mrbenjamino

kewlfish said:

Neerb said:

I think if the “Somehow, Palpatine has returned” bit is going to be replaced with the group listening to something, a big fancy broadcast isn’t the way to go. Instead, we should hear Palpatine speaking with Pryde, distorted enough to sound like a secret recording but clear enough to recognize their voices. This places emphasis on the spy subplot and foreshadows both that someone high-ranking is the spy, as well as that Pryde’s loyalty lies with the Emperor and not the Supreme Leader. It also potentially works as a red herring. If we hear Richard Grant speaking in the spy message and then later see him as a new character in the First Order meeting, he and Hux eyeing each other suspiciously from across the table, then an observant audience member will likely come to one of two assumptions: either Hux is the spy (now foreshadowed instead of a random twist), or Pryde is (a red herring, making Hux’s reveal and death a bigger twist).

Edit: if we want to split Palpatine and Pryde’s conversation from later in the movie, and do a bit of sentence-mixing, we could do it like this:

Spy recording on Ajan Kloss:
Palpatine: “Send the ships to a world they know. Let it burn. The Final Order begins.”
Pryde: “Yes, my lord.”

This gives context to Poe’s line, “He calls it the Final Order. In 16 hours, attacks on all free worlds begin.”

Then in the meeting after Leia’s death:
Palpatine: “The princess of Alderaan has disrupted my plan, but her foolish act will be in vain. Come to me on Exegol, General Pryde.”
Pryde: “As I served you in the old wars, I serve you now.”
Palpatine: “She will come. Her friends will follow.”
Pryde: “Yes, my lord.”

This is the same “Yes, my lord” used twice, but it’s far enough apart and appropriate enough for the situation that I bet a casual audience member wouldn’t notice.

https://vimeo.com/434221276
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I did a super rough mock up of what this could theoretically look like… I don’t think anyone else did this lol, but I just quickly went through the pages. I’m sure Hal would make it sound much better than what I could do, but I think that, done right, it could work well.

its decent, i just have no idea what “send the ships to a world they know” is supposed to mean in that context

Hal 9000 said:

That plays pretty well. However, it borrows shots from later in the scene and it may not work to lose them.

the only borrowed shot in there is the wide of rose and Finn, other than that there’s none

Knight of Kalee said:

I don’t know if this would fit better in the the Radical redux thread, but I like it a lot! It might be the most plausible way to both address the intel and remove the cringy “Somehow Palpatine returned”.
Maybe there should be a short reaction shot added before Rose speaks, because her facial reactions don’t quite match, and the characters would need a couple more seconds to process it. Maybe insert Chewie’s reaction in there?
Though I agree with Hal, I’d like to see how the rest of the scene plays out.

a shot of chewie shot could work, thanks!!

had another crack at the palpatine message, tried to keep it as real as possible

https://vimeo.com/434154765
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Chase Adams said:

StarkillerAG said:

I don’t know if we should be having this discussion in Hal’s thread. It seems like it would go better in the general ideas thread, and Hal doesn’t really seem interested in adding Palpatine’s message.

^
This.
Please listen to this.

yeah, it’s getting a tad fanedit-y

tried a little take on the palpatine message, might be a little too subtle

https://vimeo.com/433918483
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Oh wow! I had no idea this was still being worked on!!

PodracingThisIs91 said:

Hi everyone, big fan of what’s going on here! I’ve been following this thread from the very beginning I watched Workprint V2 and it already looked way better than the original film, and with the last changes getting ready I think we’ll finally get the movie we deserved (I mean, with the material we have. I wish Snoke could have survived TLJ to be the main villain here).

I know we want to slow things down here for better pacing, and speeding things up is a no no, but: I can’t stand Slow-mo Kylo. It takes me out of the movie so bad. I can see JJ telling A. Driver “Hey you’re a badass character, so you have to do badass stuff, like killing people going backwards, and at the same time, make sure you move your foot correctly so you’ll set this on fire at the same time, cause just killing people backwards is not badass enough for kylo ren. Oh oh, and we’ll make it slo-mo, cause it’s more badass, I know there isn’t slo-mo in star wars, but eff it, we’re adding flashbacks in this one already.”

I’m no editor, so this is just a thought, but could someone sped Kylo up to normal or even fast-sithlike speed? I think it would be much more starwarsy and, also, badass. I know, I know I’m loco, speeding things up WTF. I know this will bring problems like the score and all, and I know I’m very late for the party, but it has being bothering me lately and I wanted to share my thought.

Cheers and all my respect for all of you editors out there!

uhhhh

EDIT: just gave it a quick try and at normal speed, it’s almost incomprehensibly fast, I personally don’t think it’d work

Octorox said:

Hal 9000 said:
And I don’t have the ability to smooth out slowed footage. Can anyone stretch that shot, though? It’d be seamless if smoothed.

Does this work? https://drive.google.com/file/d/1B374STNUafUTx0V8qjZTDouqOYf08dvv/view?usp=sharing

in my opinion that looks pretty good

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got rid of my comment because it spoilt which one was mine

my picks are

Ap’Lek: 5,8
Kuruk: 5,7
Ushar: 5,8
Vicrul: 3,8

I’m seeing a pattern

ChainsawAsh said:

I think the Mustafar sequence looks pretty seamless.

