DuracellEnergizer

Ready and willing to kill the women and children first, sir!

That's easy to explain -- PT/TCW Anakin and OT Vader exist in different universes. ;-)

The Rand Corporation, in conjunction with the saucer people -- under the supervision of the reverse vampires -- are forcing our parents to go to bed early in a fiendish plot to eliminate the meal of dinner.

We’re through the looking glass, here, people.

darklordoftech said:

DuracellEnergizer said said:

I've come to see Palpatine as a complete nihilist who believes that that the dark side is an all-consuming chaos which will eventually destroy everything in existence.

Are you implying that Palpatine wants to destroy everything in existence? If so, why does he want to destroy everything in existence?

No. I see Palpatine as someone who is so afraid of annihilation that he is willing to do the one thing he believes can save him from it -- embracing the dark side so fully that he eventually merges with the dark side itself, preserving himself through it. Everything else in existence -- the Jedi, the Sith, the Empire, the Rebellion,  etc. -- are either tools to be used in his quest for ascension or obstacles to removed from his path. 

This is God!

NeverarGreat said:

As for the Force, I suspect that it may be terminology used only by Jedi and Sith, and other religious orders have other names for this mystical energy field. Heck, if I was part of the Sith order, I would come up with some other name for it than "The Dark Side of the Force". What a mouthful, as well as implying that it is evil! The Emperor could simply be using that language on Luke because that's what the Jedi call it, and using the Sith names for things would just get confusing.

I've come to see Palpatine as a complete nihilist who believes that that the dark side is an all-consuming chaos which will eventually destroy everything in existence. In that context, I have no problem with Palpatine using such a term.

Of course, I don't recognize Palpatine as a Sith, either, so ...

Mavericks is of the opinion that "Sith" automatically equals "darksider", nuances in beliefs, traditions, philosophies, etc. be damned.

Of course, I completely disagree with him/her.

I fail to see how writing fanfiction which one never makes money off of constitutes as piracy.

Stupid government.

INT. NYAX/OBI-WAN, ANAKIN, & SIRI'S CELL

Ben, Nik, and Siri all lie prone within their cell, fast asleep.

ZOOM IN

On Obi-Wan's sleeping face.

FADE TO

Obi-Wan standing out in the middle of the Tatooine desert, completely naked save for a simple loincloth hanging down over his privates. Though the suns are low in a dark sky -- indicating that the time of day is twilight -- the landscape is brightly lit as if under a midday's full suns.

Standing before Obi-Wan -- towering over a large, elaborate altar wrought out of platinum and gold -- is a tall, gnarled tree, it's branches ablaze with green flame.

OBI-WAN: (gets down on his knees) What is thy bidding, my master?

BLAZING TREE: If train you not the boy, another will he turn to for guidance.

As a shadow falls over him from behind, Ben turns to look over his shoulder. Standing there, clad in the armour and robes of a Mandalorian Knight, is Anakin Skywalker. His teeth needle-sharp points in his mouth, his eyes a pair of burning red coals in his face, he carries a bloodstained sword of Mandalorian iron aloft in his hands.

Before Ben can act, Anakin lops his head off with a single stroke.

CUT TO

Obi-Wan starting awake in the cell as the cell door is unlocked and opened, allowing a pair of Mandalorian Knights with four heavily-armed 'droid escorts to step inside. While Siri immediately awakens as these sinister figures enter the cell, Nik remains sound asleep.

MANDALORIAN #9: (to Mandalorian #10) Grab the boy.

The Mandalorian obeys his comrade and grabs hold of Anakin, violently pulling him awake.

ANAKIN: Hey! What --?

Leaping to his feet, Ben shoves the Mandalorian back away from the boy and into his comrade, toppling them both over. With Siri awake and by his side, they turn in unison toward the four 'droids.

Lunging at one of the 'droids, Ben wrenches the large blaster out of its hands and, taking aim, fires. The resulting bolt strikes the 'droid, but to absolutely no effect. Looking down at the weapon, Ben sees that it is set on "stun" with no visible dials or switches available to change it to a heavier setting.

Caught off guard, the Jedi knights fail to get out of the way as the other 'droids level their blasters and fire, bringing them both down with incredibly potent stun-bolts.

Regaining their wits, the two Mandalorians climb back to their feet. Walking over to Obi-Wan, Mandalorian #9 kicks the unconscious Jedi once in the gut.

MANDALORIAN #9: Forget the kid. Let's bring this trash to the doctor instead.

