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darthrush said:

Might be an unpopular opinion, but I don’t think these edits are near the quality of other options avaible.

I think your forgetting all those other people who don’t prefer drastic changes. Remeber that a large majority of people loved TFA even with its rehashed moments. It’s all about familiarity. Most people want some thing that is familiar, but new. Drastically changing narratives can have a worse impact on many viewers.

Here’s what I did to that scene. See the 3:50 mark. Simply took it out and let her face do the acting.

https://vimeo.com/171723740
password: fanedit.org

^when she’s talking to Finn when she first meets him.

To Han in the same scene you are talking about, “you still drive me crazy”

I believe she also says you when talking to Han right before Ren’s interrogation of Rey.

^Sounds like we have very similar ideas. I’d be interested in seeing your draft. What are your extensive changes to Rey’s vision? What is the source of your Hux speech queue? I used some music from The Force Unleashed. I thought I had all the available Force Awakens queues. I’m unaware of an alternate for Hux’s speech.

Watched your ending celebration edit on vimeo and have some feedback for you. The audio editing was pretty abrupt to my ears. I’d recommend trying to use the soundtrack and start the music later with a fade in. You’ll need to produce your own crowd noise effects, but it will sound better. Also, I thought I saw part of another scene as the wipe transition happened.

Hey Kiizer, they are all online on fanedit.info when I checked last week.

This thread be 😉

To be honest, you posted during quite possibly the busiest time of year, and your posts are pretty lengthy. It’s on my read list, but I don’t have time right now *<:)
runs off after children

^…^ said:

• find the better crawl to use, or someone who would like to make one

Might I suggest using Jackpumpkinhead’s revisited crawl creator.

You could insert a hyperspace effect and have it end on Jyn waking up in the cell as if it was a dream.

The Ritty said:
Why do people insist on just removing all the things they didn’t like.

Um, I’ve watched part of your edits and you’ve done the same thing…

The Ritty said:
Now, I haven’t seen this cut cuz I won’t watch anyone else’s but mine…

This is a very sad statement. Collaboration brings about innovation and fosters excellence. It also opens up closed minds to new perceptions and directions. I’d recommend learning from these amazing editors by watching and learning from them. Your own personal edits will improve if you do.

I’m interested in your heavily edited, take out the nonsense versions 😃

What formats, file sizes, aspect ratios are these in?

https://postimage.org
Photbucket.com or some other image uploading site for uploading

Then type

Most will be interested in the video examples I would think.

No offense Spuf, but your post isn’t very clear and you have no examples. I’m assuming most people are fine with and waiting for Adywan’s version.

Insert a crawl, then have the rewind sound as it begins to come in and backtrack the crawl and start the film as it does in the original version.

Play Giacchino’s Star Trek theme when the Rouge one title card comes up.

Play Anakin’s “I hate sand” as the two are engulfed in the death star aftermath on the beach.

You could change the “along time ago…” card to say, “a ridiculously long time ago in a ridiculous galaxy ridiculously far far away…seriously…”

When Vader is watching the Tantive fly away, insert his “Nooooooo!” from ROTS or the no from ROTJ

Well at least I used I believe on that post. I think it’s time for me to go hibernate for awhile 😃

They are online. I’ll PM you

Have you PM’d TM2YC? He’d let you know if they were available still. Also, TV’s Frink is an excellent source for edits. Check his request thread. He’s listed all of the edits in page one that he has I believe.

I may have them. I’ll check through my drive.

^Nice Hal

I like how it ends with “the last Jedi…”

Forgot to mention about the last paragraph of the crawl:
seek should be seeks

General Leia Organa leads a determined RESISTANCE, sending a pilot to a remote planet to retrieve vital information that could aid their cause. Information the First Order seek seeks out for themselves…

I had a 2 hour delay from school this morning so I watched through part of your edit. Here’s some feedback

First off, the colors are fantastic and the quality of your file is superb. I’d love to know your render settings.
The following is a critique of the material, not of you personally. I’ll admit that I’m kind of living through your edit as I’m not able to work on mine at this time.

