposed to be Bane?

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#570659
Topic
What is your take on PT villains?
Time

I have three big bads.

The first and most immediately obvious big bad is Legate Ceres, the supreme ruler of the separatist movement called the League of Sovereign Planets. She leads the charge against the Republic in the Clone Wars, severing the head of the Republic in the war's very first battle (by all accounts a tactical victory). A dark side-corrupted Jedi, her interactions with Anakin Skywalker prove to be of critical importance in the tale being told in my prequels. She is the white whale to Skywalker's Moby Dick. But even in death, she attains a spiritual victory. Though her League armies ultimately lose the Clone Wars, she wins in a way only the dark side of the Force can claim a victory: through corruption of the opponent's character...in this case of the Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker. Ceres appears in Episode I: In the Age of the Jedi and Episode II: The Dark Times Begin.

The second big bad is Admiral Palpatine, founder of the Galactic Empire. A charisma afforded to him by the dark side of the Force allows him to unite large swaths of a scarred galaxy under his dark ideology: the right of the strong (Human) species to rule over the rest. In pre-Clone War times he was the Vice Chief Officer of the Republic Navy, constantly using his dark side powers to scheme and plot as the "power behind the throne", never seeking to be put "on the spot" politically. But his delusions of grandeur after Ceres' brazen attack on Coruscant and the subsequent collapse of the Republic allow him to take control of his homeworld of Anaxes and use it as a base of operations to forge an empire of dominance and strength, but at the cost of any and all humanity. It is he who convinces Anakin Skywalker that the dark side could provide order to a galaxy in turmoil. Palpatine only appears in Episode II.

The final big bad is Anakin Skywalker, and indeed the big bad that the entire series has been building up to. It is not until the final act of Episode II, that Anakin finally becomes convinced that the dark side of the Force is the only way to bring order to the galaxy. But near the end Episode III, the full extent of Anakin's madness is revealed. He kidnaps the mother of his children, Jeni, and locks her down on the fortress world of Had Abaddon so that she can carry her twins to term, thus providing Anakin with the genetic crop to start a new dark Jedi order with which to overthrow Palpatine and rule the galaxy as a new dynasty of darkness. The final mission of our heroes is to break into the Had Abaddon Imperial fortress and rescue Jeni from the clutches of the traitorous Anakin Skywalker. While Anakin himself appears in all three prequels, his "big bad" role is only fulfilled at the end of Episode II and all throughout Episode III: War of the Skywalkers.

 

We never see the famous black armor suit, nor is the name "Darth Vader" ever uttered in the trilogy, but I do my best to imply that this Anakin Skywalker is in fact the same man as the one who strikes down Ben Kenobi in cold blood on the first Death Star.

Likewise, we do *not* see Palpatine use Force Lightning at any point in his screen-time during Episode II. He is shown to be gifted in use of the Force in other ways.

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#569821
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In the Age of the Jedi
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I totally get that, Mrebo. It's something I've done my  best to take into account in writing this: that Star Wars is Star Wars, not Tom Clancy-world. If this were actually made into a film, we wouldn't know all those thousands of years of history that I posted up there or the planet Ceres was born on or the history of the alien secessionist movement. I'm thinking of sneaking in a little reference to the Unification War of 150 to 129 BBY but if I can't do it sensibly then I won't try to crowbar it in there.

What's left of the Republic after the film's opening battle is either enslaved or exterminated by League forces or coalesces into two different remnant groups, which are the embryonic forms of the two factions seen in the OT. The Alliance to Restore the Republic is formed on Alderaan by Bail Organa and Commander Cev'ko in the early days of the Clone Wars. The Galactic Empire (a name which was a gross misnomer during the early days of its existence) was formed after Admiral Palpatine defended his homeworld of Anaxes with the naval fleet entrusted upon him by Antior.

In an attempt to avoid being "overly political", I destroyed the Republic's governing structure near the very beginning. You can't have those boring Senate scenes if the whole Senate has been vaporized by turbo-lasers, can you?

