Just watched the current versions of your edit – fantastic!! It works so well as a finale for the show. I actually would echo the comments made above regarding changes. I can’t wait to see your final version!
I’m looking for adaptations of the canon stories for the Knights of the Old Republic and Old Republic video games!
I’m not sure if this is the right place to post this, but I wanted to share it with this crowd. I was thinking a lot about Tarre Visla and how little we know about him. I was also thinking about Mandalorian culture, especially some of the mythos surrounding the Mythosaur and the dark saber. And since we don’t have specifics on the “song” mentioned in Mandalorian…I thought I’d give it a shot. The forgotten verse is basically a piece that ties directly into Tarre himself, and a short story I’m writing about his legend. Let me know what you think! (If you hate it, please be cool about it lol)
The Song of the Mythosaur (Translated from the Old Tongue)
Beneath the endless skies it strode,
A beast of shadow, vast and bold.
The flame of Mandalore its breath,
The thunder of its heart, a song
That shook the earth and shattered the dawn,
And called its children to rise as one.
Through famine and war it bore them hence
To forge their wills as tempered steel,
But lo, unyielding, they cracked and fell
As ancient stone beneath the wheel.
And the beast saw rifts grow deep and wide,
Scars of glory, ruin, wrath, and pride.
Then silence drowned the forge’s flame,
And songs of old grew still with time.
The beast lay waiting in its tomb,
Beyond the reach of blade or rhyme.
It waits in shadow, cold and still,
It waits as ever darkness will.
But one day, when the stars descend
To meet the breaking of the light,
Thunder shall call the clans to stand,
Their hearts to rise against the night.
And the breath of the beast shall crack the sky,
And with one voice shall Mandalore cry,
“The song of the people shall never die!”
So let it ring, both near and far,
Through water and stone, through void and star,
The roar of mighty Mythosaur,
The song of Mandalore.
The Forgotten Verse (Spoken only by the eldest of elders, never sung aloud)
But on that day, from ancient stone,
A shadow forged through blood and flame
Shall rise to meet the breaking light,
And wield the mighty mending blade.
It’s blood for blood that sews the right
To answer the call of wills made steel,
The song of old invites the wheel.
Beware the voice that stirs the beast,
For fire shall cleanse and ash shall fall.
The way is carved through light and dark,
When warrior and sage are one with all.
So let it ring, both near and far,
Through blood and bone, through void and star,
The roar of mighty Mythosaur,
The song of Mandalore.
**note: due to the nature of translations, it’s possible that some of these lines have slight errors. (Read: they do. I wrote them in with the idea that translating ancient languages that have smaller vocabulary with many variant meanings can cause misinterpretation depending how they’re read. The last line is a great example. What do you think the “textual translation error” might be here?)
Would love a link!
Overall, I think this is a solid reordering! One Phase One note, though. While I totally get your reasoning for moving Iron Man 2 so late, considering that Phil Coulson leaves for New Mexico in Iron Man 2 and states as much, it may not make sense to put it where you have it. Just a thought.
Would love a link!
Anyone heard any updates on this? I’m so stoked for it!
I’m so stoked for this edit! Any updates?
Actually, overnight I had a little idea for how to improve it, and made a few orderings:
I think #5 is best, using zoom levels of the camera to connect them.
I REALLY love the moment. Fantastic way to integrate that beat.
If I may offer my feedback, I do feel like timing on the cuts (even in #5) isn’t quite right. On a Force connection, there’s a rhythm to it, and right now, something’s a little off. Maybe it feels like the flashbacks linger a tad while the present moment cuts too fast? More “balance” as it were, lol.
That all being said, we probably have different editor’s eyes. Excited to see where you land!
I love this idea so much. Can’t wait to see the results of your work!
Any updates on this? Would love to see your hard work!
Would love a link as well!
On Ahsoka 3, it would play out as Ahsoka 3 followed immediately by the Vader-lightsaber moment. That would still leave the final episode on a strong point - Ahsoka and Rex burying the dead. It just would mean that burying the dead didn’t lead directly into the snow falling on that planet and the Vader moment. But if these are all codas, I think it works fine.