INT. NYAX/TORTURE CHAMBER

The two Mandalorian Knights drag Obi-Wan into the torture chamber, the four armed 'droids following behind, and carry the unconscious Jedi over to the dungeon master, who is currently engaged in injecting a series of nasty-looking chemicals into an emaciated Hutt strapped down onto a table.

DUNGEON MASTER: (scolding) You knocked him out.

MANDALORIAN #10: You expected him to come with open arms and kisses?

DUNGEON MASTER: (sighs) My stimulants don't come cheap, you know. In the future, try to bring captives to me in a conscious state, will you please?

Reaching over to his tray full of hypo-syringes containing various different coloured fluids, the dungeon master picks up one containing a dirty yellow liquid. Grabbing hold of Ben's left arm, he pulls it out and jabs the needle into the Jedi's wrist, injecting the entire contents of the syringe into his bloodstream.

In moments Obi-Wan comes fully awake, screaming in agony.

DUNGEON MASTER: Welcome back to the land of the living, Master Jedi. Don't worry about the pain -- it'll pass momentarily.

After about a minute, the burning pain passing through Obi-Wan's veins begins to subside, and the screaming comes to an end.

DUNGEON MASTER: (ecstatic) It has been some time since I've worked on a bonafide Jedi.

Reaching back to his tray, the Mandalorian dungeon master picks up a hypo filled with a blue-black liquid.

DUNGEON MASTER: (cont'd) This'll be such a pleasure!

Grabbing Ben by the chin with his free hand, the dungeon master then brings forth the syringe with the other. Planting the tip of the needle directly against Obi-Wan's forehead, he pushes it through his skull and into his brain, injecting the chemicals directly into his cerebral cortex.

As the Jedi's eyes roll up into his head and his muscles begin to involuntarily shudder, the Mandalorians holding him drag him over to the coffin-like encasement. Opening it, they throw Ben inside and then seal it shut, closing him up in complete darkness and silence.

EXT. DARK WORLD (DREAMSCAPE)

Blue-white fog begins to billow up within a completely empty black void, and Obi-Wan comes running through it in slow motion. Terror etched on his face, he keeps turning to look behind him at something chasing after him.

Without warning, the ground goes out from under him, and the Jedi falls through the thick fog, disappearing from sight.

INT. TUNNEL WORLD (DREAMSCAPE)

Obi-Wan falls through a carved rock tunnel leading into the earth deep below. As he plummets, several nightmarish creatures -- flickering balls of sparking light, skeletal horses, skulltulas, and batwinged skulls -- come flying out of the darkness to assail him, swirling about him, wailing and cackling.

CUT TO

Bright electricity coursing over a blue background.

CUT TO

An inverted-colour shot of Obi-Wan reaching the end of the tunnel, breaking through a thick cover of cobweb and falling past it.

EXT. SEA WORLD - TWILIGHT (DREAMSCAPE)

Ben breaks through the dark water of an endless sea, gasping and thrashing about as he struggles to draw air into his lungs. Once he has caught his breath, he begins to swim through the blue-black water, soon disappearing into the horizon in the distance.

Suddenly, the seascape shatters like a pane of glass, dropping away in shards to reveal a close-up shot of a blazing orange sun beyond.

FADE TO

Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon Jinn standing within the labyrinthine interior of the ruins of an ancient fortress. Clad in the armour of the ancient Jedi Knights, they wield swords of emerald and azure fire, respectively.

Standing before them, clad in a red-and-black suit of biomechanical armour, is the dark warrior, a wicked crown of long horns encircling his head and a quarterstaff of ruby-red fire blazing in his hands.

Bringing their weapons to bear, the two Jedi attack the dark warrior, meeting his flaming red staff with their swords of blue and green fire. As one, the three combatants make their way up the labyrinthine interior of the ruins, moving with the grace of dancers in a cosmic ballet as lightning and thunder strikes through the open holes of the ruins, lighting the interior up with intense sound and dazzling illumination.

As the three warriors near the apex of the ruined fortress, the ground around Obi-Wan's feet suddenly turns to liquid tar, and he finds himself unable to move forward with any haste. As he struggles to move through the syrupy black mess, Qui-Gon and the dark warrior move on ahead in their duel, leaving him behind.

With immense effort, Ben manages to walk through the tar and climb the rest of the distance to the top of the ruins. As he arrives, he finds himself too late to offer the apprentice any aid; having gained the advantage in their duel, the dark warrior runs Qui-Gon through with his quarterstaff, killing him.