We would just see that the humans in charge of the Republic were pretentious and racist (kind of a parallel to the early twentieth-century notions of social darwinism and white man's burden)...who then got blasted to bits by vengeful aliens and now our rag-tag band of heroes must escape to the stars.

Then the question must be asked: What happens next?

Star Wars happens next.

 

As an aside, I estimate that the point where Anakin kills the hornagaunt is about twenty minutes into the film. Ben and Jeni's first encounter with him is what starts us towards the film's second act.

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#569737
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What is your take on PT villains?
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How do you handle antagonists in your prequel rewrites? Are they confined to Anakin and/or Palps, or do you introduce at least one more "Big Bad" or any named secondary antagonists?

I'm interested in hearing what you guys have to say about how you would have done Dooku or Grievous or Maul, or even how you made up your own villain(s) from scratch (which is what I did) if you so choose.

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#569710
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In the Age of the Jedi
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Stupid connection. I can't make an edit to my previous post.

I did not mean that the next part I'm going to post will be the climax. "The climax of the film, though, is meant to be a non-stop high-octane roller coaster ride on par with the finale of ANH," has nothing to do with the previous sentence.

We still have a ways to go before the film's climax.

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#569701
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In the Age of the Jedi
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More to come: leaving Alderaan, Ben training his Force abilities with the Jedi order, and Anakin and Jeni growing close together.

How is the story going so far? I'm kind of concerned that the next part might be a little too slow as far as cinematic pacing goes. The climax of the film, though, is meant to be a non-stop high-octane roller coaster ride on par with the finale of ANH.

 

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#567582
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In the Age of the Jedi
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Here's a condensed history of the Republic. The first part of the timeline covers some of the pre-Republic era. The last bits have some extra info about Anakin and Ceres' earlier lives, as well as the outbreak of the Clone Wars.

One assumption I make is that Obi-Wan's line in ANH about "a thousand generations" refers to 10,000 years. I tried to rationalize each generation as being 10 years instead of 25 by positing that each successive "generation" referred to the average amount of time it took for a Jedi apprentice to ascend to the rank of Knight, who is thus able to take on an apprentice(s) of his/her own...thus allowing for the next "generation" of Jedi.

I did that because I had too much trouble trying to justify 25,000 years of space-faring civilization with regards to the technology level seen in the OOT. Ten thousand years is still quite ridiculous, but I couldn't make it any shorter than that out of concern that I might contradict Obi-Wan's line in ANH. I suppose something's gotta give.

Here is the history of the Republic; as usual, feel free to critique...

ca. 12,500 BBY - A golden age of technology on Coruscant that promises such innovations as faster-than-light travel and sentient droids is brought to an end by the invasion of a hostile race called the Taung.

From the little of what can be together this era's history, it is believed that the alien battle force embarked for Coruscant from an unidentified world in the Unknown Regions as part of a pilgrimage foretold by their primary religion.

Having cast aside their ancient Sith foes a thousand years earlier, the Jedi Knights of Coruscant, the planet of both their origin and of the Human species, lead the charge against a strange new foe. Their powers allow them to turn the tide in an extraordinary manner against an unrelenting and seemingly technologically superior foe.

ca. 12,400 BBY - The Taung War is brought to a climax as a hyperspace rupture, a kind of technology that would not be properly harnessed for another eleven thousand years, is opened in Coruscant's upper atmosphere as a last-ditch attempt to eliminate the invaders.

Enormous amounts of radiation are thrown outward, a deluge that could not be controlled by pre-Republic technology, killing every Taung on and around Coruscant. But this also greatly damages Human civilization on the world, killing billions and destroying much of the planet's advanced civilzation.

ca. 10,000 BBY - The newly-formed Republic of Coruscant has now reclaimed all of the battered territories of its homeworld and looks to the stars for a new beginning.The first sleeper ships are loaded with colonists and Jedi Knights sent out to make contact with or settle other systems. It was only after the Taung War that the Jedi settled into their capacity as peacekeepers rather than super-warriors.

 
ca. 9,750 to ca. 4,500 BBY - Many Core worlds such as Alderaan and Corellia join the Republic, either through colonization and Coruforming of uninhabitable worlds or through absorption of existing populations into the Republic’s structure.

