Legit. I might then look to extend the amount of text I give each page, which will have an impact on the music. I’ll see how it goes when I do the first episode.
Right, I’ve been able to fix those issues highlighted. I’m finishing up the episode now (excluding the intros and outros) and am going to render it overnight (I’m in GMT) so I can upload in the morning.
Those video issues look endemic - if they’re every hundred then that’s hundreds to fix, but I don’t want to remake all the smoothed audio so I’ll see if I can just create a new video track with compliant sources. All of the sources, the project settings and the ruler are at 23.976, but I must have lost something by originally setting it up as 29fps. If I have to duplicate it all I will…!
The version I’ll upload will contain those frame issues but at least I’ll be able to gather any willing feedback while I work on fixing them at the same time.
Edit: No, I won’t do that, the video using the movie as the source is too bad when rendered. I’ll fix it first.
Thanks guys. It’s great to have some more experienced editors in this thread. I’ve only produced a handful of edits so far so it’s useful to have your technical knowledge here.
Sade, thanks for the kind words. Glad you think that intro works. I know exactly where those errors have come from and they should be easy enough to check and fix. They’re related to my earlier mistake so shouldn’t reoccur in future episodes.
I’ll check the black levels in the cut to tanks, though that bit is kind of necessary in order to construct this new dialogue. Originally Obi-Wan calls Anakin to talk about the plan, but in this whole scene I’m using the dialogue from Cat and Mouse where Bail calls Obi-Wan then Obi-Wan calls Anakin to get the same information across. But Anakin receiving the call in this scene doesn’t give me enough time so I had to pad it- first by reversing the shot so Anakin looks out the window, then at “something outside the window”, then back to his focus on the call. If the shot feels too short my only real option is to extend it instead, and let the dialogue take a little longer.
I’ll review the other issues and trims!
And everyone- I’ll think more about the crawl. Though I am going to release some of the Tartakovsky series as episode 0 of this show.
McFibb, we’re on the same page. I agree about tightening being an option. Right now, since a lot of voices here have swung me toward inclusion rather than exclusion, I’ve produced, let’s call it, the ‘loosest possible tight edit’. As in, I’ve made the necessary cuts for the story to work and to remove the most objectionable bits, but left the episode otherwise intact. Mainly due to cognitive load! Once I have the story and key cuts working, I can then look to trimming and polishing - but I thought that might be best to do incorporating viewer feedback. So I’ll absolutely consider yours and other trims, once this round is complete.
I also hate the PT droids, and have cut their voices as much as possible. You might have spotted a couple of ‘roger rogers’ removed from that clip already, and there’re more in the full episode. You do need to put up with their voices when they’re carrying important dialogue, but I’m getting rid of as much trash as possible. I couldn’t cut their 'aaaaah!'s as they fall from the speeder bikes due to the surrounding sound, though I think that ‘joke’ is OK.
I’m also thinking that I much prefer to release content as a dialogue with you guys to feed back. That’ll give us our best final quality for each episode. I’m starting to think that a weekly schedule might encourage me to rush episodes or not account for all the to-and-fro, so I think what I’d prefer to do is to simply release each one in (my) chronological order, as and when they’re done, but accounting for feedback, so I don’t have too many spinning plates at one time. I’ll build less of an audience this way, which may be detrimental for feedback, but I think I should give the work on each episode as long as it needs, for a better result.
That’s good, but it needs to fit to some standard structure, which I currently have as six lines of text, of which the first and last are shorter.
Since I have to do about fifty episodes, I figured the very first line might position the viewer chronologically, and then the second would give the state of the galaxy.
Your fourth line wouldn’t quite work, since at the start of the episode we believe it’s Obi-Wan who’s requested a padawan - Ahsoka is ostensibly his, not Skywalkers, and ‘officially’ it’s only Yoda that changed that plan (though it’s implied later that Obi-Wan was in on it).
Your second, third, and fifth lines are all good though!
Yeah, what I said was contradictory. What I meant was that I prefer only the application of the (neutral) force to be morally light or dark, but that healing, i.e. interfering with natural forces like life and death, is morally dark. Though Neerb’s explanation works nicely with that, because with sacrifice of one’s life force to heal, natural balance is preserved.
Anyway, time for all these weeks of planning and chat to be rewarded. Time for-
OPENING CRAWL:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1sA29YutBnVZ3ixdgJ-qUHhmy88i7fEAC/view?usp=sharing
Cast your peepers over that. That’s now the introduction to our Christophsis episode, essentially using scenes from Cat and Mouse and Hidden Enemy to make it so that the assault is a bit more of a trap, and to give us the bonus tension of Bail’s supply and relief efforts throughout the whole episode.
Yeah, Dr. Krogshöj, I did think about numbering/chaptering them, but as you say, I’m producing multiple cuts. I’d like people to be able to mix and match. And I’ve played around with the idea of naming by convention, but I think I’d rather stick closer to TCW and allow each episode to have a bit more flexibility. I might revisit this after I’ve produced all of the edits, for v2 (the wider release beyond these forums).
