I believe Sherlock’s edit will do that. I’m pretty sure Hal said he’s keeping that as-is.
That’s a good point, Burbin. As for the line, what about: “The fleet has heavily modified weapon systems”.
Ah okay. Hopefully the Sherlock edit gets finished! I just really don’t like that scene. Detracts a lot from the movie and from the moment.
That URL links you to a folder, which contains a test clip as well as the footage that needs to be doctored to fit the new line. If anyone with the ability to do so could make it work, I think we will have gotten away with this change pretty effectively.
I gave it a shot: https://streamable.com/vch7w3
As for the line, what about: “The fleet has heavily modified weapon systems”.
Yeah, though instead of “weapon systems”, maybe just “super cannons” or “superlaser cannons” or “superlaser helix cannons”, just to make it clear he’s talking about the big gun at the bottom. Or maybe we could just call them “Dreadnought-level laser cannons” so it’s immediately clear it’s a big deal.
What’s the purpose of referring to the cannons when this edit removes the fact they are “planet destroying”?
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Wow, that was quick!
And I think that would be some nice connective tissue to TLJ by mentioning the Dreadnought. I’ll generate that shortly.
It would be nice to bring up because otherwise they just appear out of nowhere at the end for an easy explanation as to how they can destroy the ships easily.
Exactly. Since they appear anyway it’s cleaner to acknowledge them somehow. Something like that would be welcome.
And thanks, Burbin! I’ll tuck that in and see how it plays.
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Here’s a decent generation: https://drive.google.com/file/d/14h0B5y1LioNbtuVBdA-2j7Wi5wA1L0iC/view?usp=sharing
Yeah, the Resistance’s whole plan hinges on the fact that hitting the cannons ignites the SD’s main reactors and brings the whole ship down, it’s the only reason they believe they have a shot. But in the current cut of Ascendant the cannons come out of nowhere on the Resistance briefing, it’d be better if they’re set up earlier.
Here’s a decent generation: https://drive.google.com/file/d/14h0B5y1LioNbtuVBdA-2j7Wi5wA1L0iC/view?usp=sharing
It’s a flat reading of it, so I wonder if shuffling the dice could finesse it at all.
And might be nice not to repeat the word ‘fleet.’ And be something for Chewie to react to.
“Their new/added laser cannons outgun us.”
Not that… but something like that.
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This should do it:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1u8h_AF_gtX0YwGqPfxBPzpDOy4jCQK4A/view?usp=sharing
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1zC_ku0-CzBY_-VSNZRk1GgqujBfijRQh/view?usp=sharing
How about “the ships have been modified”, or “each ship has been modified with Dreadnought-tier laser cannons”. I’m pretty sure the Resistance was already outgunned against the First Order so that’s not saying much.
Hal wanted something really negative for Chewie to react to. The way I did it is the only way to condense all the necessary information, I think.
EDIT: To respond to you, Burbin, I was going to say “we don’t stand a chance” but I didn’t want Poe to be too doubtful about all this.
Would you mind generating Burbin’s as well? Comparing them to dreadnaughts probably communicates a lot to Chewie to be fair.
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Here ya are: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1oqWbImOKe9Yyxdq8uPlEVyuEDrY4iehJ/view?usp=sharing
EDIT: Here are a couple alternatives - https://drive.google.com/file/d/1oxGCYCnYp1SpBBALFKd7zcOu9FOh3vyf/view?usp=sharing and https://drive.google.com/file/d/1pUB39eRidmC8RhKI6GMOBxXtfOiY7BFL/view?usp=sharing
Here ya are: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1oqWbImOKe9Yyxdq8uPlEVyuEDrY4iehJ/view?usp=sharing
EDIT: Here are a couple alternatives - https://drive.google.com/file/d/1oxGCYCnYp1SpBBALFKd7zcOu9FOh3vyf/view?usp=sharing and https://drive.google.com/file/d/1pUB39eRidmC8RhKI6GMOBxXtfOiY7BFL/view?usp=sharing
have you tried using “scared” as prompt? perhaps could be something
the dark side of the force is a pathway to many abilities some consider to be unnatural
I originally used the term “dejected”. Here are some options with “scared”:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1T9T3txv5srA-IlzlZAKiLonisQV45iXB/view?usp=sharing
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1MsGLnXn0Bv8EggePO-NEgif6WsNRKsBa/view?usp=sharing
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1svUqUZ-GPkt477tXcLniEf3tt8zDipX9/view?usp=sharing
I like that last one the best. I’m also using like 3 or 4 other adjectives so it’s kinda set in its ways tbh.
Here’s where we’re up to, and it isn’t half bad!
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kknVSS6pVbUgJINQrWwoxU2sR8nTiAE6/view?usp=share_link
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It’s definitely worthy of being in a cut of the film. The lip movement has improved significantly. I’m wondering if it might need a few minor adjustments, though.
That’s really smooth. I have to admit it always gave me a bit of OCD to hear the Emperor’s theme truncated in Ascendant where the “16 hours” cut happened. I’m glad you have found something very useful to put in that gap.
It is 100% on my list, Alex! Haha
I had no idea more was in the works for Ascendant, Hal. That’s fantastic! Do you have a proposed v3 changelist?
Jar Jar, those new lines sound incredible as always! I do wonder though if it sounds a little…technical? As if Poe were just reading off the Wookieepedia article for the Sith Destroyers. What if it’s a little less specific: “His followers have been hiding something for years - an enormous stockpile of star destroyers from the old empire, outfitted with new weapons and armor. He calls it the Final Order.”
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I mean, Poe is actually recalling specific details that were given in the message from the FO spy. So it’s not completely implausible.
Plus, it gives the audience instant context for what these things are capable of. Just in the previous movie, we see the Dreadnought annihilate the Resistance base with its big gun.
Yeah, I think it’s a fairly elegant solution to making our plot change work without leaving seams. It’s incredible that something not on any of our radars two months ago could swoop in and afford such luxury.
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I wonder if we could AI generate a Poe line to fill that gap where he talks about light speed skipping, that was pretty much the only noticable cut in V2.
Here’s what’s on my radar for a V3 update:
Burbin’s Sith eyes for Rey✅
AI voice for Leia - two lines; waiting for updated versions. These are “He’s too dangerous” and “A Jedi needs her weapon.” Would be nice to get a few alts for her saying “Rey” because TROS uses the same twice.
AI voice for Kylo Ren✅ - “You were right” and “They paid for your protection… in more than one way.”
AI voice for 3PO - Replacing “What a dreadful situation, where is an R2 unit when you need one” and the little exchange between he and the stormtroopers which could literally be whatever we want
AI voice for Luke - Unlikely at this point, or maybe to smooth out “sensed the end of her Jedi path” with a syllable or two
AI voice for Rey - “The Jedi texts taught me something.”
AI line for Ben Kenobi (page 626)
Yellow lightning? (As much as I like it, it has more of a place in the Rey Nobody version)
Shuttle vs TIE? (I know, I know… I’ll abide by the prior poll)
Fix pink saber on Exegol✅
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For Leia, were you planning on still including: “I sense a great deal of uncertainty in you, Rey.”? I can get those other Leia lines easily enough.
For 3PO, I would like some options written out before I start generating things.
I have no idea what Poe could talk about instead of lightspeed skipping.