The Jedi Knights, with their lengthened lifespans, are the perfect companions for the colonists. They help spread the message that the Force is to be used in a constructive and benign manner.

The Jedi of this period are open in their activities, even occupying positions in the Republic’s government, both on the homeworld and on her colonies and ally planets. Over time, the notion of the Jedi being a Coruscant-based organization is lost, replaced instead by a more cosmopolitan order composed of equals parts the many different races inhabiting the Core.
 
ca. 3800 to ca. 3650 BBY - Many Jedi who grew corrupt from their governing power attempt to stage a coup of the Republic’s government and install themselves as god-kings known as “Sith Lords”.

The dark Jedi seek to carry on the legacy of “the strong ruling the weak” as their forbears in pre-Republic times had done. They believe that their extraordinary abilities give them the means and the right to conquer and dominate others. The dark Jedi are resisted against by their light-side counterparts.

The Sith-controlled territories are known collectively as the Sith Coalition. The Coalition functions as an ad-hoc leaderless compact, united not by common currencies, armies, or citizenry, but by an dark ideology strong enough to bridge the interstellar depths. Such is the only possibility in an era before hyper-travel.

Asynchronous bouts of slower-than-light interstellar warfare occur, with autonomous cells of Force-users in mortal combat on far-flung worlds. Many worlds execute suspected Force-users out of fear and paranoia.

The Sith Wars end with the dark Jedi’s eviction from the galaxy under the eye of Jedi ambassadors. The Knights thereafter act as a secret peacekeeping group rather than an official organ of government. The Sith War also provides cause for the antipathy and suspicion many beings in the galaxy would feel towards Force-users in later years, in addition to being the longest continuous conflict in galactic history.

Lightsabers are developed during the war after the discovery of special crystals on a moon that would later be known as "the Sanctum". The Sanctum becomes the base of operations for the Jedi after their post-war retreat into secrecy.
 
2,270 to 1,344 BBY - A second wave of colonization occurs due to advances in artificial intelligence that allow the first truly sentient droids to act as overseers on starships and perform many more tasks on colony worlds.

Though there is fear that the droids will conduct an organized rebellion against their “meatbag” predecessors, no such event ever comes to pass.

By the end of the Second Expansion, all of the Core Worlds and a handful of systems a dozen lightyears outward have joined the Republic, which has rechristened itself the Stellar Republic.
 
1,138 BBY - First iteration of hypergate technology allows the transmission of messages at superluminal speeds. A network of hypergate nodes begins to form in the Republic’s systems.
 
1,004 BBY - Hypergate technology now allows the transport of entire starships at many times the speed of light. This marks the start of a truly galactic era. Coruscant gains even more importance due to the construction of the hypergate nexus at a Lagrangian point just outside the world’s gravity well.
 
997 to 313 BBY - The network of hypergates expands. More worlds and species are absorbed into the Republic, typically taking the form of economic partnerships.
Little large-scale colonization occurs between the Core zone and the galaxy outside.

Eventually the upper-bound is reached in the feasible size of the hypergates, causing starship designs to stratify into a number of strictly-defined classes based on the sizes of hypergate apertures.

The frontier mentality disappears due to the drastically reduced travel times between systems linked by hypergates.

Yoda is born in the early part of this period. He is Force-sensitive at birth.

280 BBY - The Republic's first contact with the Chiss race occurs. The Chiss are an independent stellar civilization living in an out-of-the-war cluster near the edge of the galaxy. They use a unique form of FTL dubbed by Republic scientists as the hyperspace cannon.

The Chiss royalty sees the incursion of the Republic as a threat to their legitimacy as absolute divinely-ordained rulers of the state.