Sade, you’re right, but it looks like the movie’s slightly out. Either that or that 23.976 is really a slightly variable framerate and it’s just getting picked up at 24.001. I’ll always run at 23.976 though as it solves the issue if it comes up. And I always check as much as possible with test short renders, then full, for frame issues. I’m quite a meticulous frame editor so I generally catch them early.
I’ve never been a great fan of abilities being categorised either as darkside or lightside, I prefer to think that both dark and light are moral interpretations of the same thing.
So lightning is ‘darkside’ not because it’s on the darkside powers level up path, but because it directly harms and tortures people. Whereas a mind trick is ‘lightside’ because it’s an alternative path than violence.
Similarly, ‘preserving those we love from death’ is darkside insofar as it’s an act of fear of loss, an intervention against the natural order of things. When baby yoda used it, I put it down to his naivete, but when Rey did, it felt like an attempt to make force healing less inherently dark, which I didn’t like.
Yeah, I just tested both, and lower seems better. But in exploring that for future episodes, I was able to fix it for my existing episode, just by disabling resampling (and matching transitions to frames), which means I don’t have to duplicate everything. Woop!
I’ve made a mistake with my Christophsis episode and had it set for NumeralJoker’s source, even though I’d switched over to the originals. Changing the settings threw a lot out of whack so I’m having to reproduce the work. But nevermind! I’d worked out all of the cuts, so it shouldn’t take me too long. I’m very pleased with how it turned out, either way.
Unfortunately the two Christophsis episodes are still a slightly different FPS to the Christophsis parts of the movie, being 23.976fps and 24.001fps respectively, so there is a risk of slight visual issues in either half. Should be minor though.
For those in the know, what’s best to set my project at? The 23.976 or the 24.001? My guess is that compression is less messy that extrapolation, so going smaller seems wisest.
To which I’ll reply “That’s actually how it is in the original episode. SHRUG.”
I am looking forward to posting lists of nitpicks of your edits only to rediscover that most of them are inherent to the original episodes. I suppose I could just check the original episodes myself before posting…
Nahhh, it’s best to go in with as little memory as possible, so that you can best test this in isolation. I can always highlight if necessary! 😉
As a totally unrelated aside, I absolutely loved the Mandalorian this season, but I was a little disappointed that it didn’t maintain the zippy sound effects of the Darksaber or the way that it leaves its image slightly behind itself as it swings through the air. Which breaks physics, but was so cool. I thought it was a nice part of its identity in TCW.
I think I favour THE DEATH WATCH name over something that focuses on the actual core - Obi-Wan and Satine - because they do at least thrust the plot forward, and our theoretical fan who’s coming from the Mandalorian (who I think it’s valid to handhold a bit since there has been a massive spike in Clone Wars interest because of that show) would take interest in a name so Mandalorian.
And Knight of Kalee, I agree the mini spiders aren’t bad at all, they just eat up a lot of time to get us to the same point. They’re not additive, I think it’ll just help with the pacing.
As an aside, I’m calling it now - when I air the first Mandalore episode, people who know I’ve cut out the mini spiders might say “That cut doesn’t quite work - Merrik grabs the Duchess and gets out of the room, passing Obi-Wan (who could have easily grabbed him), then we cut to Obi-Wan in the corridor having completely lost them even though he was right next to them”. To which I’ll reply “That’s actually how it is in the original episode. SHRUG.”
Cheers ADR14NAT1ON! Never worry about being ‘only’ critical - it’s all valuable stuff! I really appreciate the feedback - and McFibb picking up some further exploration of the music - because the more brains we can pass this all through the better.
On your point about the intro theme not always matching the episode, I think that’s something that’ll quickly be mitigated by people getting used to it - whatever we settle on. I remember when I first heard the Clone Wars theme, the kind of broken version of the usual Star Wars theme, and finding it really jarring. I think that whatever we settle on, people will quickly get used to it, and it’s right that it encapsulate the spirit of the show if not the episode. And I think all we’re really doing is trying to hone in on the musical identity of the end of the Clone Wars (a lovely emotional epic) as opposed to the start (a bombastic anthology).
I actually think you’re right about my own credit. In most of the edits I’ve seen the faneditor puts themself early, which is fine since you’re usually watching a single movie which you sought out because it’s been edited. But in this case since we’re taking a few seconds to look at it over a piece of art, I think there’s a risk that people overthink my influence - and once per episode that could add up. So I think I’ll put myself last of the ‘featured’ credits, or perhaps after the original editor, if that’s in there. I think since this has been so collaborative that I must also include a regular (non-background-image) slide featuring as many of the participants in this thread as possible.
Well, that was a wasted 24h. The rendering of a new 8-bit source using NumeralJoker’s 10-bit source was still unpalatable to my PC for whatever reason. Even playing it through VLC and other media players had problems. So I’ll stick with the original sources for now. Anyway, since that means I can reboot my editing software now, that means I’m back on to editing. I should have a workprint for the Christophsis episode out within a couple of days.
