msycamore said:
the color timing on Alien seems to be the modern Director's Cut timing though.
As I feared... So it's goodbye to the look of ALIEN that I've loved over the years then. Damn, I hate the new colour timing throughout.
If I'm reading this latest James Cameron interview below correctly, then it now seems that the 'Future Earth' scenes are being incorporated into the 'finished'-quality extended DVD/Blu-ray version, after all! :)
Unlike the current 'AVATAR: Special Edition' theatrical re-release which has approx. 9 minutes extra, the 'Collector's Edition' DVD will include a version which has approx. 16 minutes extra added...including over 4 minutes worth of the 'Future Earth' opening. This is bound to be the definitive version, and these 'grimy cityscapes' should make for a dramatic contrast to the lush jungles of Pandora - http://www.oregonlive.com/movies/index.ssf/2010/08/interview_with_james_cameron_o.html
Been kinda busy of late, but I meant to add this here about the limited re-release that is currently happening with this, since 27th AUGUST. I'm disappointed to read that it looks like the 'Future Earth' scenes are still being omitted after all though, and will likely only end up on the longer, 'unfinished' DVD/Blu-ray version -
AVATAR: SPECIAL EDITION
1st Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yPqkRDKfrbU
2nd Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tLylzuf1MWA
There's been a few other interesting developments on the 3D front recently too, and I'll go into them sometime soon, when I can.
INDEPENDENCE DAY (released 1996/directed by Roland Emmerich)
Teaser Trailer 1 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ywVziLVbCmw NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
Teaser Trailer 2 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qYJfxI6QjJQ
Teaser Trailer 3 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7ukcrw3zrxU NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W0J6mB8NsgI
IDEAS FOR A COMBINED ‘THE LAST JEDI/THE RISE OF SKYWALKER’ MEGA CUT SEQUEL TO THE ‘FORCE AWAKENS’, AS ONE LONG, EPIC FINALE TO THE ‘SKYWALKER’ SAGA…AND A WAY TO SHOW IN A SINGLE MOVIE THAT SNOKE WAS IN FACT MERELY A CLONE…AS WELL AS A WAY TO INTRODUCE THE EMPEROR AS A ‘WTF’ SURPRISE ELEMENT, WITHOUT IT BEING REVEALED IN THE OPENING SCROLL WORDING BEFOREHAND.
MENTION HOW FRUSTRATING IT’S BEEN TO HAVE TO INCLUDE THE LIKES OF THE ‘QUICKSAND/CAVERN’ SCENE, BECAUSE FINDING THE KNIFE CLUE WAS SO IMPORTANT TO INCLUDE. AND THE SAME WITH HAVING TO GO TO POE’S OLD PLANET TOO, BECAUSE WE NEED TO HAVE C3PO’S MEMORY UNLOCKED TO FIND OUT WHAT THE SITH DIRECTIONS TO EXEGOL ARE.
(NOTE: ALL THE FOLLOWING SEQUENCES ARE IN THE EXACT ORDER THAT THEY APPEAR IN THE MOVIE, EXCEPT I’VE RE-CUT THEM IN THE WAYS I PREFER. I’LL DECIDE WHAT I WANT TO KEEP AND THE ORDER I PREFER ONCE I’VE COMPLETED THEM ALL)
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Rey holds Luke’s broken lightsaber, as Leia says WE HAVE EVERYTHING WE NEED…
…and we continue as we see a group shot of everyone inside the Falcon…
…and we continue as we end THE LAST JEDI footage with the Falcon travelling through blue hyperspace into a flash of white…
(NOTE - THERE’S A STRONG CHANCE THAT I MIGHT CUT TO KYLO TOUCHING VADER’S MASK AS WE HEAR HIS VOICE SAY “JOIN ME…” AT THIS POINT - NOT 100% SURE YET, BUT THIS COULD IMPLY THAT IT’S THE EMPEROR FORCE-CALLING HIM, AS KYLO HEAR’S HIM USE VADER’S VOICE WHEN KYLO INITIALLY GOES TO FIND HIM ON EXAGOL)
…then we CUT to Kylo touching Vader’s mask…
…and we end on this shot…
…then we CUT to Vader’s mask as we hear his voice say JOIN ME…
…then we CUT to Kylo opening his eyes as he sees flashbacks of him killing his father Han, then let’s go of the mask…
…then we CUT to the start of THE RISE OF SKYWALKER footage with a starfield as we pan down to 3 screaming ties travelling towards Kylo’s Stardestroyer in orbit near a red planet…
(OR…SHOULD I PUT KYLO TOUCHING THE VADER MASK AS HE HEARS HIS VOICE SAY “JOIN ME…” AS THE FIRST ‘THE RISE OF SKYWALKER’ FOOTAGE, BEFORE THE 3 TIES FLY DOWN OVER MUSTAFAR(?), AS HE LOOKS FOR A WAYFINDER TO GET TO EXEGOL???) - THIS MIGHT HELP TO IMPLY THAT IT WAS THE EMPEROR WHO WAS CHANNELING THE “JOIN ME…” TO KYLO…AS DOESN’T HE SAY THAT EVERY VOICE KYLO HAS HEARD (INCLUDING VADER’S VOICE) HAS BEEN HIM??? - CHECK THIS.
(NOTE - THE WAY THE MUSIC BUILDS IN THE ‘GROUP’ SHOT/FALCON IN HYPERSPACE’ SHOT GIVES THE IMPRESSION OF A ‘CONCLUSION’ AT THAT POINT…SO CUTTING TO THE INITIAL SCENES FROM ‘THE RISE OF SKYWALKER’ SHOULD GIVE AN ADEQUATE IMPRESSION THAT A PERIOD OF TIME HAS PASSED) - UNFORTUNATELY, THESE SCREENSHOTS CAN’T CONVEY HOW THE MUSIC FITS TOGETHER DURING MY CUTS.
…then we CUT to Kylo turning in close-up…
…and continue as normal as he pushes the lid off a stone structure and picks up a Sith Wayfinder, then flies to Exegol to find the Emperor…
(PUT MORE PHOTOS HERE)
NOTE: ADD IN ALL THE DIALOGUE - not sure if I’m going to use THE DARK SIDE OF THE FORCE IS A PATHWAY TO MANY ABILITIES SOME CONSIDER TO BE UNNATURAL dialogue or not yet.
…and continue on until we end on this shot…
…and then we CUT to this close-up of Kylo saying WHAT COULD YOU GIVE ME?..
…and then we CUT to the Emperor’s hands as he says A NEW EMPIRE…
…and continue on as normal as a Stardestroyer fleet appears…and we hear the Emperor’s voice say THE MIGHT OF THE FINAL ORDER WILL SOON BE READY…IT WILL BE YOUR’S IF YOU DO AS I ASK…
…then we CUT to a close-up of Kylo, as we hear the Emperor’s voice say END THE JEDI…AND BECOME WHAT YOUR GRANDFATHER VADER COULD NOT…
…and we end on this shot once Kylo has switched off his lightsaber…
…then we CUT to this close-up of the Emperor smiling as lightening shines on him…
…and continues as normal to black…
the movie normally continues with the Falcon in hyperspace at this point - MIGHT GET RID OF THIS HERE, AND USE ELSEWHERE - NOT SURE YET.
MIGHT GET RID OF CHEWIE, POE, AND FINN PLAYING HOLOCHESS SCENE AT THIS POINT, BUT MIGHT DO A CUT DOWN VERSION OF IT - NOT SURE YET. AND DEFINITELY GET RID OF ALL SHOTS OF THE BIG YELLOW DISNEYFIED ALIEN!
…and then we CUT to Falcon flying towards ice planet…
…and continue on until we end on this close-up of Poe saying T minus 5!..
…then we CUT to the Falcon entering an ice base (GETTING RID OF FINN RUNNING THROUGH A SPARKING FALCON INTERIOR)…
…and continue as normal as the Falcon turns onto a landing pad, and Finn opens the hatch to an alien contact who tells him that he has a message from a spy in the First Order (doesn’t know who it is), but tells him to transfer the message to Leia…
…and continue as normal as TIEs follow the Falcon and Finn shoots back, and Poe asks how many are left, and we end on this shot as Poe says TOO MANY!..
…and then we CUT to seeing an overhead gantry in front of them…
…and then we CUT to Chewie roaring and pointing (which is a brief shot which came slightly EARLIER)…
…and then we CUT to the Falcon turning on it’s side, as Finn blasts the gantry…
…and continue on as normal as the Falcon blasts through an ice wall…
…and we end on this shot of the Falcon flying away…
NOTE: I MIGHT THEN CUT TO THE EARLIER SHOT OF FALCON FLYING THROUGH HYPERSPACE (SEE ABOVE) AT THIS POINT - NOT SURE YET.
…then we CUT to Rey meditating in a jungle in mid air saying BE WITH ME…BE WITH ME…
…and we end on this close-up of Rey as she says THEY’RE NOT WITH ME…
…then we CUT to Rey saying I DIDN’T FINISH THE TRAINING COURSE…I GOT DISTRACTED… (Note - I’m just laying out the EXACT sequence and dialogue here at the moment, without trying out any kind of re-edit at the moment - although IF I do use it, I MIGHT cut directly from Rey saying I KNOW IT LOOKS…to I THINK I’M JUST TIRED, THAT’S ALL…)
…then we continue as Rey puts her staff over her back saying I’M JUST NOT FEELING MYSELF…
…then we continue as Rey says I KNOW IT LOOKS…
…then we continue as Rey says …UH, IT LOOKS LIKE I’M MAKING EXCUSES…
…then we continue as Leia says DON’T TELL ME WHAT THINGS LOOK LIKE, TELL ME WHAT THEY ARE…
…then we continue as Rey says I THINK I’M JUST TIRED, THAT’S ALL…
…then we continue as Leia looks at her and starts to turn as we hear a female voice shout GENERAL!..
…then we continue as a female rebel says THE FALCON STILL HASN’T ARRIVED…COMMANDER’S ASKING FOR GUIDANCE…
…then we continue as Rey gives Luke’s now-fixed lightsaber back to Leia…
…then we continue as Rey says I WILL EARN YOUR BROTHER’S SABER…ONE DAY…, as Leia takes it and BB-8 beeps…
…then we continue as Rey laughs a little saying NO, YOU CAN’T DO IT FOR ME…
…then we continue as Leia says NEVER UNDERESTIMATE A DROID!..as she walks away and Rey turns and says YES MASTER…
…then the movie continues as normal, as we see Rey flipping through the Jedi texts. as we see a drawing of a Sith Wayfinder, as a voice shouts REY… (BY THE WAY, LUKE GAVE THE IMPRESSION THAT HE HADN’T READ THEM WHEN YODO ASKED HIM IN THE LAST JEDI, BUT IN THIS MOVIE IT’S MADE OUT THAT LUKE WENT LOOKING FOR THE SITH WAYFINDERS - IS ALL THIS ASSUMPTION ON MY PART CORRECT?? - CHECK PROPERLY)
NOTE - OR I could CUT from Falcon breaking through ice into space…to the shot of Rey flipping through the Jedi texts…so that I miss out the entire scene of her giving Luke’s lightsaber back to Leia (DOES SHE ACTUALLY STILL HAVE IT IN CERTAIN SHOTS BEFORE LEIA GIVES IT BACK TO HER!??)
…then we continue as a female rebel pilot shouts FALCON’S BACK!..and we end on Rey closing the book and getting up to leave quickly…
MISS OUT NEXT SEQUENCE OF FALCON ON FIRE, AS IT’S MAINLY SILLY DIALOGUE - AND SUDDENLY LOOKS LIKE IT’S ALL IN DAYLIGHT COMPARED TO SCENE BEFORE IT!
…then we CUT to a large group of rebels gathered beneath the big Tantive ship, as we hear Poe’s voice say WE’VE DECODED THE INTEL FROM THE FIRST ORDER SPY…
…then we continue as Poe says AND IT CONFIRMS THE WORST…SOMEHOW PALPATINE RETURNED…
…then we continue as there are gasps from the gathering, as Rey looks to her side a little…
…then we continue as Leia looks at Rey and then looks away… (NOTE - THIS SHOT OF HER LOOKS WEIRD SOMEHOW, SO I MIGHT MISS IT OUT OR TRIM IT A BIT - I COULD JUST HAVE HER LOOKING AT REY, OR IF I JUST HAVE HER LOOKING AWAY I WILL BE ABLE TO RETAIN ROSE’S VOICE SAYING WAIT…
…then we continue as ROSE says DO WE BELIEVE THIS?..and we hear a voice say IT CANNOT BE…THE…
…then we continue as the alien rebel says EMPEROR IS DEAD…and we hear a voice say DARK SCIENCE…
…then we continue as a bearded rebel says CLONING…SECRETS ONLY A SITH KNEW… (NOTE - I MIGHT cut SECRETS ONLY A SITH KNEW, as what about the likes of the Kamino cloners in AOTC?, and Luke’s alien pal seemed to know about cloners in general, saying they were good at it - Am I correct in this? Was it outlawed over the years? Also, how would this bearded rebel know that only the Sith knew the secrets of cloning? Check properly)
…then we continue as Poe’s voice says HE’S BEEN PLANNING HIS REVENGE… (NOT SURE IF I’LL MISS OUT THIS REVENGE LINE OR NOT)
…then we continue as Poe says HIS FOLLOWERS HAVE BEEN BUILDING SOMETHING FOR YEARS…
…then we continue as Poe’s voice says THE LARGEST FLEET THE GALAXY’S EVER KNOWN…
…then we continue as Poe says HE CALLS IT THE FINAL ORDER…
…then we continue as Poe’s voice says IN 16 HOURS ATTACKS ON ALL FREE WORLDS BEGIN…
…then we continue as Chewie growls…and we hear Poe’s voice say THE…
…then we continue as Poe’s voice says EMPEROR AND HIS FLEET ARE HIDING IN THE UNKNOWN…
…then we continue as Poe says REGIONS…ON A WORLD CALLED EXEGOL…
…then we continue as Rey looks up…
…then we continue as R2D2 beeps excitedly…
…then we continue as C3PO says EXEGOL DOES NOT…
…then we continue as C3PO’s voice says APPEAR ON ANY STAR CHART…THE…
…then we continue as C3PO’s voice says LEGEND DESCRIBES IT AS HIDDEN WORLD…
…then we continue as C3PO says OF THE SITH…
…then we continue as Rey runs to take the Jedi text book out of a box, as we hear Poe’s voice say SO PALPATINE’S BEEN…
…then we continue as Poe says OUT THERE ALL THIS TIME…PULLING THE STRINGS…
…then we continue as Leia says ALWAYS IN THE SHADOWS FROM THE VERY BEGINNING…
…then we continue as we hear a voice say IF WE WANT TO STOP…
…then we continue as Maz says HIM…WE MUST FIND HIM…WE MUST FIND EXEGOL… (NOTE - I MIGHT miss out her saying IF WE WANT TO STOP HIM…as the black rebel and others should be looking down at who’s talking, like those in the shot before do - NOT SURE YET)
…then we continue as we hear a voice say GENERAL…, and Maz turns around…and sees Rey holding a book as she says CAN I SPEAK WITH YOU?..and we hear her say I KNOW HOW TO GET…
…then we continue as Rey says to Leia TO EXEGOL…and Leia says TELL ME…as Rey then says LUKE SEARCHED…
…then we continue as Rey says FOR IT, FOR A LONG TIME…HE NEARLY FOUND IT…as she shows Leia the book and says THERE ARE CYPHERS HERE I CAN’T READ…
…then we continue as Rey flips some pages saying BUT HE SAID TO GET THERE YOU NEED ONE OF THESE…A SITH WAYFINDER… (NOTE - does all this ‘research’ by Luke mean that he read the Jedi texts after all, despite it being implied by Yoda that he might not have in THE LAST JEDI? - Doesn’t matter anyway, as I’d be getting rid of Yoda’s scene in my version)
…then we continue as Rey says THEY’RE COMPASSES THAT LEAD THE WAY TO EXAGOL…
…then we continue as Rey says TO STOP WHAT WE BOTH KNOW IS COMING…I NEED TO FINISH WHAT LUKE STARTED…FIND EXEGOL…
…then we continue as Rey says FIND THE EMPEROR… (NOTE - Leia then says NO…at this point - not sure if I’d include it or not yet)
…and then we CUT to close-up of Rey saying IT’S WHAT YOU WOULD DO…
…then we continue as Rey uncouples a hose on the Falcon in close-up and end the shot JUST BEFORE we hear Poe’s voice say SO… (I’d get rid of Poe saying SO YOU GOT HER UP AND RUNNING…and then Rey saying YOU WERE RIGHT BEFORE…as I’d discard the whole silly sequence where the Falcon is on fire and they have an argument, which that dialogue refers to)
…then we CUT to Rey throwing the hose down under the Falcon as she says I’M GOING TO PICK UP LUKE’S SEARCH FOR EXEGOL…I’M GOING TO START…
…and then continue as Rey says WHERE HIS TRAIL WENT COLD…THE FORBIDDEN DESERTS OF PASAANA…
…and then continue as Poe says YEAH I KNOW, WE’RE GOING WITH YOU…as he pats her on the shoulder…
…and then we continue as normal until we get to the point where BB-8 beeps and C3PO says I WHOLEHEARTEDLY AGREE…and we end on Rey smiling…
…then we CUT to Rey contemplating the jungle as Poe says HEY, WE SHOULD GET GOING…then asks her WHAT IS IT?..and she says NOTHING…so that I can get the beginning of C3PO starting to say IN THE EVENT THAT I DO NOT RETURN…I WANT YOU TO KNOW THAT YOU HAVE BEEN A REAL FRIEND ARTOO…MY BEST ONE IN FACT…as he walks off, and we end on R2D2 beeping profusely…
(OR…DO I INSERT KYLO TOUCHING VADER’S MASK WHICH SAYS “JOIN ME…” SCENE IMMEDIATELY BEFORE REY CONTEMPLATING THE JUNGLE SCENE - TO MAKE IT LOOK LIKE SHE SENSES KYLO PERHAPS???)
…then we CUT to Leia giving Rey Luke’s lightsaber again…and we end on them hugging… (NOTE - NOT DECIDED YET IF I’D INCLUDE SCENE BEFORE THIS WHERE REY SAYS SHE HAS SO MUCH SHE WANTS TO TELL LEIA, AND LEIA SAYS TO TELL HER WHEN SHE RETURNS, OR NOT. ALSO NOT DECIDED IF I’D INCLUDE THE NEXT SHOT BELOW WHERE LEIA HOLDS REY’S HEAD WHEN HUGGING, OR NOT)
…then we CUT to the Falcon taking off…
…and we continue on as everyone gathers in the Falcon’s cockpit, and it flies away from the jungle planet…
…and we continue as Kylo and his Knights of Ren watch as his helmet is fixed, and they fly back to his Stardestroyer, as we end the scene of them walking down a corridor JUST BEFORE the stormtroopers speak…
…then we CUT to Kylo throwing down the alien contact’s head on a table…
…and then we continue as Kylo walks past those sitting at the table saying WE HAVE A SPY IN OUR RANKS…WHO JUST SENT A MESSAGE TO THE RESISTANCE…WHOEVER THIS TRAITOR IS, WON’T STOP US…WITH WHAT I’VE SEEN ON EXEGOL, THE FIRST ORDER IS ABOUT TO BECOME A TRUE EMPIRE…
…and then we continue as we see Hux seated, as Kylo turns round saying I SENSE UNEASE ABOUT MY APPEARANCE GENERAL HUX…as those opposite Hux look over at him…
…then we CUT to HUX grimacing, as we hear a voice opposite him say FORGIVE ME SIR, BUT THESE ALLIES ON…
…and then we continue as the officer opposite Hux says EXEGOL…THEY SOUND LIKE A CULT, CONJURERS AND SOOTHSAYERS…
…and then we continue as the person beside him says THEY’VE CONJURED LEGIONS OF STARDESTROYERS…THE SIXTH FLEET WILL INCREASE OUR RESOURCES TEN THOUSAND FOLD!..
…and then we continue as the person looks over at Hux saying SUCH RANGE AND POWER WILL CORRECT THE ERROR OF STARKILLER BASE…as we hear a female voice say WE’LL NEED TO INCREASE RECRUITMENT, HARVEST MORE…
…and then we continue as the female voice says OF THE GALAXY’S YOUNG…as the officer then says THIS FLEET…WHAT IS IT, A GIFT?..WHAT IS…
…and then we continue as the officer says HE ASKING FOR IN…
…and then we continue on as we hear the officer say RETURN?..as Kylo suddenly throws him to the ceiling using the Force…and says PREPARE TO CRUSH ANY WORLDS THAT DEFY US…MY KNIGHTS AND I ARE GOING HUNTING FOR THE SCAVENGER…
…and then we continue as the Falcon drops out of lightspeed at the planet Pasaana…
…and then we continue as Poe says SURE THIS IS IT?..and then C3PO says THESE ARE THE EXACT CO-ORDINATES THAT MASTER LUKE LEFT BEHIND…
…and then we continue as the group turn round a bend, and come across a colourful gathering…and Poe says WHAT IS THIS?..and then C3PO says IT’S AGGY AGGY’S FESTIVAL OF THE ANCESTORS…OOH, THIS CELEBRATION OCCURS ONLY ONCE EVERY 42 YEARS…and then Finn sarcastically says WELL THAT’S LUCKY…and we end on C3PO raising his finger saying LUCKY INDEED!.. (NOTE - I’m not certain yet if I’d cut here OR after they all turn round and C3PO looks back and forth at the group OR if I’d just keep the whole scene as it is where C3PO turns to look behind)
…then we cut to a big barbecue and dancing aliens, as Rey says I’VE NEVER SEEN ANYTHING LIKE THIS…then Finn says I’VE NEVER SEEN SO FEW WAYFINDERS…then Poe says THERE’S ALWAYS RANDOM FIRST ORDER PATROLS IN CROWDS LIKE THESE…as BB-8 looks at a smoke cannister…
…then we continue as Poe says KEEP YOUR HEADS DOWN…CHEWIE…LET’S SPLIT UP, SEE WHAT THE LOCALS KNOW…as Rey turns and stops to look around, and we end on her looking over at some alien children watching a puppet show…
…then we CUT to this shot of the alien children (I’m not keen on the close-up laughing puppet, though it’s no biggie if I keep it in), as we then hear an alien voice, and then hear C3PO’s voice say SHE SAYS WELCOME!..as the female alien drapes a necklace over Rey’s neck…and wants to know Rey’s family name, but Rey says I DON’T HAVE ONE…I’M JUST REY…
…and then we continue as Rey suddenly turns away, and goes looking around in a hurry…and we end on her in Force-contact with Kylo…
…then we CUT to Kylo saying YOU CAN’T HIDE REY…NOT FROM ME…
…and then we continue as Rey says I SEE THROUGH THE CRACKS IN YOUR MASK…YOU’RE HAUNTED…YOU CAN’T STOP SEEING WHAT YOU DID TO YOUR FATHER…
…and then we continue as Kylo says DO YOU STILL COUNT THE DAYS SINCE YOUR PARENTS LEFT?..SUCH PAIN IN YOU…SUCH ANGER…I DON’T WANT TO HAVE…
…and then we continue as we hear Kylo’s voice say TO KILL YOU…I’M GOING TO FIND YOU, AND I’M GOING TO TURN YOU TO THE DARK SIDE…
…and then we continue as Kylo says WHEN I OFFER YOU MY HAND AGAIN…YOU’LL TAKE IT…
…and then we continue as Rey says WE’LL SEE…as Kylo suddenly snatches Rey’s necklace… (NOTE - I MIGHT add 'Han meme saying “That’s not how the Force works” here, as I’m not keen on the fact that Kylo can ‘force-grab’ her necklace from a huge distance away - in the same manner that he gets Rey’s lightsaber to fight off the Knights of Ren - as it seems to be yet another ridiculously OVER-POWERED ability introduced by these sequels!)