I agree that episodic or blended movies would be ideal, and they’re definitely on the cards, but yeah, for now, I’ll keep it simple! 😉
Love it!
Random…did you notice how in Ahsoka 2, the character design for Obi-Wan is AOTC, but in Ep. 1 of TCW, his design is ROTS?
Would love to check this out!
I love these ideas.
Ahsoka 1 - Love the idea of intercutting with Ep. 1. I think I’d be interested to see if it matches tonally.
Ahsoka 2 - YES. The TOTCW episode is a great idea. Splitting them is the best option, IMO.
Ahsoka 3 - So yes, I think it belongs as a coda. I LOVE the idea of taking the in-episode coda from the finale and sandwiching it around this. However, what would the ending of the final episode be? Would it be strong enough?
Dooku episodes - So I’m of two minds here. I think to keep it consistent with what you did for the end of the series, it’s probably best to keep them as separate episodes and say when to watch them. However, I do like the idea of blending them in and splitting TPM into episodes for a season zero. My only thing is that if you did that…I’d really, really want to see the same thing done for ROTS/the final season lol. Especially with the idea of blending in footage from the animated duel sequence. But that’s just me. 😃
Can’t wait to see what you decide to do! Love that you’re including this stuff!
Super interested to hear what material you’ll include from Tales of the Jedi. Only the post-ROTS stuff?
Would love a link!
Congratulations on a job well done!
That totally works!
I really love where this is going. IMO, the idea of him going to Diayu really works well.
If I may, a couple thoughts:
What if the Leia vision starts coming on him in a couple of flashes while he’s in the streets, then he goes to the warehouse to seek clarity? That way, it bridges the gap a bit.
Also, as far as the vision itself goes…this is just a nitpick, but the foley feels a bit too crisp, especially given the effects of how visions are used in the prequels. What about adding a bit of echo? And one last thing…what’s your reasoning for ending the vision on that lingering shot of ROTS Obi? For me, it feels like it would be more fitting to finish the vision either on the babies, Padme, or Anakin, since it’s feels more like the Force is connecting his memories with these events across the galaxy.
I’m personally of the opinion that you’re on the right track not bringing Leia in until this point, honestly. It keeps the audience’s perspective with Obi-Wan, and I think that’s actually pretty crucial.
The placement of the moment on the star destroyer with the Grand Inquisitor/Vader didn’t quite work for me; would you mind clarifying your rationale for putting it there? I think the knowledge that they were chasing someone was just a bit confusing.
I eagerly await what happens next in your cut! The tone is AWESOME.
Would love to check this out! Link, please? 😃
I’m a huge fan of the direction you’re taking this! Can’t wait to see it!
This is interesting, your change list looks similar to what I ended up with initially when I went in to make my ow 3-in-1 and pared back to nothing but Rey and Kylo’s scenes. I went on to add in much more from there, but I’m keen to see what you make of it!
Just sent you a PM on fanedit.org. Would love to check out what you came up with!
So I got that new Mac. 😃
Went back through this thread tonight, and I just want to say that I’m really moved by how supportive you all were during my first go round. It’s inspiring enough that I’m gonna make this happen! I’ve got some travel happening over the next couple weeks, but I’ll post an update when I have something to show.
Hope everyone has had a great year so far, and thanks again for sticking around!
I really like the new ending, although I think I’d need to see it in more context (i.e. from when he leads them out with a flare) to be sure it doesn’t feel weird to flash back.
As for the bat chase…I’d say keep it upside down, personally. It’s a pretty iconic shot. I do like cutting Batman leaning his head in though. I’d also say make the cut from Penguin’s reaction to slamming him against the wall just a tad snappier; something just feels a bit off. Perhaps either the sound effect feels like it needs a tiny bit of overlap to smooth the transition or the reaction shot could be trimmed. Something like that. It’s already good. Just a nitpick.
Great work!