smudger9

So here is our next Live Action show. What are peoples’ thoughts so far? I love it!

Right from the outset this looked like an ideal series to edit into a sci-fi adventure movie, and the first 2 episodes have only cemented that idea.
The episode run times point towards a single movie edit and the plot looks like its going to be a linear one with the main A-plot following the children and a much smaller B-plot back on At-Attin.

I’ve edited the first 2 episodes together and cut them down from 64 mins runtime to 50 mins. The show is delightful with very little that needs removing from a cringe perspective, which is surprising for a children’s show.

If anyone wants to view what I’ve done so far DM me…. I have an SD 5.1 version uploaded for viewing.

The main changes I’ve made are:

• An expanded, classic opening crawl.
• Removal of the pirate opening. It’s a great scene, but very much a TV series opening.
• Cut as much as I could from episode 1 to get the story moving, but maintaining the focus on Wim as our primary protagonist. Most of the cut footage involves Fern, we only see her when it’s relevant to Wim’s story. At this stage we don’t need to know who her mother is - this will be revealed to the audience through Wim’s dad in the B plot on At-Attin. The crew enter the ship at the 22 minute mark, rather than 31 minutes in the show.
• Removed the “claimsies” scene.
• Removed Fern and KB’s interactions with the hooker on the pirate station.
• Most scenes have had a small amount of trimming to reduce the run time and speed up the pacing.

Hi all, just thought I’d offer an update on the Season 3 edit.

I have completed by third cut and got it down to 2h 50. Slightly over my 2h45 target, but there is a lot to fit in.

The rough outline is

Act 1: Escape from Tantiss & Reunion
Act 2: Reconciliation & Omega’s Capture
Act 3: Return to Tantiss

Basic Premise:

• The plot focuses on events at Tantiss.
• Omega and Crosshair’s escape form the first act with a lot of tightening of the plot including condensing the three Tantiss day cycles to two.
• There is a single scene of Hunter and Wrecker finding the abandoned base, to have them appear in the first act.
• When Omega and Crosshair crash on the planet Lau they immediately go to the port and steal the shuttle.
• “The Return” and “Point of no Return” form the bulk of the second act.
• The capture of the clone agent by Rex and his team is included between those 2 episodes. The knowledge that the clone agents are looking for Omega is the trigger for the Batch to leave Pabu.
• The rest of Infiltration and Extraction are cut.
• Bad Territory and Harbinger are completely cut.
• The vast majority of Identity Crisis is cut. Only the important scenes involving Emery and Hemlock are retained and spread throughout the second act. Anything involving the children or the vault are removed. We don’t see the inside of the vault until Omega arrives.
• The Juggernaught is largely cut. All we see is the first scene of Rampart and the Batch arrive to release him and leave the planet - it plays out similar to the Rebels breaking out Jan in Rogue One.
• The third act is the final three episodes with a good degree of trimming.

If anyone wants to offer feedback I have an SD, centre channel-only version available to view. It’s entirely music free and is actually really cool to watch it.

My plan is to slowly go thought it over the next few weeks to add the other 5 channels and sort out music transitions, although Skeleton Crew will be taking priority.

NM

Thanks Warhorn. Much appreciated! This series was the most rewarding for me to edit because it was very hit and miss. When you eliminate the elements that didn’t work, you’re left with a pretty good story that foreshadows events of the PT.

spunkmeyer said:

Smudger,
I looked forward to someone doing a more filmic edit of this. I attended the London launch and came away slightly confused by the constant jumping around the timeline. Even seeing the whole series left me a bit meh.
You have done a great job of moving everything round to address this, flashbacks are only used when necessary and the whole moves more like a film would. The removal of unnecessary battles and subplots don’t affect anything, except to allow the seasoned watcher to go “oh, that bit has gone”. The opening crawl and music is a welcome addition, I fail to see why they have to change stuff like that. Editing is crisp, the whole is more pacey.
The only part that was a big problem for me that you couldn’t undo was the bit where she gets to the dead jedi before Sol etc by using a shortcut in a place she had never visited. Purely done so that she could be ‘discovered’ finding the body. Shoddy writing, frankly.

Thanks for your work, I look forward to you doing the same to skeleton crew et al.

Thanks Spunkmeyer. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Totally agree with the point you make about shoddy writing. It’s a feature of many modern shows. When something doesn’t make sense they just crack on regardless rather than re-write it. Somehow Palpatine returned…….

Really looking forward to Skeleton crew. As a massive fan of Goonies and ET I’m hoping I can get a fun adventure film out of the series.

Jar Jar Bricks said:

I enjoyed watching this edit a great deal. It will probably be my go-to from now on. A shame that it won’t ultimately lead anywhere, though. I just have a few nitpicks:

• I would have preferred the whole version of Osha’s testing. This was the only cut that a viewer noticed, and he hadn’t seen the show since it came out.
• You could save a lot of time by removing the fake wakeup vision that Osha has from the crash. I realize that this sets up her future hallucinations of child Mae, and possibly explains why she suddenly suspects her of the murder at the edge of the cliff, but in my opinion it messes with the pacing too much. Without it, I also think the scene at the cliff is more revelatory/interesting.
• Without the line that their midichlorians are split evenly, I’m not sure why Sol thinks he needs both girls to prove anything about the vergence.
• I guess I’m confused what happened to the rest of the witches - is the intention supposed to be that they killed the rest?
• I’d remove the weird, almost predatory scene between Sol and Mae strapped to the ship, mostly because we don’t actually learn anything from it anymore since the final flashback is shifted to Brendok. You could possibly even experiment with their next scene together, removing the reveal that he killed their mother, to save that reveal for Brendok itself.
• In general, you could probably tighten up Sol catching on to the fact that “Osha” is Mae earlier - shortly after the part where the camera holds on him for almost a minute (he’s clearly piecing things together). I don’t think many of the tracker scenes are necessary here, they’re just cringey comedy. The “Corcoran” cut accomplishes this quite well.