…and then we continue as Rey runs towards the others saying WE HAVE TO GO…BACK TO THE FALCON, NOW…as Finn then says WHY?..and Rey then says IT’S REN…
…and then continue as a female officer takes the necklace to Kylo saying SIR, WE’VE HAD THIS ANALYZED…IT COMES FROM THE MEDIAN SYSTEM…PASAANA, FORBIDDEN VALLEY…as Kylo then tells an officer PREPARE MY SHIP…ALERT THE LOCAL TROOPS…SEND A DIVISION…
…and we continue on a the officer says YES…SUPREME LEADER…
…and then we continue as Rey and the others run until we hear a voice shout FREEZE!..HOLD IT RIGHT THERE!..
…and then a stormtrooper with a gun pointed at them says I’VE LOCATED THE RESISTANCE FUGITIVES, ALL UNITS REPORT…before he is shot dead with a crossbow arrow…
…and then we continue as a masked figure says FOLLOW ME…and they all enter a slow moving vehicle…
…and we continue as the masked figure says LEIA SENT ME A TRANSMISSION…and he opens a small hatch to say something to the small alien driver…as Finn says HOW DID YOU FIND US?..and Lando takes off his mask saying WOOKIEES STAND OUT IN A CROWD!..
…and we continue on until Poe says GENERAL CALRISSIAN, WE’RE LOOKING FOR EXEGOL…and Lando then says OF COURSE YOU ARE…
…and we continue as Lando shows a hologram of a Sith Wayfinder, saying ONLY TWO REMAIN…as Rey then says A SITH WAYFINDER…LUKE SKYWALKER CAME HERE TO FIND ONE…as Lando then chuckles and says I KNOW…I WAS WITH HIM…LUKE AND I WERE TRAILING AN OLD JEDI HUNTER…OCHI OF BESTOON…HE WAS CARRYING A CLUE THAT COULD LEAD TO A WAYFINDER…WE FOLLOWED HIS SHIP HALFWAY ACROSS THE GALAXY, HERE…WHEN WE GOT TO HIS SHIP, IT WAS ABANDONED…NO CLUE, NO WAYFINDER…
…and then we continue as Rey says IS OCHI’S SHIP STILL HERE?..as Lando then says IT’S OUT IN THE DESERT WHERE HE LEFT IT…and Rey then says WE NEED TO GET TO THAT SHIP…SEARCH IT AGAIN…as TIE fighters appear in the distance, and Lando says I’VE GOT A BAD FEELING ABOUT THIS…
…and we continue as Lando says OCHI’S SHIP IS OUT PAST LURCH CANYON, GO…and they say their farewells, as Rey then says LEIA NEEDS PILOTS GENERAL…as Lando says MY FLYING DAYS ARE LONG GONE…BUT DO ME A FAVOUR…GIVE LEIA MY LOVE…and Rey then says YOU SHOULD GIVE IT TO HER YOURSELF, THANKYOU…as we hear the TIES fly nearer, and Lando looks out…
…and then we continue as Rey and the others run from the TIEs, and steal a couple of speeders as stormtroopers give chase, and then use jetpacks…
…then we CUT to Rey on her speeder… (MISSING OUT THE WHOLE “THEY FLY NOW?” DIALOGUE)
…and we continue until Rey eventually says I SEE A SHIP…and we end on the close-up of Ochi’s ship (JUST BEFORE REY THEN SAYS I’VE SEEN THAT SHIP BEFORE… - BECAUSE MY VERSION OF THE FORCE AWAKENS WON’T INCLUDE REY’S VISIONS OF HER BEING TAKEN AWAY FROM HER PARENTS, OR IN OCHI’S SHIP)…
NOTE - AT THIS POINT I’D HAVE LIKED TO BE ABLE TO GET RID OF THE GROUP FALLING INTO THE ‘QUICKSAND’, AND THEN INTO THE CAVERN BELOW/FINDING THE ‘MAP KNIFE’/AND REY HEALING THE INJURED GIANT SNAKE…BUT I’M DEFINATELY GOING TO HAVE TO INCLUDE FINDING THE ‘MAP KNIFE’ NO MATTER WHAT UNFORTUNATELY…BUT WILL STILL GET RID OF ‘REY HEALING THE INJURED GIANT SNAKE’, NO MATTER WHAT! - SO I COULD USE THE SHORT SCENE OF ‘THE FAT REBEL REPORTING TO LEIA AND ROSE’ TO EITHER BREAK UP THE SCENE OF THE GROUP INSIDE THE CAVERN (IN PLACE OF THE BIT WHERE REY ASKS POE WHAT HE WAS GOING TO TELL HER, AND HE’S EVASIVE AS POE RIBS HIM ABOUT HAVING SECRETS)…OR I COULD USE IT TO
…our heroes sink into the ‘quicksand’…
…and then we CUT to BB-8 and the rest of our heroes falling into a cavern…
…and then we continue until this point BEFORE Rey asks Finn what he was going to say in the ‘quicksand’…
…then we CUT to the fat rebel updating Leia and Rose… (FINISH WORDING HERE)
…and then we CUT to a close-up of Chewie growling as we then hear Poe telling C3PO he doesn’t want to know what made the cavern…
…and then we continue until our heroes find Ochi’s skeleton (FINISH WORDING HERE), and we end on Finn saying NO HE DIDN’T… (SO THAT WE DON’T SEE POE TURNING AWAY SAYING HE DOESN’T LIKE BONES)
…then we CUT to BB-8 rolling towards the ‘map knife’…
…and then we continue as C3PO tell our heroes that he his programming won’t let him translate the knife wording, and we end on this shot once he’s said something like “I regret sir…”
NOTE - I WILL DEFINATELY NOT BE INCLUDING REY HEALING THE GIANT SNAKE, BUT IT LOOKS LIKE I WILL NOT BE ABLE TO INCLUDE THE SHOT OF CHEWIE PUTING THE ‘MAP KNIFE’ INTO HIS BAG EITHER.
…then we CUT to the Knights of Ren ship, as we them looking around…
…and then we continue as we see Ochi’s ship in the distance, the group climbs up towards it (FINISH WORDING HERE), and C3PO says WE CANNOT POSSIBLY FLY IN THAT OLD WRECK…
…then we CUT to the close-up of C3PO behind Chewie saying I SUGGEST WE RETURN TO THE MILLENNIUM FALCON AT ONCE…and continue as Rey senses something and says I’LL BE RIGHT BEHIND YOU…OKAY?..as Finn looks out at her leaving…
…and then we continue as Poe and the rest enter Ochi’s ship…
…and then we continue as they inspect the ship and it starts up okay…as Finn looks out and sees Rey in the distance, then says CHEWIE, TELL REY WE GOTTA GO…
…and then we continue as Chewie goes looking for Rey, as we see a couple of Knights of Ren watching him…
…and then we continue as Rey walks further into the desert, then stops…as we then see Kylo’s ship approach her…
…and then we continue as Ochi’s ship starts up…as Poe says WHAT’S SHE DOING?..WHERE THE HELL’S CHEWIE?..and then Finn says IT’S REN…as Poe turns to see him leave…
…and then we continue as Finn runs round a rocky area and sees First Order landing craft…
…then we CUT to Chewie being taken aboard a landing craft by stormtroopers, as Finn looks on…
…and then we continue as Rey ignites Luke’s lightsaber, as Kylo approaches in his ship, and end as Rey turns around saying HMMMPH… (NOTE - THE SHOT ENDS ON THE BACK OF HER HEAD, BUT THERE’S NOT A SCREENSHOT OF IT)
…then we CUT to Kylo’s ship…
…then we CUT to a close-up of Kylo…
…then we CUT to Kylo’s ship…
…then we CUT to Rey running away from Kylo’s ship, as she sommersaults above it, and slices a wing off, as it crashes into a fireball against a large rock…
…and then we continue as we see a close-up of Rey, and end on the shot just before we hear Finn’s voice shout REY!..
NOTE - IF THIS ABOVE WAY OF KILLING KYLO WAS TO WORK, I’D NEED TO RE-EDIT THE EARLIER SCENE OF HIM SAYING TO REY HE WAS GOING TO TURN HER TO THE DARK SIDE…AS THAT SEEMS STRANGE NOW THAT HE’S TRYING TO RUN HER DOWN AND KILL HER INSTEAD! - I THINK THE DIALOGUE CAN BE RE-EDITED TO MAKE IT LOOK LIKE HE WANTS HER DEAD INSTEAD.
(HOWEVER, I MIGHT ALSO JUST INCLUDE FAR MORE SCENES INVOLVING KYLO FROM THIS POINT, PERHAPS EVEN RIGHT UP UNTIL THE EMPEROR FORCE-THROWS HIM A GREAT DISTANCE DOWN A DEEP PIT? - WHAT I’D DEFINATELY WANT TO GET RID OF IS THE REY/KYLO FIGHT AMONGST THE WAVES, AND THE WHOLE REY DYING/KYLO BRINGING REY BACK TO LIFE/THEM KISSING/KYLO DYING HAVING GIVEN HIS LIFE-FORCE TO REY SCENARIO!)
AND ALSO, THIS IS JUST AN INITIAL IDEA BELOW WHICH I DON’T KNOW WILL WORK OUT OR NOT WITH THE WHOLE ‘DEATH OF LEIA’ SCENARIO YET, SO THIS IS JUST TO REMIND ME THAT I’D TRY THESE OPTIONS AT THIS POINT - so I’d either CUT to this shot of Leia with the others as she senses something is wrong…
(NOTE - I’LL JUST SHOW THESE PICS ABOVE, BUT I DON’T KNOW IF I’D BE SHOWING MORE OR THE SCENE OR NOT YET)
…OR ALTERNATIVELY…I’D CUT FROM THE CLOSE-UP OF REY ABOVE TO THIS SHOT OF LEIA SENSING KYLO’S DEATH INSTEAD, WHERE SHE SAYS “BEN…”
…and IF I end up doing EITHER of these options above with Leia, I’d then CUT to Finn running (NOTE - the first shot wouldn’t load for me) as he shouts REY!..THEY GOT CHEWIE!..THEY GOT HIM!..as he points to a First Order lander flying away, as we end on the close-up of Rey looking up…
(NOTE - I COULD PERHAPS THEN CUT TO ONE OF THE REACTION SHOTS OF FINN…MOST LIKELY THE ONE OF HIM SHOUTING NOOO!..OR I MIGHT JUST CUT TO THE SHOT BELOW AT THIS POINT)
…then we CUT to Poe shouting WE GOTTA GO, THEY’RE COMING!..
…then we CUT to a close-up of Rey turning around to see TIES approaching, as we hear Finn and Poe shouting REY!..and WE GOTTA GO!..as she back around and says CHEWIE…and Finn runs towards ship shouting REY, C’MON…REY!..
…then we CUT to Kylo walking away from the wreckage of his ship…
…then we CUT to this shot of Kylo walking away from the wreckage…
…then we CUT to this shot of Kylo walking away from the wreckage, as he comes to a halt…
…then we CUT to this close-up of Kylo… (AS HE PRESUMABLY WATCHES OCHI’S SHIP TAKE OFF IN THE DISTANCE)
(NOTE - I’D PREFER TO NOT SHOW REY’s FORCE-LIGHTNING, AS I’D RATHER SHE DIDN’T SEEM SUPERPOWERED, AND WOULD RATHER KEEP THE PALPATINE REVEAL TO WHEN KYLO TELLS HER EVENTUALLY)
…and then we continue as we see Ochi’s ship hiding in asteroids…
…then we CUT to a close-up of Rey, as Finn’s voice says IT WASN’T YOUR FAULT…and then Rey says IT WAS…and then Finn says NO, IT WAS REN, HE MADE YOU…and we end on the shot where Rey turns around saying CHEWIE’S GONE!..
…then we CUT to BB-8 looking up at Rey…
…then we CUT to Finn silently facing us…as Rey looks worried…
…and then we continue as we see the Falcon being towed by TIEs towards a Stardestroyer, as we hear Hux’s voice say WE RECOVERED THE SCAVENGER’S SHIP, BUT SHE GOT AWAY…
…then we CUT to inside the Stardestroyer as General Pryde says IS THAT ALL?..as Hux then says NO ALLEGIANT GENERAL, THERE WAS ANOTHER TRANSPORT IN THE DESERT…IT BROUGHT BACK A VALUABLE PRISONER…and General Pryde then says PRISONER?..
…and then we continue as a door slides open, and a guarded Chewie roars…
…and then we continue as Hux says THE BEAST USED TO FLY WITH HAN SOLO…as Chewie then roars…and General Pryde says TAKE IT TO INTERROGATION STATION…and turns to leave…
…and we continue as Chewie is taken away by the Stormtroopers who say MOVE IT!..and we end on hearing Poe’s voice say WE’VE ONLY GOT 8 HOURS LEFT…
…then we CUT to Poe saying IF THE MISSION FAILS…IT’S ALL BEEN FOR NOTHING…and continue on until we end on Rey saying FOR CHEWIE…
…then we CUT to Ochi’s ship powering up to leave…
NOTE- HOWEVER…I DON’T KNOW YET IF I CAN JUST HAVE REY USE HER FORCE-SENSE TO SEARCH THE WRECKAGE OF THE DEATHSTAR FOR THE SECOND WAYFINDER…SO I MIGHT NEED TO USE THE WHOLE FINDING THE DAGGER/NEEDING TO GO TO KAJIMI TO MAKE BABU FRICK MAKE C3PO SAY IT’S INSCRIPTION SCENARIO (ALTHOUGH I DEFINATELY DON’T WANT REY TO USE THE KNIFE AS A ‘SHAPE MAP’ AGAINST THE DEATHSTAR WRECKAGE TOO)…SO I MIGHT HAVE TO DO THE ABOVE SCENE LIKE THIS INSTEAD -
…and we continue as Chewie is taken away by the Stormtroopers who say MOVE IT!..and we end on hearing Poe’s voice say WE’VE ONLY GOT 8 HOURS LEFT…
…then we CUT to Finn saying POE, CHEWIE HAD THE DAGGER…as Poe then says WELL, WE GOTTA FIND ANOTHER WAY…and Finn say THERE ISN’T…THAT WAS THE ONLY CLUE TO THE WAYFINDER THING, AND IT’S GONE!..as C3PO then says IT’S TRUE…THE INSCRIPTION ONLY LIVES IN MY MEMORY NOW…as we continue the scene right up until Rey says FOR CHEWIE…
…then we CUT to Ochi’s ship powering up to leave…
NOTE - ALTHOUGH I MIGHT END UP USING THE ENTIRE SCENE WHICH ENDS IN POE SAYING KAJIMI!..I’M NOT SURE YET.
ALTERNATIVELY…IS IT POSSIBLE TO JUST END ON THE SHOT OF C3PO SAYING YES MASTER POE! ??..AND HAVE THEM GO TO KAJIMI ANYWAY, WITHOUT INVOLVING BABU FRICK??
******** NEW IDEAS! *********
NOT SURE YET IF I WANT TO INCLUDE A RE-EDITED VERSION OF REY THINKING SHE’S KILLED CHEWIE WITH FORCE-LIGHTNING, AS WELL AS INCLUDE A RE-EDITED VERSION OF THE WHOLE ‘OCHI’S SHIP GOING TO KOJIMA/REY VS REN FIGHT/POE GETTING THE PASSKEY FROM AN EX-GIRLFRIEND’ SCENARIO…BUT I THINK I’M LEANING THAT WAY - EXCEPT I HOPEFULLY CAN DO WITHOUT INCLUDING BABU FRICK REMOVING C3PO’S MEMORY TRYING TO GET HIM TO TRANSLATE THE KNIFE INSCRIPTIONS - JUST HAVE HIM CASUALLY MENTION TO POE, FINN, AND REY THAT IT’S ONLY STORED IN HIS MEMORY NOW…AND END ON SHOT OF HIM SAYING “YES MASTER POE” - SO THIS IMPLIES THAT REY CAN NOW FIND OUT OFF C3PO THAT A WAYFINDER OBJECT IS ON THE DEATHSTAR RUINS (WHICH HE DETAILS IN THE SCENE WITH BABU FRICK WHICH I MIGHT BE GETTING RID OF)…WITHOUT HAVING TO USE THE KNIFE AS A ‘VISUAL GUIDELINE’ WHICH I DISLIKE - I JUST HOPE I CAN SHOW THE GROUP ENTERING THE CAVERN SMOOTHLY, SO THAT THEY FIND OCHI’S SKELETON AND KNIFE, WITHOUT HAVING TO SHOW THEM GOING THROUGH ‘QUICKSAND’, WHICH I DISLIKE TOO.
THE EMPEROR HAS DEMANDED THAT KYLO KILLS REY, AND HE IS DEFINATELY JUST ABOUT TO STRIKE HER AT THIS POINT BEFORE LEIA INTERVENES - SO JUST HAVE HER KILL HIM WHEN HE IS DISTRACTED BY LEIA SAYING ‘BEN’, AND LEAVE IT AT THAT IN MY VERSION…WITHOUT HIM BEING REDEEMABLE! (NOTE - ALSO, I HATE THE OVERLY ‘SUPERPOWERED’ FORCE-HEALING NOTION FOR REY, SO THIS SCENARIO ALSO GETS RID OF THAT - ALTHOUGH I CAN JUST ABOUT ACCEPT THAT BABY YODA CAN DO IT IN THE MANDALORIAN!) - BUT I MIGHT RE-EDIT THE SHOTS OF REY SKEWERING HIM, AND MIGHT INCLUDE KYLO SEEING HAN SAYING ‘BEN’ TOO…INBETWEEN THE SHOTS OF LEIA LYING DOWN HOLDING HAN’S MEDAL…AND KYLO DROPPING HIS LIGHTSABER, WHICH REY THEN GRABS. (NOT SURE ABOUT ALL THIS YET…SEE WHAT I’VE WRITTEN LOWER DOWN ABOUT IT ALL)
ALTHOUGH I DISLIKE YODA’S FORCEGHOST BEING ABLE TO AFFECT ‘REAL WORLD’ LIGHTNING IN THE LAST JEDI…(WHICH IS WHY I’M REMOVING THAT SCENE, AS WELL AS THE FACT THAT LUKE IS ALREADY WEARING JEDI ROBES AT THAT POINT, WHICH I DON’T WANT IN MY VERSION - HE WILL ONLY BE SEEN TO WEAR THEM AFTER HE HAS REJOINED WITH THE FORCE, AND DOES HIS FORCE-PROJECTION FIGHT WITH KYLO NEAR THE END OF THE LAST JEDI PORTION OF MY THE LAST JEDI/THE RISE OF SKYWALKER ‘MEGA-CUT’)…I RECKON I CAN LIVE WITH SEEING LUKE’S FORCEGHOST CATCHING THE LIGHTSABER AND LIFTING THE X-WING FOR REY TO FLY TO EXEGOL (AND LEADING THE REBELLION SHIPS TO WHERE IT IS TOO), AS BOTH THOSE INSTANCES DON’T SEEM AS RIDICULOUSLY OVER-‘SUPERPOWERED’ AS YODA’S FORCEGHOST BEING CAPABLE OF BRINGING DOWN ‘REAL-WORLD’ LIGHTNING WHEN HE WANTS! ALSO, THEY ARE BOTH GREAT SCENES INVOLVING SEEING JUST A BIT MORE OF A LIKEABLE LUKE FOR THE LAST TIME IN MY VERSION AT THE END OF THE DAY - (APART FROM WHEN WE SEE HIM AND LEIA WATCHING REY TOGETHER AT THE VERY END OF MY ‘MEGA-CUT’)
ONCE REY KILLS KYLO, SHE HEADS TO LUKE’S ISLAND IN KYLO’S SHIP AND BURNS IT, AND AFTER LUKE TELLS HER THAT LEIA KNEW ABOUT HER BEING A PALPATINE, HE GIVES HER LEIA’S LIGHTSABER AND RAISES HIS X-WING FOR HER TO USE KYLO’S WAYFINDER IN…AND THEN WE CAN GO TO POE AND THE GANG GETTING THE EMPEROR’S MESSAGE, AND THEN EVENTUALLY FOLLOWING REY’S COURSE IN LUKE’S X-WING - THE LAST WE WILL SEE OF THE EMPEROR IS HIS HOLOGRAM TO GENERAL PRYDE, AS I DISLIKE ALL HIS EVENTUAL SCENES ON THE SPIKEY THRONE! - WE CAN ASSUME HE AND HIS FOLLOWERS WERE ALL DESTROYED IN THE FINAL BATTLE, AND THEN HAVE REY GO TO TATTOOINE TO BURY BOTH LIGHTSABERS AS SHE NOW MADE HER OWN, AND END THINGS WITH HERE SEEING LUKE AND LEIA’S FORCEGHOSTS, AND SAYING HER NAME IS REY SKYWALKER.
…THE GROUP HAS LEFT IN THE FALCON TO HEAD TO ENDOR AND THE DEATH STAR RUINS, AND COME ACROSS SOME LOCALS ON ‘ALIEN HORSES’ (WHICH WILL NOT END UP ON THE STARDESTROYER BATTLE!) WHO HELP THEM, AND REY THEN SKIMS OVER TO THE RUINS ON HER OWN TO THE RUINS AND FINDS THE WAYFINDER OBJECT…
(NOTE - I’M GOING TO ASSUME THAT REY IS ‘DRAWN’ TO THE LOCATION OF THE WAYFINDER, EVEN THOUGH WE WON’T HEAR C3PO SAY THE KNIFE’S INSCRIPTION DIRECTIONS (!)…AS WE DON’T SEE KYLO USING A KNIFE ‘GUIDE’ EITHER WHEN HE FOUND THE FIRST ONE!
