The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (Released) — Page 673

Jar Jar Bricks said:

Hal 9000 said:

Changed Rey’s line to Leia as she turns over the lightsaber from “your brother’s saber” to “your family’s saber” to begin to plant a seed about eventually identifying herself with the Skywalker family (AI voice provided by Jar Jar Bricks)

In a callback to a line modified earlier, when Leia hands Leia the saber before she departs the base, she tells Rey, “You are family” (AI line provided by Jar Jar Bricks)

I had nothing to do with these two. RL did both of these 😉

Did not mind at all but thanks for the credit Jar Jar!

Also - so you don’t forget, Hal - remember to fix that sound overlap before Rey starts to heal Ben 😃

It’s frustratingly close at this point (please note I wasn’t able to fully remove her original first line in the background):
https://youtu.be/wXYFxgIqVdE?si=6_wRdXaOJ-b0hkwM

I think after a different generation of the first line we should be there. But here are the two raw lines:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/13dL8se4tcS2V0sKm5yIhWFxv4fMiMw1B/view?usp=sharing
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1OgtDE-QQTyKL5fGzrVyBfj6gzcR8TB4C/view?usp=sharing

I had a go at the Finn and Jannah scene.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1JVfNWEHbAeUcyaNeV9w66N-iYoT2XSiJ

Awesome! Thanks for that.

Also, I take back what I said in my PM, RL. I think Finn’s line about the Resistance being where the stormtroopers belong is an excellent callback to TLJ, and it doesn’t take away from his talk about the Force itself whatsoever.

I do think that the first test is more seamless, though. “And you” would be a perfect line, but it doesn’t sound right.

I love that touch about Finn being an inspiration. However, she says “It wasn’t a decision, but like an instinct”. But her saying that Finn inspired them very clearly makes their mutiny a conscious decision, otherwise why mention it? I think it has the risk of becoming muddles between conscious decision and unconscious instinct.

I think you have to at least keep the line about the stormtroopers one by one deciding not to do it because that’s where the whole instinctual Force aspect comes into place.

RogueLeader said:

I had a go at the Finn and Jannah scene.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1JVfNWEHbAeUcyaNeV9w66N-iYoT2XSiJ

Fuck, I could cry that’s perfect.

krlozdac said:

I love that touch about Finn being an inspiration. However, she says “It wasn’t a decision, but like an instinct”. But her saying that Finn inspired them very clearly makes their mutiny a conscious decision, otherwise why mention it? I think it has the risk of becoming muddles between conscious decision and unconscious instinct.

I had this same thought when I was putting all this together. But I think the reason she calls it an instinct is because they did it completely in unison. As in, there were absolutely zero doubts on what they should do.

Whereas what you’re describing is more of a one-by-one laying down of the arms, which definitely is more of a decision.

Thanks for the feedback everyone! Haha, and thanks Jar Jar! Honestly I just spend way too much time thinking about this stuff.

The “And you” version I just slapped together quickly because the reading came to me. I’m curious if people would prefer that line reading if I nailed it down, or like the v1 line reading. Again, not based on quality but just the line alone.

And that’s a good point krlozdac, but my train of thought was like Jar Jar’s. Finn’s story planted the seed. But, I don’t think they ever collectively planned to defect. Them laying down their weapons just sort of happened in the moment. Maybe Finn’s story planted a seed of morality in them, and it began taking roots, and then bloomed suddenly. It’s like, before hearing about Finn, they may have slaughtered those civilians. But it awoke their consciouses.

EDIT: Also, is the new shot okay?

I think it’s vague enough on the specifics that everything can still mesh. She says everyone’s heard Finn’s story, not necessarily that they all discussed it and agreed they should do it too. More likely, when they talked about the story they would have been afraid to openly voice any support for what he did.

So when they all put their weapons down, it was more like the instinctual feeling knowing that they would all do the same thing then and there, that it was the right thing to do, regardless of what was or wasn’t said.

RogueLeader said:

The “And you” version I just slapped together quickly because the reading came to me. I’m curious if people would prefer that line reading if I nailed it down, or like the v1 line reading. Again, not based on quality but just the line alone.

EDIT: Also, is the new shot okay?

What is this “new shot” you’re referring to? 😉 Don’t tell me or it’ll stand out all of a sudden.

I think it would work really well with that line, if perfected. I like the idea that it’s the Force which is bringing all of these defected stormtroopers together to help heal the galaxy.

Jar Jar Bricks said:

RogueLeader said:

The “And you” version I just slapped together quickly because the reading came to me. I’m curious if people would prefer that line reading if I nailed it down, or like the v1 line reading. Again, not based on quality but just the line alone.

EDIT: Also, is the new shot okay?

What is this “new shot” you’re referring to? 😉 Don’t tell me or it’ll stand out all of a sudden.

New Shot? I meant new show. Is Ahsoka any good? 😅

That Janna scene is beautiful! So glad something could be done for Finn.

Thanks Neerb! Maybe it’s just because I’ve been imagining it for so long, but I do feel like I have more of a emotional reaction to this scene now than I did before.

I had another go at the “And you” version, and touched up things here and there.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1gfn_2npNuyDawhQUpbNYrDRLoHEwxU2o/view?usp=drive_link

Damn bruh. So good.

Chills. Lots of chills.

Chills here too, amazing work. If I didn’t know already, you could tell me that this was an official scene and I’d believe you.

Nicely done, RL!

Are there any other outstanding ideas we have? It sounds like Hal isn’t too keen on AI Palpatine.