0:09:03 - The regrading feels really off here. I’m assuming you were going for twilight here. This is difficult as the previous frames were extremely dark and during night.
0:09:57 - Great removal of Phasma
0:12:40 - Not sure why Unkar’s lines were removed. This scene feels odd now and I would suggest removing Unkar completely, but I see you have plans to change his lines.
0:17:35 - I like the idea of dubbing Unkar. This makes him more of a Jabba character. I’d like to hear some more inflection in his voice though, ala Jabba.
0:18:40 - Nice removal of ridiculous Finn lines
0:20:26 - Cut to bridge after explosions is a little rough audio wise
0:20:38 - cut to ventral cannons seems off, recommend cutting the cannons. We know they are there, do we need to see them?
0:20:19 - audio bleed over is a bit too long to my ears (by product of not having Phasma scene?)
I may have missed it, but when does Finn tell Poe his name in your edit? I know it’s implied, but it won’t make sense that he knows his name later on
0:22:26 - cut feels a little choppy
0:22:30 - nitpicky but I liked Ren’s lines about the clone army, it was kind of a dig on the prequels
0:33:02 - this transition is pretty jarring. There isn’t enough time for her to get in the hole. I’d recommend reworking this scene.
Rathtar sequence feels off audibly and visually, imho
0:40:07 - Transition to lightspeed sequence feels rushed. (are all of Snoke’s scenes saved for the end?)
0:46:45 - russian music? Then back to original music? Super jarring
0:48:08 - Audio transition is pretty abrupt here and throughout the entire Snoke scene. We need more narrative here. Who is the tall terrible CGI man? Maz is the one that explains I’m not a fan of this part
0:52:05 - This is a really odd transition, and it fades out.
0:53:47 - Not sure why we are going back to Ren in less than 5 minutes. Not sure why he stands up and continues to talk to the mask while he’s supposedly walking away offscreen?
0:56:10 - just curious about your audio decisions during the force vision
0:57:41 - Maz’s cut line of “but” is kind of needed to make the dialogue flow
1:00:00 - Music is really odd here, builds up then goes away, Finn’s line isn’t clear. Hux’s speech feels flat without a climax
Takodana just feels choppy. (was the stormtrooper retreat back into the carrier a deleted scene?)
So, is the reveal from Leia?

We share a lot of similar ideas cut wise. You are perhaps more kind to the character dialogue than I am at times. There are many audio transitions that feel abrupt and some of the narrative is unclear and choppy at times. Most of the choppiness occurred at Takodana and beyond. I found it pretty hard to follow from that point forward. I’m also not a fan of the rearranged Snoke and StarKiller base scenes. ANH had the DS fire early on to establish its threat and ability. I feel that we need that in this movie as well. To have them attack before we know why is a little hard for the viewer. I love the trailer music, but it just doesn’t fit here for me. Also, the slowed down scenes are choppy due to their altered frame rate.

Great first draft. Looking forward to continuing efforts 😃

Hello Liambrazier,

I watched through your 15 minute preview on dropbox and have some feedback.

I really like you disclaimer card 😃

I have some suggestions for the crawl

Here’s the text from your current v1.1

The legacy of the Jedi has almost faded into myth. Continuing oppression in the common systems have crushed any thoughts of lasting hope for the galaxy.

A new FIRST ORDER have arisen from the ashes of the Empire. They now ready a giant weapon to finally wipe out the dissidents within the New Republic.

General Leia Organa leads a determined RESISTANCE, sending a pilot to a remote planet to retrieve vital information that could aid their cause. Information the First Order seeks out for themselves…

Here are some suggestions in italics

The legacy of the Jedi has has almost faded begun to fade into myth. Continuing oppression in the common systems have has crushed any thoughts of lasting hope for the galaxy.

A new FIRST ORDER have has arisen from the ashes of the Empire. They now ready a giant weapon to finally wipe out the dissidents of the galaxy, the New Republic.

General Leia Organa leads a determined RESISTANCE, sending a pilot to a remote planet to retrieve vital information that could aid their cause. Information the First Order seeks out for themselves…

These suggestions attempt to keep your original vision of the crawl while addressing somethings that either don’t sound Star Wars-y (imho) or are confusing to the reader.

(Grammar Nazi alert)
I know that the First Order implies many, but you began the sentence with A so it should be singular. It’s similar to the idea of Europeans are vs Europe is. Here it mirrors the latter example.
A similar instance occurs in the first paragraph. Continuing oppression has vs continuing oppressions have. The “in the common systems” is the where this occurs, so the has doesn’t link to it.

I like the hook of your first sentence. It does however make me question one of the premises of TFA. Does the whole galaxy believe the Jedi are a myth? I can understand Jakku and the rest of the outer rim, but 30 years is an extremely short amount of time. Not an issue so much with your crawl, but it is an interesting thought to consider. Your line echoes Rey’s later line “I thought he was a myth”, but I can’t believe the entire galaxy feels that way. Especially after Luke supposedly lead a galaxy wide Jedi search and was most likely linked to the formation of the New Republic.

One last nitpick. The crawl seems to fade out prematurely as it approaches the upper area of the screen. I know that JJ did this in TFA but I believe that was an error on his part.

Did you use JackPumpkinHead’s crawl creator?
I do like how your crawl is inferential rather than explicit. It lets the story tell itself rather than telling us completely what is going on.
Anyway, I like where your crawl is headed, Up Up and Away! 😉

I’ll download the whole preview and give further feedback asap.

Update

Yesterday my computer died. The drive is fine, looks like a board surge. Shopping around to see if I can replace it or just upgrade (don’t really have funds for that right now). I’ve got about 24 weeks left in my Masters, so I may just wait until it’s done. I’ll update as soon as progress begins again. Thanks for you support and patience.