…and then we continue as she turns…
…then we CUT to a ‘Sith’ version of Rey unfurling a double-bladed lightsaber, who proceeds to fight her after saying DON’T BE AFRAID OF WHO YOU ARE…
…until we end on this close-up of Rey…
…then we CUT to the ‘Sith’ version of Rey snarling in close-up, as Rey falls backwards and drops the wayfinder…
…then we continue on as Kylo appears, and picks up the wayfinder…
…then we continue as Rey ignites her lightsaber and walks slowly towards Kylo, as Kylo says LOOK AT YOURSELF…YOU WANTED TO PROVE TO MY MOTHER THAT YOU WERE A JEDI, BUT YOU’VE PROVEN SOMETHING ELSE…as Rey comes to a halt…
…then we CUT to a close-up of Rey saying GIVE IT TO ME…
…and then we continue as Rey says THE DARK SIDE IS IN OUR NATURE…SURRENDER TO IT…and then Reys say GIVE IT TO ME…once again, as Kylo then says THE ONLY WAY YOU’RE GOING TO EXEGOL IS WITH ME…as he crushes the wayfinder, and Rey shouts NOOO!..and then starts to fight with him, as they both jump downwards…
…and then we continue as Leia senses something is wrong, and we end on the shot of her walking away…
…then we CUT to Rey and Kylo fighting on the outside of the death star ruins…
(I’M GETTING RID OF THE ANIMATRONIC MAZ AS I DISLIKE IT - IT’S WOODEN COMPARED TO THE CGI VERSION IN THE FORCE AWAKENS - AND HOW COME SHE’S ABLE TO KNOW THAT LEIA KNOWS WHAT HAS TO BE DONE, AND THAT TO REACH HER SON WILL TAKE ALL OF HER STRENGTH THAT’S LEFT?? - IS SHE PSYCHIC?? - CHECK THE FORCE AWAKENS AND READ UP ON WIKIPEDIA ABOUT HER)
…and then we continue as Finn runs towards them shouting REY!..and then Rey shouts NO!..as she Force-pushes him back…
…and we end on this shot of Finn being obscured by the waves…
…the we CUT to Finn landing and sliding back towards Jenna…
…and we then continue as Rey and Kylo keep fighting…until he’s just about to kill her and suddenly stops…
(NOTE - NOT SURE IF I’D RE-EDIT FIGHT SHORTER OR NOT - FOR INSTANCE AFTER REY AND KYLO DO THEIR FIRST JUMP INTO THE WAVES IN THE DISTANCE, DO I INSERT FINN SHOUTING REY!..AND THEN CUT TO REY LANDING LIKE A SUPERHERO FROM HER SECOND JUMP?? - ALSO, DO I RE-EDIT THE END OF THE FIGHT A BIT, JUST WHEN KYLO GOES TO TAKE A KILLING SWIPE AT HER?? - NOT SURE YET)
…and we continue as Leia whispers BEN…and a distracted Kylo turns around
…and then we continue as Leia lies down on her bed as she holds Han’s medal…
(NOTE - I MIGHT END UP DOING A SHORT RE-EDIT OF KYLO SEEING HAN AT THIS POINT - NOT SURE YET, AND ALSO NOT SURE WHAT TO HAVE EITHER ONE OF THEM SAY YET)
…and then we see Kylo drop his lightsaber in slow motion, as Rey grabs it and stabs him with it…
…and then we continue as Leia passes away and her arm drops…
…and then we continue as Rey senses her death, saying LEIA!..
…and then we continue as Rey pulls the lightsaber out of Kylo…
…and then we continue as Rey cries in shock…
…and then we continue as R2D2 sounds mournful beside Leia…
…and then we continue as Rey kneels down beside Kylo, and we end on the shot of his wound…
…then we CUT to Rey saying I DID WANT TO TAKE YOUR HAND…BEN’S HAND…as she then gets up, and Kylo watches her leave…
…so we see Kylo for the LAST time at this point…and then Rey runs towards Kylo’s ship, gets in, and flies away…as Finn and Jenna watch, and the Falcon then arrives…
NOTE - I DON’T WANT TO INCLUDE ANY SHOTS OF ‘SHROUDED’ LEIA…SO I’D GET RID OF THE ONE THAT CONTINUES AT THIS POINT, WHERE SHE IS SURROUNDED BY REBELS AS MAZ SAYS “GOODBYE DEAR PRINCESS…” (as she should have ‘disappeared’ at the point where she died)
…then we CUT to Poe, Finn, and Chewie arrive back at the rebel base, and are told by a female rebel that Leia has gone…as Chewie ends up roaring in distress… (FINISH OFF WORDING HERE)
…then we CUT to a close-up of the Emperor’s hologram, as he says THE PRINCESS OF ALDERAAN HAS DISRUPTED MY PLANS…BUT HER FOOLISH ACT WILL BE IN VAIN…
(NOTE - DUE TO THE EMPEROR’S DIALOGUE STARTING JUST SLIGHTLY BEFORE THE ‘WIPE’ EFFECT FROM A CLOSE-UP OF KYLO ENDS…IS IT POSSIBLE TO START HEARING THE EMPEROR SAY “THE…” OVER THE PRECEDING SHOT OF CHEWIE ROARING BESIDE AN ORANGE X-WING I’M CUTTING DIRECTLY FROM??)
…and then we continue as the Emperor then says COME TO ME ON EXEGOL GENERAL PRYDE…
…and then we continue as we end on General Pryde saying AS I SERVED YOU IN THE OLD WARS, I SERVE YOU NOW…
…then we CUT to the Emperor saying THE FINAL ORDER BEGINS…SHE WILL COME…HER FRIENDS WILL FOLLOW…as General Pryde then says YES MY LORD…and bows his head… (NOTE - I’M GOING TO INCLUDE THE REST OF THE EMPEROR’S DIALOGUE ABOUT SENDING A SHIP TO SORT OUT A PLANET THE REBELS CARE ABOUT, AFTER ALL!)
…and then we continue as a Sith Stardestroyer appears, and it fires down at the planet Kojima…
…then we CUT to a rebel female telling Poe (FINISH WORDING HERE)
…and then we CUT to a side view of Poe (JUST AFTER HE HAS SAID “THIS IS HOW IT FINISHES…”), just as he shuts his mouth and then turns when Rose says LISTEN…IT’S ON EVERY FREQUENCY…
THE CLOSE UP OF ROSE CONTINUES HERE, BUT I DONT KNOW IF I’LL INCLUDE IT OR NOT YET!
…then we CUT to a close-up of Rose saying LEIA MADE YOU ACTING GENERAL…WHAT NOW?..
…and then we CUT to Leia’s body, as Poe says (FINISH OFF WORDING HERE) …as we eventually hear Lando say …WE HAD EACH OTHER…and we end on a close-up of Poe…
(NOTE - I MIGHT END UP MISSING OUT THIS WHOLE SCENE ALTOGETHER - BUT I’M NOT SURE YET, AS LANDO IS REALLY GOOD IN IT, AND I WOULDN’T LIKE TO LOSE IT UNLESS IT LOOKS LIKE IT WOULD BE BETTER WITHOUT IT)
…then we CUT to Kylo’s ship burning on Luke’s island sanctuary…
…and then we continue as a distressed Rey throws wood on the fire…
…and then we continue as she then throws Luke’s lightsaber towards the fire…and Luke’s Forceghost suddenly catches it and walks towards her saying (FINISH WORDING HERE)…and we end on the close-up of Rey…
…then we CUT to Rey sitting as she says (FINISH WORDING HERE)…
…and then we continue as they have a conversation (FINISH WORDING HERE)… (I MIGHT BE CUTTING SOME DIALOGUE OUT - NOT SURE YET)…and we end on this shot of Luke standing up again…
…and then we continue as Rey then proceeds to be given Leia’s lightsaber, and see a flashback of young Luke and Leia training with each other…
…and then we continue as Luke eventually tells Rey that she has everything she needs…as she runs to get the other wayfinder out of Kylo’s smouldering ship… (FINISH WORDING HERE)
…and then we continue as the sea starts bubbling…and Rey runs to see Luke’s X-wing rising up…
…and then we continue as Rey turns around to see Luke’s smiling Forceghost is lifting the X-wing up for her…
(NOTE - THIS WILL BE THE LAST TIME WE SEE LUKE’S FORCEGHOST, APART FROM WHEN WE SEE HIM BESIDE LEIA AT THE VERY END)
…then we CUT to a close-up of R2 beeping…
…then we CUT to C3PO saying PICKING UP A SIGNAL?..FROM WHOM?..
…and then we continue as the conehead droid gets plugged in…
…and then we continue as
…and then we continue as Rey flies Luke’s X-wing towards Exagol…
…and then we continue as Finn says SHE’S SHOWING US…SHE’S SHOWING US HOW TO GET THERE…as Poe then says THEN WE GO TOGETHER…
…then we continue as the bearded rebel says to sad Chewie COME ON BUDDY, WE NEED YOU…as he then gets up to follow the others and we hear Finn’s voice say SO LONG AS THOSE STARDESTROYERS ARE ON EXEGOL…
…and then we continue as Finn then says to the gathering…WE CAN HIT 'EM…and a rebel voice then says HIT 'EM, HOW?..and another rebel voice then says (FINISH WORDING HERE)
…and then we continue as Poe then says…LIKE THIS ONE…as he presses a remote…
…and then we continue as Finn says EXCEPT THEY WON’T…AIR TEAM’S GONNA FIND THE TOWER, GROUND TEAM’S GONNA BLAST IT…as a rebel then says GROUND TEAM?..
…and then we continue as Finn looks over and says I HAVE AN IDEA FOR THAT…
…and then we continue as Poe says ONCE THE TOWER’S DOWN, THE FLEET WILL BE STUCK IN THE ATMOS CHECK THIS WORD FOR JUST MINUTES…WITH NO SHIELDS, AND NO WAY OUT…
…then we CUT to Lando saying THAT’S OUR CHANCE… (NOTE - NOT SURE YET IF I SHOULD MISS OUT THE PREVIOUS SHOT OF ROSE SAYING “WE THINK THE CHECK THIS WORDING CANNONS MIGHT CONNECT TO THE MAIN REACTORS”, OR NOT)
…and then we continue as the bearded rebel says WE NEED TO DO SOME HOLDO MANOEUVRES…DO SOME REAL DAMAGE…as C3PO and an alien turn to look at him…and we hear Finn’s voice says C’MON, THAT MOVE IS ONE IN A MILLION…
…and then we continue as Finn says FIGHTERS AND FREIGHTERS CAN TAKE OUT THEIR CANNONS IF THERE ARE ENOUGH OF US…
(NOTE - NOT SURE YET IF I WANT TO INCLUDE BOTH OF THESE ABOVE SCENES AFTER LANDO SPEAKS, OR NOT)
…and then we continue as NIET NUB GUY says some alien gibberish…and then a female rebel says HE’S RIGHT, WE’D BE NO MORE THAN BUGS TO THEM…
…and then we continue as Finn says THAT’S WHERE LANDO AND CHEWIE COME IN…THEY’LL TAKE THE FALCON TO THE CORE SYSTEMS…SEND OUT A CALL FOR HELP FROM ANYBODY LISTENING…as Poe then says WE’VE GOT FRIENDS OUT THERE, THEY’LL COME IF THEY KNOW THERE’S HOPE… * NOTE * - NOBODY CAME AT THE BATTLE OF CRAIT THOUGH, SO I NEED TO HAVE A THINK ABOUT THE WORDING USED HERE OR IN ‘THE LAST JEDI’ PORTION OF MY ‘MEGACUT’!
…and then we continue as there’s concerned muttering in the gathering, as Poe says THEY WILL…FIRST ORDER WINS BY MAKING US THINK WE’RE ALONE…WE’RE NOT ALONE…GOOD PEOPLE WILL FIGHT IF WE NEED THEM…
(NOTE - I’M NOT KEEN ON THE BEGINNING OF THE ‘REBELS GETTING READY TO LEAVE’ SCENE THAT CONTINUES AT THIS POINT, SO I THINK THE BEST WAY TO START IT WOULD BE JUST AFTER THE BLACK FEMALE REBEL HAS RUN TOWARDS THE GREEN SHIP - THE MUSIC STARTS NICELY HERE, AND BUILDS UP ALONG WITH POE’S DIALOGUE FROM THIS POINT)
…then we CUT to a pilot starting up his green ship’s engine, as we see all the rebels preparing to leave, and we hear Poe’s voice say WHAT OUR MOTHERS AND FATHERS FOUGHT FOR, WE WILL NOT LET DIE…NOT TODAY…TODAY WE MAKE OUR LAST STAND…FOR THE GALAXY…FOR LEIA…
…and then we continue as Poe says…FOR EVERYONE WE’VE LOST…and Finn then says THEY[VE TAKEN ENOUGH OF US…NOW WE TAKE THE WAR TO THEM…
…and then we continue as the rebel fleet leaves the jungle planet…
…and then we continue as Rey’s X-wing arrives at the Stardestroyer fleet above Exagol…
…and then we continue as a female captain’s voice says SHE’S ON APPROACH…and then General Pryde’s voice says ALL SHIPS RISE TO DEPLOYMENT ALTITUDE…as Rey’s X-wing dives down…
(NOTE - THIS WILL BE THE LAST WE SEE OF HER UNTIL AFTER THE BATTLE IS WON, AND SHE TRIUMPHANTLY FLIES BACK INTO VIEW AGAIN TO JOIN THE OTHER SHIPS LEAVING) - CHANGE OF PLAN! I THINK I HAVE TO SHOW REY ENTERING THE STRUCTURE TO CONFRONT THE EMPEROR AFTER ALL, AS IT JUST SEEMS UNSATISFYING TO LEAVE THAT OUT AFTER ALL - BUT I INTEND TO MAKE IT SEEM AS IF HE WANTS HER TO TAKE THE THRONE AS HIS HEIR…UNTIL SHE TRIES TO ATTACK HIM THAT IS!
…then we CUT to seeing the Stardestroyers slowly rise up… (NOTE - I THINK I’D RATHER MISS OUT THE ‘TINY SHIP DIVING DOWN’ SHOT)
ADD MORE PICS OF REY HERE, AS SHE WALKS INTO THE LARGE STRUCTURE - AND THE SCENE ENDS ON THIS SHOT BELOW -
…then we CUT to the Tantive IV and the rest of the rebel fleet heading to Exogal, following the course set by Rey… (FINISH WORDING HERE) - NOTE: we actually CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL HERE, SEEING AS I’M NOW SHOWING REY ENTER THE STRUCTURE.
…and then we continue as a Stardestroyer crewman says CAPTAIN…WE HAVE RESISTANCE CRAFT INCOMING…as a female commander walks towards General Pryde’s hologram saying ALLEGIANT GENERAL…and the hologram says (FINISH WORDING HERE)
…and then we continue as the rebel fleet arrives at Exegol…
…and then we continue as Poe says LOOK AT THAT FLEET…
(NOTE - ALTHOUGH I’VE PREVIOUSLY GOT RID OF POE TALKING ABOUT THE STARDESTROYER CANNONS BEING CAPABLE OF DESTROYING ENTIRE WORLDS, I’M NOT SURE YET IF I NEED TO GET RID OF ANY DIALOGUE ABOUT THE CANNONS DURING THE FOLLOW BATTLE SCENES, OR NOT - STILL TO CHECK IT OUT MORE)
…and then we continue as the Stardestroyers begin to fire at the rebel ships…
…AND THEN WE CONTINUE ON, AS WE EVENTUALLY END THIS 1ST BATTLE PORTION ON REBEL SHIPS DIVING DOWNWARDS…
…AND THEN WE CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL, AS WE SEE REY BEING LOWERED BELOW THE STRUCTURE ON A LEVITATING PLATFORM -
FILL IN LOTS MORE PICS OF REY ENTERING THE STRUCTURE HERE, AS THE SEQUENCE ENDS ON THIS SHOT -
…then we CUT to the 2nd part of the space battle continuing… - NOTE: we actually CONTINUE AS NORMAL NOW SINCE I’M INCLUDING REY VS THE EMPEROR AFTER ALL, as we resume with the space battle at this point -
FILL IN MORE PICS HERE, AS WE EVENTUALLY SEE GENERAL PRYDE TELLING HIS OFFICERS TO JAM THE NAVIGATION SIGNAL AND ROUTE IT THROUGH HIS COMMAND SHIP INSTEAD, AS WE EVENTUALLY SEE FINN REALISE THAT THE SIGNAL IS ON THE COMMAND SHIP NOW -
…as Finn says “WAIT…THE NAV SIGNAL’S COMING FROM THAT COMMAND SHIP…THAT’S OUR DROP ZONE” -
…and then we CUT to a female rebel pilot saying “YOU WANNA LAUNCH A GROUND INVASION ON A STARDESTROYER?” -
…as Finn says “I DON’T WANT TO, BUT WE CAN’T TAKE OUT THAT SHIP’S NAV SYSTEM FROM THE AIR…” -
PUT MORE PICS AND DIALOGUE HERE, AS WE END ON THIS SHOT OF FINN SAYING “WE HOPE” -
…AND THEN WE CONTINUE ON, AS WE EVENTUALLY SEE A REBEL ‘GROUND’ TROOPS CARRIER LAND ON A STARDESTROYER HULL, AS GENERAL PRYDE IS NOTIFIED, AND WE END THIS 2ND BATTLE PORTION ON A CLOSE-UP OF THIS OFFICER TALKING TO HIM… (FINISH WORDING HERE) - CHANGE OF PLAN! - I’D PREFER TO CUT DIRECTLY FROM THE TROOPS CARRIER LANDING STRAIGHT TO THE CLOSE-UP OF IT’S DOOR OPENING AND THE HORSES COMING OUT, AND PLACE THE GENERAL PRYDE SCENE OF HIM BEING TOLD THEY ARE NOT USING SPEEDERS AFTER THAT -
NOTE: SINCE I’M SHOWING REY VS THE EMPEROR NOW AFTER ALL, I WANT TO USE SOME OF HIS DIALOGUE WHICH OVERLAPS SHOTS OF THE HORSES - EXCEPT I’M GOING TO RE-ARRANGE THINGS SO THAT WE NOW CUT DIRECTLY TO THE CLOSE-UP OF THE TROOPS CARRIER DOOR OPENING, AND SEE THE HORSES COME OUT -
I WANT TO MISS OUT THE SHOTS OF FINN AND JANNAH TALKING TO EACH OTHER (AS I THINK IT MIGHT HELP THE SEQUENCE TO SEEM TO NOT COME ACROSS QUITE SO RIDICULOUS TO ME), SO THAT WE JUST HEAR MUSIC ACCOMPANYING THE HORSES SCENE, AS I THINK THIS WILL IMPROVE IT A BIT - NOTE, MIGHT IT BE POSSIBLE TO CUT DIRECTLY FROM THE SHARP SHOT OF THE CARRIER LANDING TO THE CLOSE-UP OF IT AS THE DOOR OPENS AND WE SEE THE HORSES AND FINN AND REST ON HORSEBACK…AND THEN CUT TO CONVERSATION BETWEEN GENERAL PRYDE AND HIS CREW HERE INSTEAD???..BEFORE THEN CUTTING BACK TO OVERHEAD SHOT OF FINN AND THE REBELS ON HORSEBACK??? - (ANYWAY, HOW DID THE CREWMAN KNOW THAT THEY WERE’NT USING SPEEDERS BEFORE THE REBELS HAD EVEN COME OUT OF THE CARRIER??)
…AND I’D END ON THIS SHOT BELOW, IMMEDIATELY BEFORE WE HEAR FINN AND JENNAH TALKING TO EACH OTHER -
…and then we CUT to the scene where a black officer says that a troop carrier has landed, and General Pryde tells another crewmember to jab their speeders, only to be told they aren’t using speeders (NOTE - the way things are ordered in the original version, how does the crewmember know they aren’t using speeders when the troops carrier door hasn’t even opened yet?) -
…and then we CUT to the overhead shot of the rebels on horseback, at the point immediately after where Finn and Jennah were talking to each other - HOPEFULLY THE MUSIC BLENDS IN WELL ENOUGH IN MY NEW RE-ARRANGEMENT OF THIS OVERALL SEQUENCE -
…then we CUT to First Order troops landing on a Stardestroyer hull… NOTE - we actually CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL HERE NOW, seeing as I’m including the horses after all - STILL MORE PICS AROUND HERE TOO
…then we continue as the rebel ‘ground’ troops engage in battle with the First Order troops… (NOTE - I’M GETTING RID OF ALL THE REBEL TROOPS RIDING ON ALIEN HORSEBACK!) - NOTE, I’M KEEPING THEM AFTER ALL NOW!!
STILL TO FILL IN LOTS OF PICS HERE TOO
(NOTE - AS MUCH AS I DISLIKE THE WAY HE’S BEEN BROUGHT BACK, I’M GOING TO HAVE TO INCLUDE SCENES OF REY OVERCOMING THE EMPEROR AFTER ALL, DUE TO ALL THE BLOOD ON REY AT THE END…BUT WILL RE-EDIT THINGS MUCH MORE TIGHTLY THROUGHOUT IN THE SCENES INVOLVING THEM BOTH - LESS IS MORE!) - NOTE, THE BLOOD ISN’T AN ISSUE ANYMORE, AS I’M NOT INCLUDING THE WORSE BLOODIED SCENES OF HER AT THE END ANYWAY. THIS ISN’T AN ISSUE ANYMORE ANYWAY, AS I’M GOING TO INCLUDE REY VS THE EMPEROR NOW AFTER ALL.
…SO EVENTUALLY, WE SEE REY HEAD TOWARDS THE EMPTY THRONE -
STILL TO ADD MORE PICS HERE
STILL MORE PICS TO ADD HERE OF THE LIKES OF REY LOOKING AROUND AT ALL THE SITH FOLLOWERS CHANTING , BEFORE SHE EVENTUALLY HEARS THE EMPEROR SAY “LONG HAVE I WAITED…” AT THIS POINT, AND WE SEE HIM -
…AND WE END THE SHOT JUST IMMEDIATELY BEFORE THE EMPORER THEN SAYS “FOR MY GRANDCHILD TO COME HOME”, AS I DON’T THINK I WANT TO USE THAT LINE -
WHAT I’M HOPING TO DO WITH THE OVERALL SEQUENCE THAT COMES NEXT - ADD LOTS OF PICS HERE TO SHOW HOW REY GOES TO ATTACK THE EMPEROR AFTER HE TRIES TO GET HER TO TAKE THE THRONE, AND DEALS WITH HIS RED GUARDS, AND HE THEN BLASTS HER, WE SEE THE LIGHTSABERS FALL, HE SEES HIS FINGERS GROW AND TALKS, THEN WE SEE REY BEING HELD IN THE GRIP OF THE FORCE AS THE EMPEROR SAYS “AND NOW…”, AND HE TALKS ABOUT THE ONE TRUE EMPEROR AS HE BLASTS HER, MAYBE MAYBE MISS OUT THE MAD EMPEROR SHOT HERE AS WELL AS REY FALLING, AND CUT DIRECTLY TO THE X-WING SPACE BATTLE AGAIN AT THIS POINT???
