Hal 9000

Yeah, but without that countdown why is everyone hurrying? Even dead Luke has to hustle and can’t just allow Rey to process her stuff on her own on the island for a few hours or days.

And I don’t think I’ll end up removing Luke’s line. I know it’s a parallel to Obi-Wan’s, but we’ll see. Don’t really have a problem with it and the scene may be chopped up enough.

OP updated with a fresh revision of my ideas, removing several and tweaking some. Rather than cut and paste and denote 90% of DominicCobb’s thread’s ideas, a last item refers to it.

Here’s my current idea for a crawl:

Episode IX
THE RISE OF SKYWALKER

The iron grip of the FIRST ORDER has spread to the farthest reaches of the galaxy. Kindled by the feat of Jedi Master Skywalker, the populace of countless worlds have risen in defiance.

As Rey, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training under the ailing General Leia Organa, the fledging Resistance gathers intel to forge a path to freedom.

Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren searches relentlessly to unlock the secrets of his former master’s power, determined to suffocate any threat to his rule…

Honestly I wouldn’t even say that.

I love almost all the ideas you outline here. I don’t know why you insist on calling your project useless, and hope you’ll execute these ideas. I think “my” project would benefit greatly from your help with some of these. (“My” in quotes because it’ll be tough for me to spend any length of time on editing, given my life situation now.)

I like it! Perhaps the line “She didn’t tell me” could be removed also. With what we can all do collectively, I’d bet so, even if we had to use visual FX.

Me neither. I like it, even if I can’t quite picture it. I just remember Luke speaking about Palpatine stuff in what felt like an embedded way.

I suppose something like this could be nice:
“What are you afraid of?”
“Myself.”
Stern look
“Leia knew it, too.”
“She never told me/still trained me/whatever the exact line is.”
“Confronting [that] fear is the destiny of a Jedi… if you don’t face Palpatine, it will be the end of the Jedi.”

I’m not sure which option we will end up going with, and I remain open to 1 or 2. I think it’ll depend on whether 2 can be pulled off seamlessly in my estimation. I know a big hurdle will be the Luke scene.

Makes me sad that I would type “the Luke scene” about Star Wars Episode IX.

Those are both really good! I think I like the first better. That little musical accent on the shot changes really helps sell it. Excellent tweak.

I agree. TROS is a very poor conclusion to this whole thing, and it presents as averse to the sort of fan editing that became a cottage industry for the prequels.

krausfadr said:

ChainsawAsh said:

You could always use “Hello there!” Classic.

lol

Where’s Frink? Add that line a second or two after Luke vanishes.

Disregarding new lore from TROS yet considering the material we have to work with, I like #2.

If I were consulted while the movie was still being made and had that list to choose from, I’d go with 6, or maybe 4.

I won’t remove the “Rey Skywalker” thing. ‘Nobody’ to ‘Skywalker’ is okay with me.

This edit will be our ‘Scouring of the Shire,’ if we’re lucky.

Thanks, RogueLeader, and I think that’d be great. I can at least serve as an MC to guide, compile and execute. Not judge, jury, or executioner, though.

I… don’t really have strong feelings yet about the Rey thing. I guess it depends on what can be done well. But I don’t feel that we need to necessarily hold to ‘canon’ for this one since it just seems so convoluted and hamfisted. At least with LOE, I had lore from 1983 to consider.

And as a random thought for now: does anyone know where we could find masked Kylo dialogue to the effect of “you were right”? I’d like to replace his line to Rey of “I never lied to you.”

Thanks! Should be a little better for us, but nothing earth shattering.

Certainly. I just took a new job that starts in a month, and time for interacting with this will be very scarce. But I’ll do what I can when I can, and appreciate the group effort this will be.

Wow, this thread has had a busy day! What an interesting idea. It’d take some doing. It’s still hard for me to entertain it much, but hopefully seeing the movie again in a couple weeks will bring me back up to speed.

Doesn’t seem worth it.

krausfadr said:

Let’s play mad libs:

“You don’t just have power, Rey. You have his [funny noun]. You’re a [funnier noun].

power / Palpatine

Ewoks / Mary Sue

Clone DNA / bad experiment

stunning brown eyes / midichlorian

“You don’t just have power, Rey. You have his beauty. You’re an angel.”

Palpatine’s son is a clone of Palpatine now? He doesn’t look like him.

Unless someone wants to do a little deepfake project.

It’s two frames, but still. If you wanted to watch V4 it should be fine for that, just don’t author a physical disc just yet.

I noticed a little oopsie in V4, so I’ll have to eventually release a fixed version. But I may as well hold off in case we have any more bright ideas related to TROS.

It’s a video glitch during Leia’s first conversation with Finn. The cut point was misaligned when I go back to the BluRay from footage from NeverAr.

^ Thanks, nl! It is hard to totally picture all of those scenes in that order, but once I can see the movie again I’m sure I’ll be in a better place to appraise it in terms of desirability and feasibility. Scene transitions can be difficult, but this film’s relentless BLAH pacing may allow for less polish than I’d usually strive for.

I can’t listen to the Emperor’s line right now, but that’s be amazing if it were able to blend in seamlessly after all.

Probably!

ChainsawAsh said:

I’m down with that idea, but that makes it even more necessary to come up with some way to communicate to the audience at the end that Palps is 100% for realsies dead this time, you guys - otherwise it’s just, “Well, we saw all his clone bodies earlier, clearly he’s just gonna get cloned again.”

Hmm, I’m not sure how this causes greater need for confirmation that he’s dead forever this time. It was already sorely needed to begin with! (Unless he represents the sort of evil that cannot be killed along with any one man and is never truly vanquished.)

nl0428 said:

Hey, Hal. I know that you have a life as us fan editors do too. But I was wondering that in the future, most likely when the film arrives on Blu-ray, since there’s no deleted scenes available, would you be interested if I offered you a pitch scenario of restructuring scenes in the narrative?

Of course! Don’t be shy.