Damn I knew it was too long. Though I’ll stand by that I think it needs to get more specific to feel like a proper crawl.

FWIW, i was able to shorten mine to 90 words

It is a time of despair. Luke
Skywalker, sworn to rebuild
the legendary Jedi Order,
has vanished.

In his absence, remnants
of the fallen Empire known
as the FIRST ORDER have
risen from their stronghold,
Starkiller Base, to threaten
regions encroaching on
the fragile New Republic.
Funded in secret by daring
senators, General Leia
Organa leads a RESISTANCE
against the growing power.

Desperate to find her brother
and restore hope to the
galaxy, Leia sends her best
pilot Poe Dameron in search
of a clue to the last Jedi’s
whereabouts…

DZ-330 said:

EPISODE VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

It is a time of despair.
Luke Skywalker, sworn
to rebuild the legendary
Jedi Order, has vanished.

With the Jedi now facing
extinction, agents of the
evil FIRST ORDER have
risen from the shadows
of an Imperial fortress
to claim supremacy over
countless worlds beyond
the fragile New Republic.

Growing restless amid
endless debate, daring
Senators have secretly
commissioned the pilots
of a brave RESISTANCE
to find the last Jedi and
restore the light of hope
to the darkening stars….

That last paragraph is awfully close to The Phantom Menace’s crawl. I actually like the language in the original TFA crawl as imo that last paragraph should really hone in on specific context for the opening scene.

Not that anyone asked, but i find writing crawls endlessly fun so here’s my take:

EPISODE VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

It is a time of despair. Luke
Skywalker, once sworn to
rebuild the legendary Jedi
Order, has vanished.

In his absence, remnants
of the fallen Empire known
as the FIRST ORDER have
risen from the stronghold
Starkiller Base to claim
their supremacy over
regions beyond the fragile
New Republic. Funded in
secret by daring senators,
General Leia Organa leads
a RESISTANCE against the
growing power.

Desperate to find her brother
and restore a spark of hope
to the galaxy, she sends pilot
Poe Dameron to the planet
Jakku, where an old ally has
discovered a clue to the last
Jedi’s whereabouts…

arabian said:

Kestrel said:

arabian said:

I watched it and overall it’s very well done. I do have notes:

…

Wow, thanks for the extensive feedback! I did think about including “A long time ago…” But I’m going to wait till I get to ep6 and decide if I want to keep Huyang’s line where he says it. If I decide to keep that, I want it to remain a meta reference to the Skywalker saga, and not an awkward meta reference to itself. I’m leaning toward that, so decided to leave it out.

Maybe someone will come up with some workaround suggestion. I only watched the show once so I dunno.

I get what you mean in not wanting to not do the exact same thing, but it’s really not the exact same thing at all. The situations are just different enough, and they are spaced apart. Morgan is talking about the one who stole the map from her and just gives Baylan her name (which is literally how it happens in the show), and Clancy Brown introduces her by name to the crowd (again, literally how it was done in the show). By doing it this way, you’re given us what the show gave us, but allowing them to mirror each other and say: These are our protagonists.

After watching through it again, I think I’ll compromise and further tighten Ryder’s speech, then cut to Sabine’s intro after he says “Where is she?”

For the lightsaber issue, I’ll see if I can keep in the scene where Hera briefs Ahsoka on Home-One while retaining a brisk pace. Baylan asking Morgan “Who is this Jedi” prevents any implication that he and Ahsoka have encountered before.

arabian said:

I watched it and overall it’s very well done. I do have notes:

…

Wow, thanks for the extensive feedback! I did think about including “A long time ago…” But I’m going to wait till I get to ep6 and decide if I want to keep Huyang’s line where he says it. If I decide to keep that, I want it to remain a meta reference to the Skywalker saga, and not an awkward meta reference to itself. I’m leaning toward that, so decided to leave it out.

As for the Star Wars title into, I’m not sure if that’d fit with the music. The current one fades in well with the eerie violins. But I’ll play around with it.

I knew the lightsabers were going to be the iffiest thing retained. I thought it might be implied she’s encountered them before but I know that’s a stretch. It can’t be easily cut because it’s integrated into her conversation with Sabine and the subsequent reveal that Sabine has taken the map – and it’s a good development to Baylan and Shin’ characters. I may alter the crawl to make a reference to some “previous encounter with Morgan’s allies” though I am not a huge fan of altering canon.

When Ryder tells that guy to cover for him, it always gets a laugh from me. I know most people would probably cut it, but I couldn’t bring myself to. I may play around with tightening up the awkward moment so it’s not quite as cheesy though. Plus, having a character revealed after someone else says their name was already done to introduce Ahsoka. I didn’t want to do the exact same thing again.