If you look into some of the areas I suggested, you might be able to trim this edit down to a more digestible 2 hours and 30 minutes.

Thanks for the feedback!

That is the full scene of Osha’s testing. I agree it feels too short, but that’s how it’s presented in the series. The only thing I cut was the final shot of Indra looking at Sol.

I have the same views about the fake wake-up. I tried a few edits removing it but none really worked. Unfortunately that dream sequence is pretty essential to the story. Osha needs a reason to suspect that Mae is alive, and that is the only option.

I removed mention of the midichlorian symbionts for several reasons. Firstly I didn’t want to expand their lore any further given their controversial nature amongst fans. I left in what fits with TPM.
Secondly I actually think having physical “proof” that the twins are the same person takes away from Sol’s character arc. He is driven by this belief and I like it being a theory to him, rather than a fact. It still doesn’t change the fact that he needs both twins to prove that they are the same person.

I left the fate of the witches for the audience to decide… were they killed by the Jedi or the fire? Including the Kelnacca fight scene in the final flashback made it way too long, and the fate of the other witches isn’t that important to the story.

I tried several edits of the Sol/Mae scenes aboard the cruiser and reduced them as much as I could. The issue with cutting things further is that they need to get to Brendock before Mae escapes. That pretty much rules out cutting the scene where Mae is restrained.

Basil and PiP were the most frustrating part of this edit. I wanted to remove them completely, but they are tied to the core plot which makes it almost impossible. I tried it several times, but I couldn’t come up with anything I was 100% happy with.

EddieDean said:

smudger9 said:

EddieDean said:

Looks great. Why cut Maul talking to Jesse about the grand plan? That was always one of the highlights of the episode for me.

We get most of that exposition in Maul’s interactions with Ahsoka and I didn’t want to detract from those scenes. The whole arc hinges on Maul luring the Jedi (ultimately the wrong Jedi) to Mandalore so the focus should be on that dynamic.

Maul revealing the nature of the grand plan to a clone didn’t feel right for his character. Clones are beneath him.

Sounds great either way. I’ve always been a big fan of yours. What’s next in this series for you? What’re your major plans for the remaining content? Any thoughts on an alternative opening movie? As you have, I’ve thought this content to death, so if there’s any valuable perspectives I can offer I’d be happy to.

Thanks Eddie. It was great returning to the Clone Wars. The actual stimulus was the Tales of…. series, which I enjoyed incorporating into Clone Wars content.

Next up is Bad Batch season 3 and then Skeleton Crew. If I have time before Andor season 2 I’ll do a season 6 Clone Wars edit.

sgscobie said:

Can’t wait to watch this, as your edits are always top tier! Thanks, once again 😃

Thanks so much. EPIX is now in my clone was folder 😊.

EddieDean said:

Looks great. Why cut Maul talking to Jesse about the grand plan? That was always one of the highlights of the episode for me.

We get most of that exposition in Maul’s interactions with Ahsoka and I didn’t want to detract from those scenes. The whole arc hinges on Maul luring the Jedi (ultimately the wrong Jedi) to Mandalore so the focus should be on that dynamic.

Maul revealing the nature of the grand plan to a clone didn’t feel right for his character. Clones are beneath him.

Finally an addition to this series.

Episode IX: The Fallen Apprentice

I’ve gone out-of-order to bring you an edit of the final season. While there have been many fan edits of the Siege of Mandalore, this edit uniquely weaves in elements from the Trace and Rafa arc and the “Tales of…” series to produce a balanced movie focusing on Ahsoka’s post-Jedi journey that creates a bridge between the Clone Wars and the Era of the Empire. My Main aims are:

1. Craft a Cohesive Three-Act Structure:
   This edit aims to deliver a well-balanced and satisfying beginning, middle, and end, ensuring that the story feels complete and fulfilling and serves as a fitting conclusion to the beloved Clone Wars saga.

2. Highlight Ahsoka’s Journey:
   The narrative focuses on Ahsoka Tano’s evolution, tracing her path from a disillusioned citizen of Coruscant to a hesitant Jedi and ultimately to a rebel poised for action. “Practice Makes Perfect” has been used throughout the edit to show Ahsoka’s relationship with Anakin and the jedi order and to foreshadow events in the final act.

3. Create a Bridge between the Clone Wars and the Era of the Empire:
   By using select portions of the “Tales of…” series I have ventured beyond the end of the Clone Wars to lay the groundwork for storylines in the early Empire era to create a seamless transition into the next era of the Star Wars saga.

