TheDimitrios

Finally got around to watching this and boy it makes a difference. Switching the Padme and Anakin scenes around did wonders. Going from the kiss directly to the balcony scene… just genius.

Taking out all of the Gunray side plot that made no sense whatsoever was also such a good decision.

The movie is kinda watchable and coherent now. Same goes for Episode 1.

The only thing I would change about these is to remove the Grievous conversation with Palps in Episode 3, because that just creates some serious questions. Since you provided the HQ files, maybe I will do that alternate Cut on a rainy sunday afternoon.

Gandalf the Cyan said:

It’s nice, though I do think the 2nd shot should have more mist if possible.

Thanks for the feedback!

I will try to add more. Wanted to see if I can get away with this.
More detail: That shot has a Wipe transition on it, which makes multilayer roto work a bit of a pain.

I also have added some colorful glow around the planet and cooked up a new intro, new images will follow soon. Finally got a clear direction for the edit!

Trying to bring the Look of Kessel to a place where it fits with Solo. (Pics below)

This is how it looked in solo:

This is how it looked in Rebels:

This is how it currently looks in my edit:

What do you guys think?

WtarSars said:

It would be a real challenge if you were able to somehow edit the season in a way where Omega rescues crosshair but then Omega gets captured before leaving. Crosshair finds his brothers and together rescue omega. I just don’t like how she escapes and then is captured again and then escapes again. Reminds me too much of the ahsoka pike fillers from season 7.

It could resolve the issue of Pabu getting attacked by the Empire and therefore being aware of the happily ever after location for the Batch. That whole thing could be cut.

Radical Reedit for the whole show, actually.

Jar Jar Bricks said: In other words, even with failure as his greatest fear, he can still believe that the Jedi are doomed to fail in TLJ, thus why he wants them to end.

Even more: He could have been specifically afraid that his new order would fail like the old jedi order did.

Yesh, I think Ventress will be back in the next project, but without connection to her appearance here. It was just a little teaser for her return, nothing more.

I have to agree with the feedback someone gave here for Movie 2: The Phee scenes where 2 missions get teased, but do not come to fruition, feel a bit off.

I don’t exactly know how to resolve it. Maybe it is enough if the second scene shows them hanging out in the bar, listening to Phees stories to show that they are not busy currently?
So the Dooku mission gets brought up to show she has ideas too crazy even for the Batch, the second one makes us question her truthfulness and sanity? Would need a dialogue change when the Batch is called by Rex, but maybe thats doable?

smudger9 said:

TheDimitrios said:

smudger9 said:

TheDimitrios said:

smudger9 said:

TheDimitrios said:

There is an instance in the first Cad Bane scene where Omegas Bow just disappears from her back.
I think adding the few missing seconds there is worth it to not have the Continuity issue. 😃

What is it about that bow? 🤣

Just got round to looking at this. You’re correct. I’d cut Todo knocking the bow out of Omega’s hand. D’oh. Its back in and will be updated when I release episode 2.

Did you get around to this change and the blurry image sequence from ep2 yet? If yes, I would like a link to the new versions. 😃

Also: With one episode left and the Zillo beast playing a big role in the Finale presumably… What does the game plan fpr movie 3/4 look like currently?

Yes it’s fixed. The file is in the original folder link.

At this point my 1 or 2 movie plan depends on the length of the final episode. If it’s a standard length I think a 1-movie edit it doable.

Downlaoded again, the fix in episode 1 does not seem to be there.

Got further into episode 2 and at around 50:00 the music comes only from the left

Ahh sorry. I thought you were taking about the EP2 blurring that you mentioned. That is fixed and uploaded. I’ll replace EP1 with the fixed bow version.

Absolutely no reason to apologise. You are doing a great service to this community. 😃

smudger9 said:

TheDimitrios said:

smudger9 said:

TheDimitrios said:

There is an instance in the first Cad Bane scene where Omegas Bow just disappears from her back.
I think adding the few missing seconds there is worth it to not have the Continuity issue. 😃

What is it about that bow? 🤣

Just got round to looking at this. You’re correct. I’d cut Todo knocking the bow out of Omega’s hand. D’oh. Its back in and will be updated when I release episode 2.