NOTE, I’M GOING TO SHOW ALL THE DIALOGUE BETWEEN THE EMPEROR AND REY BELOW, TO MAKE IT EASIER TO SEE AT A GLANCE WHICH LINES OF DIALOGUE I WANT TO USE WHEN I ADD FURTHER PICS HERE -
So after the Emperor says “LONG HAVE I WAITED…”
Emperor’s face then says “…FOR MY GRANDCHILD TO COME HOME” -
Then we briefly see Rey’s face (as next dialogue begins over the end of it) -
Emperor’s face slowly zooms closer as he then says “I NEVER WANTED YOU DEAD…I WANTED YOU HERE…EMPRESS” -
Then dialogue continues as he gestures towards the throne saying …“PALPATINE” -
Emperor then says “YOU WILL TAKE THE THRONE…” -
Then Rey backs away -
Emperor then says “IT IS YOUR BIRTHRIGHT TO RULE HERE…IT IS IN YOUR BLOOD…” -
Then dialogue continues as the Emperor says “…OUR BLOOD” -
Rey continues to back away saying “I HAVEN’T COME TO LEAD THE SITH…I’VE COME TO END THEM” -
Emperor then says “AS A JEDI?” -
Rey says “YES”, As Emperor then says “NOOOO…” (NOTE - WOULD THEN CUTTING TO EMPEROR SHOUTING “THE JEDI ARE DEAD!” WORK? - IS REY TOO CLOSE TO HIM IN THAT SHOT?? - FOLLOWED BY THEN CUTTING TO REY’S FACE AS EMPEROR THEN SAYS “AS ALL THE SITH LIVE IN ME…YOU WILL BE EMPRESS, WE WILL BE ONE!” - NOT SURE, CHECK)
Emperor then says “…YOUR HATRED, YOUR ANGER…YOU WANT TO KILL ME…THAT IS WHAT I WANT…”
KILL ME, AND MY SPIRIT WILL PASS INTO YOU…AS ALL THE SITH LIVE IN ME…" -
Then dialogue continues as Emperor says “YOU WILL BE EMPRESS, WE WILL BE ONE!” -
Then we see Rey’s face -
Then after the close-up on Rey’s face, THE SPACE BATTLE RESUMES AT THIS POINT, as the stardestroyer fleet’s engines ignite -
…AND SPACE BATTLE ENDS ON POE’S VOICE SAYING “JUST STAY ALIVE!” -
We then see Rey’s face, as Emperor then says “THE TIME HAS COME!”, as Rey turns around and we see the hooded Sith followers moving around and kneeling, as lightning crackles behind the throne -
(NOTE - I MIGHT BE CUTTING at the end of the shot where we see the lightning crackling up behind the throne, with the hooded followers in the foreground - not 100% sure yet)
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…and then the Emperor says “WITH YOUR HATRED YOU WILL TAKE MY LIFE…AND YOU WILL ASCEND!” -
Rey says “ALL YOU WANT IS FOR ME TO HATE, BUT I WON’T…NOT EVEN YOU” -
Emperor then says “WEAK…LIKE YOUR PARENTS” -
Rey says “MY PARENTS WERE STRONG…THEY SAVED ME FROM YOU” -
Emperor then says “YOUR MASTER LUKE SKYWALKER WAS SAVED BY HIS FATHER…THE ONLY FAMILY YOU HAVE HERE…IS ME!” -
and then we see Rey watch the Emperor look upwards, as she turns to look up also -
as Rey looks on in horror…Emperor’s voice-over says “THEY DON’T HAVE LONG…” -
then Emperor’s voice-over continues to say “…NO-ONE IS COMING TO HELP THEM…AND YOU ARE THE ONE WHO LED THEM HERE…” -
then Emperor’s voice-over continues to say “…STRIKE ME DOWN (I MIGHT REMOVE these 3 words - not 100% sure yet)…TAKE THE THRONE, REIGN OVER THE NEW EMPIRE, AND THE FLEET WILL BE YOURS…ONLY YOU HAVE THE POWER TO SAVE THEM…REFUSE…AND YOUR NEW FAMILY DIES!”, as we end on Rey’s face -
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At this point, we see Rey’s X-wing as Kylo appears and rushes towards the Sith building -
as we see Rey look down then turn around to the Emperor -
as we see a brief shot of the Emperor -
as Rey nods in despair -
as the Emperor says “GOOOOD!” -
as Kylo rushes into the Sith building and leaps onto a huge chain -
as we resume the space battle as the rebels run back to their carrier on the stardestroyer hull, and Finn ends up aiming a big gun around to fire at the command deck -
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as we hear the Emperor’s voice say “THE RITUAL BEGINS…” -
as the Emperor moves towards Rey saying “…SHE WILL STRIKE ME DOWN…AND PLEDGE HERSELF AS A SITH!”, as we end on Rey’s face as the Sith followers chant -
at this point we see Kylo shooting at the red guards then being surrounded by the KLnights of Ren, as the Emperor’s voice says “SHE WILL DRAW HER WEAPON…” -
and then we see a brief close-up of Rey reaching for Luke’s lightsaber as we hear the Sith followers chanting -
and then Rey ignites her lightsaber as the Emperor then says “SHE WILL COME TO ME”, and Rey then slowly walks forwards as she turns to the side to look at the Sith followers who chant -
(NOTE- I MIGHT CUT JUST WHEN THE SABER IGNITES ABOVE JUST BEFORE WE HEAR THE EMPEROR’S VOICE - NOT SURE YET)
at this point we see Kylo is still fighting with the Knights -
as Rey continues to walk slowly towards the Emperor as he says “SHE WILL TAKE HER REVENGE…”, and the Sith crowd chant -
at this point we see Kylo still fighting with the Knights -
as Rey then walks closer to the Emperor as he says “…AND WITH A STROKE OF HER SABER, THE SITH ARE REBORN…”, and Rey lifts her saber upwards -
the Emperor then shouts “THE JEDI ARE DEAD!” -
as Rey holds her saber up as the Sith crowd chants -
and we then cut between close-ups of Rey and Kylo in ‘Force communication’ -
as we hear the Emperor’s voice say “DO IT…” -
as the Emperor then says “…MAKE THE SACRIFICE!” -
and Rey slowly raises her lightsaber behind her back as if to strike, as the Emperor closes his eyes, but instead the lightsaber disappears, as we close-in on the Emperor -
and Kylo now has Luke’s lightsaber behind his back, and begins to fight the Knights with it -
as Rey grabs Leia’s lightsaber from behind her back, and ignites it -
as the Emperor pulls away from Rey as she starts to fight his red guards -
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as Kylo continues to fight the Knights -
as Rey continues to fight the red guards up until when she stands up suddenly -
as Kylo finishes off the final red guard, and joins Rey as they both hold up their lightsabers together -
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as the Emperor’s voice says “STAND TOGETHER…” -
and the Emperor then says “…DIE TOGETHER!”, as he raises his wizened hands -
as Rey and Kylo are knocked backwards off their feet -
as Luke and Leia’s lightsabers tumble along the ground -
as Rey and Kylo are pulled forward by the Emperor -
as the Emperor suddenly recoils and gasps (NOTE - I MIGHT THEN CUT TO REY GRABBING LEIA’S SABER FROM BEHIND HER BACK AND FIGHTING THE RED GUARDS AS THE EMPEROR BACKS AWAY) -
as the Emperor watches his hands regenerating, and he says “THE LIFEFORCE OF YOUR BOND…A DYED IN THE FORCE…A POWER LIKE LIFE ITSELF…” -
as the Emperor’s voice says “…UNSEEN FOR GENERATIONS…” as we see Kylo and Rey powerless in front of him -
as the Emperor’s voice says “…AND NOW…”, as we see Rey powerless in front of him -
as the Emperor says “…THE POWER OF TWO…RESTORES THE ONE TRUE EMPEROR!”, as he raises his now regenerated hands towards them, and we hear Rey scream -
as the Emperor starts to suck the lifeforce out of Rey and Kylo -
as the Emperor manically laughs and his eyes turn yellow -
as the Emperor continues to suck the lifeforce out of Rey and Kylo, and they eventually fall to the ground -
as Rey falls in close-up as we hear the sound of an X-wing -
and the space battle continues again at this point -
NOTE - I’VE JUST SHOW THE EXACT WAY THE SCENES ABOVE PLAY OUT IN THE MOVIE JUST THE WAY THEY ARE, UNTIL I CAN SORT OUT THE WAY I WANT TO REARRANGE THEM…BUT FROM THIS POINT BELOW, I’M NOW RESUMING TO JUST SHOW THE WAY I WANT TO CUT THINGS FOR THE REST OF THE MOVIE -
NOTE - I MIGHT just CUT from ‘Steps’ saying “I KNOW, I SEE THEM” above, and miss out the shot below of Poe saying “NO, NO, STEPS, STEPS!”…
…and instead CUT directly to the shot below of ‘Steps’ X-wing being hit, as I think it sounds more effective if we just hear ‘Steps’ screaming, and Poe yelling “NOOOOO!” before he crashes -
as we hear frantic radio chatter, and CUT at the point when an exploding X-wing passes the bottom-RIGHT of the screen -
…and then we CUT back MUCH SOONER to the Emperor now (INSTEAD OF WAITING FOR THIS WHOLE SECTION OF THE SPACE BATTLE TO CONCLUDE AS NORMAL), as I think it’s better if we get to see him fully restored at this point, so that we keep the momentum up of his transformation, rather than have to wait so long to see what happened with him after Rey and Kylo fell to the ground earlier! (NOTE - IN THE MOVIE, POE WOULD NORMALLY APOLOGISE TO EVERYONE IN DISPAIR AT THIS POINT, AND WE WOULD THEN GO ON TO SEE LANDO APPEAR WITH THE HUGE FLEET - WHICH KINDA MADE US KNOW THAT EVERYTHING WAS GOING TO BE OKAY NOW…BUT BY KEEPING THE ‘CALVALRY’ FROM ARRIVING UNTIL AFTER THE EMPEROR’S FULL TRANSFORMATION, THIS GIVES A LONGER IMPRESSION OF THINGS GOING FROM BAD TO WORSE FOR THE REBELS!) -
…as we CUT to the fully restored Emperor saying “LOOK WHAT YOU HAVE MADE…”, and the Sith crowds chant, as the Emperor acknowledges them -
…as we CUT back to the space battle (JUST AFTER ‘STEPS’ HAD CRASHED), and resume at the point JUST AFTER the exploding X-wing passed the bottom-RIGHT of the screen…so that we now see an exploding Y-wing pass the bottom-LEFT of the screen -
…and continue on as normal as Poe apologises to everyone in dispair -
…FINISH PICS AND DIALOGUE OFF HERE, AS LANDO APPEARS WITH A HUGE FLEET (NOTE - I MAY GET RID OF ‘POE SAYING EVERY CANON HIT IS A WORLD SAVED’ SHOTS, AND JUST JOIN THE FALCON SHOTS TOGETHER INSTEAD…AND MAY ALSO SHORTEN STARDESTROYER CREW SCENE A BIT, SO THAT WE DON’T SEE GENERAL PRYDE AND BLACK OFFICER TALKING, AS I DON’T LIKE THAT DIALOGUE! - OR GET RID OF IT ALTOGETHER?? - NOT SURE YET)
…and as Poe excitedly hears from his ‘ex-girlfriend’ and Babu Frik (NOTE - I MIGHT GET RID OF BABU FRIK - NOT SURE YET!), this section of the space battle ends as normal on this shot of exploding stardestroyers -
…as we CUT to the Emperor’s voice shouting “NOTHING WILL STOP THE RETURN OF THE SITH!”, as he then raises his hands and fires lightning bolts upwards (NOTE - HE SEEMED TO BE SUDDENLY POSITIONED ON THE THRONE AFTER HE FLUNG KYLO DOWN THE CHASM IN THE MOVIE, BUT NOW THERE’S BEEN PLENTY OF TIME FOR HIM TO BE SITTING ON IT AT THIS POINT!) - NOTE - ALTERNATIVELY…I MIGHT GET RID OF ALL THE ‘OVER-POWERED’ EMPEROR SHOTS OF HIM FIRING LIGHTNING UP IN THE SKY AT THE SHIPS, AS WELL AS THE SCENE OF POE’S SHIP AND OTHERS POWERERING UP…AND JUST CUT BACK TO REY REVIVING AND HEARING VOICES BEFORE SHE GETS UP AND RETRIEVES LEIA’S LIGHTSABER AT THIS POINT INSTEAD!
…and we continue on as normal, as the Emperor’s laugh fades and Rey turns over to see the lightning hitting the ships -
as Rey ‘Forcegrabs’ Leia’s lightsaber, and stands facing the Emperor who then stops firing his lightning -
…and then we CUT to the ship’s no longer being hit by the Emperor’s lightning, as Poe says “I’M BACK ON…THIS IS OUR LAST CHANCE, WE GOTTA HIT THOSE CANONS NOW!” (NOTE - IT MAKES MORE SENSE TO ME THAT THE ELECTRICAL BOLTS ARE PAUSED AT THIS POINT WHEN THE EMPEROR GETS DISTRACTED BY REY CONFRONTING HIM AGAIN, INSTEAD OF THE POINT THAT THEY ARE PAUSED IN THE MOVIE! - BUT WILL KEEP TO THIS IF JOINING DIRECTLY TO THE WIDE SHOT OF THE EMPEROR VS REY MAKES IT LOOK LIKE HE’S TOO SUDDENLY OFF HIS THRONE!) -
NOTE - THIS NEXT SECTION SHOWS HOW I MIGHT END UP REDOING THE EMPEROR VS REY DUEL - NOT SURE YET - AND HOPEFULLY ALL THE MUSIC MELDS TOGETHER WELL ENOUGHH!
…as we then CUT to the Emperor getting up slowly and saying “LET YOUR DEATH BE THE FINAL WORD IN THE STORY OF REBELLION!”, as he fires lightning bolts at Rey, who blocks them with Leia’s lightsaber -
…and then we MAYBE CUT to the wide shot of the Emperor vs Rey (NOTE - HE’S NOW SUDDENLY MOVED FORWARD OFF HIS THRONE - WILL THIS STILL WORK OKAY?? - NOT SURE) - NOTE - CHANGE OF PLAN! - I MAY END UP CONTINUING THIS WHOLE SCENE USING ALL OF THE EMPEROR’S DIALOGUE FOR DRAMATIC EFFECT, SEEING AS I’M SHORTENING THE OVERALL SCENE SO MUCH NOW, AND GETTING RID OF ALL THE SILLY-LOOKING SHOTS OF HIM ANYWAY!!
…and then we CUT to Rey standing her ground, as the Emperor says “I AM ALL THE SITH!” -
…and we continue as normal as Rey says “AND I…”, as she ‘Forcegrabs’ Luke’s lightsaber behind her back -
…and we continue as normal as Rey says “…I’M ALL THE JEDI!”, as she clashes both her lightsabers together -
…and then we CUT to the ‘electrical bang’ as the Emperor disappears and the Sith throne disintergrates (NOTE - DOING IT THIS WAY MEANS I CAN’T USE A COUPLE OF SHOTS I LIKED, BUT I REALLY PREFER THE WAY THIS THEN LEADS BACK INTO THE SCORE AFTER REY CLASHES HER LIGHTSABERS TOGETHER!) -
and we then continue on as normal, as the entire building disintergrates on top of the Sith crowds -
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…and then we continue as Rey Force-pulls Luke’s lightsaber to her…
(NOTE - I’M GOING TO TRY TO SHOW THAT REY EARLIER DROPPED LUKE’S LIGHTSABER BEHIND HER BACK - INBETWEEN THE SHOT OF THE EMPEROR’S FACE WITH HIS EYES CLOSED WAITING FOR THE BLOW…AND THE SHOT OF REY THEN PULLING HER EMPTY HAND BACK FROM BEHIND HER BACK - ALSO, THE VERSION I’M DOING WILL SEE THE EMPEROR SEEMING TO WANT TO BE KILLED, BUT HIS BODY IS SOMEHOW BROUGHT BACK TO NORMAL BY BEING AFFECTED POSITIVELY BY THE FORCE OF BEING AROUND HIS GRANDDAUGHTER??? - WILL IT MAKE SENSE AT ALL???
ALTERNATIVELY - I COULD IGNORE EVERYTHING I WROTE DIRECTLY ABOVE, AND INSTEAD HAVE THE EMPEROR WANT HIS GRANDDAUGHTER TO TAKE THE SITH THRONE, BUT SHE ENDS UP MAKING AN ATTACKING MOVE AND KILLS HIS RED GUARDS…AND THEN CUT TO HIM RAISING HIS HAND TO ZAP HER…AND THEN CUT TO THE LIGHTSABERS TUMBLING ALONG THE GROUND…AND THEN CUT TO HIM RECOILING BACK AS HE TALKS ABOUT THE DYAD/BOND (BETWEEN THEM - DOES IT COME ACROSS THAT WAY??) BEING ABLE TO GIVE HIM LIFE…AND THEN CUT TO REY BEING HELD BY THE FORCE IN FRONT OF HIM AS HE SAYS "AND NOW…(THEN CONTINUES TO TALK ABOUT THE ONE TRUE EMPIRE) AS HE RAISES HIS HAND TO ZAP HER AGAIN…(I MIGHT THEN CUT TO THE EMPEROR CACKLING AS HIS EYES TURN YELLOW AT THIS POINT, IF IT WORKS) THEN CUT TO REY FALLING ON THE GROUND AS WE CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL AS WE SEE THE SPACE FIGHT CONTINUE FOR A BIT…AND THEN CUT TO THE FULLY FORMED EMPEROR SAYING “LOOK WHAT YOU HAVE MADE” AS WE SEE THE SITH CROWD AS THE EMPEROR LOOKS AROUND TO THEM…THEN CUT BACK TO THESPACE FIGHT FOR A BIT…THEN CUT TO THE EMPEROR’S VOICE SAY SOMETHING LIKE “THE SITH HAVE RETURNED” ?? AS WE SEE STARDESTROYERS BEGINNING TO FALL, AS WE SEE HE IS ON THE THRONE NOW AS HE FIRES LIGHTNING BOLTS UPWARDS…
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STILL TO FINISH SHOTS FROM THIS POINT ONWARDS UNTIL WE GET TO THE MOMENT BELOW WHERE THE FALCON HAS RESCUED FINN AND JENNA
…and then we continue as Rey emerges out of the smoke, and drops both her lightsabers…
…then we CUT to the smoking debris of Stardestroyers raining down…
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(NOTE - AFTER THE FLEET LEAVES EXAGOL, I’D INCLUDE THE BESPIN CITY/EWOKS/STARDESTROYER ON JAKKU MONTAGE SCENES TO KEEP THE SCORE INTACT…AND THEN CONTINUE AS WE WIPE TO THE REBEL SHIPS ARRIVING BACK IN THE JUNGLE, AND CARRY ON UNTIL BB-8 AND THE CONEFACE DROID ARE HAPPY TO SEE EACH OTHER - HOWEVER, I’D THEN GET RID OF ALL THE OTHER SCENES, AND JUST CUT TO THE BB-8 GREETING REY SCENE SO THAT IT ALL DOESN’T DRAG ON WITH THE LIKES OF OVERLY FAMILIAR MUSIC AND HUGGING, KISSES, AND CRYING ETC. - IT ALSO MAKES FOR A NICE CONTRAST WHEN WE GO FROM DIRTY, BLOODIED REY TO CLEANED UP REY IN THE FINAL SCENE IMMEDIATLEY AFTERWARDS, AND JUST FEELS MORE OF AN INTIMATE ENDING OVERALL)
…and then we CUT to R2D2 whistling, as C3PO says DID YOU HEAR THAT?..
…and then we contiue as Rey lands in Luke’s X-wing and BB-8 rushes to greet her…
…and then we quickly FADE to blackness as we CUT to the Falcon arriving at Tattooine…
(NOTE - THE MUSIC FADING DURING THE BRIEF BIT OF BLACKNESS WILL TIE IN WELL WITH THE PREVIOUS SHOT OF REY LOOKING ROUND, AND GIVES THE IMPRESSION THAT A BIT OF TIME HAS PASSED BEFORE WE SEE THE FALCON IN THIS SHOT)
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…and then we continue on as normal, as Rey looks over the edge -
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…and then we continue as an old woman passes by saying THERE’S BEEN NO-ONE FOR SO LONG…
…and then we continue as the old woman says WHO ARE YOU?..
…then we CUT to Rey as she senses something and looks around…and then sees the Forceghosts of Leia and Luke…
…and then we continue as Rey turns round again and says REY SKYWALKER…
…and then we continue as Rey and BB-8 look out at Tattooine’s twin suns setting…
(NOTE - JUST PUT DIRECTED BY J.J. ABRAMS END TITLE HERE INSTEAD, AS NORMAL)
JUST A COUPLE OF THINGS TO THINK ABOUT - should I add the shot of the Falcon in hyperspace BEFORE the shot near the end of the Falcon going back to Tattooine?? Also, should I add the scene of Chewie playing the hologram chess game with Finn and Poe as well, or not?? - And would either work okay and soundwise??
ALSO - INSTEAD OF WHAT I’VE SHOWN ABOVE, I THINK I MIGHT PREFER TO ALTER THE ENDING EVEN MORE LIKE THIS BELOW! - by fading out the ‘Stardestroyer crashing on Jakku’ shot directly to the ‘blackness of time having passed’ shot as it fades back to the Falcon flying over Tattooine with Rey burying the lightsabres (NOTE - Using my ‘rule’ of whether I would discard a sequence if I’d imagined it was a ‘deleted scene’ which I’d discovered I could incorporate or not…I think I could do without seeing the fleet landing back on the jungle planet, and everyone meeting up - It’s a pity to lose R2D2 and C3PO, but they weren’t given a good ‘send-off moment’ anyway. And I don’t really need to see Rey land the X-wing as she’s greeted by BB8, as they’re seen in the final sequence anyway. Still not sure whether I’d include either a ‘falcon in lightspeed shot’ (there’s quite a good brief one of it coming towards us during the lightskipping scene) or the Chewie/Poe/Finn holochess scene or not…but IF I don’t include Chewie, Finn, and Poe along for the trip on the Falcon with Rey at the end, then this way allows me to imagine that Poe MAY have ended up with his space girl ex., while Finn MAY have ended up with Jennah…rather than seeing Old Lando hitting on her!