4. Integration of Subplots:
   By incorporating relevant subplots, such as a condensed version of the Trace and Rafa arc, I have provided additional context and depth to the main narrative. Whilst not the best element of the final season, the subplot is essential for Ahsoka’s arc and to set up events on Mandalore.

Here is a link to a scene where I’ve added the Kenobi holo message from Rebels to Ahsoka looking at the Clone helmets.

https://youtu.be/K8MGtVP1yEw

Detailed Changes

Star Wars Logos (2 mins)
Opening Crawl
Pan down to shot of a shuttle exiting hyperspace above Coruscant (shot from Rise of Clovis)

Act 1 (50 mins)

TOTJ Practice Makes Perfect (4 mins)
Cut to external shot of Jedi Temple from Tales of the Jedi Practice Makes Perfect.
Jedi Temple scene plays out unaltered.
Wipe to Ahsoka arriving at the military hanger. Training plays out up to Ahsoka being stunned. Cut to black with audio of Anakin continuing.

Gone With A Trace (8 mins)
Dissolve transition to Ahsoka on her speeder on Corusctant. Shots trimmed to have the force theme synch better.
Trimmed the malfunctioning speeder sequence so the there is one continuous sequence of her filing down to the platform.
Removed Ahsoka talking about fixing her own bike - Trace fixes it in this edit.
Remove Trace “don’t take too long” and “I could do with the money” - Trace fixes it for free.
Remove scene of Ahoska fixing her bike.
Cut Trace “No sense in you staying if you’re gonna be miserable”.
Cut Trace “Don’t do anything, got it”.
Cut Ashoka “I’d back off if I were you”.
Trim fight between Trace and Bintu’s thugs.
Remove Droids storyline. We now cut from Rafa greeting the Alien in the laundromat to Ahsoka and Trace working on Trace’s ship, this removes the entire second half of the episode.

Deal no Deal (19mins)
Cut chat about the Silver Angel name.
Remove Anakin and the cruiser scene - he’s supposed to be in the Outer Rim! Ahsoka, Trace and Rafa now lift off from the hangar and leave Coruscant without incident.
Anakin’s presence in this part of the story is maintained by using the Anakin/Padme scene from “A Distant Echo”. Anakin’s dialogue is altered so that he mentions Fives instead of Echo.
Cut the meeting with King Yaruba - they arrive at Kessel and head straight to the spice mines.
Cut Ahsoka “That was more of an ethical debate”.
Cut Rafa and Krim talking abut trust.
Cut Rafa “I think we transmitted that to you already”.
As the crew get captured in their crusier I reversed the wide shot of their ship so that the shot pans out and inserted the clip of Bo Katan and her night owls from the end of “Dangerous Debt” discussing the identity of the Jedi they can see. This brings forward the Mandalorian’s appearance to the earliest possible point to better integrate the main plot with the opening act.

Dangerous Debt (3mins)
Only the scene of Ahsoka, Rafa and Trace in the cell has been used.
The rest of the episode has been cut which eliminates the repeated escapes and gets to the point of this arc a lot sooner.

Together Again (16mins)
Initial scene of Ahsoka, Trace and Rafa in the cell has been cut - this has essentially been replaced by the scene from Dangerous debt. The Pikes then take them all to see Krim.
The scenes of Rafa and Trace acquiring the spice shipment have been removed.
Cut Ahsoka entering the Mandalorian ship. The scene ends with her talking to Trace and Rafa and transition wipes to the next episode.

Act 2 (44mins)

Old Friends Not Forgotten (24mins)
Cut the Anakin/Kenobi banter. Anakin just walks out to surrender.
Cut the shot of the 501st hiding under the bridge.
Cut battle droid “that’s a relief”.
Cut Anakin and Kenobi talking about Ahsoka and Maul as Bo’s ship arrives.
Trim Ahsoka and Anakin walking down the corridor.
As Ahsoka meets the 501st I have used the next sequence from Practice Makes Perfect to create a series of short flashbacks of her training.
Trim Ahsoka twirling her new lightsabers.
Cut Ahsoka wishing Anakin good luck.
Cut most of Ahsoka’s free-fall to the surface of Mandalore - a very over-the-top sequence that makes her look indestructible.

The Phantom Apprentice (20mins)
Cut Maul “your way of thinking is behind the times.
Cut Rex and 501st running through the tunnels.
Cut Ahsoka “Tell Anakin……” And Obi Wan “I will”.
Cut Maul talking to Jesse about the grand plan.
Cut Maul “information is a valuable commodity”
Cut Bo Katan/Saxon lift fight - adds nothing.
Cut Maul talking to Ahsoka about the hypocrisy of the jedi council.
Cut the brief Clone/Mando battle scene that interrupts the Maul/Ahsoka scene. Its a much more impactful scene uninterrupted.
Trim Maul/Ahsoka battle including Ahsoka losing and regaining a lightsaber and Ahsoka telling Maul Anakin would have beaten him easily.

Act 3 (44mins)

Shattered (24 mins)
Cut Yoda asking Ahsoka if she has a message for Skywalker.
Trim Bo and Ahsoka farewell.
As Ahsoka stands on the bridge I have added the next flashback sequence from Practice Makes Perfect.
As Rex and the 501st head doff to hunt down Ahsoka I’ve inserted the first scene from TOTE Devoted of Bariss in her cell as order 66 is carried out.
Cut Ahsoka having difficulty finding Rex’s chip.

