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How much advice could any of us have for this situation? I’m sorry, but I’m afraid wii have nun to chuck at you.
WHEN THE PAWN HITS THE CONFLICTS HE THINKS LIKE A KING WHAT HE KNOWS THROWS THE BLOWS WHEN HE GOES TO THE FIGHT AND HE’LL WIN THE WHOLE THING 'FORE HE ENTERS THE RING THERE’S NO BODY TO BATTER WHEN YOUR MIND IS YOUR MIGHT SO WHEN YOU GO SOLO, YOU HOLD YOUR OWN HAND AND REMEMBER THAT DEPTH IS THE GREATEST OF HEIGHTS AND IF YOU KNOW WHERE TO STAND, THEN YOU KNOW WHERE TO LAND AND IF YOU FALL IT WON’T MATTER, CUZ YOU’LL KNOW THAT YOU’RE RIGHT – FIONA APPLE
ALBUM: 8/10
ALBUM COVER: 3/10
ALBUM TITLE: 11/10
BLOODLETTING – CONCRETE BLONDE
ALBUM: 8/10
ALBUM COVER: 5/10
NEVER ENOUGH – PATTY SMYTH
ALBUM: 7/10
ALBUM COVER: 5/10
SHAPESHIFTER – MARCY PLAYGROUND
ALBUM: 7/10
ALBUM COVER: 9/10
Don’t like stop motion, Spuffy? Now I know I hate you.
I do! Just not in this way. And what did you say after that?
Well, then, I only mildly dislike you after all.
Ok. Coll. P.S, You really need to chill. An admin said that hes adding nee rules to iff topic. So you better be careful what you say. MUAHAHAHAHA 😈
It would really help if you could proofread your posts or use a spellchecker. Half the time I can’t even tell what you are trying to say.
He’s trying to be a mini-Darth Solo and failing pretty miserably at it.
I like Jadzia with this hairdo. I wish she had worn it in more than two episodes.
I am undone.
I just now realized that’s a photo of Felicity Jones. Damn, she’s unrecognizable* with her hair down and wet.
*Not to mention sultry.
I guess I’ll just have to settle for Rogue One on Netflix or Blu-ray, whichever comes first.
And the BD better not be too costly.
Ooh, was it me?
*Possessed needs attention*
Then I will provide it!
Those are good, interesting ideas, Scholar. I’ll see how it goes implementing them.
After a night thinking things over, I believe I’ve figured out a few ways to fix the most grievous problems with this screenplay.
Place the battlemoon in the Bajilon system with the clone fleet
Bring SGW-0027 back into the main story
Have Obi-Wan land on Geonosis following Operation Battlemoon/Battle of Bajilon and rescue Darth from the Raiders
This’ll allow the story to have a main villain while also tying Obi-Wan’s and Darth’s stories closer together.
The downside is I don’t know what to do with SGW herself. Between arriving in the Bajilon system and encountering the Jedi saboteurs, she has to do something. There was her ongoing battle of wills with her second-in-command and the Clonemasters, but I don’t think there’s enough of a story there for her, and I’m not going to insert her tangential flashbacks back into the script.
^ALLOL!
God, I so desperately want to see Rogue One. Damn my lack of money and convenience.
If it ain’t bad, it ain’t nothin’!
meep
I’d kill the parents that named me Meep.
You’re all pulling a Spuffy in this thread.
^ALLOL!
Ellipses are sexy.
Yeah, I can’t take that guy seriously anymore.
Has he given Jyn Erso a silly nickname yet?
I love Darth Solo’s barely comprehensible mutterings. I hope he never changes.
I had a dream that the second season of Stranger Things was already available for streaming, that I wouldn’t have to wait months to see where the story goes.
*sigh* Why can’t life come with a fast forward button?
Thanks for your thoughts, Scholar.
I’ll say your criticisms are certainly valid. Hell, I’ll even say I agree with you. The story did go off the rails following the Xuthltan incident, with too many unconnected character arcs going on and no central villain to take the stage. In trying to simplify the convoluted mess that was the earlier draft, I may have simplified things too much.
This screenplay has been a bit of a drag for me, and I’m not keen on going back to it, but I may have to. I’m a bit bereft of ideas on how to fix the problems you’ve noticed, though. If you’ve got any scenarios, feel free to run them by me; I’m eagre for creative input.
- Rogue One: 0/10
I don’t even have to see the movie to know this is complete BS.
I’ve been interested in reading Paradise Lost. From the look of things, though, it’ll be as much a chore for me to understand as Shakespeare.
Don’t like stop motion, Spuffy? Now I know I hate you.
I do! Just not in this way. And what did you say after that?
Well, then, I only mildly dislike you after all.