Star wars arrowverse said:

Cool,like the fact that it gets straight to the point.

Thanks for checking it out!

vranir said:

I really like your choice of shot to introduce Ahsoka herself.

Thank you, I originally had that cut straight to her jumping out of the hole but decided the map needed it’s due introduction. To make that sequence go faster, I spliced together the shot of her turning the first pedestal with the shot of her standing up from the last one. Consequently, the shot of her smirking makes a great intro.

This is a WIP

Hey all, I know there’s a few Ahsoka edits out there but I’m passionate about turning this whole series into a proper feature-length movie. I want this story to be something you could watch on the big screen and stand toe-to-toe with the other Star Wars films. This will be my first released fan edit, so any and all feedback is appreciated.

The final edit should be no longer than 2 hours 20 minutes.

Major changes:

• A traditional-style opening crawl (in red)
• Most scenes are seriously tightened (faster, more intense!)
• No focus on New Republic
• No/minimal WBW or Anakin fan service

Another minor goal is to make this story stand more on it’s own outside of Rebels. To the end, the crawl has been altered to the following:

AHSOKA

The GALACTIC EMPIRE has
fallen and a NEW REPUBLIC
has risen to take its place.
However, sinister agents are
already at work to undermine
the fragile peace.

Eleven years ago, Imperial
GRAND ADMIRIAL THRAWN
was subjected to exile by the
hands of Jedi Padawan EZRA
BRIDGER with help from the
mythic hyperspace whales. A
sinister plot is now underway
to find Thrawn. If he should
return, it would galvanize the
IMPERIAL REMNANTS and
rekindle the civil war.

Former Jedi Knight AHSOKA
TANO has captured one of
Thrawn’s old allies, MORGAN
ELSBETH, and learned of a
secret map which is vital to
the enemy’s plan. Ahsoka now
searches for the map as
Morgan is transported to the
New Republic for trial…

I have just finished cutting down episode 1 and adding the new crawl. Check it out here:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/11xEKKdetMO0Js1HfuVLnOjKvQqurKIyt/view?usp=drivesdk

Watching through the full saga fanedited and this is the first of yours I’ve seen (I opted for octorox’s ep I edit). Just wanted to say excellent work. Couldn’t tell what was a deleted scene and orignal, it was all integrated and edited so masterfully. The last time I watched ep II, I’m pretty sure my brother and I gave up 20 minutes in and fell asleep. It was too bad as I remember watching it a lot and loving it as a kid before ep III came out. Now, I feel like I can finally love it as much as I did back then, so thank you.

I’ll list some of my nitpicks here in case you deem them worthy of changing for a future version.

• The lack of Dexter’s brief introduction felt awkward and unecessary. Obi-wan and this random Alien just appear in a diner out of nowhere. You can kind of figure out that Obi-wan knows this guy, but it’d be more effective imo to just leave the scene of him greeting Obi-wan from behind the counter.
• I noticed in the changelog that ending to the packing scene was reinstated. I’m curious why that decision was made because it felt like the only thing really out of place in their love story. The rest of it was handled really well and makes their romance pretty believable, but the “it makes me uncomfortable” and his creepy stare was distracting for me.
• The color grading for their kiss was too dark and felt out of place compared to the rest of the film’s visuals. I’m not sure if that scene really needs to be at sunset, anyway. The pear scene could easily be morning or the kiss could be the day after.
• I understand the music transition from the kiss scene is the original music as it cuts off when Padme regrets the kiss, but it doesn’t work here. It just sounds like a poor edit. Something from “love pledge” could probably be plugged in there for a better transition.

Hello, all. I’m presenting a fully scripted 124 page rewrite of Episode IX. I hope it is enjoyed by whoever finds the time to read it! Here’s a brief overview:

Featuring exciting action based on the writing of The Force Awakens script. This is meant to be a legitimate alternative to The Rise of Skywalker that still feels as though it could have been written by JJ Abrams and belonged side-by-side with the other two sequel movies. This was initially conceptualized in 2018 after the release of The Last Jedi. I fell in love with TLJ on first viewing but after several discussions, I came to understand people’s issues with it. I conceded that it set up episode IX with a nearly impossible task to satisfyingly conclude both the sequel trilogy and the saga as a whole. But after much thinking, a few ideas came to me and the following story was birthed.

Opening crawl:

STAR WARS

EPISODE IX

RESOLUTION OF THE LIGHT

The galaxy is a hellscape! Everywhere,
there is chaos. Since Luke Skywalker’s
death, Supreme Leader Ren has destroyed
all remnants of the once mighty Empire
and the ephemeral New Republic. All that
remains is the FIRST ORDER.