Victory and Death (20mins)
Add final flashback scene from Practice Makes Perfect using the scene of Rex and Ahsoka walking into the Hangar.
Minor trimming to the hangar battle to remove static shots.
Trim sequence with Ahsoka falling through the air.
Inserted Barriss recruitment scene from TOTE Devoted before we see Rex and Ahsoka looking at the crashed Ventor and clone helmets.
Obi-Wan hologram warning from Rebels added to scene of Ahsoka looking at the clone helmets.

Epilogue (10mins)

TOTE Doveted: Barriss arrives at the fortress inquisitorius and we immediately cut to her being tested by the Grand Inquisitor. The other Jedi there for testing have been cut.
TOTJ Resolve: Padme funeral scene plays out in full.
TOTE Devoted: Bariss and the other inquisitors are introduced to Vader.
Final Clone Wars scene of Vader and Imperial troops exploring the wrecked Venator.

As with episode 2, this will also get THE NEW REPUBLIC title added.

I plan to revisit these edits before the Mandalorian and Grogu is released to tighten them up. I may move the Mando/Grogu reunion back to Tatooine.

Khernel said:

Hey, already watched ep2, I have to say I dont like the new title, “Mando”, it doesnt sound serious to me. But I like the rest of it, now I get how you fixed that part of the first edit where you removed the prison episode, it works better than I expected. Time to watch part 3!

I will be changing the title and opening crawl to the red THE NEW REPUBLIC banner as I have done with season 1

I’ve updated the files so that they are 5.1 audio. An error with the original render meant the files were stereo.

Daiyus said:

I really enjoyed this edit, thank you Smudger. The chronological structuring helped a lot in my opinion, and certainly coming at it from the angle of “this is all there is, how does it best fit as a prequel” worked wonders. Of the edits I’ve watched so far, this has been the one that’s landed best for me, and should definitely be watched by anyone trying to find their standard Acolyte version for their collection. I’ve still got some more to try, but I can absolutely see this version working for a lot of people given the misgivings of the Acolyte I’ve seen generally.

There’s some minor trims I’ve considered, more from the perspective of wondering if they’d work. There’s two during Episode 5 that have always stuck out to me as concepts; first, a slight trim to the split-blade reveal to remove the initial split, so the action flows from Jecki’s attack > Qimir’s block stance > three impalements > Qimir’s face & split-saber reveal > reconstructing hilt. That might add more surprise to Jecki’s death, but still explain the split-saber concept as we see it being reconstructed.

The second is to trim out Qimir panicking trying to remove Pip from his back. I think he’d be more likely to realise the Umbra Moth attack is coming and simply prepare for for it, and deal with it, rather than panicking. He handles it fairly confidently otherwise.

Thanks so much for the review. The ambermoth attack on Qimir is a bit goofy. I’ll take a look at that and see if I can tighten it.
As for Qimir’s reveal, I have to say I hadn’t considered altering it as it was probably the coolest part of the whole series. I’ll take a look at what you suggest. I can definitely see the benefit of making Jecki’s death even more surprising.

Yan Jedi said:

My girlfriend and I watched your edit last night, and we both loved it. You’ve done an amazing job once again. The only small thing that felt a bit off was seeing Plagueis appear in the middle of the movie, especially with his theme cutting off rather abruptly as the scene transitions. It disrupted the flow just a bit. I still think he should appear at the end. Also, I think the full fight between Sol and Qimir could have been left in without affecting the movie’s pacing. At the very least, it would have been great to see Qimir call his shoto saber back with the Force, as there’s a moment where he’s clearly trying to summon it 10 seconds before, and then he just has it. It would add a nice touch of continuity to the fight and to be honest, I thought the fight was dope haha.

Overall, though, you’ve really outdone yourself with this and it really feels like the murder mystery it should have been. Thank you for your great work!

Thank you so much for your review!

Let’s dive into the Plagueis scene. This moment marked his only appearance in the series, and I felt it was crucial to include some element of it there. It adds an intriguing layer, hinting at unseen forces at play as we build towards the finale. This way, the audience has something extra to ponder while processing the unfolding events. I did experiment with placing his appearance at the end but, without any foreshadowing, it just didn’t resonate with me. It felt a bit forced, reminiscent of Yoda’s cameo at the end of the series.

As for the music transition, I maintained the original series’ score but made a slight adjustment by shortening the Plagueis section. The transitions in and out remain intact.

I appreciate your feedback on the Qimir/Sol fight! I’ll revisit that scene to see if I can tighten it up. I wasn’t particularly fond of the boomerang sabers, which is why I opted to cut that element. Overall, my goal in this edit was to moderate the use of force powers, as I felt some moments were a bit over the top and didn’t align with the spirit of the prequels.

Thanks again for your thoughts!

manu90 said:

I would love a link to your Acolyte edit!!

I second others’ opinions, your SW fan edits are brilliant. I especially enjoyed Andor and The Bad Batch. IMO best edits out there 😉 I wonder if you will still release Ep3 of The Bad Batch?

Endless thanks for your contribution to SW universe.

Many thanks.

I still plan to do Bad Batch season 3. I’ve got Clone Wars season 7 to finish off first, and then I’ll hopefully squeeze in bad batch season 3 before Skelton Crew starts.