They also realize from the accounts of Republic explorers that hyperspace cannon technology is more flexible than that of hypergates because it removes not only the upper limit of starship size but also promises travel to anywhere the cannon can be pointed rather than between fixed nodes. The downside, however, is the great fuel expenditure required to slow the vessel down, limiting travel to within a defined sphere of space.

269 BBY - When the Republic fails to acquire hyperspace cannon technology from the Chiss by diplomatic means, they try to steal it. One of the Republic's spies is exposed by the Chiss' counter-intelligence force and this sparks the Chiss War. 

264 BBY - All but one of the Republic's hypergates in the Chiss sector has been destroyed by the native fleet. The Republic Navy cuts off the route to that last remaining gate, known thereafter as Death's Door, effectively stranding the detachment in enemy territory. The force contains a Jedi ambassador, a venerable old Master sent to settle the dispute by peaceful means rather than through the cleansing of the Chiss.

After holding off an onslaught of Chiss marines, the detachment leaves Death's Door for the Chiss homeworld of Csilla in a slower-than-light troopship that was docked at the hypergate. The Jedi Master takes command just before the crew enters stasis. They are not expected to reach the Csilla for another two decades.

257 BBY - After years of failed diplomatic communications, the Republic reactivates Death's Door and sends a fleet through the aperture. The expeditionary force begins skirmishes with local defenses.

248 BBY - By now the Chiss have deactivated or destroyed all of their hyperspace cannons as the Republic onslaught sweeps through their systems. This is enacted as a scorched earth policy.

247 BBY - A decade of fighting leads the Republic expeditionary fleet to Csilla, where the battered forces finally stand down and accept the Republic's terms of surrender. 

243 BBY - The Death's Door detachment finally arrives at Csilla. They find that the war they were going to end through peaceful means has been over for four years. 

175 to 129 BBY - I have detailed the events of this time in post #13.

The hyperdrive is developed, followed shortly by its proliferation among almost all of the galaxy's species. Some of the device's inner workings were reverse-engineered from the remains of Chiss hyperspace cannons.

The Republic enacts a third wave of colonization. The Unification War occurs, spurring the development of sentient cloning.

After the war, the Stellar Republic signals a new era of brotherhood by renaming itself the Galactic Republic.

66 BBY - Ceres is born on Zygerria to a native mother and a Human father. She is Force-sensitive at birth. Ceres' father, a mercenary hired by a group of slavers, leaves her on the planet with her mother soon after carving the mark of his syndicate into the skin of her back.

59 BBY - Anakin Skywalker is born on Taris. He and his mother suffer physical abuse at the hands of his father.

53 BBY - Ceres is sold into slavery as a dancer and concubine.

47 BBY - Anakin Skywalker gains Force-sensitivity.

44 BBY - In a fit of rage, Anakin's father kills his mother. Anakin finally retaliates by killing him in return. With no personal attachments left, Anakin is forced to subsist in the underlevels of Taris.

43 BBY - By now, Ceres has ascended from a common working girl to a high-class courtesan. For months, her movements are tracked by the Jedi Knight Hirala, who believes that Ceres needs to be inducted into the Jedi and the slavers need to be brought to justice.

Hirala uses her Jedi mind tricks to pass as a captive, allowing her to organize a breakout from the slavers' holding cells on Socorro. The ring is indeed disbanded and the captives freed, while the Jedi gain another ally.

44 to 37 BBY - Anakin makes a living as an underground swoop racer. His skills attract both fame and notoriety, making him a prime target of rival gangs and the authorities.

37 BBY - Obi-Wan Kenobi tracks down Anakin's Force presence on Taris. The Master convinces Anakin that his powers can be used for good, that those abilities give him a duty to uphold justice. Anakin relents because the prospect of being a Jedi allows him to gain some control in life, countering the helplessness he felt when he found out that his father had killed his mother. Obi-Wan takes Anakin under his wing as an apprentice.

35 BBY - In the first instance of sentient cloning since the Unification War, the ranks of the Togorian secessionist army are bolstered with duplicates of their finest warriors. Back at the Sanctum, Anakin and Ceres start to take an interest in one another.

