Octorox said:
DominicCobb said:
They were nobody:
https://vimeo.com/414948227
Really promising, although I think the conversation feels a little disjointed now. Kylo goes from talking about Rey’s power to talking about her parents without much build up. I wonder if it would possible to preserve a little more of the original scene while still excising the problematic elements? Is there a way you could work in Poppasketti’s “you were right. They were nobody” line without the “because they chose to be”? I also wonder if the cutaway to the rest of the gang could be moved, as I think it interrupts the flow of the scene, especially since you’ve made it quite a bit shorter.
I think, with the context of the first scene, bringing up her parents makes sense. He’s goading her about her anger, of which a lot comes from her abandonment.
As to including more of the conversation about the parents, it’s something I’ve tried and will continue to tinker with, but I haven’t found any solutions that I’m happy with. The main reason why I feel the need to change the flow of the conversation is that, if you do it they way it is originally, it’s obvious what’s being set up. Kylo goes from talking about what she did in the desert to saying there’s more to her story and what happened to her parents. Linking the two makes for a clear implication that I’m trying to remove.
There’s really no way to move the cutaway, I could remove it, but that’d be tricky considering I’m already considerably cutting down the execution scene. I’m not terribly worried about these scenes feeling short since they don’t have the same revelatory weight as those in the original film.