(NOTE - I COULD EVEN CUT FROM THE STARDESTROYER FALLING TO JAKKU, DIRECTLY TO THE CLOSE-UP OF ARTOO BEEPING AS C3PO LOOKS UP TO SEE REY LAND AND GREET BB-8, THEN FADE TO FALCON FLYING OVER TATTOOINE)
…and then we quickly FADE out from the shot above, and CUT to the brief ‘blackness of time passing’ as we fade back to Falcon arriving at Tattooine…
…and we continue on as normal, as Rey emerges from the Falcon -
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…and then we continue on as normal, as Rey looks over the edge -
…and then we continue as an old woman passes by saying THERE’S BEEN NO-ONE FOR SO LONG…
…and then we continue as the old woman says WHO ARE YOU?..
…then we CUT to Rey as she senses something and looks around…and then sees the Forceghosts of Leia and Luke…
…and then we continue as Rey turns round again and says REY SKYWALKER…
…and then we continue as Rey and BB-8 look out at Tattooine’s twin suns setting…
(NOTE - JUST PUT DIRECTED BY J.J. ABRAMS END TITLE HERE INSTEAD, AS NORMAL)
*** Just a thought - would adding in an edited version of the broom boy ending work?? - perhaps in-between where stardestroyer is crashing towards Jakku sands…and the usual end scene where Falcon flies past a sandcrawler on Tattooine. ***
JUST A COUPLE OF THINGS TO THINK ABOUT - should I add the shot of the Falcon in hyperspace BEFORE the shot near the end of the Falcon going back to Tattooine?? Also, should I add the scene of Chewie playing the hologram chess game with Finn and Poe as well, or not?? - And would either work okay and soundwise??
ANOTHER ALTERNATIVE IDEA = AFTER WE SEE THE MONTAGE WHICH ENDS IN THE STARDESTROYER CRASHING DOWN TO TATTOOINE, MAYBE CUT TO ‘LIGHTSKIPPING’ SHOT OF FALCON IN HYPERSPACE, THEN MAYBE CUT TO CHEWIE, POE, AND FINN PLAYING CHESS SCENE, THEN MAYBE CUT TO RAY EXITING THE FALCON IN CLOSE-UP, THEN MAYBE CONTINUE AS NORMAL FROM THERE RIGHT UP UNTIL OLD WOMAN ASKS ‘WHO ARE YOU’, AND WE SEE RAY REPLYING “REY”, THEN MAYBE CUT TO FALCON FLYING OVER SANDCRAWLER AS JAWAS SAY “OOH TEENIE!”, THEN FADE TO CIRCULAR IRIS.
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HOW I MIGHT GET RID OF KYLO IN EMPEROR VS REY SCENE -
…after roof has opened, and we have battle montage as Emperor’s voice tells Rey that only she can save them if she takes the throne, we eventually end on this close-up of Rey looking upwards -
(Kylo normally appears at this point, as he looks at Rey’s X-wing)
…and then we CUT to Rey looking downwards and slowly turning -
…and continue as we see a brief shot of the Emperor -
…and then we CUT to close-up of Rey reaching for Luke’s saber -
FINISH THIS OFF - NOT SURE YET, BUT WOULD I CUT TO EMPEROR CLOSE-UP?? (WHICH IS SEEN INBETWEEN REY ‘HANDING’ LUKE’S SABER OFF TO KYLO), AND THEN CUT TO REY IGNITING THE SABER (WE WON’T NOTICE IT’S LEIA’S ONE I RECKON), AS EMPEROR BACKS AWAY AND SHE FIGHTS HIS RED GUARDS??..
OR…COULD I INSTEAD CUT TO EMPEROR ANGRILY RAISING HAND AT THIS POINT (IMMEDIATELY AFTER REY HAS REACHED FOR LUKE’S SABER)…AND THEN CUT TO LUKE’S IGNITED SABER TUMBLING AWAY…THEN CUT TO REY REACHING FOR LEIA’S SABER BEHIND HER BACK INSTEAD, AND IGNITING IT, AS EMPEROR BACKS AWAY AND SHE FIGHTS HIS RED GUARDS…THEN CUT TO REY FINISHING OFF THE RED GUARDS AND STANDING UP SUDDENLY…
OR SOMETHING LIKE THIS, AS THE DYED OF THEIR FORCE BOND ENDS UP MAKING THE EMPEROR REGENERATE AND NOT REQUIRE REY ANYMORE?? - EMPEROR’S VOICE-OVER OVER MONTAGE OF BATTLE WHICH ENDS WITH HIM SAYING “…YOUR NEW FAMILY DIES!” / CUT TO EMP SAYING “…THE ONLY FAMILY YOU HAVE HERE IS ME!” / CUT TO REY SAYING MY PARENTS WERE STRONG, THEY SAVED ME FROM YOU / CUT TO REY REACHING FOR LUKE’S SABER?? / (NOT SURE IF I CAN CUT TO REY IGNITING LUKE’S SABER HERE)?? / CUT TO EMPEROR BACKING OFF AS REY FIGHTS RED GUARDS?? / CUT TO REST OF REY FIGHTING RED GUARDS WHICH ENDS WITH HER STANDING UP SUDDENLY?? / CUT TO EMPEROR RAISING HIS HAND ANGRILY?? / CUT TO BOTH LIGHTSABERS TUMBLING ALONG GROUND?? / CUT TO EMPEROR LOOKING AT HIS HANDS REGENERATING ETC. FINISH OFF WHAT HE SAYS ABOUT DYED ETC, AS WE THEN CUT TO REY HELD IN FRONT OF HIM AS HE SAYS “…AND NOW…”, AS WE THEN CUT TO HIM SAYING “…BECOMES THE ONE TRUE EMPEROR!”, AND ANGRILY RAISES HIS HAND AGAINST HER AGAIN / AND WE CUT TO HIM LAUGHING MANICALLY AS HIS EYES TURN YELLOW?? / AND WE CUT TO REY FALLING TO THE GROUND…AS THE SPACE BATTLE RESUMES…AND THEN WE CUT TO THE NOW REGENERATED EMPEROR SAYING “LOOK WHAT YOU HAVE MADE!” - NOT SURE ABOUT THIS LAST PART - CHECK
OR SOMETHING LIKE THIS PERHAPS…AFTER THE EMPEROR SAYS “…YOUR NEW FAMILY WILL DIE!” AND WE END ON REYS FACE LOOKING UP IN DESPAIR (NOTE - OR WOULD I CUT TO HER LOOKING DOWN AND AROUND, AND THEN CUT TO EMPEROR SAYING “THE ONLY FAMILY YOU HAVE HERE IS ME!”??)…WE’D THEN CUT TO THE REBELS GOING BACK TO THE CARRIER ON THE STARDESTROY HULL, AS FINN AND JANNAH SPIN THE GUN TURRET AROUND TO AIM AT THE COMMAND BRIDGE AS WE HEAR THE EMPEROR’S VOICE SAY “THE RITUAL BEGINS…”, AS WE BRIEFLY SEE HIM SUSPENDED A DISTANCE AWAY FROM REY AS THE SITH CROWD CHANTS, THEN CUT (NOTE - WOULD I CUT TO REY SAYING SOMETHING TO HIM OR NOT AT THIS POINT??)…WE’D THEN CUT TO REY REACHING FOR LUKE’S LIGHTSABER AND IGNITING IT, THEN CUT (NOTE - WOULD I CUT TO REY SAYING SOMETHING TO HIM OR NOT AT THIS POINT??)…WE’D THEN SEE THE EMPEROR ‘ZAP’ HER WITH HIS WIZENED HANDS…WE’D THEN SEE LUKE’S IGNITED LIGHTSABER TUMBLE ACROSS THE GROUND BRIEFLY…WE’D THEN SEE THE EMPEROR RECOIL AND SAY (FINISH WORDING HERE) AS HE LOOKS AT HIS REGENERATING FINGERS…WE’D THEN CUT TO REY REACHING FOR LEIA’S LIGHTSABER BEHIND HER BACK, AS THE EMPEROR BACKS AWAY AND SHE STARTS FIGHTING HIS RED GUARDS…WE’D THEN CUT TO HER FINISHING FIGHTING WITH HIS RED GUARDS, AND STANDING UP SUDDENLY…WE’D THEN CUT TO THE EMPEROR ‘ZAPPING’ HER WITH HIS REGENERATED HANDS THIS TIME (NOTE - WOULD I HAVE HIM SAYING HIS WORDS ABOUT ‘THE ONE TRUE EMPEROR’ BEFOREHAND, OR NOT??)…WE’D THEN CUT TO LEIA’S LIGHTSABER BRIEFLY TUMBLING ACROSS THE GROUND…WE’D THEN CUT TO THE EMPEROR LAUGHING AS HIS EYES TURN YELLOW…WE’D THEN CUT TO REY FALLING ON THE GROUND, AS WE SEGUE BACK INTO THE SPACE BATTLE (NOTE - OR SHOULD I JUST CUT DIRECTLY TO THE SPACE BATTLE AT THIS POINT??)…WE’D THEN CUT TO THE FULLY FORMED EMPEROR SAYING “LOOK WHAT YOU HAVE MADE…” AS HE TAKES IN THE SITH FOLLOWERS CHANTS
ALTERNATIVE NEW IDEA! - INSTEAD OF HAVING THE EMPEROR ‘OVERLY-SUPERPOWERED’ WITH LIGHTNING ABILITY COMPARED TO RETURN OF THE JEDI, I COULD INSTEAD CUT THINGS IN A WAY SO THAT I GET RID OF THE EMPEROR SAYING “NOTHING WILL STOP THE RETURN OF THE SITH!” AND FIRING LIGHTNING AT ALL THE REBEL SHIPS…AND JUST HAVE HIM GETTING UP AND SAYING “LET YOUR DEATH BE THE FINAL WORD IN THE STORY OF REBELLION!” AND FIRING HIS NORMAL LIGHTNING AT REY AT SOME POINT AFTER AFTER SHE HAS GOTTEN UP AND FORCE-GRABBED LEIA’S LIGHTSABER! - BUT STILL END WITH REY CLASHING HER SABERS TOGETHER, THEN CUT TO THE ELECTRICAL BANGS AND EPIC SCORE.
FINAL DECISION!! - JUST KEEP THE OVERPOWERED EMPEROR, AS REY IS EQUALLY OVERPOWERED WHEN SHE BRINGS THE WHOLE SITH BUILDING DOWN ON THE CROWDS…AND KEEP POE AND THE OTHER SHIPS RECOVERING INBETWEEN REY HOLDING HER LIGHTSABER AND THE WIDE SHOT OF THE EMPEROR HAVING MOVED FORWARDS - I MIGHT GET RID OF HIM SAYING “YOU ARE NOTHING” (AS I DON’T LIKE THOSE SHOTS), OR MIGHT EVEN GET RID OF HIM SAYING “A SCAVENGER GIRL IS NO MATCH FOR THE POWER IN ME” INSTEAD - BUT NOT 100% SURE YET.
LATEST ULTIMATE FINAL DECISION!!! - I RECKON THAT I WILL NEED TO KEEP THE SHOTS OF THE EMPEROR DRAINING THE LIFEFORCE OUT OF BOTH REY AND KYLO AFTER ALL, TO MAKE THINGS LOOK BETTER AND TIE IN TO THE ‘REDEMPTION’ LORE AFTER ALL…BUT I’M STILL DEFINITELY GOING TO KILL KYLO OFF BY THE EMPEROR THROWING HIS ASS DOWN THE PIT! - WHICH MEANS I’LL NEED TO KEEP REY BEING ABLE TO SUPERPOWER FORCEHEAL KYLO AFTER STABBING HIM, UNFORTUNATELY (good grief, does this ‘forceheal’ power mean that Rey is actually ‘The Chosen One’ if she can stop death like that??!)…BUT CAN NOW COBBLE TOGETHER SOME OF THE SHOTS OF KYLO THROWING HIS SABER AWAY (FROM THE HAN DREAM SCENE) TO MAKE IT SEEM THAT HE IS PERHAPS CONTEMPLATING HIS SURVIVING REY’S SABER STAB AND THE DEATH OF HIS MOTHER AND THAT HE’S GOING TO HELP REY, AND PLACE THAT AFTER THE SHOT OF CHEWIE HOWLING BESIDE THE ORANGE X-WING OVER THE DEATH OF LEIA, AND BEFORE THE TRANSITION FADE TO THE EMPEROR’S HOLOGRAM TALKING TO GENERAL PRYDE, THUS KEEPING THE START OF THE EMPEROR’S WORDS NOW.
ALSO DISCARD SILLY-LOOKING FULL FRONTAL SHOT OF REY AND KYLO GETTING THEIR LIFEFORCE DRAINED, AS THE OVERALL SCENE WILL LOOK BETTER WITHOUT IT.
ADDITIONAL NEW THOUGHTS - I RECKON THAT I COULD END ON SHOT OF EMPEROR’S WIZENED HANDS AS HIS VOICE OFFERS HIM A NEW EMPIRE, THEN CUT OUT NEW ORDER FLEET SHOTS AND DIALOGUE ALTOGETHER AS IT’S RIDICULOUS THEY BREAK OUT OF THE GROUND! - THE FLEET IS MENTIONED BY POE IN HIS LATER TALK WITH THE REBELS, SO JUST KEEP THE FLEET SIZE AS A LATER REVEAL IN THE MOVIE WHEN REY FIRST REACHES IT IN LUKE’S X-WING.
ALSO - HAVE ANOTHER LOOK TO SEE IF I CAN WORK OUT A WAY TO JUST KEEP REY CONFRONTING THE EMPEROR ON HER OWN WITH NO ‘REDEEMED’ KYLO INVOLVEMENT ALTOGETHER! - EITHER HAVE REY KILL HIM WITH HIS OWN LIGHTSABER?..OR STILL HAVE HERE ‘FORCE HEAL’ HIM, AS HE THEN THROWS AWAY HIS LIGHTSABER AND HAS NO FURTHER INVOLVEMENT IN THE MOVIE? - SO THAT I CAN STILL HAVE FADE FROM HIM TO HOLOGRAM SHOT OF EMPEROR TALKING TO PRYDE. OR IS THERE A WAY TO STILL HAVE HIM COME TO HELP REY, BUT JUST HAVE THE EMPEROR DISPATCH HIM DOWN THE CHASM WITHOUT HAVING TO USE ANY OF THE ‘FORCE DRAIN’ SHOTS OF HIM AND REY WHATSOEVER?
Ah, you’ve actually pre-empted me there on a couple of ALIEN-related things I’ll be covering soon Monroville. 😃 PM sent.
Have another one in the meantime…
THE ROCKETEER (released 1991/directed by Joe Johnston)
Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4Q-0A55aV20
Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rSpBOCrjd5s
IDEAS FOR KING KONG (Peter Jackson’s 2005 version) -
The UNIVERSAL logo appears…
…and then we continue on as normal with the atmospheric music of the UNIVERSAL PICTURES PRESENTS and A WINGNUT FILMS PRODUCTION title cards…and CUT after the KING KONG main title which ends with a slight animal sound…
…then we CUT to a wide shot of New York ZOO with animal noises as our new opening…
…then we CUT to these New York depression era scenes with Al jolson singing…
…and then we continue on as normal, until I CUT the song at the moment the train passes by…
…and then I’d CUT to the solemn music change as we see the theatre being closed…
…and then we continue on as normal as Anne runs towards the locked doors, and then CUT on the two guys faces once the fat woman shouts It’s all right for you, we haven’t had a paycheque in two weeks…how are we gonna eat?..
…then we CUT to Anne trying to get a job off a producer in the street…
…and then we continue on as normal, as he refuses (NOTE - he mentions Jack Driscoll in this scene!) but notices her looking hungrily at people eating, and offers her a tip for a sleezy job with someone he knows, and then the scene ends on her close-up…
…and then we continue on as normal with the shot below of CARL in a projector room (OR I’d CUT to slightly later in the scene - not decided yet)…
…and then after lights go up and a grey haired producer complains about is this all that they are getting for their $40 grand, I’d CUT once the moustached guy says You promised us romantic scenes with Bruce Baxter and Maureen Mackenzie…
…then we CUT to Carl as we hear the bald producer say Carl, you’ve been in production for over two months!..
…then we CUT to Carl getting out of his seat as he says Yes I understand that, but fellas…we’re not making a film anymore, and I’ll tell you why…etc…
(Not 100% decided yet if I’d instead CUT to Carl as he lets slip about hiring a ship to get to a location, followed by the bald producer saying he’s just meant to be shooting on a backlot first…BEFORE I continue on with Carl saying that he understands that as he gets up to talk about how things have changed and that he’s found a map etc. (I need this as a MENTION OF THE MAP before it’s shown again later in his assistant’s dream, and before it blows out of Carl’s hands after that)
…but either way, I’d then CUT at this close-up shot of Carl telling the producers …that’s where I’ll shoot my picture…
…and then we CUT to the close-up of this guy turning round quickly…
and the next shot which follows normally now matches as the grey haired producer still has his hands together at this point…
…and we continue on at this point as Carl is asked to leave by the bald guy, and then gets a glass of his assistant Preston so that he can listen in as the bald producer sticks up for him but the other two producers slag him off and one says Carl will bankrupt them and demands that the animal footage is sold and that they salvage something from this debacle (I MIGHT remove guy saying he’s a preening self-promoter, not sure yet), and I MIGHT CUT to Carl and Preston running away with film cannisters at this point, OR just continue on as normal as a young helper is sent to call Carl back in, but he’s gone…
…and then we continue on with Carl and Preston running off with film cannisters…
…and then after getting chased by the producers as they escape in a taxi, we CUT on close-up of Preston’s face once Carl tells him Don’t worry Preston, I’ve had a lot of practise at this…
…and then after missing out him saying that he’s used to crapping the crappers, we CUT to Carl’s expressive face…
…and then we continue on as normal and then CUT on Preston telling him that ‘Fay’ is dong a picture with RKO…
…and then we miss out Carl saying Cooper huh?, and CUT to him just saying …I might have known
(I MIGHT end up missing out Carl saying that altogether, not sure yet)
…and then we continue on as normal as the yellow taxi heads towards us, as we hear Preston saying You’re not listening, we gotta delay the shoot, shut production down, we can’t sail tonight…
…and then we continue on as normal as Carl gets out (I MIGHT miss out him telling Preston For God’s sake Preston, start thinking like a winner, and just have him say to call Jack as he needs that goddam screenplay only) to look for a girl and spots Anne walking away from the burlesque club, and then saves her skin when she then steals an apple, and then takes her for a meal to talk about his project…and as Carl say’s …this fateful meeting that changes everything we CUT on a close-up of a curious Anne…
NOTE - i like to imagine that Carl mentioned to Anne that Jack Driscoll was writing the script during this conversation, which convinced her to take the chance with him!
…and then we CUT to a foghorn sounding as the the yellow taxi pulls arrives at the docks at night…
…and then we continue on as normal, and then CUT on Carl’s close-up once he’s said I keep tellin’ ya Jack, there’s no money in theatre…you’re much better off sticking with film…
…so I’d miss out Jack saying he loves the theatre and Carl saying he doesn’t or he would have jumped, and INSTEAD we then CUT to one of the producers swiping his hat in frustration at dock with police -
…and then we continue with this CGI’d shot of the ship against the city, but I MIGHT remove it, not sure yet…
…and then we continue on as normal, as Jack is given a place to sleep by Choy and the Captain…
…and then we continue on as normal until we get to this close-up of the chloroform bottles -
…and then we continue on as normal with this ship shot out at sea, and we CUT at the end of it -
…then we CUT to Jack typing in his cage, and continue on as normal as Jimmy the cabin boy says Compliments of the chef… as he drops food off, and we CUT after he puts the tray down -
…then we CUT to Jimmy taking something as he exits the cage and the typing continues…
…and then we continue on as normal as the black crewman Hayne’s takes Jack’s stolen pen off Jimmy, and tells Driscoll he didn’t mean no harm, and that he’ll keep him out of the way, it’s just that he likes it down here, and that he found him there four years ago, and CUT on his side profile once he ends up saying …stowed away in one of them bat cages…
…then we CUT to Hayne’s saying …he was wilder than half the animals in here…
…and then we continue on as normal, and CUT on the close-up of Hayne’s once he says …he still won’t tell me where he came from, but it wasn’t any place good…
(NOTE - I MIGHT miss out Hayne’s close-up and final line, and just end on the shot where he says …he was wilder than half the animals in here… - NOT SURE YET)
…then we CUT to a zoom-in on the ship again, as we hear it’s engines chug and Carl’s voice saying She’s standing at the railing, she doesn’t know it yet…but they are sailing toward disaster…ya got that?, and then we CUT once we hear Jack’s voice saying okay, so she turns… as we hear typing…
…and then we CUT to Carl saying …she has to look away…and that’s when she sees it…
…and then we continue on as normal as Jimmy comes down the ladder slowly…
…and then we continue on as normal, as Jack says Sees what?, what?…and Carl turns to say …the island…, and continues discuss it with Jack, as Carl then spots Jimmy as Jack types out SKULL ISLAND…
…and then we continue on as normal, as we see the front of the ship chasing dolphins, and hear Carl’s voice saying Alright everyone from the top, aaaand ACTION!..
…and we continue on as normal as we see Carl filming a scene with Anne and Bruce the actor…
…and then we continue on as normal as Anne says I think this is awfully exciting, I’ve never been on a ship before…, as Jack smiles watching, and we CUT once Bruce says I’ve never been on one with a woman before!..
…then we CUT to the close-up of Carl scowling as we just make out Bruce saying muffledly …just being around is trouble!, as Carl sees Jimmy whispering to Haynes…
NOTE: I MIGHT CUT BEFORE CARL SAYS “CUT!”…OR I MIGHT CUT ONCE CARL SAYS “CUT!”…OR I MIGHT CUT ONCE CARL SAYS “GREAT!”…OR I MIGHT EVEN EXCLUDE THIS WHOLE ‘FILMING’ SCENE ALTOGETHER, AND CUT DIRECTLY FROM JACK TYPING ‘SKULL ISLAND’ TO THE CAPTAIN TAPPING HIS COMPASSES - NOT DECIDED YET.
