Sir Ridley said:
Progress! Here’s the latest version of the Maz’s castle sequence. Thoughts?
https://youtu.be/TqZeT7FN0c0
Watching this again, I realize what I disliked from this sequence in the original film.
In the original and in this edit, Rey runs away and intends to keep running…into the forest? Forever? I understand that having a Force vision can be traumatic and everything, but it doesn’t seem in character for her to suddenly run away from both her destiny and a way back to Jakku. She’s too competent for this sort of thing. What would make more sense is if she ran outside to get some air and deal with the traumatic Force vision, with the intention of returning once she’d recovered.
So for this sequence, remove ‘I’m leaving…no, you can’t. They’ll help you’.
Then we’re left with 'What are you doing? BB-8, you have to go back. You’re too important.'
This makes it sound like she’s still dedicated to BB-8’s mission even if she doesn’t want anything to do with the Force vision.
I also think the scene would flow better if Rey stopped running before Finn sees the Finalizer, but there’s probably not enough footage to make that seem natural.
JEDIT: What might be more effective was if all she says is ‘We have to go back’, and then it cuts to Finn and Maz in the basement. This way Rey makes the decision to return without seeing the First Order ships, and only sees the attack when she gets back to the castle. It also shortens the time between Finn seeing the Finalizer and the inevitable attack.