I still hate the entire thing and think it should pan down from the crawl to Kylo’s ship flying through the nebula to Exegol. 😉

yeah sure it looks cool, but it absolutely butchers the already fragile pacing

poppasketti said:

Well, here’s a new pass of the Ochi ship!

https://vimeo.com/430068518
pw: fanedit

I stripped out the audio to focus just on the visual for the moment, and I’m curious where you all think this is at. Would love honest feedback!

I rescaled every part of the shot, tweaked the ship and rotation, added some sand blowing texture to integrate the elements, and a few other things. I could also try reversing the direction of the movement so Kylo is moving the other way.

its getting to a pretty good stage, making that ending shot more stationary helps a lot

ChainsawAsh said:

mrbenjamino said:

Also if anyone’s interested im making my own blu ray covers for my personal copy ill make. I used some international poster art, upscaled it, messed around with colours and made my own logo. Made a normal and crazy one.

Dude, these are great! What font is that for the TROS logo? I may have to steal it for the final version of my vanilla BR cover set, since I still haven’t found a “classic” TROS logo I really like.

Glad ya like it 😃 I’m at work at the moment but the font was from the very first logo for the original Star Wars, I found it just from googling it

made final versions of my own cover if anyone interested, again there’s a normal one and an alternate colour one.

Hal 9000 said:

Having the porg sounds linger into the next shot is a great idea!

Klaud is still in the end celebration scene.

I’d feel better about removing the un-explicitly-resolved Finn secret if it can be removed without making the underworld scene feel weird.

And nice poster! I can include it as a bonus, even if another is the main cover art to match the other two edits.

Thanks Hal! ill probably make one more version of the poster just cause there are some weird things going on with the logo

Also if anyone’s interested im making my own blu ray covers for my personal copy ill make. I used some international poster art, upscaled it, messed around with colours and made my own logo. Made a normal and crazy one.

snooker said:

to be fair that could easily be reframed as a part of his knowledge of First Ordet systems. It could be an a-class process or whatever tlj calls it lol

I mean I guess, but the force theme does play while he’s staring at the ship

Anakin Starkiller said:

Hal 9000 said:

I’m hesitant to remove the Finn having something to say thing because it’s a good chunk of what implies he’s Force sensitive.

I saw the whole movie and not once did I think Finn was Force sensitive. Honestly, does that really matter as a plot point? It doesn’t really contribute anything. Besides, the Force dwells in all living things, it’s not binary.

Removing Klaud from two shots

So from the whole movie.

it kinda does, the force is literally the only way he knows which ship is hosting the navigation systems

I know this edit is inconsequential and more just a personal gripe, but it just bugged me that there’s one shot of porgs and one sound with no trail off, so I just thought a small trail off would make it feel a little less slapped in lol

https://vimeo.com/431683159
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Hal 9000 said:
We don’t really see any birds or porgs on Ach-to so it feels sort of weird to add foley for something not even there. Maybe they migrated South to an evil island.

I guess that’s fair, I don’t really know, Ahch-To in TROS just feels more like two soundstages than a living, breathing island

Hal 9000 said:

Okay, Octorox, I went ahead and added vimeo-sourced DominicCobb footage for the two vision scenes. They are temp sources, and have only stereo audio, but it’ll help give a better overall sense of the shape of the edit.

“I’m so hungry, I could eat an Octorok!”

surely sneak a line from these Zelda games in the fleet scene

I know this isn’t an entirely important edit, but in comparison to TFA and TLJ, Ahch-To in TROS feels very barren and lifeless (other than that one shot of the two porgs), there is always usually porgs far off in the distance making noise. Maybe adding in Porg noises in the distance would help it feel more like Ahch-To?

just sent a few in now

axlanian said:

Casting Call time!!

https://vimeo.com/430474428

For this project, we’ll be giving four Knights voices. Who’s speaking is based on who is the focal point of each shot. I’m a bit unhappy about having to use a new Knight for the two final lines, but they simply show different Knights than were focused on earlier.

We’re recording a few options for different scenes so that Fan Editors have their pick of which lines they specifically would like to include in their edits. If you feel like you’ve got a great idea for a new line, go for it!

Please record yourself doing whichever lines you would like in a normal, but tense voice. Do not attempt to speak deep or low, just be as serious as you can be. If you want to record for all four knights, great! If you only want to try one of them, that works too! Krausfadr and I will decide which to keep after I have applied effects to all of them.

Due to the distorted nature of these voices, you do not need the greatest microphone ever for this project. That being said, please record without background noise, and please create lossless files (like a .WAV) and upload them to Google Drive. Then PM me with a downloadable link.

Thanks for your help!

oh wow i only just saw this! ill give it a crack

Hal 9000 said:

Unless morning is a mad rush, I ought to be able to mux and send it up. It’ll be a 720p ‘Apple Tv’ preset with 5.1 DD.

There’s obviously things that aren’t ready yet, but I’m okay doing this since what’s there is coherent. You could watch this as is and there aren’t any loose ends.

thank the maker(s)