Well sheeeeeit. You’re right that it’s too late, so that’ll have to be. There’ll always be things like that to find. All the same, good to point it out.
Somehow, Coruscant returned.
I agree too. And don’t worry- especially early on, we don’t get more than one episode without Ahsoka.
Now on to Cloak/Lair, which as you say is weaker.
With this pairing, the intro would focus on how Anakin’s essentially dumped Ahsoka on Luminara for a bit, whilst she’s escorting Gunray.
The Cloak of Darkness is an OK episode. The Ahsoka stuff is good - Luminara/Ahsoka makes a good pairing because we see that Ahsoka’s boldness is not necessarily a weakness - and the rest is fine, though I’ll trim some of Gunray and the goofy stick droid thing, plus the scene of Ventress planting bombs (mainly because it just looks very dull). Unfortunately the episode is cut in quite a boring way, so it doesn’t have much dynamism to it.
But Lair of Grievous… It’s just not that good. I think the only way it can stay is if you absolutely whip through it. The good bits are the hints that Grievous is monstrous, and the final beat where Yoda acknowledges that there’s a risk that the war may turn the Jedi from peacekeepers into warriors. Grievous is a real weakness though - yes he gets a bit of layering here, but he gets an easy beat and the tension between him and Dooku only really serves to show that even Dooku thinks he’s a crap villain. For there to be any tension in the episode it has to be Grievous’ plan, I think, and he’s laying in wait.
So you’d essentially have Fisto arrive on the planet, straight up to the chair (unopposed) and reveal the Gunray hologram, have the folk explore his lair, then skip right to him coming out of his main room (implicitly doing this deliberately to draw Kit Fisto away), then killing Nadar. Instead of fighting Grievous, I’d then just have Fisto flee, and report back to the order.
There is a nice scene in Shadow Warrior which I thought about including here, where Dooku and Sidious talk about Grievous. But the only workable Sidious dialogue is “This turn of events is unfortunate. General Grievous is a critical part of my plan for the Clone Wars. You must lure [Skywalker] into a trap”. And it’s set on Naboo, with some lovely establishing shots, but I think that raises way too many questions.
My editor has crashed, but since it’s still rendering my 8-bit Christophsis source I don’t want to force a restart, so I’m looking at some upcoming edits. My episode two is made from the first two Mandalore episodes.
This is a really strong arc, but I wanted to trim the goofier elements, notably Obi-Wan getting put on a Bond villain’s production line OF DEATH, and the small spider things. Instead the story plays out as:
This episode doesn’t feature Ahsoka, and this early in the show I’m considering explaining it away in the crawl. There’re plenty of times later when people are off doing their own thing, but in this case, I think people will expect to know why, so I think “Anakin’s escorting Ahsoka elsewhere” is important for the opening. Either that, or this is our episode one?! That’d fit a bit more tightly with the cold open of Death Watch commandos finding the Maul bros, then we could introduce Ahsoka in episode two - though this episode’s quite Obi-Wan focused so isn’t an ideal opening.
I was thinking of calling this episode either THE DEATH WATCH or TERROR(ISM?) ON MANDALORE. I could call it DUCHESS OF MANDALORE, since Satine is the focus, but my DoM wouldn’t include the actual Duchess of Mandalore episode, which’ll come a little later. But by calling it THE DEATH WATCH, they’re our key element to continue to follow throughout the show, which is sensible.
Work continues on the Christophsis episode. Using now the original sources, I’ve produced the rough cut from the best elements of the three episodes, and it flows nicely. It runs to about 30 minutes. Plot is now:
I think I’m just going to call this THE NEW PADAWAN, unless anyone can think of anything better. CRISIS ON CHRISTOPHSIS is a bit too cheeky. THE SIEGE OF CHRISTOPHSIS is cool but takes a little weight off the later outer rim sieges, and I think it’s best to focus on the characters for this one. I don’t want to highlight Ventress since she’s a minor part, so I wouldn’t go with something like APPRENTICES or PADAWAN AND ASSASSIN.
There’s nothing released yet buddy, but stay tuned. I’ve put the current status right at the top of the OP so it’s easy to check, and will update the title as new episodes are released.
Oops, my bad! I will definitely stay tuned.
BTW, I have just posted my own episode grouping/order in another thread that you might find of note.
Nice, thanks for the share. I always like to see others’ versions of these, because it helps me to see where the community’s focus is.
There’s nothing released yet buddy, but stay tuned. I’ve put the current status right at the top of the OP so it’s easy to check, and will update the title as new episodes are released.
Looks like an Intel I5-6600K @ 3.50GHz, with 16GB RAM.
It’s still only at 54% though, which is a pain. I don’t want to have to spend 24 hours pre-processing each of 50 episodes - that makes a weekly release far more unlikely. I think I’ll stick with the original sources, without grading. To be fair, the show always looked great when it looked great, and most of the episodes that looked like ass have been excised for exactly that reason. I think for the weekly release (which is very much our pilot), original should be absolutely fine. I’ll consider grading or alternate sources - that’s all easier to do after final cut, which should follow community feedback anyway.