Poppa! You’ve done a great job removing the other skimmer. Good job there.
Gareth, I like your idea of having Rose get shot down as they’re retreating too. I hadn’t really considered that, but it does give you more to work with. The way you currently have it cut, as an alternative, I wonder if you could cut it where we see the AT-AT shoot, Rose looks back, and we see her get shot down? It just seems like there is a lot of time inbetween seeing the AT-AT and her shouting no.
On the other hand, you could argue she needs to say no so Finn knows that she got shot down. I agree with Poppa, that the laser blasts need to be red. The laser flare is a good idea too, but I would make it much shorter, like just a few frames, because this is a fast moving laser bolt, so we see just enough to know what is happening. If you go through action scenes frame by frame, you’ll usually notice that laser muzzle flares are usually only one or two frames, and lasers zip by in a few frames as well. It’s fast, but our eyes still catch it, and moves more realistically. You’re doing good though!
I like those two options Poppa. I agree that the best way for it to work is to just see Finn get out of the skimmer and say Rose and nothing else until he pulls her back in (Not even seeing him get out of his skimmer could add to the hopelessness too, possibly?).
But yeah, since a lot of the “skimmer destruction” shots all look pretty violent, it will help that we wouldn’t see Rose even conscious after that. It’ll make her being injured seem a lot more severe I think.
It would also be good if one could crop a shot to see the cannon laser being fired. Unfortunately you can’t get a good impact shot, but I wonder if one could use a shot of the inside of Kylo’s shuffle maybe, and we hear the muffled explosion and see the light get brighter for a few seconds. Could work well with a close up of Kylo maybe, one could even add a little light flare in his eyes? Not sure, but then we just cut to the shot of the aftermath that is also inside the shuttle. Just spitballing though.
Anyway, it’s cool seeing all the ideas building off one another. Darthrush, poppasketti, gareth. Hopefully we can get the Rose thing to work, but I think it’ll turn out well either way.