…and then we CUT to the Captain tapping his compasses…
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…then we CUT to a crewman getting a message on the ship’s radio…
…and then we CUT to this shot of the paper message being ripped off…
NOTE - ALTERNATIVELY, I COULD HAVE THE UNIVERSAL PICTURES PRESENTS AND A WINGNUT FILMS PRODUCTION AND KING KONG TITLES IN-BETWEEN ANNE’S CURIOUS CLOSE-UP AND THE FOGHORN AS THE TAXI ARRIVES AT THE DOCKS…
ALSO NOTE - I MIGHT DISCARD SCENE OF CARL FILMING ON THE SHIP AS THE BOY TELLS THE CREW WHAT HE HEARD…AS WE SEE THEM ALL CONFRONT CARL ABOUT HIS INTENTIONS TO FIND SKULL ISLAND LATER ANYWAY - SO I COULD JUST CUT FROM THE CLOSE-UP OF JACK TYPING THE WORDS ‘SKULL ISLAND’ DIRECTLY TO THE CAPTAIN TAPPING HIS COMPASSES ON THE TABLE INSTEAD! - THIS WOULD JOIN 2 VERY ATMOSPHERIC SCENES TOGETHER WITHOUT THE FLUFF OF THE ‘CARL FILMING THE ACTOR/ACTRESS’ SCENE INBETWEEN, AND HELP TO SHORTEN THE RUNTIME EVEN MORE - NOT SURE 100% YET, BUT I QUITE LIKE THIS IDEA.
ALSO NOTE - JACK AND ANNE ARE NOT A LOVE ITEM IN THIS, AND ONLY INITIALLY GET THROWN TOGETHER WHEN THE SHIP IS GETTING ROCKED ABOUT WHEN IT REACHES THE ISLAND!
I’d DEFINITELY NOT include the additional horned dinosaur scene as it’s bloated CGI nonsense that’s over-colorgraded and has ridiculous physics, and merely repeats music heard in brontosaurus chase - keep the more mysterious theatrical footage of big trees/jungle as the men follow after Kong.
I’d DEFINITELY NOT include the additional shooting of the giant bird scene, as it just looks stupid.
I’d DEFINITELY NOT include some of the additional soldiers in truck scenes, but WILL INCLUDE the additional Kong jumping on the truck that shoots at him on pond scene.
I WILL INCLUDE the additional raft/giant fish scene.
ADD MORE PICS OF KONG FALLING AND ANNE AND JACK MEETING UP HERE
…then we CUT to close-up of dead Kong’s hand (which is a great music match here), as reporters take photos, and a guy in the crowd yells “KONG!” -
ADD FURTHER PICS HERE WHERE GUY SHOUTS “KONG!” AND OTHER SHOTS OF CROWDS AND REPORTERS, ENDING WITH DENHAM’S CLOSE-UP AS HE SAYS IT WAS BEAUTY THAT KILLED THE BEAST BEFORE HE TURNS AND WE FADE TO BLACK -
My ENDING involves normal footage of Kong falling and Anne getting up and then embracing Jack on top of the Empire State Building…then CUT to close-up of Kong’s hand with photographers on top of him as we hear a guy shout “Kong” (music blends in well with previous shot of Anne and Jack embracing)…then CUT to something involving New York cop as 2 reporters move forward and one says to the other that Kong must have known what was coming…then CUT OUT other reporter saying what does it matter, he was just a dumb animal…and instead CUT to Carl pushing forward as the other reporter then just says that the aeroplanes got him, as close-up of Carl then says that it wasn’t the planes, it was beauty killed the beast, as he turns slightly…then FADE OUT to black (discarding final wide shot of crowds around Kong’s body, as it makes him look small!)…then CUT to end titles and music.
NOTE - DO A NEW ‘GIANT CENTIPEDE’ SEQUENCE, WHICH JUST HAS THE PAN UP TO THE CENTIPEDE STARTING TO CRAWL ALONG THE CEILING (WITH DINOSAUR GETTING CHOMPED IN THE BACKGROUND)…AND THEN CUT TO THE SHOT OF ANNE SCAMPERING OUT.
vbangle said:
Can you please stop saying that Han shot <span style=“text-decoration: underline;”>first</span>? There is no first or second. Han was the only one to shoot period. Its just one of things that is said quite a lot around here that just isn’t correct. Thank you.
Yeah vb, I kinda see how that wording could be misconstrued to refer to the ‘Special Edition’ version of things, where we see both Han <span style=“text-decoration: underline;”>and</span> Greedo shooting…and I wouldn’t want that. But to be equally pedantic, I was meaning the phrase in regards to the original version only, in that Greedo seemed just about to shoot Han, but Han beat him to it…first.
Anyway, back to the trailers…
ROLLERBALL (released 1975/directed by Norman Jewison)
Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CV9ysMZamxs NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
Being a big fan of the original movie, this was an instance where I was really looking forward to what an ‘updated’ remake might bring. The signs looked good, as this was going to be directed by the guy that made ‘PREDATOR’ after all. The original production design and team costumes looked great, but I kinda hoped that the ‘re-imagined’ carnage would involve an assortment of grungy, spiked, ‘MAD MAX’ - influenced costumes, bikes, and post-apocalyptic settings this time around… And I hoped it would prove to be a worthy successor to the original… Boy, was I in for a disappointment on both counts, as can be seen below, lol!..
**ROLLERBALL (released 2002/directed by John McTiernan)
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Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3beTBUTxOXs
I’D LIKE TO CHANGE A LOT OF THINGS FOR MY PREFERRED VERSIONS OF THE ‘SNYDER TRILOGY’ OF ‘MAN OF STEEL’ / ‘BATMAN V SUPERMAN: DAWN OF JUSTICE’ / ‘JUSTICE LEAGUE’ MOVIES -
‘MAN OF STEEL’ ideas - DON’T INCLUDE scenes with Clark with a full beard, such as the oil rig rescue. And GET RID of the ‘tornado’ scene where Clark’s dad stops him from saving him…which he should have been able to manage easily with his ‘superspeed’! - just make it seem as if his dad passed away sometime 'offscreen! NOTE - However, someone did a neat re-edit of the sequence where it looked like a car unexpectedly struck Clark’s dad when Clark was DISTRACTED handing a child to safety. ** WRITE UP MORE IDEAS HERE WHEN I HAVE TIME **
‘BATMAN V SUPERMAN: DAWN OF JUSTICE’ ideas - Just END the scene between Batman and Lex Luthor in the jail at the point where Batman punches him! CUT at that point, rather than include the ‘dent’ in the wall, and Lex doing his ‘ding, ding, ding’ dialogue, and make this his FINAL appearance in the ‘trilogy’ - because of the dialogue that Batman says before he ‘brands’ him, we can just assume he ended up in ‘Arkham Asylum’ afterwards! ** WRITE UP MORE IDEAS HERE WHEN I HAVE TIME **
** NOTE: I’ve not decided yet if I would just cut directly to the END CREDITS immediately after Batman punches Lex…OR if I would cut directly to the EXISTING final scenes of Bruce Wayne walking out of the cemetery, followed by Lois at Clark’s graveside, or not **
POTENTIAL IDEA FOR MY PREFERRED NEW ‘JUSTICE LEAGUE’ BEGINNING -
Definitely KEEP Zack Snyder’s own version of the opening which ‘recaps’ Superman being killed by Doomsday creature (during previous BATMAN V SUPERMAN: DAWN OF JUSTICE movie) - for it’s atmospherically dark tone and score, as well as it’s continuous movement showing Superman’s death reverberating across the 3 worlds of Humans, Atlanteans, and Amazonians -
It includes the following titles wording - WARNERS BROS. PICTURES presents // in association with ACCESS ENTERTIANMENT and DUNE ENTERTAINMENT // an ATLAS ENTERTAINMENT / STONE QUARRY production // a ZACK SNYDER film // zack snyder’s JUSTICE LEAGUE (Cyborg sits at table at this point) // BEN AFFLECK // HENRY CAVILL // AMY ADAMS // GAL GADOT // RAY FISHER // JASON MOMOA (Superman’s ‘voice’ and newspapers flies towards city buildings at this point) // NOTE: At this point EZRA MILLER appears during a clip of Lex Luthor (with hair) inside the Krypton ship watching a ‘hologram’ of Steppenwolf holding 3 cubes materialize…but I’d like to REMOVE this altogether (and would remove the similar scene with Lex and a ‘hologram’ of Steppenwolf from BvS:DOJ too, as I described above), so that the last we’d see of Lex is when Batman punches him in the previous movie! // WILLEM DAFOE (Superman’s voice passes city skyline at this point) // NOTE: At this point JESSIE EISENBERG appears during clip of Superman’s voice distrupting and undersea ‘Atlantean warrior’…but I’d like to REMOVE the wide shot with his name altogether! // JEREMY IRONS // DIANE LANE // NOTE: At this point CONNIE NIELSEN appears as Superman’s voice continues to travel to the Amazonian’s island, where it affects their ‘box’ too - I think I would keep this intro. so far, as Superman’s voice seems to be moving outwards continually up to this point, along with the camera movements. // J. K. SIMMONS // CIARAN HINDS RYAN ZHENG // AMBER HEARD JOE MORTON // LISA LOVEN KONGSLI DAVID THEWLIS - NOTE: At this point the black Amazonian turns in close-up to shout “Alert the queen!” before turning to the ‘box’ again…and I’d CUT at this point.
At this point in Zack Snyder’s edit, we would NORMALLY CUT to a close-up of a kettle on the fire as we continue to then see Bruce Wayne travel on horseback over mountainous scenery to find Aquaman in Iceland and ask him to join his group…but I MIGHT decide to remove this entirely for something else, to cut the bloat, as it’s already been a slow-moving, gradual build-up to this point - SO AT THIS POINT, I MIGHT CUT TO THE NIGHT-TIME ACTION SCENE WITH A NEWSPAPER SAYING SUPERMAN IS DEAD, FOLLOWED BY BATMAN FINDING ONE OF STEPPENWOLF’S ‘SCOUTS’ IN GOTHAM CITY, AND ALFRED DISCUSSING LEX LUTHOR’S FILES AND LOOKING FOR OTHER SUPERHEROS INSTEAD, AND BEING ASKED TO BRING THE JET - NOTE: This was actually the 2nd scene in Joss Whedon’s edit, which came after the dreadful opening ‘mobile footage of Superman’, but it repeats the following credits at the start of it - WARNER BROS. PICTURES presents // in association with ACCESS ENTERTAINMENT and DUNE ENTERTAIMMENT // an ATLAS ENTERTAINMENT / CRUEL AND UNUSUAL production // a ZACK SNYDER film…BUT I would MISS OUT the WARNER BROS. PICTURES presents // in association with ACCESS ENTERTAINMENT and DUNE ENTERTAINMENT wording and begin this Joss Whedon scene when the police car passes below, and can live with the remaining credits being repeated at this point -
…and the scene ends with Batman jumping off a building -
…and then I THINK I’d continue on at this point with Joss Whedon’s JUSTICE LEAGUE main titles as Lois visits Superman’s broken monument, and we see various large tribute flags on different cities with the ‘S’ symbol, and Clark’s mother leaving his grave and her repossessed farm, ALONG WITH A REPEAT OF CERTAIN CREDITS WORDING WHICH I NEED TO WRITE OUT HERE STILL -
…and then I’d CUT this Joss Whedon scene once the song ‘Everybody Knows’ ends at this point -
…and then I’d CUT to Zack Snyder’s edit from this point onwards for the Terrorists/Wonder Woman sequence, as the movie is much moodier than Joss Whedon’s version, and has a similar tone to THE DARK KNIGHT opening -
** NOTE: IF I decide that I DON’T want to repeat the CREDITS WORDING in the Joss Whedon ‘Everybody Knows’ title sequence above, I would just CUT directly from Batman jumping off the building to the ‘London Bridge’ shot above to start the Zack Snyder cut of the ‘Terrorists/Wonder Woman’ sequence INSTEAD! - NOTE: ALTHOUGH I WOULD HATE TO LOSE THE FLAG TRIBUTES TO SUPERMAN ACROSS THE GLOBE, AT LEAST I’D BE ABLE TO USE ZACK SNYDER’S FOOTAGE OF HIS MUM LEAVING HER FORCLOSED HOME, WHICH IS MORE ATMOSPHERIC LOOKING **
TO BE CONTINUED - Not sure if I will be ending the Wonder Woman sequence on the full Zack Snyder conclusion with the black policeman looking up after building explodes and the terrorist’s hat floats down…OR if I’d prefer to end it on the white flash as she clashes her forearm bracelets together - either way, I’d then continue with Bruce Wayne on horseback as he goes looking for Aquaman - I’d definately END the sequence with the Joss Whedon dialogue and Aquaman swimming off version though, as we FINISH on Bruce saying “Doesn’t mean I’m wrong”…and then CUT to the Zack Snyder scene of Bruce’s helicopter landing as he tells Alfred he found Aquaman who said no to him, before they board the jet…and then I’d CUT to Zach Snyder’s scene between Bruce and Alfred aboard the jet, before we see it flying through the sky, and then continue onto the next scene as normal in Zach Snyder’s version.
THE MANDALORIAN LAST EP OF SEASON 2 - RECUT LUKES SCENES AT END, TO MAKE HIM SPEAK LESS. HIS EYES AND EXPRESSIONS DONT EMOTE ENOUGH, AND HIS DIALOGUE IS TOO PO-FACED. ALSO CUT DOWN AMOUNT OF GROGU STROKING MANDOS FACE
adywan said:
There will be more activity in the transport scenes
That's a nice confirmation there adywan, and I'm looking forward to the added 'depth' of the overall Hoth battle you're planning, compared to the 2004 DVD mix. Can't wait to hear how that will sound on the surrounds! Been kind of busy of late, but look out for a PM later tonight concerning the workprint. You're doing ridiculously good work on this! :)
Also, some of you may be interested in this new thread I've started in the 'Off Topic' section, if you get a moment sometime - http://originaltrilogy.com/forum/topic.cfm/Imps-MOVIE-TRAILER-SHOWCASE-PAST-PRESENT-AND-COMING-SOON/topic/11782/
**Coming Soon… **Due for release in 2011…
SUPER 8 (coming 2011/directed by J. J. Abrams)
Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kRx8KXBzGME
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then we end on Falcon travelling in hyperspace -
…After ‘Group’ shot and Falcon flying shot ends in a white flash…I’d then CUT to the scene of Kylo getting his helmet fixed, then returning to his Stardestroyer in his TIE, as his Knights of Ren follow him down a corridor (THIS IS A WAY OF DOUBLING DOWN ON THE FACT THAT KYLO ISN’T GONNA CHANGE TO THE LIGHT SIDE AND BE REDEEMED!) -
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…After ‘Group’ shot and Falcon flying shot ends in a white flash…I’d then CUT to the zoom-in towards Luke’s island…and then CUT to him telling Rey he has something Leia wanted her to have, and then end on the close-up of her looking at Leia’s hidden lightsaber -
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…and then I MIGHT CUT to Vader’s burnt mask being touched by Kylo who closes his eyes and then sees a flashback of him killing Han (it’s possible to cut 2 or 3 shots together to do this!) -
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…and IF I do that, then I’d next CUT to Kylo’s broken mask pieces being thrown down, as we see it being put together again, and then he travels with his Knights of Ren to his Stardestroyer, and he rounds a corridor with them -
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NOTE - mention in a ‘blue box’ description, that I’d DISCARD the next shot below of the old woman asking “Rey who?” -
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NOTE: THERE’S 6 WAYS I COULD GO WITH THIS -
GO WITH ABSOLUTELY ALL OF ORIGINAL ENDING (INCLUDES LUKE AND LEIA) - NO THANKYOU.
ONCE OLD WOMAN THEN ASKS REY WHO?..CUT TO CLOSEUP OF REY SAYING REY SKYWALKER AS MUSIC SWELLS (MISSING OUT LUKE AND LEIA)
ONCE OLD WOMAN WHO ARE YOU?..CUT TO CLOSEUP OF REY SAYING REY SKYWALKER AS MUSIC SWELLS (MISSING OUT OLD WOMAN ASKING REY WHO? AS WELL AS MISSING OUT LUKE AND LEIA)
ONCE OLD WOMAN ASKS WHO ARE YOU?..CUT TO REY SAYING REY…THEN IMMEDIATELY CUT TO CLOSE OF REY SAYING REY SKYWALKER - JAMES BOND LIKE (MISSING OUT OLD WOMAN ASKING REY WHO? AS WELL AS MISSING OUT LUKE AND LEIA)
ONCE OLD WOMAN ASKS WHO ARE YOU?..CUT TO REY LOOKING AROUND TO LEIA AND LUKE BEFORE EVENTUALLY SAYING REY SKYWALKER (MISSING OUT OLD WOMAN ASKING REY WHO?) - THIS ONE MIGHT BE THE BEST, I’M NOT SURE YET.
COULD PERHAPS CUT FROM SHOT 55 (LEIA SWITCHING HER LIGHTSABER ON) DIRECTLY TO SHOT 58 (SO THAT I MISS SIDE-ONWARDS SHOT OF HER LOOKING AT IT, AS I’M NOT TOO KEEN ON THAT SHOT)…THEN ONCE WOMAN SAYS “THERE’S BEEN NO-ONE HERE FOR SO LONG…WHO ARE YOU?”, AND REY THEN REPLIES “I’M REY”…I COULD THEN PERHAPS CUT TO THE FALCON FLYING OVER A SANDCRAWLER ON TATTOOINE AS WE HEAR A JAWA SAY “OOTEENEE!” AS MY CLOSING SHOT, THEN ‘IRIS’ TO END CREDITS AND MUSIC.
NEW POSSIBILITY WHICH I’D LIKELY GO FOR! - SEE WHAT I’VE WRITTEN AT THE VERY END OF THIS POST
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ABSOLUTELY BEST ENDING IDEA FOR MYSELF WHICH GIVES THE MOVIE SAGA A MUSIC-ORIENTATED CONCLUSION WITHOUT ANY DIALOGUE WHATSOEVER (in the same kind of manner which I preferred for the end of the Prequel Trilogy too with my proposed ROTS ending) - WHICH ELIMINATES SPECIFYING IF REY IS A ‘SKYWALKER’…OR A ‘PALPATINE’…OR SIMPLY ‘REY’, AS YOU CAN CHOOSE TO BELIEVE WHAT YOU WISH WITH THIS SOLUTION! - Meaning that I can do away with the ‘random nosey old woman’ who happens to be wandering in the desert at this point. HERE’S HOW -
NOTE - I’m not 100% sure yet if I’d include the ‘side-on’ shot of Rey looking at her lightsaber, or just join shot 55 directly to shot 58 and CUT immediately before we hear the woman’s animal roar.
ALSO NOTE - an ALTERNATIVE version of this NON-dialogue ending would go like this instead - …we CUT from the previous ‘musical montage’ which ends with the ‘Stardestroyer falling in the Jakuu desert’ to the ‘Falcon flying over a sandcrawler on Tattooine’, and continue on as normal with Rey having a look around and then burying Luke and Leia’s lightsabers in the sand, as she then ignites her own yellow lightsaber, with the ‘side-on’ shot of her looking at it as our FINAL shot…and FADE OUT to a ‘circular iris’ as the end credits begin.
…SO I’VE GOT A CHOICE OF WHETHER TO END ON A SHOT OF REY OR THE FALCON TO FINISH THINGS OFF.
UPDATE - DO I INCLUDE THE SCENE OF CHEWIE, FINN, AND POE PLAYING HOLOGRAPHIC CHESS ANYWHERE, OR NOT?? - AS A WAY TO IMPLY THAT THEY HAVE ACCOMPANIED HER ON THE FALCON!
7 FACES OF DR LAO (released 1964/directed by George Pal)
Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wln5SWJwGao NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
THIS IS HOW I’D LIKE TO RE-EDIT THE START OF ‘SOLO’ FOR MYSELF -
(BUT I MAY JUST END UP USING SILVER ‘LUCASFILM’ LOGO IN SOME WAY)
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ALTERNATIVE IDEA - I MIGHT instead go from a point in the scene of Han yelling that he’ll come back when Kira is taken…to fading out to black for a second…then fade/CUT to Han and two others scouting a bridge on a snowy planet, as we hear the man say “Here it comes, take a look…”
NOTE - I COULD ADD ‘TIME STAMPS’ TO ALL MY CUTS JUST IN CASE THE LINKS EVER GO DOWN ON THESE IDEAS AGAIN!
BACK TO THE FUTURE (released 1985/directed by Robert Zemeckis)
Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AFcjv0oPw6E
BACK TO THE FUTURE II (released 1989/directed by Robert Zemeckis)
Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UU-dHBmEGBU
BACK TO THE FUTURE III (released 1990/directed by Robert Zemeckis)
Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BBKMvGhvH9U
BACK TO THE FUTURE (re-released 2010/directed by Robert Zemeckis)
Re-release Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7wtOnH0gK9M NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
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THIS IS HOW I’D LIKE TO RE-EDIT ‘ROGUE ONE’ WITH A NEW VERSION OF THE ‘BOR GULLET’ SCENE WITH THE DEFECTOR AND SAW -
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It the 'color-corrected every frame' comment that's really got me worried!
The 'look' of a movie's colour is one of the things I'm most concerned with when it comes to all these re-releases.
I despise the overly-dark, 'stylised' re-coloration that Ridley Scott did for his ALIEN:DIRECTOR'S CUT, which seems to be the default new colour for the original cut too now, compared to it's great original colouration. And the same goes for what he did to his BLADERUNNER:FINAL CUT also, which messed with the original's excellent colours.
I wonder how far Cameron has deviated for this BLURAY release now? The original color is ALREADY perfect on ALIENS (and the 'Special Edition') as it is, so count me nervous again.
Too many directors are fouling up their originals with all this colour-grading nonsense. It looks like I'll be sticking with more and more DVD originals at this rate...
Jaitea said:
But watching it just makes me think why not just cut it out.
But then we'd miss what ady has in mind for his new 'rebel base' background for this establishing shot...
adywan said:
vaderios said:
ady are aware of this? http://www.thefoundry.co.uk/products/cameratracker/
It might solve some tracking problems you have :)
-Angel
That plug-in would be exactly what i need if it does what it says. There is just no way i would be able to afford it as the funds dried up a long time ago
Awesome find there vaderios. It would be great if some of us can further assist to help adywan get this eventually, and whatever else he still requires.
Here is the finished version of the matte. As you can see there have been a few changes:
That shot looks even more epic now! Great new tweaking to the colouring, and love being able to make out the stairs now.
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doubleofive said:
It looks great in the whole scene.
And doubleofive would know, having seen the 'workprint'.
Hmmm. You should have been one of them. I sent you out a copy of it last week.
It arrived today!! Thankyou very much, and I will PM you when I can soon.
vbangle said:
Adywan, give us an update on your health....here's hoping you are doing better and feeling good.
Well things are almost back to normal. I'm still on the tablets but the headaches have gone.