I’m polishing this edit off at the moment. It’ll be released in the next few weeks.

If anyone is waiting for the 4K version. It’s now uploaded to the same folder as an .mkv file.

DM sent

DarthMarv said:

Another great edit from you Smudger! A much better streamlined version of the The Acolyte that removes most of the problematic elements.
The new title crawl is miles better than the original, the AI Venestra voice sounded seamless and was a good solution to skim past the whole Ki Adi & Coruscant filler.
Overall lots of good choices of cuts and a much more watchable version of the Acolyte.

Thankyou so much Darth. There’s a lot of good ideas and material in this series. Such a shame that the rest was so bad that the show got cancelled.

It’s finally rendered and uploaded (the 1080p version anyway). The 4K is just being packaged into an .mkv container and will be added to the folder tomorrow. I’ve forwarded a link to those that have requested it.

If I’ve missed you out, or if you would like a link shoot me a DM.

Thanks Khernel. The prisoner episode does provide some good character development for Din, and it is the start of his relationship with Carson Teva. If I was making 2 movies out of season 1 then I would have definitely included it. However, with a single movie edit there really wasn’t much room to include it. I would have needed to replace the Tatooine episode, which is far more important for the overall plot of the show.

It’s all done and ready. Sadly Compressor isn’t wanting to play ball. It really is a crap piece of software and is testing my patience. Anywoo… I’m having to do workarounds to get it rendered into 1080 and 4K, but I’m on it and will post on here when it’s ready and send out links to those that have expressed an interest.

Here is all the artwork

szopman said:

Sounds great, I haven’t watched the show, so it will be a very interesting cinematic experience for me 😉

Are you planning to include an opening crawl?

Would you consider using some “Legends” pre-EI title, like “Cloak of Deception” or “Dynasty of Evil”, etc?

Yes, there is an opening crawl. I didn’t want to directly reference an EU title, but funny you should mention dynasty of evil - “the power of two” is a little nod to “rule of two”.

As I watched the Acolyte I found myself caught between excitement and disappointment. There’s so much to love about the series, yet I can appreciate why some fans felt it fell short. Of all the live action shows and seasons we’ve had, this one felt in most need of a solid movie edit. This edit certainly has a bigger list of changes than any of my others.

I’ve been crafting this edit since the series first aired, but with limited free time, I’ve found myself fashionably late to the editing party. Just as I was wrapping up my work, the cancellation news hit — an unexpected twist that, while disappointing, ultimately granted me the creative freedom to reimagine the ending.

My Vision for this Edit:

1. A True Prequel: I have aligned the series with established lore, particularly what’s laid out in The Phantom Menace, setting it up as a legitimate prequel to the prequels.

2. Chronological Flow: By introducing a prologue sequence reminiscent of “Rogue One” and incorporating a single, impactful flashback in the finale, the narrative unfolds in a clear, chronological and engaging manner.

3. Character Focus: I have prioritised the arcs of Sol and Osha, while having Mae as a more peripheral character who doesn’t step into the spotlight until the confrontation on Olega.

4. Murder-Mystery Enhancement: To amplify the intrigue, the murders of Indara and Torbin will occur off-screen, allowing suspense to build.

5. Jedi Perspective: I have presented the Jedi in a more positive light. Highlighting their noble mission on Brendock and showcasing their motivations for intervening with the twins as a response to the dangers posed by their upbringing in a dark side cult.

6. Complex Antagonism: Venestra has been transformed into a compelling secondary villain. The last Jedi privy to these events, who conceals the truth from both the Jedi Council and the Senate.

7. A New Ending: The edit has eliminated Mae’s memory wipe, paving the way for a more thought-provoking conclusion.

8. Mysterious Origins: The origins of the twins remain shrouded in mystery, echoing the nature of Anakin’s creation in TPM.

9. Enigmatic Witches: The witches are depicted as a mysterious and powerful entity, devoid of chanting!

10. Fluid Storytelling: I have significantly reduced the back-and-forth between Plot A and Plot B, as well as minimising transition wipes, allowing scenes to breathe and offering a richer viewing experience.

11. Refined Dialogue: Finally, I have trimmed any dialogue that feels unnecessary or poorly executed, ensuring that every line serves a purpose and is cringe-free.

With these changes, I hope to breathe new life into “The Acolyte,” creating a viewing experience that resonates with both fans of the show, and those that disliked it.

Detailed Changes
Total run time 2h 39mins

Opening Logos (2mins)
Classical Star Wars Opening Crawl

Prologue: (23 mins)
This is a fusion of EP3 and EP7 that delivers a condensed, chronological narrative of events to lay the groundwork for the movie’s essential plot elements.
We begin from the Jedis’ perspective, seamlessly transitioning to Osha’s perspective during her Jedi testing.
This setup portrays The Jedi as noble guardians of the force and transforms the witches into a mysterious entity. The specifics of the twins’ conception are shrouded in mystery. It establishes the Jedi as having noble motives, turns the witches into more of a mystery, removes the explicit details of the twins’ conception and frames Mae as the pivotal figure in the massacre.
The Ascension ceremony is omitted with all necessary exposition presented during Mae’s Jedi testing.

