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- #1408927
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- The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE]
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1408927/action/topic#1408927
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Hey Eddie.
I’ve watched the first 4 episodes and will post with my thoughts later today. (Loving it so far though.)
Just wanted to comment on the Domino Squad one. I’m glad you dropped the cold open. It feels far more fluid now and it works as just being one test as opposed to two. I definitely think you should re-insert Cutup’s death though. Removing it just creates confusion as the character just disappears off screen now. It also sets up the Eel for later with Rex, which right now feels a bit out of left field.
The only other thing that feels off is 99’s reaction to Heavy’s death. I know we don’t explore their relationship as much as in the original episodes but the timing just feels a bit too short after the ‘Oh’. If there is anyway to drag that out for just a few more seconds then I think it would benefit a lot from it. I also felt the timing on the fade to black from Heavy when it reads ‘2 Weeks Later’ was off. I think it would feel more natural keeping the screen dark after the fade for a little longer and then fade in with the text. Right now, it just feels a little too quick.
Other than that I loved the episode, the pacing is great and the narrative flows smoothly. We hit the important beats when it feels necessary and you don’t overload the character and drama with action, it hits a really nice balance - if that makes sense.
You’re doing an awesome job and I can see your edits definitely being my go to for any rewatch. Cheers.