FLASH TO

Obi-Wan and the dark warrior suddenly engaged in a fierce duel, sword of green flame clashing against staff of red fire. They are like two perfect mirror images of one another, two different sides of one whole coin.

The duel reaches its crescendo, and Ben finds himself faltering against the zabrak warrior. As he loses his footing, the darksider takes his advantage and knocks the Jedi off the top of the ruins. With his reflexes at his command, Ben saves himself by grabbing hold of a stone outcropping, but he loses his flaming sword in the process; looking down, he watches as the vibrant emerald blade disappears in the black void below.

Standing over the Jedi, the dark warrior throws his hands up into the air, releasing a roar of final victory. Looking down at the helpless Jedi, he grins -- bearing needle-like teeth -- then rears his ruby quarterstaff back for the killing blow.

Without a moment's hesitation, Obi-Wan flies up through the air, passing over the dark side warrior, and lands behind him. Bringing forth his hand, Qui-Gon's sword of azure fire materializes in his hand. As the dark warrior turns to face him, Obi-Wan lashes out with the blue sword, slashing the zabrak through the shoulder.

His face growing slack, the dark warrior's eyes glaze over and he falls over the side. Looking over, Obi-Wan watches as red lightning courses out of the zabrak's wound as he plummets into the darkness.

CUT TO

Inverted-colour electricity coursing over an orange background.

CUT TO

Obi-Wan running his hands down his face as tears of blood stream down his cheeks from bloodshot eyes.

CUT TO

The decayed head of a GREEN, GNOME-LIKE CREATURE WITH LONG, TAPERED EARS rising up out of a black void. As it reaches the camera, its mouth opens, releasing a hideous shriek as it swallows everything up.

FLASH TO

Ben lying outside the open coffin-like encasement in the Nyax's torture chamber. Traumatized by the hallucinatory experience he just witnessed, he can do nothing but tremble uncontrollably, his eyes frozen open in stark terror.

Going back over the early parts of the script, I realized that too little about Zull's character is revealed during the time between her abduction and "The Infamous Scene" to make her following descent into darkness all that profound, so I decided to add a new scene which reveals more backstory on her people and the spiritual beliefs she held to prior to her fall.

The new scene can be found between the scene where Ben meets Beru and the scene where Ben has his first argument with Owen.

http://originaltrilogy.com/forum/topic.cfm/Star-Wars-The-New-Dawn-The-First-Episode-in-DuracellEnergizers-New-PT-Rewrite/post/691422/#TopicPost691422

Like Ric_2 said, I'm trying to go no higher than PG-13 with my script. In my mind's eye, most of the heavy violence -- like in that last scene -- is implied rather than shown (like in Psycho, for example). 

I hate Chris Crocker.

Hmm ... that gives me an idea! How about a Chris Crocker Disappreciation Thread?

Tobar said:

Having never heard about the Force, wouldn't that seem to suggest he hadn't even heard of Jedi before?

Not necessarily. After all, lots of people in the real world know about plenty of religions without having any real/accurate knowledge of what those religions actually teach.

Doesn't Georgey know that two-dimensional (ring-shaped) shockwaves can't happen in space?

I never thought pre-Vader Anakin was ever famous before the PT rolled around. I figured he was just an average Jedi who fought in the Clone Wars but never did anything to really distinguish himself/place himself under the spotlight.

EXT. DANIA VII - TRAINING ARENA - DAY

The training arena lies at the heart of an enormous amphitheatre, wide-open to the deep emerald sky of the planet Dania VII. The base of the amphitheatre serves as the main training centre for the recruits, while the outlying rings have been converted into various obstacle courses, each with varying levels of difficulty. Standing at regular intervals along the perimetre of the outermost ring of the amphitheatre are several armed Death Watchmen, each on alert for any captive lucky enough to get through the obstacle courses and make a break for freedom.

Entering the centre of the amphitheatre through a tunnel coming up from underground, Zull steps out into the intense light from Dania VII's three primary-coloured suns. Grimacing, she averts her gaze, shielding her eyes with her hand and focusing her vision on the ground at the centre of the arena, and walks forward, the two dozen other recruits of her regiment following in after her. Waiting for them is a Mandalorian drill sergeant.

DRILL SERGEANT: Hurry up and take your places.

The slave recruits file in up to the Mandalorian, organizing into two neat columns of a dozen each before him. As each regiment is made up of recruits sorted by their proficiency in the Force, all the members of this regiment stand on roughly equal footing with one another.