EP7 Campfire Scene
Trimmed to remove Torbin’s mention of returning home - Torbin is not the catalyst for events in this edit. Wipe transition added.

EP7 Sol & Indara in the forest
Complete scene. Wipe transition added.

EP7 Sol discovers the witches
Removed Sol trying to contact Indara, this doesn’t fit with his character and it allows a focused pursuit of the twins.
Wipe transition to an establishing shot of the mine from EP3. We then cut to the twins & Koril entering the mine - the first shot of Sol hiding has been removed.
Removed mother Koril hearing and responding to the noise made by Sol.
Wipe transition to next scene.

EP7 Sol returns to camp
Removed Sol talking about a ceremony - how does he know this?
Removed Sol talking about Indara deferring to the council.
The Jedi jump on their speeders.
Wipe transition to next scene.

EP3/EP7 The Jedi enter the mine
This sequence begins with the EP7 Jedi POV but switches to EP3 footage to remove the Torbyn/Aniseya possession sequence. The mind control element is kept.
Removed the twins talking about the Jedis’ robes.
Removed Indara “with your permission” - she doesn’t really ask for permission!
Use the EP7 transition from the Jedi leaving the mine to the scene on the Jedi cruiser. Wipe transition added.

EP7 The Tests
Shortened the dialogue between Indara and Mae.
Transition wipe from Osha’s test to an external shot of the mine.

EP3 The Massacre
Here we switch to the Witches POV and cut straight to Mae declaring that Osha failed to follow their plan.
Removed Osha “I don’t want to share it with Mae” - poorly acted.
The Mother Aniseya-Osha scene is trimmed to just include mention of Osha having a choice. Mentions of “The Thread” are cut.
The EP7 scene of mother Koril ordering Mae to prevent Osha leaving is added. This sets up Mae (and Mother Koril) as the cause of the massacre (which happens off screen in the prologue).
The EP7 Jedi campfire scene is added. AI dialogue is used to reframe their motives for returning to the mine. Their primary motive is the safety of the twins.
Trimmed the Osha-Mae fire sequence for pacing reasons.
Removed Osha and Sol running past the bodies of the witches. Osha only sees mother Aniseya’s body.

EP1 (25 mins)
Wipe transition from the external shot of the burning mine to Osha asleep aboard the Neimoidian Cruiser. This transition frames the prologue as a dream sequence from Osha’s perspective. The scenes aboard the Neimoidian cruiser quickly give the audience the necessary exposition to fill in events during the time skip.
The entire Mae-Indara sequence is removed, partly to achieve the above transition but also to maintain the mystery surrounding the identity of the murderer.
Removed Osha “Woah, inside voices PIP”.
Removed the “we can hear you” chat - cringey!
Removed the “fire in space” sequence. This flashback is superfluous because of the prologue sequence.
Removed female Neimoidian “Urgh” when the Jedi arrive, the male Neimoidian’s “urgh” is a far better scene ender.
Removed Yord introducing himself. This is mainly to remove reference to the other Jedi being his Padawan because she is absent for the rest of the movie.
Removed Osha’s talk about Jedi skills not being transferrable. Erm… yes they are…. To anything!
Removed Yord’s line about attachments. Just a word salad!
Added wipe transition from Osha’s room to them walking along the corridor.
Removed Sol “time for lunch” unnecessary use of everyday language in Star Wars really takes me out of scenes.
Removed some of the cringey dialogue between Sol and Venestra such as “you were so shy” - yuk!
Removed wipe between Jedi Temple and Prison Ship.
Re-edited the Parasite’s jump so that it flows better.
Removed Osha struggling to get the seat harness on.
Removed the Sol-Jecki scene - it adds nothing.
Wipe transition added from the Sol/Venestra conversation to Sol and Jecki walking down the steps.
The two separate Osha-Mae flashback scenes have been edited together into a single sequence but the Brendock part has been removed. This is unnecessary due to the prologue sequence. I added in Mae “I will kill them all” and then transitioned to Osha waking up.
The Carlaac sequence has been completely re-arranged to reduce the number of cuts between Osha and the Jedi and to remove the horrible transition wipe as the Jedi arrive and immediately appear inside the prison ship.
Removed the end scene of Mae and Qimir.

