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Hal 9000 said:

About Hux. I think we tossed that around but it doesn’t really make the movie any better. Just causes more problems and makes it abrupt.

Fair enough - you’re the expert! And I’m very excited reading about your proposed V2 ideas!

Also, I know it’s not on the agenda right now, but regarding the thought that Leia should “conjure” Han for Ben…I honestly think that it’s one of the few instances of ambiguity that actually works in the movie. Personally, I always saw that scene as a physical manifestation of Ben’s inner dialogue - a visual representation, done for the sake of a visual medium. I never interpreted it as Han literally appearing.

That’s just me though; I realize that scene caused a lot of contention with fans. Again, you’re the expert, not me!

Hey Hal, I’ve only watched bits of your edit so far, but it’s so much improved over the original that it’s almost comical. The pacing, the color correction…just incredibly well done. I haven’t been this excited about a fan edit since Despecialized. Thank you, thank you, thank you!

I did have a thought though - what do people think about not having Hux as a spy? It massively contradicts with his borderline over-the-top Imperialism that we see in the other two movies. Surely, I can’t be the only one who thinks that it’s jarring to go from this guy to “I’M THE SPY!!!”

And the thing is, it really wouldn’t take that much work to remove. Clip a couple of lines about “The Spy!” when Poe and Finn come back from their reconnaissance trip in the beginning, and then cut straight from the two of them rescuing Chewie and running down the hallway to them recovering the Falcon. That way you also avoid the awkward “Hero is captured > Hero escapes > Hero is re-captured > Hero re-escapes” setup, which is very strange pacing-wise. Hux is literally completely irrelevant to the film.

The BD25s are still up, but if anyone would be willing to share the BD50s, that would be amazing! Thanks!

Been looking for a Rey-Nobody edit. Any chance I could check it out?

Just watched Ep. 2! I don’t really have many notes on this one - you did a solid job of trimming out the fat and making a concise, satisfying adventure. The spider droid works really well, how we don’t see it until Anakin does. Also, your introduction is amazing; I literally said “Oh damn” out loud. And I love the Mandalorian-style concept art for the end credits!

Great job!

Christophsis sounds like it’s coming together really well. And I do think that the ending with Bail works! Like I said, Anakin turning his head really does help to sell the merge.

Also, thank you for taking the time to consider my notes! Yours is the first project I’ve been able to watch as it’s in development (in the past, I’ve only discovered fanedits after they’re completed), so I hope I was able to help a little. Can’t wait to see more!

I just watched 1.01 - Christophsis. Really, really nice job! A couple of observations I had while watching:

• I love the atmosphere of the music starting, and then the video coming in a little later.

• At 2:05 the sound transition is a tad noticeable. Maybe you could erase a bit of the sweeping shot of the room, then cut to after Obi-Wan’s initial strike, and do an L-cut on the audio. There’s a moment here where Obi-Wan sort of gears up to do a large swing, which might make for a good “joining the battle” kind of move.
  Alternatively, you could just cut directly from the initial break to the close-up shots with the three of them. That might help to hide the fact that Anakin and Ventress are on the steps, snap to the ground level, and then are back on the steps.

• The music starts to drown out Ventress as she says “We’re about to take control of this world.” (Although, the editing here is pretty much seamless with the transition, so I’m genuinely not sure if it was like that in the original episode.)

• Maybe the Bail Bombing should be right after Anakin and Obi-Wan escape Ventress and she says “Prepare to march.”? That way it gives a little extra time for the two of them to get back to base, and it directly connects Bail’s “Get me General Kenobi” with his message to the Jedi.

• I love how you connected the Bail segments to the ground assault segments. It took me a few minutes to realize those were even from separate episodes.

• I’m getting some slight stuttering at 4:38, and one frame at 5:08…annnd a little at 5:17. Just every so often throughout, actually. Is it just me?

• The transition back to the battle at 5:24 feels just a hair rushed. Is there any extra time in the shot of the Admiral, that it could linger on him a smidge longer?

• Overall, fantastic job toning down Ahsoka in the episode. One thing though, you could probably cut out the bit about “Do we still need this thing? I can’t take it anymore. I have to stand up.” by cutting directly from Anakin’s line to them lifting off the crate. That line makes her go from peppy to whiny, imo. Maybe even swapping Anakin’s “We have a ways to go.” so that it comes before Ahsoka’s “I think we made it past them!” That also tracks better with Anakin letting her stand up, and then hitting the droideka.

• It feels weird to me that Obi-Wan surrenders without a plan. Maybe it could work if you cut from him standing in attack formation, to the close up of him, to the shot of the droids? That might imply that he’s overpowered by them, and thus being held by them in the next shot.

• Great job timing Bail thanking Anakin with Anakin turning his head!

• When Anakin talks to Yoda about Ahsoka, maybe it could be structured like this: Yoda says “Trouble with your new Padawan” > Obi-Wan says “I was explaining to Yoda about the situation.” > Anakin: “Really?” > Ahsoka glances at Anakin, Anakin looks at her (shots moved from before Obi-Wan’s line) > Yoda: “Perhaps we can…” and the scene continues. I feel like it will have more emotional weight if Ahsoka and Anakin share a glance as he’s deciding whether to accept her, rather than “Oh no, even Yoda’s talking about us.”

Overall, really great job blending the three episodes together, and especially with making Ahsoka less annoying! I didn’t even notice the lack of "Sky Guy"s. Other than the nitpicky stuff above, my only “large change” suggestion might be to cut the opening with Ventress altogether, and just open with the bombing on Bail. Her stuff doesn’t really matter to the rest of the plot, and she talks about “her loyal informant” as if that person matters in your edit.

I’m just discovering your work now, and I’m in love with it. Honestly in love. The original thin lightsabers look like characters are just whacking at each other with limp, bendy noodles. Your enhanced lightsaber effects truly make the show as a whole look so much better.

I hope you can continue with this project!

xxtelecine 7xx said:

Episode in progress.

https://youtu.be/PclCWjmjBgI

Dude, seriously, this looks incredible. I really hope you’re able to continue on with the rest of the season! (Dare I wish for the whole series? lol)

Also, I think that if it is actually possible to remove the lightsaber helicopters, the show would be better for it. The Season 2 finale is incredibly strong, and those helicopters are basically the only thing that reminds us “Oh yeah, Rebels is geared more for kids.” They just feel so wrong.