DRILL SERGEANT: You'll be practicing swordplay techniques today. (pulls a pair of swords out from scabbards strapped to his sides) Each of you pair up with a partner.

Obeying the Mandalorian, each member of the regiment pairs up with a partner. Zull finds herself paired up with Tilos Metiya, a ruggedly handsome human male with dark blond hair and steel gray eyes.

TILOS METIYA: (winks at Zull) I promise not to rough you up too much, Zullie.

Zull refuses to respond, her face grave.

One-by-one, each pair moves to the centre of the arena, taking turns sparring while the Mandalorian stands nearby, giving them advice each and every time they slip up.

Eventually, it is Zull and Metiya's turn.

TILOS METIYA: (slaps Zull on the rear) We're up, Zullie.

Her eyes flaring with sudden anger, Zull rears back her hand and throws it out, her fingers twisted into claws, eagre to slice ribbons of flesh off his face. Effortlessly, the human male catches her wrist before she can make contact.

TILOS METIYA: (grins) Save it for the show, Zullie baby, okay?

Violently wrenching her arm out of his grip, Zull speed-walks up to the Mandalorian sergeant, taking one of the two proffered swords eagrely. Metiya, for his part, nonchalantly walks up to the sergeant, absentmindedly accepting the remaining sword.

DRILL SERGEANT: Beg --

Before the Mandalorian sergeant can finish his proclamation, Zull attacks, bringing her sword down on Metiya with a ferocious strike. Barely able to register the attack in time, the human sloppily blocks the blow and is thrown off-kilter. Unwilling to give Metiya any opportunity to catch his bearings, Zull dives in for another attack.

Empowered by her rage and the dark side of the Force, Zull delivers unrelenting blow upon unrelenting blow Metiya's way, giving him no opportunity to go on the offensive, forcing him to use his sword merely as a shield. The human feebly tries to use the Force to repel her attacks, but she shrugs the counterattacks off, using the Force herself to deliver blow upon bone-splintering blow to his face, torso, and groin.

Eventually, Zull brings the outmatched battle to an end. Slashing through the tendons of his sword hand, she disarms him, and with a Force-assisted kick, she drives him off his feet to his back on the ground.

DRILL SERGEANT: (walks up to Zull) Flawless victory, Zull. Next time, however --

The fallen priestess gives the sergeant no time to finish his speech. Teeth bared like a beast driven to an unquenchable rage, she rears back her sword and, with a savage howl, attacks Tilos Metiya, who lies defenseless on the ground trying to staunch the flow of blood running out from his slashed wrist.

Reaching Metiya, the near-human woman brings her sword down on him, cleaving him in twain. Her rage unsatisfied, she pulls the sword out and swings down again.

Each time she chops into the dead flesh of her slain opponent, she pulls the sword out to deliver another blow, again-and-again-and-again until Mandalorian guards are finally sent to restrain and pull her away.

darth_ender said:

Yeah, that's what I thought this thread would devolve into.

 Entropy works overtime on OT.com ;-)

*looks up "antipodean"*

Yes.

TIMELINE-N

PODD

13,000,000,000 BCE

DISTINGUISHING CHARACTERISTICS

A reality where everything is make up of negatively-charged antimatter and light operates on inverted wavelengths.

FINAL NOTES

I’ve got nothin’. shrug

TIMELINE-M

PODD

13,000,000,000 BCE

DISTINGUISHING CHARACTERISTICS

A universe that is literally the mirror image of our own; left is right, right is left, and everyone speaks backward.

FINAL NOTES

.heM

sidney poitier chicken

I wonder if Dmian will ever reappear.

I think Dolores O'Riordan has replaced Alanis Morissette as my favourite female singer.

Leonardo said:

ray_afraid said:

For Ep.7, people will be too busy tweeing "OH-M-GEE! The Movee is startin! Gonna b tha best eva!! YOLO! LMFAO!!" to even know what the opening logos look like.

 This, a thousand times this. I don't even go to the movie theather anymore (actually you could count the times I've been on a couple of hands - let's include toes, tops) but from what I'm told people do anything but watch the screen now. People have always slept, and we all know what goes on in the last row, where all you can hear is slug sounds, but apparently now the whole place is lit up with the glow of smartphones and resounds with loud chatter and babble.

So just put on a slideshow accompanied by a radio play. It'll cost less and not many people will notice.

The 21st century never fails to reinforce my moderate Neo-Luddism.

I apologize to Heilemann for whatever it was I did/said that inspired him to put me on ignore.