I've started back to work on ESB:R full time now. The workstation just needs the lights installing but i've got everything set back up so it's full steam ahead ( pictures/ video of the workstation coming next week). The model/ set building resumes at the weekend.
Glad to hear things have improved. Looking forward to seeing your workstation! :)
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It looks great in the whole scene.
And doubleofive would know, having seen the 'workprint'.
From the snippet seen in the final trailer, the overall look now seems far superior to me I have to say, as the SE version is 'blue-tinged' and overly dark compared to how it is now. And adywan's also done a couple of terrific additional tweaks on top. Count me delighted with how this turned out.
SilverWook said:
What is it with Japan and spaceships that look like seagoing vessels anyway?
Dunno, but they're probably gonna go ape for *this* at the end of the year - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZTuPK66J300
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Here are still of a crawl I have made with this app and as you can see it's closer to the real thing than the one on the SW.COM.
Thanks for showing that! :)
It's one of the coolest apps. I've ever come across. There's no doubt that the quality of that guy's version is very impressive compared to the 'official' one. (Why should I be surprised?)
It mentions at the bottom of that info. page you linked to, that someone called 'Darth Revan' is going to be doing a port for PCs too! Great stuff.
Also, when I followed a couple of links on that page, it led me to this, which I presume is the guy that came up with it. There seems to be some neat stuff worth having a look at sometime - http://alienryderflex.com/tutorials.shtml
TV's Frink said:
So this thread is now ours, to do with as we please?
Yeah, knock yourselves out! Although technically it's C3PX's thread now, since I gave it to him...so best ask him. :)
Okay, I’ve finally had time to go back and fill in all those slots I ‘reserved’ above to start things off properly now. Feel free to comment on anything from here onwards (movie-related that is…) I’ll continue adding loads of other trailers, old and new, when time allows.
Here’s a few more…
THE WAR OF THE WORLDS (released 1953/directed by Byron Haskin)
Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Imjio167nJo NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
WAR OF THE WORLDS (released 2005/directed by Steven Spielberg)
Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mtqFbzCnG94 NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
Theatrical Trailer 1 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VqrdrBtGTeE NOW GONE! Will look for replacement soon.
Theatrical Trailer 2 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XP42yAyC3YQ
NOTE - Just in case anyone happens to stumble across this old ‘Trailers’ thread of mine sometime, I’ve just temporarily used this space to put the following edit ideas/shots on here to remind myself about them at some point!
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INITIAL IDEAS FOR 1ST EPISODE OF ‘THE MANDALORIAN’ TV SHOW -
I MIGHT change SILENT silver LUCASFILM logo to SHORTENED ‘fanfare’ version.
DISCARD the ‘shiny characters’ line-up and ‘rainbow star wars’ logo, and instead ADD the SILENT ‘A long time ago, in a galaxy far far away’ blue wording BEFORE cutting to the ‘locator’ beeps and wind of the first shot.
The blue ‘gillman’ alien guy was really annoying, and it would be tempting to cut the ENTIRE first part of the show to get rid of him…EXCEPT I really like some of the initial imagery, so I think it might be possible to DISCARD some of the scenes involving him, and cut directly to the close-up of the Mandalorian pushing him into the chamber to be ‘carbonised’! - POSSIBLY get rid of the CGI’D driverless golden speeder, and just cut to the rusty speeder with the driver after the SPY ALIEN plays his flute?
In the 2ND EPISODE, I might DISCARD everything before the Mandalorian and floating Yodaling walking towards us with the sun behind them (but keep THE MANDALORIAN title??), as they then come across the jawas stripping the ship…OR I MIGHT include initial start of episode where the Mandalorian fights off the Younglings attackers, and then CUT to them walking with the sun behind them (but keep THE MANDALORIAN title??)…while DISCARDING the whole scene of the Mandalorian attending to his wound as the Yodaling puppet tries to heal him.
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(NOTE - I might just start off with the silent LUCASFILM LOGO and blue wording instead, seeing as these are merely ‘standalone’ stories outwith the MAIN SAGA storyline with Luke and co.)
NOTE - I NEED TO ADD A LOT MORE ‘FILLER’ SCREENSHOTS TO THIS, AND MIGHT MENTION THAT I ALWAYS TRY TO IMAGINE ANY SCENES I’M DISCARDING AS BEING LOST ‘DELETED SCENES’, TO SEE IF I’D REALLY HAVE WANTED TO INCLUDE THEM IF THEY’D BEEN NEWLY DISCOVERED!
YOUTUBE CLIP OF SOME LUCASFILM LOGOS - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wdYaG3o3bgE
( IS THIS JUST THE SAME LUCASFILM LOGOS RE-UPLOADED? - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_UaDulL4X84 )
YOUTUBE CLIP OF LUCASFILM LOGO WITH NEW THEME - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JMqSKd_PXAQ
( IS THIS JUST THE SAME NEW THEME RE-UPLOADED? - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OkzfZ3EcHqw )
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(ADDITIONAL NOTE to myself: the Screencaps site doesn’t include the 20TH CENTURY FOX logo or the ‘rainbow’ LUCASFILM logo, so I would just use the first 2 image links immediately below to show them instead) - ANOTHER ADDITIONAL NOTE to myself: To get any of these links to actually show as pics on this site, I need to add  at the very end too!
(NOTE - I MIGHT possibly use the ‘colourful’ version instead of the ‘silver’ version…and I MIGHT go for a totally ‘hybrid’ intro. scene of my own which would go like this - 20TH CENTURY FOX logo and ‘FANFARE’ music begins/then instead of the LUCASFILM logo at this point, we’d see the STAR WARS title recede away to the rest of the ‘FANFARE’ music/then we’d see the LUCASFILM logo and the ‘A LONG TIME AGO…’ wording in silence, in the same kind of way that ROGUE ONE starts…OR ALTERNATIVELY…I MIGHT just keep the 20TH CENTURY FOX logo and LUCASFILM logo in their normal place with the ‘FANFARE’ music, and THEN have the STAR WARS title recede away in silence before we then see the ‘A LONG TIME AGO…’ wording in silence too…OR ANOTHER POTENTIAL ALTERNATIVE…I MIGHT replace the 20TH CENTURY FOX logo with the receding STAR WARS title instead, as we then see the LUCASFILM logo, and then see the ‘A LONG TIME AGO…’ wording)
(NOTE - I then MIGHT possibly put receding STAR WARS MAIN TITLE/static starfield over ROGUE ONE music/or SILENCE at this point instead!? - but see new idea above)
(NOTE - I won’t be including either the ROGUE ONE or SOLO ‘Main Titles’ in my edits of these ‘standalone’ movie spin-offs, due to the fact that I really dislike the weak look of the ROGUE ONE font, and because I’m DISCARDING the entire first 25 mins. of SOLO altogether, including it’s ‘Main Title’. I also dislike that the SOLO ‘main title’ includes the byline ‘A Star Wars Story’ but ROGUE ONE doesn’t, even though they are BOTH ‘standalone’ spin-offs - so the A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away… wording effectively becomes the common ‘main title’ which introduces these ‘standalone’ storyline settings…so I’m just looking on these movies as being SUPPLEMENTARY to the ‘main saga’ for myself)
I’m intending to TOTALLY DISCARD all the various scenes that are seen BEFORE the ‘JEDHA IMPERIAL-OCCUPIED MOON/SAW’S GANG WITH BHODI’ scene (NOTE - SHOULD I LIST THEM TOO?), but here’s the movie’s current order of scenes shown AFTER that -
JEDHA IMPERIAL-OCCUPIED MOON/SAW’S GANG WITH BHODI…
…which transitions into WOBANI PLANET/IMPERIAL LABOR CAMP PRISON TRUCK RESCUE OF JYN ERSO…
…which transitions into SHIP HEADED TO YAVIN 4/REBEL ALLIANCE HEADQUARTERS/JYN’S INTERROGATION/SHIP LEAVING YAVIN 4…
…which transitions to SAW’S INTERROGATION OF ‘DEFECTOR PILOT’ BHODI…
…which transitions to TIE FIGHTER APPROACHING STARDESTROYERS OVER DEATHSTAR/TARKIN’S DISCUSSING ‘DEFECTOR PILOT’ WITH KRENNIC/TARKIN LOOKING OUT AT DEATHSTAR…
…which transitions to BLACKNESS/FLASHBACKS OF YOUNG JYN WITH HER PARENTS AND KRENNIC/GIVEN A PENDANT BY HER MOTHER/HUGGED BY HER FATHER/BALD SAW OPENING THE HATCH…
…which transitions to JYN SUDDENLY WAKENING UP TO LOOK AT HER PENDANT/LOOKING OUT AT JEDHA PLANET/LANDING ON JEDHA
NOTE - although I’m DISCARDING the ‘flashback’ scene altogether, I’m still deciding whether the rest of this current order of scenes sufficiently tells the story of the ‘defector pilot’ Bhodi well enough for me in this order, or not. If not, then I’m thinking about focusing on him more right from the start like this instead -
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NOTE - SEE THIS SITE FOR SIZE REFERENCE - https://logos.fandom.com/wiki/Lucasfilm/Other
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SCENE ENDS ON TARKIN LOOKING OUT AT THE DEATH STAR -
CUT TO WOBANI IMPERIAL PRISON PLANET AND JYN’S RESCUE FROM A TRANSPORT VEHICLE (NOTE - I’ll probably cut to the WOBANI planet shot rather than direcly to the transport vehicle…as it might seem as if the transport vehicle is supposed to be on the Death Star that Tarkin is looking at, if I just join those two shots together directly!) -
(REMOVE close-up shots of Jyn ‘suddenly sitting upright’ and ‘the sleeping alien’)
SCENE ENDS ON JYN BEING THROWN ON GROUND BY DROID -
TRANSITIONS TO YAVIN 4 AND JYN’S INTERROGATION BY REBELS -
END OF JYN GETTING INTERROGATED -
TRANSITIONS TO JYN AND CASSIAN ABOUT TO LEAVE REBEL BASE -
SCENE ENDS ON SHIP FLYING AWAY FROM YAVIN 4 -
(OR alternatively, place receding STAR WARS MAIN TITLE/static starfield over ROGUE ONE music/or SILENCE here instead!? - https://caps.pictures/197/7-starwars4/full/star-wars4-movie-screencaps.com-3.jpg )
(NOTE - either way, I might decide to put MAIN TITLE immediately after No. 2 wording instead?)
NOTE - I MIGHT BE DISCARDING THE ‘ROGUE ONE’ AND ‘SOLO’ MAIN TITLES ALTOGETHER FOR MY VERSIONS, SO I’D CUT FROM THE SHOT OF TARKIN STARING AT THE DEATH STAR TO THE SHOT OF JYNN AWAKENING SUDDENLY INSTEAD, AS THE SHIP APPROACHES JEDHA - the choice I have to make is whether to KEEP the movie’s current order of scenes which give the impression that the REBELS know about the defector BEFORE the EMPIRE does (even though my opening scene has one of Saw’s men saying the Imperials will be looking for the defector - and also because I’m discarding the scene of Cassian being told about it by an informer)…OR to try and cut it in the way I’ve shown above - but this rests on the cut from the ship leaving Yavin 4 directly to the close-up shot of Jynn waking up suddenly working smoothly
ALTERNATIVELY - I COULD START WITH BHODI CAPTURED BY SAW’S GANG, WHICH TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL TO WOBANI PLANET AND JYN’S JAILBREAK, WHICH TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL TO YAVIN 4 AND JYN’S INTERROGATION…BUT CUT TO SAW’S LEGS AND THE BHODI’S INTEROGATION WHICH TRANSITIONS TO TARKIN ON THE DEATH STAR, AT THE END OF JYN’S INTERROGATION WHERE HER CLOSE-UP IS OFFERED FREEDOM…AND THEN CUT TO JYN AND CASSIAN WALKING IN THE BASE JUST AFTER THE SHOT OF TARKIN STARING AT THE DEATH STAR, AND ONCE THAT SCENE ENDS WITH THE SHIP ACCELERATING AWAY FROM YAVIN 4, I COULD THEN CUT TO THE CLOSE-UP OF JYN WAKING UP SUDDENLY AS THE SHIP APPROACHES JHEDDA
GO INTO WHY I’M NOT KEEN ON THE LACK OF FOX LOGO AND FANFARE TO KICK THINGS OFF, AND MIGHT SHOW THIS CARTOON IMAGE (should I also show the cartoony font saying ‘A Long Time Ago…etc.’ along with it, or not??) -
Mention this link about the 20th Century Fox logo and fanfare in my final description - https://www.hollywoodreporter.com/heat-vision/why-disney-should-add-foxs-fanfare-back-star-wars-1067900
START OFF with the familiar 20th Century Fox/Lucasfilm logos and fanfare of previous Star Wars movies -
CUT to the Jedha Imperial-occupied moon for my NEW OPENING, as the ‘defector pilot’ Bhodi is taken to meet Saw’s gang -
Scene ends on ‘pull-back’ of ‘jedi rocks’ -
TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL to Wobani Imperial Prison Planet and Jyn’s rescue from a transport vehicle -
(REMOVE close-up shots of Jyn ‘suddenly sitting upright’ and ‘the sleeping alien’) NOTE - “Somebody wake up Hicks!”
Scene ends on Jyn being thrown on ground by droid -
TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL to Yavin 4 and Jyn’s interrogation by rebels -
(NOTE - we are given a full introduction to Cassian Andor and Jyn Erso during this, and also given full details concerning Saw Gerrera, Galen Erso, and the defector)
End of Jyn getting interrogated -
CUT to close-up of Saw approaching Bhodi to question him -
(NOTE - I MIGHT end up putting the zoom-in on Saw’s hide-out first, if the audio blends in okay)
Bhodi is taken away when Saw orders “Bor Gullet!” to his gang (NOTE - I definately WON’T be including the CGI creature however!) -
TRANSITIONS AS NORMAL to a tie-fighter, as Krenick and Tarkin discuss the ‘defector pilot’ aboard a stardestroyer near the death star -
Scene ends on Tarkin looking out at the death star -
CUT to Jyn and Cassian about to leave rebel base -
Scene ends on ship flying away from Yavin 4 -
CUT to close-up of Jyn suddenly awakening as ship approaches Jedha -
(NOTE - I’m discarding the ‘flashback dream’ footage which normally comes before this)
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HD RELEASE LUCASFILM INTRO. - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6FNiyvy31ew
6th POST
Okay, I’m now going to describe how I’d like to see the beginning of ROGUE ONE done differently, but first, I’d like to discuss the new intro. layout that DISNEY came up with for their movies -
Like others at the time, I sorely missed the familiar 20TH CENTURY FOX logo and fanfare for a little extra bit of anticipation before the iconic blue A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away… wording silently appeared to introduce the crescendo of the equally iconic STAR WARS main title and scroll theme…and found the new replacement to be very weak sauce and lacklustre in comparison. In addition to that, I also disliked the way the new silver LUCASFILM logo and blue wording were both reduced in size compared to the bigger versions previously seen at the start of THE FORCE AWAKENS.
So for my own viewing purposes someday, I’d much prefer to REINSTATE the 20th CENTURY FOX logo and fanfare at the start of THE FORCE AWAKENS, THE LAST JEDI, and THE RISE OF SKYWALKER, to restore some continuity throughout the Original Trilogy, Prequel Trilogy, and Sequel Trilogy ‘Skywalker saga’ movies for myself.
However, I’m content that the lack of fanfare intros./scrolls for the ‘standalone’ movies such as ROGUE ONE and SOLO helps to differentiate them from the ‘main 9-movie saga’ for myself anyway…although I’d prefer to give them a similar new silent intro. instead, which includes a certain ‘Star Warsy’ element which I really missed.
So here’s my proposed NEW OPENING for ROGUE ONE which I’d prefer to see - I had originally intended to COMPLETELY DISCARD ALL THE OPENING SCENES of the existing movie…and begin with the ‘the planet Jedha with the defecting cargo pilot and Saw’s gang’ instead…as I’m not too keen on the current opening, nor the fact that we start off with Jyn as a youngster, nor the fact that Captain Ando ruthlessly backshoots his defenceless contact when we first meet him - so I wanted to introduce the two main protagonists in a different way, and preferred to just have Captain Ando first appear at Jyn’s interrogation at the rebel base instead, seeing as it works as a good introduction to him, where he explains everything anyway.
HOWEVER, I eventually decided to start off with the two main protagonists rather than the defector after all, but WITHOUT Captain Ando killing his contact -
We START OFF with the SILENT silver LUCASFILM logo and blue wording -
(NOTE - I’d DISCARD the smaller logo and lettering that were seen in ROGUE ONE, as shown HERE and HERE , as I much prefer the larger versions that were seen in THE FORCE AWAKENS instead) - PUT THIS IN A BLUE BOX?
CUT to -
CUT to -
NOTE - IF YOU PLAY THESE ONE AFTER ANOTHER, YOU’LL GET A BETTER IDEA OF HOW THIS WAY LOOK -
Silver LUCASFILM logo - https://streamable.com/0snvf
Receding STAR WARS title - https://streamable.com/s9s6k
Blue wording - https://streamable.com/esw0i
…and then we CUT* to the ROGUE ONE title -
NOTE - The ROGUE ONE title starts off much closer to us before it recedes away, so that we initially only see the letters showing ‘GUE O’ at first.
…and then we continue on as normal, as we get our first glimpse of Jyn -
…as she wakes and sits up, and we end on this shot -
NOTE - She is seen to sit a bit more upright than this shot below actually shows.
THIS IS JUST A POSSIBILITY, AS I MIGHT YET GO WITH THE FAMILIAR 20TH CENTURY FOX LOGO AND ‘RAINBOW’ LUCASFILM LOGO INSTEAD - Also, would I need begin the ‘theme’ music over some of the previous blue wording before the ‘ROGUE ONE’ title appears, or even just a little bit over blackness BEFORE the title appears??
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NOTE - This is the point where I’d prefer to reposition some of the earlier footage I like from the start of the movie instead, as a way of revealing more of Jyn’s backstory from when she was younger.
FINAL NEW ROGUE ONE OPENING - ALSO SHOW HOW I WAS ORIGINALLY GOING TO START WITH ‘JEDI ROCKS’ SCENE WITH BHODI, THEN CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL UNTIL JYN IS THROWN ON GROUND BY TALL DROID, THEN CUT TO ‘ROGUE ONE’ TITLE AND THEME, THEN CUT TO SHIP TRAVELLING TO YAVIN 4 AND THE REBEL BASE - AS A ‘REPRISE’ OF THE THEME WORKED PRETTY WELL I THOUGHT.
6th POST
So here’s my proposed new opening for ROGUE ONE now.
There’s a LOT I like about this movie, but once again there’s plenty throughout I’d prefer to alter. However, the MAIN thing I would change for myself is the way the beginning was structured. My own preference would be to start off with Jyn as an adult, rather than as a child…and luckily, there’s a straightforward way to do this without scrapping all of the early scenes.
But before I start, I’d like to mention the opening title introduction to the movie first -
Like others, I really missed the familiar 20th Century Fox logo and fanfare, but to have it open SILENTLY without the usual STAR WARS title and scroll theme music too, felt really jarring at the time…and seemed pretty weak sauce compared to the triumphant introduction of previous entries in the franchise.
And on top of that, I didn’t care for the fact that the new silver LUCASFILM logo and it’s follow-up blue wording had been shrunk in size as seen here -
But I’m using ROGUE ONE to END my personal ‘Star Wars saga’ viewing order on, as I just look on it as an additional fun watch AFTER the ‘main’ 9-chapter ‘SKYWALKER’ storyline concludes…so I’m content for the likes of it and other ‘standalone’ movie storylines such as SOLO to start off less bombastically than the ‘main saga’ chapters do anyway, as a way to differentiate them somewhat.
However, I’d still prefer to alter the current opening intro a little for myself, to restore just a bit more of that ‘Star Warsy’ anticipation which I missed…and there are a couple of options which I’m considering -
One would go like this -
We START OFF with the familiar 20th Century Fox logo and fanfare
NOTE - I believe there’s a new Disney version of the logo without the ‘A News Corporation Company’ now, so I’d probably use that.
…but the fanfare would finish over the LARGER silver LUCASFILM logo which was seen in THE FORCE AWAKENS instead -
…before the blue wording silently appears and eventually fades away too -
…and at this point, the movie begins.
However, here’s an alternative version which I’m equally mulling over too…which I’ll use as the introduction to start off my alterations now -
We START OFF with the familiar STAR WARS title, as it SILENTLY recedes away from us and fades out -
…as the silver LUCASFILM logo silently appears -
…before the blue wording silently appears and eventually fades out too -
…and then we CUT* to the ROGUE ONE title as the main theme music kicks in -
C-T (this shot below is from ‘Cap-That’ screenshots site)
NOTE - The ROGUE ONE title starts off much larger than shown in the shot above, as we only see the letters showing ‘GUE O’ when it first appears, and it also recedes much smaller than shown in the shot below.
C-T
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…and then we continue on as normal, as the music fades away, and we get our first introduction to Jyn Erso -
…as a drip on her forehead wakes her up and she sits upright, and we end on this shot -
NOTE - Jyn actually sits more fully upright than shown in the shot above.
ALSO - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of Jyn wiping her forehead - CLICK HERE , and I’d also prefer to discard the shot of her sleeping alien cellmate which then appears immediately after - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Jyn sitting upright, as she looks out her prison cell to see a stormtrooper guard walk past -
…and then we continue on as normal, as the music swells and we head to the RING OF KAFRENE TRADING OUTPOST -
…as we pan down to a busy marketplace, and get our first introduction to Cassian Andor -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of the aliens at the food stall, to quicken the pace here slightly - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Cassian continuing to walk through the busy marketplace as a stormtrooper approaches -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Cassian turns to run down an alley, and meets up with a contact who’s nervously waiting to tell him some news from Jedha. The contact tells Cassian “AN IMPERIAL PILOT…ONE OF THE CARGO DRIVERS, HE DEFECTED YESTERDAY…HE’S TELLING PEOPLE THEY’RE MAKING A WEAPON…THE KYBER CRYSTALS, THAT’S WHAT THEY’RE FOR”
Then Cassian asks “WHAT KIND OF WEAPON?”, as the contact anxiously tries to leave saying “LOOK, I HAVE TO GO”…
…as Cassian suddenly grabs him and shoves him back, demanding “WHAT KIND OF WEAPON?!”
…as the contact yells “A PLANET KILLER!”
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - This isn’t a biggie by any means, but I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of the contact yelling “THAT’S WHAT HE CALLED IT!”, as he knocks Cassian’s hand away - CLICK HERE , because Cassian is then seen to still be holding the contact’s coat in the next shot immediately afterwards…and although the contact’s face is not lined up exactly between the two shots I’d join together instead, I reckon it would look less jarring in motion than seeing Cassian still holding his jacket after being shrugged off…as the contact is then seen to shrug off Cassian’s hand just afterwards anyway.