EP2 (19 mins)
Removed the Mae-Torbin scenes. This maintains Osha’s status as a suspect for Indara’s murder, adds weight to Yord’s concerns regarding Osha and tightens the narrative focus on Osha and Sol.
I have rearranged the scenes aboard the Jedi cruiser to remove yet another unnecessary transition wipe and to allow the Mae-Quimir scene in the Apothecary store to be removed. This gives us a seamless 5-minute sequence aboard the Jedi Cruiser allowing our characters’ relationships to develop without interruption. It also provides an adequate passage of time for the journey from Carlaac to Olega.
I removed Osha talking about Pip being flexible. More cringe!
Removed Sol “It doesn’t matter what I like” - creepy delivery.
I have removed all of the Mae-Torbin scenes, so we get a continuous sequence of Sol and the others arriving on Olega and discovering Torbin’s body.
I have removed reference to Torbin killing himself, so it is presumed that Mae killed him.
Removed Yord “I followed her when she broke off” yeah, we know!
Removed Osha “Thank you Yord” - jarring
Extensive trimming of the Jedi plans to get information out of Qimir. We hear Yord’s plan. Then Jeki says “or we skip that, and she just talks to him”, followed by Osha saying “I’m in” and cutting to Osha walking to through the street wearing the cloak.
Slight trimming of the Osha-Qimir scene to remove pauses and their overly-awkward greeting.
Removed Qimir asking Sol not to use a memory wipe on him - I have removed all references to memory wipes - a terrible plot idea.
Removed Qimir “if you want to get to her she’ll be back tonight”. It doesn’t make sense for him to completely sell Mae out.
Removed 2 other unnecessary wipes from Osha to Yord on lookout and from Sol v Mae to Osha.
Removed Yord talking about it being a trap.
Removed Osha “stationed on Brendok” when talking to Sol. Unnecessary exposition and removes tension from the scene.
Removed Sol and Yord telling Mae that Osha is alive. Her finding out when she sees Osha has far more emotional impact.
Altered Jeki’s declaration of “the Galactic Senate of the Republic” to “the Galactic Republic”
Removed wipe from Osha to Mae running.
I have re-arranged the scene of Sol reporting back to Venestra. Using AI dialogue Venestra orders Sol to assemble a squad of Jedi and head straight to Kofar to intercept Mae. This is a crucial plot change. It allows me to remove the canon-breaking Jedi temple scene with Ki-Adi Mundi, it reinforces Venestra’s role as a manipulative figure and it transforms the pacing by tightening the timeline and injecting urgency and tension.
Kalnecca on Kofar has been removed. It adds nothing and I wanted the unfindable Jedi to only appear on screen once he is dead.

EP4 (23 mins)
Removed Kalnecca on Kofar scene - again adds nothing.
Removed all Jedi Temple scenes - they are no longer needed as the team head straight to Kofar.
The first scene from this episode is Yord’s briefing on the Jedi Cruiser. Removed Pip squirting Basil.
I have removed a lot of the pre-battle Kofar scenes because they added little to the plot and sapped. the tension and urgency from the race to Kelnacca.
I have restructured the remaining scenes to create suspense and uncertainty, leaving the viewer to wonder who will reach Kelnacca first. In the original series its obvious that Mae and Qimir will reach Kelnacca first.
Removed Yord asking Osha for the blaster. Osha refuses, so the scene changes nothing and it makes Yord look like too much of a pompous idiot.
Removed the Yord-Osha scene where they talk about Basil and Mae.
Removed first scene of Mae and Qimir talking about the mission and the master - most of this is repeated later.
Removed Osha and Jacki talking about loss - poorly acted and unnecessary.
Removed odd close-up shot of the umbramoth and Sol saying “I have it”.
Removed Mae “attacking a defenceless person is against everything the Jedi stands for” it makes no sense for her to say this.
Removed a couple of wipes to wide shots of Kofar to improve pacing.
Removed Sol telling Osha that he’ll explain everything when they get to the ship.
Removed Mae saying “hey little buddy” to Basil. He calls out as soon as he sees her.
Removed Yord telling Osha to stay behind them. Kills the pacing.
Removed Yord “that means you Mae”
Removed Jecki “What is that”

EP5 (21 mins)
Many scenes in this episode have been trimmed or removed with the remainder restructured. It’s a great sequence, but it is way too long, and many scenes don’t advance the plot.
The first scene I have used from EP5 is Mae looking out from Kelnacca’s place to create a better EP4 to EP5 transition.
She grabs the lightsaber and we then cut to Osha waking up next to a dead Jedi - the scene of her waking up and looking for Pip has been removed.
The first mass battle scene then plays out to where Yord tells Osha to run.
We then see Mae leave Kelnacca’s place and Jecki attacks her. In the series there is too long a period where Mae and Jecki are not seen.
Removed the portion of Jecki v Mae that happens inside Kelnacca’s place. The enter, fight and exit with no important plot points.
Trimmed Qimir chasing Osha - she no longer stops to look around.
Removed Yord finding Basil - the next time we see Basil is at the end of the battle.
Removed Osha and Yord talking about going back. They don’t at this point, so it adds nothing and it actually detracts from Osha’s decision to go back when she senses Mae is in danger.
Sol v Qimir is presented as a single sequence. There is a lot of great dialogue here, and it’s the most important segment of the battle, so I wanted it to run uninterrupted.
Removed Yord and Osha stopping to talk about Qimir. This scene removes tension and is a pacing killer.
I then cut back to Mae v Jecki and that scene plays out.
The rest of the battle scenes play out in full and in sequence.
I trimmed the Osha-Mae reunion scene to remove a lot of the cringey dialogue and have Osha turn on Mae a lot more quickly - this is more fitting with Osha’s emotional state at this point.
I removed Mae cutting her hair - it’s fairly obvious that they switch, but it’s more satisfying and engaging for the audience to work that out themselves.
I removed Qimir finding Osha for the same reason.
The last scene from this episode is Sol and Mae returning to the Jedi Cruiser.

