Eyepainter

Mrebo said:

These ideas are all terrible.

I know. Isn’t it beautiful?
– Joker

Just looked at what I came up with for restructuring the 60-80 minute chunk of my edit. I like what I’ve come up with, but I may need to watch the edit in full again to ensure that it works as a whole. For now, I’ll post what I’ve done so far.

Here’s how the scenes were structured in the theatrical film:

Han and Leia meet again
Introduction to the Resistance
Chewie talking to the doctor
The incomplete map
BB-8 meets R2
Han and Leia talk about Ben
Kylo interrogates Rey
Kylo talks with Snoke
Rey escapes
Starkiller Base begins charging
Finn tells the Resistance about the base
The Resistance prepares for battle
Han and Leia say goodbye
The First Order searches for Rey
Han lands the Falcon

Here’s what I’ve done so far:

Kylo interrogates Rey (minus the part where Rey resists Kylo, making this scene much darker)
Starkiller Base begins charging
Han and Leia meet again
Introduction to the Resistance
The incomplete map
BB-8 meets R2
Han and Leia talk about Ben
Finn tells the Resistance about the base
The Resistance prepares for attack
Han and Leia say goodbye
Rey escapes
Han lands the Falcon

If I come up with any improvements to this sequence, I’ll post an update. If you have an interesting suggestion, feel free to post it here.

Change the official logo of the resistance to a swastika, and digitally add one to the sleeve of every member of the resistance.

Doing some more restructuring from the scene when Rey gets captured to the scene when Han lands the Falcon on Starkiller Base. I can’t decide if the lowest point in the film is Rey getting captured or if Starkiller base charging up is the lowest point. This area of the film is easy to structure poorly because so many scenes take an upward trajectory (such as Han meeting Leia again, Finn telling the Resistance about the base, Rey escaping, etc.), and if I move some of the more downward scenes to fix the structure, I risk creating continuity issues (Such as Starkiller base charging up too early). I’m doing what I can, but the restructuring job is turning into the hardest part of editing the film.

RogueLeader said:

Horizontally stretch out every shot of Boba Fett in the OT to more closely match Temuera Morrison’s body-type.

You mean, like this?

https://youtu.be/6XDNBCTa8zE

Re-edit Kylo Ren’s first scene with Palpatine by digitally adding in Mariachi band instruments for both the Emperor and his followers. Then, have Palpatine say, “Au contraire, Mon Capitan! Heeee’s baaaack!” from the Star Trek: The Next Generation episode, “Deja Q.”

For the less nerdy among you, here’s what I’m referring to:

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=Ke_AkJC92IA

Changes updated!

Just changed the arrangement of Kylo Ren’s return to

Exegol at the end of the film again. Mainly because I wanted to remove ol’ Palpy’s line, “The Jedi are dead!” after removing all of his other lines during Rey’s Sith ritual.

I may have to update the changes list, because I think all of Kylo Ren’s scenes have been moved to just a little later in the sequence.

I also managed to make a “happy accident” while re-arranging, as replacing Palpatine’s

“The Jedi are dead!” with the shot of Kylo getting up while facing the Knights really adds an emotional “oomph” to the moment when Rey senses Kylo is nearby.

Mrebo said:

This was a fun watch. I liked the crawl. Some things that I would have thought would feel too abrupt if cut actually worked well on screen. The jump to the Gungan City played decently as an added humorous moment. Maybe a musical element would emphasize that. Removing visuals of the podrace announcers works great. By removing a lot of the preamble to the race, the scene with Shmi telling Anakin to be safe was able to project more heart. Removing the Padme decoy ploy was a more surprising cut but narratively works. All in all it flowed well and it was coherent.

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!

Mrebo said:

Here is my rough draft of meeting Anakin. Would love any comments.

https://streamable.com/q62z0b

I think it’s an interesting choice, and it does a good job of introducing Anakin in a more unique way than the theatrical version.

Mrebo said:

Thank you for the supportive comments 😃

I’ve taken a quick run at Meeting Anakin/Watto’s Shop. It needs polishing and maybe more trimming but I think works telling the story. Is a 4:20 (no pun intended) clip too long to share?

I’m curious about your work Eyepainter.

I’d be happy to send a PM if you’d like. Just say please.

I’m not sure how long is too long, but I did post a link to a 6-minute YouTube video I created detailing changes I made for my Terminator 2 fanedit. I haven’t gotten in trouble for it, so I think a 4:20 clip is probably okay. That is, unless the clip in question is offensive or obscene, but I doubt a clip of Episode I is gonna do that. I would say Jar Jar is obscene, but I think my definition is different from the moderators.