Did you get around to this change and the blurry image sequence from ep2 yet? If yes, I would like a link to the new versions. 😃

Also: With one episode left and the Zillo beast playing a big role in the Finale presumably… What does the game plan fpr movie 3/4 look like currently?

Yes it’s fixed. The file is in the original folder link.

At this point my 1 or 2 movie plan depends on the length of the final episode. If it’s a standard length I think a 1-movie edit it doable.

Downlaoded again, the fix in episode 1 does not seem to be there.

Got further into episode 2 and at around 50:00 the music comes only from the left

Very cool to hear!

Totally agree.

Different question though after watching the BB finale: You had considered doing a Zillo Beast episode in the past. Has the likelihood of that happening increased with how the BB ended?

smudger9 said:

TheDimitrios said:

There is an instance in the first Cad Bane scene where Omegas Bow just disappears from her back.
I think adding the few missing seconds there is worth it to not have the Continuity issue. 😃

What is it about that bow? 🤣

Just got round to looking at this. You’re correct. I’d cut Todo knocking the bow out of Omega’s hand. D’oh. Its back in and will be updated when I release episode 2.

Did you get around to this change and the blurry image sequence from ep2 yet? If yes, I would like a link to the new versions. 😃

Also: With one episode left and the Zillo beast playing a big role in the Finale presumably… What does the game plan fpr movie 3/4 look like currently?

Sounds pretty good. Boba’s first line seemed a bit off to me, but not by much.

Cant wait to see the finished product.

DarthTzetzo said:

https://youtu.be/h7Tup1chjqQ?si=YTqyHhl5vSAlXRPM

This is a very nice addition 😃😃😃

Pretty neat visual gag. 😃

Just an idea: Maybe 4 movies total might give some leeway?

Not completely through, but in the beginning when the clones leave tje bar there seems to be a “ghosting” effect on the footage.

It is so much more interesting to have the Mandos question theor beliefs rather than bring up a technicality. Definitely a big step up from the original!
Cant wait to see it all in context. 😃)

I,think it is pretty close. Maybe 1 or 2 sentences less.

DZ-330 said:

Anything beforehand ruins Luke entrance on Ahch-To.

It’s one of those “I wish Lucasfilm would have done it but we can assume it happened between movies” things.

MAYBE, some kind of throwaway line from Kylo to Rey, about ignoring Luke’s persistent attempts to bring him back to the light.

I think any solution would have to be visual, because there is already so much being resolved via dialogue only.

Rough idea: What if Lukes Ghost is visible in the background of these two shots:
https://ibb.co/K2H6ZCn
https://ibb.co/9s3dhQx
It would be 2 very brief, visual appearances (maybe even make him blurry), both in scenes where Kylo is going through a decision process on whether to follow the dark side. Also, it would (kinda) follow the rule of threes, with Luke making 2 silent appearances to Kylo and then a third one with dialogue to Rey. It also visually foreshadows the image of the Force Ghosts standing behind Rey in the end.

edit: the second shot specifically would be cool because Kylo would be literally standing between Vaders Mask and Luke, visually representing his struggle.

How about this (needs more “pathos”, more about the general idea):

DD: Your people believe it is to be earned in combat, i know. But you did not loose Mandalore, because you accepted this weapon as a gift. You lost Mandalore because our tribes were splintered, caught in a cycle of fighting each other. Mandalorians have fought over beliefs, grudges and… this weapon. If the darksaber really is meant to be a symbol of our unity, we must not fight each other over it. It shall be a gift, given from one Mandalorian to another… one tribe to another… Because we are one people. Exiled from our home. Wouldnt it be our best chance to retake our home… together?