But there is still a spark. As the
Supreme Leader begins a campaign to find
the source of Snoke’s power, the successors
to General Leia Organa travel across the
galaxy in secret, spreading hope and
securing valuable allies.

They have just been called to the
mountain planet of Dyama to aid in its
RESISTANCE…

Premises:

• Rey, having taken on new students, is afraid she is not a good enough teacher and feels overwhelming guilt for any mistakes she makes. She fears she is repeating the past failures of the Jedi Order during both the republic and under Luke.
• Finn is fired up with a vengeance against those in the First Order who have wronged him and those he has learned to care about. This is particularly realized through his rivalry with Phasma who has once again returned from the grave.
• Poe is committed to ending this war by uniting disparate allies led by a restless Chewbacca. The wookie chose a more violent path a la Saw Gerrera. In his search for Chewie, Poe and crew visit the smuggler’s moon and meet Lando.
• Ben is numb as supreme leader and longs for a connection he knows he can no longer have. He finds the source of Snoke’s power, a massive and ancient sith holocron, and is simultaneously haunted by the trauma he experienced from Snoke.
• General Hux makes plans to take over Kylo’s rule and wipe out the Resistance all in one fell swoop. His first step is to convince the Resistance he can be trusted. When his treachory is found out, the Knights of Ren are called upon to protect Ben.

Conclusions (spoilers):

• Rey learns to accept that she will make mistakes and has to trust and forgive herself. She comes to understand that she is essentially good. She refuses to kill Ben knowing it may be the greatest mistake she’s made so far.
• Finn reunites with Rose and finds new purpose in uniting the First Order’s stormtroopers against their leaders. He learns there may be a place in the galaxy for even the Phasma’s of the world.
• Poe and Chewbacca meet on Kashyyyk and trust Hux in a desperate bid to finally win a decisive battle. When Hux betrays them, Poe is separated from his group. He accepts he must be left to die in order for his comrades to retreat safely.
• Ben kills Rey and regrets it. In a kind of force-guided psychological experience, Ben is greeted by his grandfather and learns he has a power within him that Anakin was only able to dream of – the power to save the one’s he loves from death. With the energy of the holocron, Ben is able to revive Rey and they share a mind-meld in which their memories are mixed together (and it is revealed in a twist that much of the story the audience has experienced up to this point is a result of this mind-meld). They come to a near-perfect understanding of one another. Ben learns to forgive and regains control of the First Order in order to de-escalate the battle and eventually dissolve it entirely, accepting whatever consequences the galaxy may have for him.
• Hux is found along with Poe toward the end of the decisive battle and is taken into captivity.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1pU3WezlyJRZ_LFptIjmZH3dYSbtVJN6-/view?usp=sharing

Just finished downloading all three movies but the ROTJ torrent just gives me folder title "BDMV" with a couple .bdmv files in it and a .m2ts streaming file in it but no .iso? 

chyron8472 said:

Kestrel said:

Erik Pancakes said:

Mine works just fine on my PS4.

What did you burn? The ~7GB AVCHD or the ~18GB MKV? Did you burn it onto a DVD-R DL or BD-R? What software did you use? If you used the MKV, did you convert it to a BDMV folder first, or are you just playing an MKV file that's on a disc (which the PS4 definitely wouldn't support, but many Blu-Ray players would)?

 Just for future reference, would a DVD DL still work on PS4?

Yes.

And also what's the difference between AVCHD and MKV? What would work for PS4? Sorry I'm so new to all this.

MKV is a video file format. The specifics of it (like how MKV is actually just a container) aren't important for what you're asking, but suffice it to say that standalone players may or may not be able to play video files--and then only specific file types. It depends on the player as to whether it can play files and, if so, which ones. But usually if people play video files, they do so from a plugged in flash drive or external hard drive (or copied to an internal hard drive as is the case with my PS3) instead of from a disc.

AVCHD, in a nutshell, is a limited bluray format. Basically, it's lower-bitrate, menuless HD video that can be played on most standalone bluray players but is small enough in size that it can fit onto a dual-layer DVD (DVD9).

 Ah, ok. Yeah that makes sense, thanks much and wish me luck!

Erik Pancakes said:

Mine works just fine on my PS4.

What did you burn? The ~7GB AVCHD or the ~18GB MKV? Did you burn it onto a DVD-R DL or BD-R? What software did you use? If you used the MKV, did you convert it to a BDMV folder first, or are you just playing an MKV file that's on a disc (which the PS4 definitely wouldn't support, but many Blu-Ray players would)?

 Just for future reference, would a DVD DL still work on PS4? And also what's the difference between AVCHD and MKV? What would work for PS4? Sorry I'm so new to all this.