Have a J. Jonah Jameson soundalike narrate and rant endlessly about how Luke Skywalker is the greatest menace in the galaxy through all three movies in the original trilogy.

Removed a few more bits. I went through the sound editing and silenced out Han’s line: “Girl knows her stuff.” during the Starkiller base climax. Another tiny detail which lessens Rey’s “Mary Sue” problem just a teensy bit more.

I also took out some more shots of the

Starkiller base X-wing battle, and I think my approach now will be to place nearly all of the focus on the ground level (a.k.a. Rey, Finn, Han, and Chewie), and make the X-wing battle as close to insignificant as possible. I’ll still have Poe’s ship blow the planet up (sans Poe, however). It’s just that most of the X-wing battle will be removed, only showing up when absolutely necessary.

I’m not sure how many of your ideas for this edit are possible, but I will say that I am intrigued, and I like what I’m reading here. I wish you the best of luck, and I’d be happy to see it when it’s released!

Decided to cut Rey’s line, “I thought he was a myth.” As it downplays the significance of Luke Skywalker and the rebellion from the OT, and not in a good way. It also doesn’t work so well with my revised opening crawl, which places a lot of emphasis on Luke, Leia, and the First Order rising in the aftermath of the Empire’s defeat. All stuff that would make the rebellion well known across the galaxy.

At this rate, we’ll need to give pie its own villain. How about cake?

720p uploaded. PM me for the links!

Since I like to study and research 35mm colors for the sake of my own color grading, I too would love to get a PM for this if at all possible.

720p tested and working. Uploading the 720p right now.

Thanks! And a happy life day to you, too!

Just uploaded the general changes. Although I feel calling them “general” is kind of misleading. But it’s the best terminology I can come up with for now. There are no additions this time around, since I can’t find (nor do I believe there is) an official release with deleted scenes. So, instead, we’re left with just “-” for deleted, and “/” for changed or altered. I’ve removed a few lines of dialogue via sound editing, so those will be marked as “Audio:”

Keep in mind that, due to my concerns about consistency with the other two, this list isn’t final and subject to change.

Okay, that’s enough talk. Click on the spoiler tab below to see the changes I’ve made so far:

/ Opening crawl
– Kylo Ren’s visit to Mustafar (Ren finding the wayfinder is mentioned in my rewritten opening crawl instead, making this scene pointless)
– Epilepsy-inducing close-up shot of Palpatine
– “Everything.”
– “Kill the girl.”
– Falcon lightspeed-skipping scene, as it isn’t needed
– “They’re not with me. Ugh.”
– Part of Rey’s training course to make her less invincible
– “General, the falcon still hasn’t arrived. Commander’s asking for guidance.”
– Rey handing Luke’s lightsaber back to Leia
– First half of Rey’s conversation with Poe and Finn over the falcon
– “We’ve decoded the intel from the First Order spy, and it confirms the worst. Somehow, Palpatine returned.”
– Leia giving Luke’s lightsaber back to Rey
– Stormtrooper’s talk about the Knights of Ren
– Kylo Ren’s meeting with the First Order about the spy
– Shot of laughing Passana child (Too Disney-fied for me)
– “Palpatine wants you dead.”, “Serving another master?”, “No. I have other plans.”
– “…Why didn’t you?”, “You could’ve killed me. Why didn’t you?”, “You can’t hide, Rey. Not from me.”, “I see through the cracks in your mask. You’re haunted. You can’t stop seeing what you did to your father.”
– “I don’t want to have to kill you. I’m going to find you and I’m gonna turn you to the dark side…”
– Poe’s “They fly now.”
– Leia and Rose’s conversation with the X-Wing pilot about being more optimistic
– Rey and Finn’s conversation about what Finn was gonna tell Rey
– “Bones! I don’t like bones!”, “Bones? Never a good sign.”
– “I’ma blast it.”, “Don’t blast it.”
– Knights of Ren entering Pasaana
– All of Rey and Kylo Ren’s confrontation on Pasaana
– Chewie’s capture and “supposed” death scene
– The First Order’s capture of the Millennium Falcon
– Pryde and Hux’s discussion on Chewie, including the reveal that he’s alive
– All mentions of Chewie’s death during Rey, Finn, Poe, and C-3P0’s conversation on Ochi’s ship
– And yes, all “For Chewie” lines
– Pride and Hux informing Kylo that the scavenger is on Kajimi
– Rey sensing Chewie on the ship
– Zorii giving Poe the imperial medallion (due to the removal of the next scene)
– The entire episode on Kylo Ren’s ship, including the following four subplots:
---- Rey finding out she’s a Palpatine (Luke reveals this instead, and it’s stated that Rey found this out earlier, either in this movie, or possibly even in TLJ)
---- Chewie getting rescued
---- General Hux’s rebel spy reveal (and eventual death by Pryde)
---- The crew getting the Falcon back
– “I don’t know why they’re not following us, but I don’t trust it… Landing gear’s busted? How busted?”
– Scene with Palpatine reminding Kylo to kill Rey
– “Wh-wh-wh-what is that?”, “It’s the death star. It’s a bad place from an old war.”, “It’s gonna take us years to find what we’re looking for.”, “Oh, dear.”
– Scene where BB-8 and D-O play with Endor wildlife
– Scene where Finn and Jannah start getting romantic with each other
– Scene where Finn and Poe argue with each other
– “You can’t go back to her now. Like I can’t.”
– “The Dark Side is in our nature. Surrender to it.”
– “Leia knows what must be done, R2. To reach her son now will take all the strength she has left.”
– “REY!”
– Shot of Rey leaping higher than the wave
– “…Ben’s hand.”
– Palpatine making Pryde general and ordering him to destroy a planet
/ Moved Kylo Ren’s scene with Han Solo to after the destruction of Kajimi instead of before, fixing a flaw in the plot structure. Scene now begins after Lando’s line, “We had each other. That’s how we won.”
– “She’s going to Exegol.” Thus includes the cutaway to Rey flying over there, too.
– Poe’s big speech intercut to the montage of the resistance preparing for their flight to Exegol. (Doesn’t feel very Star Wars-y. Plus, Finn and Poe’s discussion before the montage gets the same point across just fine.)
– “How do you know?”, “A feeling.”
– “They’ve landed a troop carrier.”, “Jam the speeders.”, “We can’t, sir.”, “Why not?”, “They’re not using speeders.”
– “Not bad for one lesson.”, “You had a good teacher.”
– “You’re doing great, buddy. Tower’s up ahead!”
– “I never wanted you dead. I wanted you here…”
– “You will take the throne.”
– “…Our blood.”, “I haven’t come to lead the Sith. I’ve come to end them.”, “As a jedi?”, “Yes.”, “No. Your hatred, your anger. You want to kill me. That is what I want…”
– Audio: “…As all the Sith live in me…”
– “I’m staying with you.”
– “With your hatred, you will take my life, and you will ascend.”, “All you want is for me to hate, but I won’t. Not even you.”, “Weak. Like your parents.”, “My parents were strong. They saved me from you.”
/ Moved Kylo Ren’s return to just a little later for greater emotional impact
/ Same with Kylo running inside Palpatine’s lair
– Audio: “The ritual begins! She will strike me down and pledge herself as a Sith.”
– Audio: “She will draw her weapon! She will come to me! She will take her revenge… And with a stroke of her saber, the Sith are reborn!”
– “…Every one we knock out is a world saved!”
– “Where did they get all these fighter craft? They have no navy.”, “It’s not a navy, sir. It’s just people.”
– “As once I fell, so falls the last Skywalker!”
– “Do not fear that feeble attack my faithful. Nothing will stop the return of the Sith!”
– “Let your death be the final word in the story of rebellion!”
– “You are nothing! A scavenger girl is no match for the power in me! I am all the Sith!”, “And I… Am all the Jedi!”
– General Pryde’s reaction before he dies
– Rey and Kylo kissing
– Shots of Cloud City, Endor, and Jakku as the Final Order is destroyed
– A few shots of rebels hugging
– The lesbian kiss
– Chewie getting his medal
– “Where are you from, General?”, “The Gold system.”, “Well, what about you, kid?”, “Oh, I don’t know.”, “Well, let’s find out.”
– Reaction shot of Rey looking at the Skywalker dinner table
– Rey burying Luke and Leia’s lightsabers
– “Rey Skywalker.”

After giving it some more thought, I decided to remove all shots of the X-wing fighter pilots, including Poe’s, during the Starkiller base climax. This places the space battle in the background, and puts more of the focus on the ground level with Rey, Finn, and Han. Thus, the ending is even more simplified, and the Episode IV references are more like a homage instead of a ripoff.

Removing more shots of the pilots from the X-wing battle during the Starkiller base climax in the hope that it’ll reduce the Episode IV comparison effect some more.

nmxuci5970 said:

can I have a link to the work print for the first of the sequel trilogy eye painter edit as this looks the better way to suit its needs

PM sent!

Workprints uploaded. PM me if you’re interested.