EP6 (23 mins)
I have done some major scene restructuring in this episode. The original series opens with Osha on the mystery planet and Sol still on Brendock. Firstly this makes no editorial sense and secondly it makes the mystery planet seem too accessible. It’s supposed to be remote and hidden.
Thus I have pushed the Qimir/Osha scenes to later and combined the first few Sol/Mae scenes into a single sequence.
Sol and Mae (and unfortunately Basil) enter the Jedi cruiser and immediately take off.
I have moved Basil putting Pip into the dock here, to allow me to streamline the Mae/Sol scenes.
Mae sneaks up behind Sol and Sol heads off to reset the transceiver. The Jedi cruiser docks with the hyperspace device and Sol tries again to contact Coruscant having returned to the cockpit. The power then fails.
This order has allowed me to remove the awkward Sol/Mae hug and associated dialogue.
The Venestra/Mog scene then plays out in sequence and we finally transition to Osha waking up on the mystery planet.
A number of Osha/Qimir scenes are then cut together to produce a long sequence allowing the audience to feel Qimir’s slow seduction of Osha to the sark side. We briefly see Mae find Pip and then we move back to Qimir and Osha.
I have trimmed some aspects to help with pacing and to reduce the unnecessary shots of flesh.
Removed Osha drinking.
Trimmed Osha’s approach to the pool and removed her watching him undress.
Removed Qimir “I assume you didn’t keep your own saber when you left the order”
Removed Qimir “if you’re not going to join me I’d like to put my clothes back on” - too sexually suggestive.
Removed Qimir “a really long time ago” - unnecessary repetition.
The scene plays out until Osha activates the lightsaber. We then get a transition wipe to an external shot of the Jedi cruiser and Mae discussing the state of the ship with Sol - Basil in the ventilation shaft has been removed.
Sol talking about Osha (Mae) loving Pip has been removed. He mentions PIP, but that is all.
Removed Mae pretending to be Osha to get information from Sol about Brendock…. Gets rid of the annoying “interruption” gag.
Removed the Venestra/Mogg scene at the temple - quite possibly the worst scene in the series.
Removed Osha and Qimir talking about his scar.
Venestra and her team surveying the Jedi slaughter is heavily trimmed. I have cut the annoying commentary and Mog suggesting that Sol may be responsible. They survey the area and Venestra very quickly orders the bodies to be prepared for burial. I have edited it to imply that Venestra is covering things up and formulating a plan in her own mind.

EP8 (34 mins)
Removed Qimir “she can kill with no weapon”. We know what he’s thinking without unnecessarily verbalising his thoughts to Osha.
Removed Qimir and Osha talking about how to get to Mae and Sol.
Removed Mae “see you in hell Jedi” - feels out of place.
Removed Mae “wish this thing had a hyperdrive” - not everything needs to be spelled out.
Removed Mae “he’s too big to follow us in here” - he does!
Removed Basil tampering with Sol’s ship - makes no sense at all.
Removed Venestra/Mogg - “Where is he?.. He’s in there” - pointless dialogue.
Removed Mae saying that Qimir is a fair person.
Trimmed the Plagueis shot so that we just see him from the back - the frontal reveal is moved to the end scene.
Removed Osha shutting down the power in Qimir’s cockpit.
The ONLY FLASHBACK scene: This is added when Sol enters the mine courtyard and we see him having a force memory. The Flashback is the short sequence of him and Torbin walking into the courtyard and Sol killing Mother Aniseya. It ends with Mae screaming “mama” and looking up at Sol. And we transition back to Sol’s face in the present. This is the big reveal and is more powerful when placed here, at the start of the finale. Things very quickly unravel for Sol from this point.
Removed Sol going to the bridge area.
Removed Osha “unless you want to climb”
Removed Qimir’s boomerang lightsabers - a bit over the top.
Removed Osha “ I could never learn to calm my negative emotions” - poor dialogue with poor delivery.
Removed Osha recognising Pip and Pip squirting her in the face. Osha never mentions Pip again, so this plot point goes nowhere.
Trimmed the Osha v Mae fight - too many of the same moves.
Trimmed Sol holding his saber at Qimir’s throat - goes on way too long.
Removed Osha and Mae escaping through the mine tunnels. We just see them appear at the exit.
Removed Mog “basil, you’re alright, what a relief”. We still see Basil approach the group.
Altered the audio of Venestra’s force vision to remove “Kelnacca, No!”
Removed the Basil sniffing the rucksack scene. We know what he does!

The Ending:
This is a big change.
The memory wipe has been removed - the idea that a selective memory wipe can be performed in a matter of seconds is crazy - this was just too much of a plot convenience and if it is so easy, why haven’t we seen it before?
I have edited it so that Mae surrenders to the Jedi and Osha goes off to train with Qimir after getting Mae’s blessing.
The Jedi search party finds Mae who surrenders.
We then transition to Coruscant and see Mae in restraints. She enters the office with Venestra and Venestra asks for her restraints to be removed and to be left alone. We move from a close up of Venestra’s head as she looks at Mae, to Venestra reporting to the senate committee. It is left ambiguous as to what Venestra does with Mae, but given that in this edit Mae is a secondary character, her fate is not important. The audience can decide just how far they think Venestra would go to hide the truth!
At the end of Venestra’s senate briefing I added a reversed shot of her from behind, looking at the senate committee and an AI line “The Jedi council considers this matter closed” and we cut to Qimir and Osha.
The Osha/Qimir end scene plays out with the addition of the Frontal shot of Plagueis.
Iris wipe to end credits and the Star Wars main theme.