…and then we CUT* to Cassian taken aback as he says “A PLANET KILLER?..” in a hushed tone -
…as the contact shrugs Cassian’s hand off, saying “SOMEONE NAMED ERSO SENT HIM, SOME OLD FRIEND OF SAW’S”, as Cassian then says “GALEN ERSO!..”, then demands “…WAS IT?!” -
…as the contact says “I DON’T KNOW, THEY WERE LOOKING FOR SAW WHEN WE LEFT…”
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point where Cassian says “WHO ELSE KNOWS ABOUT THIS?” , and the contact replies “I HAVE NO IDEA” - CLICK HERE , and I’d also prefer to discard the shot which appears immediately after it too, where the contact says “IT’S ALL FALLING APART…SAW’S RIGHT…” - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to the contact loudly saying “…THERE’S SPIES EVERYWHERE!”, as two stormtroopers appear saying “WHAT’S ALL THIS?..C’MON, LET’S SEE SOME SCAN DOCS”
…as Cassian pretends to kneel down for his gloves, then turns around to shoot the stormtroopers -
…as his shocked contact says “NO…WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?!”, while people at the the end of the ally react, and Cassian looks for a way out -
…as people flee the area -
…as a stormtrooper appears at the end of the alley, and reports “TROOPERS DOWN, SECTOR NINE!” -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of the contact saying “I’LL NEVER CLIMB OUT OF HERE, MY ARM!” - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to several stormtroopers running through the crowds, saying “GET OUT OF THE WAY…MOVE,MOVE!” -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the scene which appears at this point of Cassian saying “CALM DONW, CALM DOWN…IT WILL BE ALRIGHT” as he then back-shoots his unsuspecting contact - CLICK HERE, as that put me right off his character from the start when he did that. When Cassian has no choice but to escape himself, I’d rather have seen him just having to leave his unfortunate contact to an uncertain fate, instead of ruthlessly backshooting him…as I wanted to like his character better during this first impression of him, and he was already a ‘badass’ after shooting the two stormtroopers.
…and then we CUT* to a close-up of Cassian tucking his blaster away as an alarm blares -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d discard the beginning of the shot which appears at this point of Cassian looking down - CLICK HERE , and just start from the point where he’s already turned to make his escape, which will give the impression that he’s just having to leave his contact behind to his fate.
…and then we CUT* to Cassian starting to make his getaway, as the music rises and he climbs out of the alley -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we head to the JEDHA IMPERIAL-OCCUPIED MOON, where the defecting cargo pilot Bhodi is captured by Saw’s gang -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we head to the WOBANI IMPERIAL PRISON PLANET and a large transport vehicle appears -
…as we see that Jyn is now aboard the vehicle in chains along with other prisoners -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d discard the shot which appears at this point of Jyn suddenly sitting upright instead of leaning forward like her other shots - CLICK HERE , and I’d also discard this close-up of the alien which then appears immediately afterwards too - CLICK HERE , as I’d prefer to make it look like the prisoner opposite Jyn is looking over at the stormtrooper guards at this point instead.
…and then we CUT* to the stormtrooper guards -
…as Jyn is looking back and forth, until the transport vehicle suddenly jolts to a halt -
…as a stormtrooper guard says “WHAT NOW?” as he stands up, and another stormtrooper replies “I DON’T KNOW, MUST BE ANOTHER PICKUP” -
…as the stormtrooper guard says “I THOUGHT WE HAD EVERYBODY”, as he reacts to a knocking sound, and turns around -
…as armed rebel troops board the transport vehicle -
…and the rebels identify Jyn as ‘Liana Hallik’, and free her from her chains. Jyn then proceeds to attack the rebels with a handy shovel, and then runs towards the transport vehicle door to escape -
…as a tall droid stops her, and throws her to the ground -
…as the tall droid says “CONGRATULATIONS, YOU ARE BEING RESCUED…PLEASE DO NOT RESIST” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we head to YAVIN 4 and the REBEL ALLIANCE BASE -
…as Jyn is taken into the rebel base for questioning -
…and we continue on as normal, as we learn a lot of information about Jyn’s background when she is initially spoken to by General Draven, Mon Mothma, and Captain Cassian Andor -
General Draven speaks saying “YOU’RE CURRENTLY CALLING YOURSELF LIANA HALLIK. IS THAT CORRECT? POSSESSION OF UNSANCTIONED WEAPONS. FORGERY OF IMPERIAL DOCUMENTS. AGGRAVATED ASSAULT. ESCAPE FROM CUSTODY. RESISTING ARREST. IMAGINE IF THE IMPERIAL AUTHORITIES HAD FOUND OUT WHO YOU REALLY WERE, JYN ERSO. THAT IS YOUR GIVEN NAME, IS IT NOT? JYN ERSO, DAUGHTER OF GALEN ERSO. A KNOWN IMPERIAL COLLABORATOR IN WEAPONS DEVELOPMENT.”**
…as Mon Mothma then tells Jyn it’s a chance for her to make a fresh start, and that they think that she can help them…as she then introduces Captain Cassian Andor who proceeds to question Jyn…who tells him that she hasn’t seen her father since 15 years, and that Saw Gerrera saved her life when she was a child, and raised her…but that she hasn’t seen him since years.
…and we also find out that the rebels want her to help them to meet with Saw, to get access to the ‘Imperial defector’ to confirm his story about the weapon, and to try and locate Jyn’s father and bring him back to testify about it to the Senate.
…as Jyn and Cassian walk towards a ship where the tall droid K-2SO is already aboard, as General Draven calls Cassian over to quietly order him to ignore what was said about taking Galen Erso back, and that he’s to kill him instead if he finds him.
…and then we continue on as normal, as Cassian, Jyn, and K-2SO fly off on their mission -
…and then we continue on as normal, as a pair of metal legs approach, and we hear the words “LIES…DECEPTIONS!” -
…as we get our first introduction to Saw Gerrera who suspiciously confronts Bhodi -
…as Saw orders “BOR GULLET!” to his gang, and Bhodi is hooded again and taken away -
…and then we continue on as normal, as a TIE Fighter screams past, and a stardestroyer comes into view in front of the Death Star -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Krennic approaches Tarkin on a stardestroyer, where Tarkin discusses the missing cargo pilot and the need for an immediate test of the weapon…and that failure will find him explaining why to a far less patient audience -
…as Krennic says “I WILL NOT FAIL”, then turns to leave, as Tarkin looks out at the Death Star -
…and then we continue on as normal, as the screen momentarily goes black before the first part of Jyn’s ‘flashback’ dream of past times with her parents begins -
…as Jyn’s father Galen comes over to Jyn saying “WHAT’S THE MATTER JYNA?..ARE YOU AFRAID?”
…and then we continue on as normal, as Galen playfully lifts her up and puts her to bed saying “I’LL ALWAYS PROTECT YOU” - 
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to have Saw with a headful of hair right from the start, as I found the transformation of him starting out as completely bald to then having an abundance of hair to be quite jarring…so I’d discard the rest of the ‘flashback’ shots which appear at this point which end with his bald appearance opening the hatch - CLICK HERE …and would replace them with an alternative, EXTENDED ‘flashback’ at this point instead…as a way of revealing a devastating aspect of Jyn’s past, while allowing me to include important footage and dialogue from the opening which I liked, but didn’t want to start the movie off with.
…and then we CUT* to another time with Jyn as her ‘flashback’ dream takes a turn for the worse, as a black ship screams downwards towards a planet -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of the ship flying over the beach…as well as it’s flyby past the working droid…and the close-up of the droid - CLICK HERE , CLICK HERE , and CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to young Jyn running frantically as the black ship passes overhead -
…and we end on this shot -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we see the black ship on a monitor screen -
…as Jyn’s concerned father and mother look on -
…and Jyn eventually reaches her homestead -
…as she says “MAMA!” on entering -
…and her mother Lira says “WE KNOW” -
…as her father Galen tells her “JYN, GATHER YOUR THINGS, IT’S TIME”, and they all hurriedly rush to grab some belongings -
…as Lira rushes towards a monitor in the kitchen area and looks over at Jyn -
…as the monitor beeps and an image appears, and we hear a male voice urgently say “HELLO” -
…as Lira turns to the monitor saying “SAW!”, and we end on this shot -
NOTE - Luckily for my purposes, bald Saw is indistinct in the shot above due to the angle of the monitor, as I’d prefer to discard the close-up shot of the monitor which appears immediately after at this point, where Lira says “…IT’S LIRA, IT HAPPENED…HE’S COME FOR US” - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Jyn looking towards her mother, as we hear Saw advise “YOU KNOW WHAT TO DO” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as the black ship turns to land -
…and we end on this shot as we hear Jyn’s father Galen say “JYNA, COME HERE…” -
…and continues to say “REMEMBER, WHATEVER I DO…I DO IT TO PROTECT YOU…SAY YOU UNDERSTAND” -
…as Jyn says “I UNDERSTAND” -
…and Galen says “I LOVE YOU STARDUST”
…as Jyn says “I LOVE YOU TOO PAPA”
…and Jyn’s mother Lira says “GALEN…” -
…as Galen says “GO!” -
…and we end on this shot -
…and then we continue on as normal, as several black troopers approach -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of Krennic and the black troopers - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Galen on his own, as he heads outside -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Jyn and Lira run to hide -
…as Lira whispers “JYN…”, and pulls her behind a rock -
…as Lira says “YOU KNOW WHERE TO GO DON’T YOU?” -
…and Jyn nods silently, and Lira takes off her necklace -
…as Lira says “TRUST THE FORCE”, and gives Jyn her necklace -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard the shot which appears at this point of Krennic and the black troopers - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Galen walking towards the intruders -
…as Jyn stops running and decides to head back -
…as Krennic and the black troopers approach Galen -
…as Krennic says “YOU’RE A HARD MAN TO FIND GALEN…” -
…and continues to say “…BUT FARMING…REALLY?, A MAN OF YOUR TALENTS?” -
…as Galen says “IT’S A PEACEFUL LIFE” -
…and Krennic says “LONELY I IMAGINE” -
…as Galen says “SINCE LIRA DIED, YES” -
…and Krennic says “OH…”, as he walks forwards saying “OH…MY CONDONLENCES”, as he then turns to the black troopers ordering “SEARCH THE HOUSE!” -
…as Galen says “WHAT IS IT YOU WANT?”, and Krennic replies “THE WORK HAS STALLED…I NEED YOU TO COME BACK” -
…and Galen says “I WON’T DO IT KRENNIC” -
…as Krennic says “WE WERE ON THE VERGE OF GREATNESS, WE WERE THIS CLOSE…TO PROVIDING PEACE AND SECURITY FOR THE GALAXY” -
…and Galen says “YOU’RE CONFUSING PEACE WITH TERROR” -
…as Krennic says “WELL…YOU HAVE TO START SOMEWHERE” -
…as the black troopers search Galen’s property -
…as Galen says “I’D BE OF NO HELP KRENNIC…MY MIND JUST ISN’T WHAT IT WAS…” -
…and continues to say “…I’VE TROUBLE REMEMBERING…EVEN THE SIMPLE THINGS” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Jyn is crouched on the ground watching and listening -
…as Krennic says “GALEN…” -
…and continues to say “…YOU’RE AN INSPIRED SCIENTIST, BUT A TERRIBLE LIAR” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we see Lira approaching in the distance, as Krennic says “NOW I ADMIRE THE EFFORT…” -
…and continues to say “…I REALLY DO”, as he turns to notice Lira -
…as we see Lira getting closer, and Krennic says “OH LOOK…” -
…and continues to say “…HERE’S LIRA BACK FROM THE DEAD”, as Galen turns and runs towards her -
…and Krennic says “IT’S A MIRACLE!” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Jyn watches the black stormtroopers raise their guns at Galen -
…as Lira keeps running towards them -
…and Krennic raises his arm and shouts “STOP!” -
NOTE - And again this isn’t a biggie by any means, but there’s another slight continuity error here, so I’d prefer to discard this shot of Krennic which appears at this point, as his arm is suddenly down at his side - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Lira raising her concealed gun -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Krennic says “OH LIRA…TROUBLESOME AS EVER” -
…and Lira shouts “YOU’RE NOT TAKING HIM!” -
…as Krennic says “NO, OF COURSE I’M NOT, I’M TAKING YOU ALL…” -
…and continues to say “…YOU’LL ALL COME, YOU, YOUR CHILD, YOU’LL ALL LIVE IN COMFORT”, as Jyn keeps watching and listening -
…and Lira says “AS HOSTAGES” -
…as Krennic says “AS HEROES OF THE EMPIRE” -
…and Galen says “LIRA…PUT IT DOWN” -
…as Krennic warns “THINK VERY CAREFULLY”, as Galen and Jyn look on -
…and Lira says “YOU WILL NEVER WIN!” -
…as Krennic orders “DO IT!” to the stormtroopers, and they shoot Lira -
…and Lira’s gun shoots Krennic in the shoulder -
…as Jyn sees everthing, and Galen shouts “LIRA…NO!” and rushes over to her -
…and then we continue on as normal, as Krennic yells “THEY HAVE A CHILD!..”, and Jyn starts to flee -
…as Krennic orders “…FIND IT!” -
…and Galen holds his dead wife -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard these next two shots of young Jyn running away which appear at this point - CLICK HERE and CLICK HERE, to slightly quicken the pace here.
…and then we CUT* to Jyn running into a nearby cave -
…as she opens a hidden hatch and climbs in -
…and then shuts the hatch behind her -
…and then we continue on as normal, as black stormtroopers search for Jyn -
…as Jyn peers out a small gap -
…and two black troopers enter the cave -
…as Jyn continues to watch through the gap -
…and the two black troopers turn to leave -
…as Jyn stops watching, and climbs down a ladder -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard this shot of Jyn sitting on the floor which appears at this point - HERE
…and then we CUT* to the stormy exterior of the cave that young Jyn is hiding in -
…as Jyn shakes a lamp in the dark to get it to work properly -
…and then looks upwards when she hears someone approaching -
…as we hear footsteps getting nearer the hatch -
…and we end on this shot -
…and then we CUT* to the sound of the hatch opening as adult Jyn suddenly awakens from her ‘flashback’ dream aboard the ship, and looks at the ‘necklace’ her mother gave her -
NOTE - I’m content not to show that it was Saw who opened the hatch, as we already hear Jyn tell the rebels that he saved her life and raised her in this restructure…and we’ve also seen that Jyn’s mother contacted Saw earlier in the ‘flashback’ dream too…so we can reasonably assume that a younger (NON-bald preferably 😉 ) Saw came along and rescued young Jyn at that point, due to those reveals -
…and we then continue on as normal, as Cassian tells K-2SO that they’re coming into orbit, and to take the controls -
…as Jyn puts away her ‘necklace’ and looks out the window -
…as Cassian says “THAT’S JEDHA…OR WHAT’S LEFT OF IT!” -
…as Cassian says “WE FIND SAW…WE FIND YOUR FATHER”, and Jyn stares out the window as the music rises -
…as the ship flies over the surface of Jedha and lands -
…and then we continue on as normal, as the group approach Jedha city -
…and Cassian takes out his macrobinoculars -
…as Jyn says “WHAT’S WITH THE DESTROYER?” -
…and Cassian replies “BECAUSE OF YOUR OLD FRIEND SAW GERRERA…HE’S BEEN ATTACKING THE CARGO SHIPMENTS”, as he looks through the macrobinoculars -
…as Jyn asks “WHAT ARE THEY BRINGING IN?” -
…and Cassian says “IT’S WHAT ARE THEY TAKING OUT”, then passes her his macrobinoculars -
…as Jyn looks through them -
…and Cassian says “THE KYBER CRYSTAL…ALL THEY COULD GET…WE WONDERED WHY THEY WERE RESTRICTING THE TEMPLE…NOW WE KNOW…” -
…and continues to say “…IT’S THE FUEL FOR THE WEAPON” -
…as K-S20 adds “…THE WEAPON YOUR FATHER’S BUILDING” -
…and Jyn says “MAYBE WE SHOULD LEAVE TARGET PRACTICE BEHIND” -
…as K-S2O says “ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT ME?” -
…and Cassian says “SHE’S RIGHT…WE NEED TO BLEND IN…STAY WITH THE SHIP” -
…as K-S2O says “I CAN BLEND IN…I’M AN IMPERIAL DROID…THE CITY IS UNDER IMPERIAL OCCUPATION” -
…and Jyn says “HALF THE PEOPLE HERE WANT TO REPROGRAM YOU…THE OTHER HALF WANT TO PUT A HOLE IN YOUR HEAD”, as Cassian give a wry smirk -
…and K-S20 says “I’M SURPRISED YOU’RE SO CONCERNED WITH MY SAFETY”, as Jyn says “I’M NOT…” -
…and continues to say “…I’M JUST WORRIED THEY MIGHT MISS YOU…AND HIT ME!”, as she hands him a bag -
…and Jyn walks past K-S20, as Cassian gives him a reassuring pat -
…and K-S2O says “DOESN’T SOUND SO BAD TO ME”, as he drops the bag to the ground -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we zoom-in towards Saw’s hide-out -
…where Bhodi is strapped to a chair and we hear a low gutteral roar -
…as the nightmare fuel that is ‘Bor Gullet’ slithers into view -
…and Bhodi looks scared as Saw says “BOR GULLET…CAN FEEL…” -
…and continues to say “…YOUR THOUGHTS”, as we see Bor Gullet’s eye -
…as Saw watches Bor Gullet getting closer to Bhodi, and says “NO LIE…” -
…and continues to say “…IS SAFE!” -
…as a tentacle reaches out at a terrified Bhodi -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d prefer to discard this close-up shot of Bor Gullet’s throbbing eye which appears at this point - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to the tentacles starting to wrap around Bhodi, as Saw says “WHAT HAVE YOU REALLY BROUGHT ME?..” -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d also prefer to discard this shot of the tentacles wrapping around Bhodi as Saw continues to say “…CARGO PILOT” which appears at this point - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to Saw saying “BOR GULLET…WILL KNOW THE TRUTH…” -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - I’d also prefer to discard this shot of the tentacles feeling Bhodi’s head which appears at this point - CLICK HERE
ADDITIONALLY - I’d also prefer to discard this shot of Saw saying “THE UNFORTUNATE SIDE EFFECT…IS THAT ONE TENDS…TO LOSE ONE’S MIND” which appears immediately after - CLICK HERE , as the first few words start off on the previous tentacle shot I want to get rid of.
…and then we CUT* to the engine roar of a cargo ship and TIE fighters flying over Jedha city, as Jyn and Cassian make their way through the city -
NOTE - I’d discard the first part of this shot of the old woman cooking which appears at this point - CLICK HERE , to avoid a continuity mismatch when I cut to another shot featuring the same old woman soon after, where she’s suddenly sitting at another area.
…and then we CUT* to Jyn and Cassian making their way through the bustling city -
…and we end on this shot -
NOTE - Due to VARIOUS reasons, I’d definitely discard the entire scene of Jyn bumping into the argumentative ‘bad duo’ of Doctor Evazan and Ponda Baba from A NEW HOPE’s Mos Eisley cantina which appears at this point, and ends on this shot as we hear an announcement saying “CITIZENS OF JEDHA…” - CLICK HERE
…and then we CUT* to an old woman sitting beside a hologram of Bhodi, as we hear an announcement saying “…YOU MUST COME FORWARD WITH INFORMATION OF THE LOCATION OF THIS MISSING CARGO PILOT…” -
…and then we continue on as normal, as we faintly hear the words continuing to say …“A REWARD OF 600 CREDITS FOR ANY INFORMATION SHALL BE AWARDED”, and Jyn and Cassian continue to make their way through the city -
NOTE - Although Jyn and Cassian now end up walking on the other side of each other, I’m content that in motion it looks as if Cassian ends up starting to move to the other side of Jyn during the hologram shot of Bhodi, due to the way they’ve had to move past other people at this point.
…and we continue on as normal, as Jyn and Cassian continue on their way through the city -
NOTE - MOST of the links in this post need REDONE as they were ‘hacked’ too. Below is a REDONE version of the link of Jyn and Cassian continuing on their way through the city link above, using the ‘img.screencaps.us’ wording -
So that’s the way I’d like to see the beginning of this particular movie play out for myself, and one day over the coming weeks I’ll get around to showing how I’d prefer to tweak the way it ends too.
In the meantime, since THE RISE OF SKYWALKER is due for release shortly…I thought it might be fun to describe the scenario I’ve got in mind to alter the most problematic entry in the entire ‘saga’ for myself…so THE LAST JEDI is up NEXT.
Heh, I just watched that movie for the first time the other night Bingowings. Quite good fun throughout, and I wasn't expecting that last line from 'Ray' in front of the kiddies that you quoted there. He said it with such gusto, lol!
I've now re-typed the *proper* clip I meant to show in my first example above Ripplin. Check it out! Even adywan couldn't save this movie. :)
Ripplin said:
P.S. I've had Starcrash for a long time and it's on my to watch list. Thanks for the reminder.
'THE HUMANOID' was another Italian 'STAR WARS'-influenced movie, which came out a year later. While 'STARCRASH' had a score by the great John Barry, this one happened to have a score by the equally great Ennio Morricone!
It's never been released on DVD (only videotape) but it seems to be fully up on Youtube if you root around, and can bear it.
Sadly, I can't seem to find the trailer for it, but here's a taste of what audiences at the time had to put up with to fill their 'STAR WARS' void until 'EMPIRE' came along....
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qADVkUL8gDM&feature=related
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uVoIvsTBX-c&feature=related
SilverWook said:
SilverWook wrote:
I guess this explains why Lucasfilm forcibly shut down the site of the fan who created essentially the exact same thing a couple years back.
I started a thread on here before it was yanked.
http://originaltrilogy.com/forum/topic.cfm/Make-your-own-Star-Wars-crawl/topic/9475/
Ah, I see. Thanks SilverWook, that's interesting, as I hadn't seen that thread of yours before.
I noticed that Sluggo foresaw at the time, that the idea would probably end up on the 'official' site eventually.... ;)
Agreed that it seems kinda ironic that it can be used to type *anything* up for sending off to various sources now, lol. Even for views that they probably wouldn't wish it to be used for....
By the way Bingowings, can you maybe give an idea of the way that guy's original version differs from this 'official' one sometime? I'm curious to know how they differ. Thanks.
Neat site zombie84! I'll be following it's progress with great interest.
That's a pretty neat idea indeed that they've come up with there. :)
Man, he contributed to lots of movies I've liked over the years....
A very talented writer.