33 BBY - Ceres takes the Oath of the Force, becoming a proper Jedi Knight after a decade of training under Hirala.

35 to 31 BBY - Rioting and protests on many worlds over the Republic's failed promise of just treatment of aliens after the Unification War leads to the formation of the League of Sovereign Planets. A prisonbreak at Despayre frees Ben Cortel.

29 BBY - Anakin takes the Oath of the Force. In the same year, he takes on an apprentice of his own.

27 BBY - After hearing a certain revelation from Anakin and deciding that the League fights for a just cause, Ceres defects from the Jedi Knights. While investigating ruined archives on the formerly Sith-dominated world of Korriban, Ceres finds herself drawn to their belief of power, over the weak, above all other ends. Tired of the reserved and meek ways of the Jedi, she decides that it is her calling to rule the galaxy.

Anakin and his young apprentice pursue Ceres to Korriban in an attempt to draw her back into the Jedi Knights, but her corruption is too severe. Anakin and his apprentice fight the traitor. Ceres kills the apprentice and cuts off Anakin's arm, leaving him alive for reasons that would not be clear to him for several years.

After this, Ceres travels the Outer Rim to gather the support of insurrectionist leaders, including Commander Hossk. Together, they depose the established League leadership, which was isolationist in nature. Ceres and her cohorts hold a vision for the League that calls for confrontation with the Republic.

25 BBY - Military tensions between the Republic and the League are at an all-time high. Many Repulic worlds have locked down all but the most essential hyper-routes. Some planets enact martial law.

Admiral Palpatine is placed in charge of all defensive and emergency duties on Anaxes. The planet houses the Navy's most prestigious war academy as well a number of heavy shipyards.

Unable to discern the League's next move, Chancellor Antior orders an even spread of naval resources across the Republic, putting Coruscant at great risk.

After more than a century of peace, the Galactic Republic is decapitated by a League attack on Coruscant and many other worlds. The Clone Wars begin with the Republic in tatters and the League triumphant.

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#567549
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In the Age of the Jedi
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Now back to Episode I:

 

The Belisarion lands outside the ruins of the Royal Palace just when the sun is beginning to lay on the horizon. Zero is left on the ship while Ben and Jeni cautiously proceed, blasters at the ready.

The two make their way past ruined statues, dance halls blackened and shattered by turbolaser impacts, and large gaps in the structure allowing cold breezes to run through carrying the smell of the Belisarion's engine exhaust. There are also the remains of the recon droid sent by Cev'ko strewn across the floor. The machine looks like it was torn apart rather than targeted by blaster fire as Jeni expected.

Eventually Ben and Jeni happen upon a passage leading to a subterranean saferoom. Ben unwittingly tunes his Force senses to the other side and feels life forms there. Life forms with voices crying out. These must be the survivors. If Breha is still alive, she must be here.

The way is blocked by fallen rocks and the remnants of League armored personnel carrier. Ben and Jeni deploy the demo charges, but there is little effect on the barrier. The two try this several times over before realizing that they are almost out of charges and the barrier has hardly been affected.

But just as the two start on the way back to their ship, they are attacked by a hornagaunt, a large flying wolf-like creature conditioned to serve as a living weapon for the League. Being a creature of the shadows, Ben and Jeni are constantly on edge and the creature itself stays hidden, attacking only where his prey might least expect it.

Ben throws his remaining demo charge towards where he thinks the hornagaunt is and shoots the charge in mid-air. For a fraction of a second, the bright blast illuminates the ghastly creature. It is injured by the explosion and must resort to crawling on the ground instead of flying.

Ben and Jeni try to flee to a more well-lit area. The monster is closer behind them than they realize. Just before entering the light, it seems the hornagaunt is about to claim them both...but then a streak of blue light appears in the darkness. The energy blade swiftly takes off one of monster's arms, followed by a plunge into the beast's heart.

Walking back into the light, Ben and Jeni are greeted by Anakin Skywalker.