I think making the “rules” behind the darksaber a parallel to the Mandalorian infighting of the tribes has some potential. It also sets up the lesser importance of the weapon, making the unification of the tribes Bo Katans claim to fame.

edit:
As to the resolution of the Mandalore storyline. Since there is a good Armorer Model around, maybe a few scenic shots of Mandalore with a voiceover of her could do the trick? She could talk about how after the retaking of Mandalore and the destruction of the darksaber the tribes united in the belief in the Mythosaur and Bo Katan (who bears his symbol). It breaks the “show dont tell” rule, but since we have to work with what we got, it might be worth considering.

Acbagel said:
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Or maybe it is all total bullshit and the Mandalorian clan is indeed just a cult, but that’s the fun of it all. That’s how most of the galaxy perceives Mandalorians in the first place.

A thought that crossed my mind: The normal Mandos have the belief in the darksaber, the CotW the belief in the Mythosaur, both indicating the true leader of Mandalore.
The darksaber gets destroyed, but Bo Katan still is accepted as a leader. Not knowing your exact plans, maybe it is possible to do something with this thematic connection to resolve the darksaber thing which was kinda brushed aside in the show?

You already established that belief in the Mythosaur is belief in Mandalore. So what if the normal Mandos kinda also make a step towards the beliefs of the CotW. Mandalore has been retaken despite the darksaber being destroyed, so apparently (in their eyes at least), it was not the signifier they thought it was, so they accept the Mythosaur as a representation of Mandalore and the justification for Bo Katans claim to leadership.

This way each side would move a little bit towards the other. The CotW are less dogmatic about the helmet thing and the normal Mandos take on a core bit of belief of the CotW, with both groups now having a newly established common ground they can build upon, giving the Mandalorians as a people some nice growth.

Hope this was not too convoluted.

The Armorer Convo is getting close.

The beginning of line regarding the fallen Forge being her grave is not clearly audible I think. (The first 2 or 3 words), but the conversation itself flows nicely now in my opinion.

With the Mando scene in Tattoine a few exchanges sound tonally disconnected. If you happen to have a script for that as a basis, I could toss some ideas around. 😃

The Star Tours easteregg is not too obvious, had to listen to it twice to actually get it.

Would love a link, if someone has it. 😃

I tried a few things here, primarily to gibe additional reasoning to the armorers decision to choose this moment to make a helmet exception
…
"BK: You wished to see me?

A: Not long ago, this place was taken from us. Many brothers and sisters died trying to defend it… Now we have reclaimed it… By helping a former enemy…
(Pause)
You once sought to reclaim Mandalore…

BK: That dream has never died.

A: Our peoples history is a tapestry of triumph and tragedy, that forged what we know as “the way”. Each of our great leaders added to it, shaping our present and future… Sometimes in ways that had been unthinkable before…
Remove your helmet!

BK: But…?

A: It is said that a true leader can endure the Gaze of a Mythosaur and emerge unscathed, their eyes reflecting the beast’s Spirit. You claim to have seen a Mythosaur. A claim as bold as it is rare… Prove it or this Fallen Forge will be your tomb… Remove your helmet!

BK: This is the Way.

A: To claim such an encounter is to assert a connection to the very soul of Mandalore. It is to claim a right to leadership, to shape the way, to guide our scattered people back to unity.

BK: I understand.

A: Then look into my eyes and let me see the depth of your claim. Reveal Your purpose to me here and now and face our destiny… Don’t show me your eyes, show me the true leader behind them… We stand on a precipice, Bo-Katan. This is the moment where you will rise or fall…

[Music, scene change]

A: Brothers and sisters! Mando’ade! Gather around, anade. Bo-Katan Kryze is going off to bring other Mandalorians in exile to us so that we may be one people again.

PV: But she shows her face…

A: The Mythosaur has fixed her gaze upon Bo-Katan. She has been chosen to walk a new way. (The Spirit of the Mythosaur IS her helmet now.) (The burden of this responsibility has been placed on Bo-Katan’s back.) To liberate our people from the past… And to restore our future… So that our children will know the glory of the Way. (We shall return to Mandalore as one people!) She will lead us home

That was quick.

The dialogue still needs some tweaking, but overall I,think it works!