Star Wars: The Last Jedi - The Dark Cut (* unfinished project *) — Page 6

Thanks for the thumbs up, I’m glad I got it right!

No Leaf Joke

https://vimeo.com/265290771

-Cut from Rey saying “Okay” to Luke resting her hand on the rock.
-Replaced “Reach out with your feelings” with just “Reach out”

Handman said:

darthrush said:

Thanks for the thumbs up, I’m glad I got it right!

No Leaf Joke

https://vimeo.com/265290771

-Cut from Rey saying “Okay” to Luke resting her hand on the rock.
-Replaced “Reach out with your feelings” with just “Reach out”

Looks great. Can’t even tell there were any changes made. Even though I thought this was one of the best jokes of the film, I must admit that seeing it played straight is much more effective.

Thanks! And I’ll be honest, it quite literally made me laugh out loud (very well done) so it was a tough decision to make but it just works so much better when it is played seriously.

darthrush said:

Thanks for the thumbs up, I’m glad I got it right!

No Leaf Joke

https://vimeo.com/265290771

-Cut from Rey saying “Okay” to Luke resting her hand on the rock.
-Replaced “Reach out with your feelings” with just “Reach out”

Wow. I really enjoyed that moment in the theater, but my goodness, it really does play out better like this. You’ve convinced me.

Here’s another attempt, this time trying to include the shot of Luke discarding the reed he is shown holding. I submit it to get a sense of whether people think the shot is better in or out.
https://vimeo.com/265385058
password: fanedit

Both were done really well … I have to say I like the leaf joke though…

Torn, I am. I love the leaf joke, but this is so good.
Consider this, I will.

Hal 9000 said:

darthrush said:

Thanks for the thumbs up, I’m glad I got it right!

No Leaf Joke

https://vimeo.com/265290771

-Cut from Rey saying “Okay” to Luke resting her hand on the rock.
-Replaced “Reach out with your feelings” with just “Reach out”

Wow. I really enjoyed that moment in the theater, but my goodness, it really does play out better like this. You’ve convinced me.

Here’s another attempt, this time trying to include the shot of Luke discarding the reed he is shown holding. I submit it to get a sense of whether people think the shot is better in or out.
https://vimeo.com/265385058
password: fanedit

That works great Hal! I’ll drop that addition into my timeline. It helps bridge the moment between her saying “Okay” and him resting her hand down.

Like all of you, the leaf joke was just so darn good. It was executed perfectly and was so hard to cut.

Here are two clips showing how I refocused the Supremacy sequence. I streamlined the Supremacy infiltration to give the whole sequence better flow and lend more focus to Snoke/Kylo/Rey.

First Clip (They Enter Ship)

https://vimeo.com/263992324

-Cut Iron gag
-Cut everything in the dressing room
-Cut BB-8 tripping a trooper
-Cut evil BB unit scanning them.

Second Clip (No Talk At Door)

https://vimeo.com/263993419

-Cut entire part of Rose/Finn/DJ arriving at door, everything with the medallion, etc.
-The next time we see them they are at the door, asking DJ how much longer it will take.

RogueLeader said:

Pretty seamless! I really like the pacing of the second clip. Did you cut Rose giving DJ her necklace since you cut him giving it back? Because we do see her wearing it later in the film.

Oh danggg. That shouldn’t be too hard. I can cut her giving it to DJ and just start that scene with DJ stealing from the ship. And his conversation with Finn is the one meaningful thing from that whole scene so no issues there.

Collipso said:

just jumping in to say: amazing work so far darthrush. really, great job.

Thanks! Really hoping to get everything as seamless as possible.

Forgot to mention that in the first clip I also cut BB-8 tripping over a trooper and the evil BB unit scanning them.

darthrush said:

Kylo Pleads to Rey Rescoring - UPDATED

https://vimeo.com/265136372

I tried to build upon many suggestions when I got to finetuning this rescoring.

-Firstly, the music now fades out when we cut to the bridge with Hux. I was able to bridge the rising drums between two points at the end of the piece to do so and it flows pretty well.
-The music has been turned down a notch so that the dialogue can stand out more.
-The music now starts earlier and fades in more gradually.
-The dialogue audio has been polished up.

Please tell me how you all like the updates to the scene!

This is a rare case of rescoring with a prequel theme that actually works for me. In fact, I kind of love it.

There’s just one thing that bugs me. Now that the music is so much more dramatic, Kylo’s lines about her parents being ‘filthy junk traders’ sounds a bit quotidian and out of place. This is also a result of Rian’s penchant for having characters overexplain things, so I’d really like to hear a version where Kylo is silent after Rey says ‘They were nobody’. Maybe just skip right to ‘You have no place in this story’, and maybe show her reaching out to take Kylo’s hand before cutting to the cruiser turning around.

This would also avoid the confusion of Rey’s vision where she clearly sees a ship flying away from Jakku.

NeverarGreat said:

darthrush said:

Kylo Pleads to Rey Rescoring - UPDATED

https://vimeo.com/265136372

I tried to build upon many suggestions when I got to finetuning this rescoring.

-Firstly, the music now fades out when we cut to the bridge with Hux. I was able to bridge the rising drums between two points at the end of the piece to do so and it flows pretty well.
-The music has been turned down a notch so that the dialogue can stand out more.
-The music now starts earlier and fades in more gradually.
-The dialogue audio has been polished up.

Please tell me how you all like the updates to the scene!

This is a rare case of rescoring with a prequel theme that actually works for me. In fact, I kind of love it.

There’s just one thing that bugs me. Now that the music is so much more dramatic, Kylo’s lines about her parents being ‘filthy junk traders’ sounds a bit quotidian and out of place. This is also a result of Rian’s penchant for having characters overexplain things, so I’d really like to hear a version where Kylo is silent after Rey says ‘They were nobody’. Maybe just skip right to ‘You have no place in this story’, and maybe show her reaching out to take Kylo’s hand before cutting to the cruiser turning around.

This would also avoid the confusion of Rey’s vision where she clearly sees a ship flying away from Jakku.

The only place I see a little disconnect between the music and dialogue is when Kylo says “You come from nothing, your nothing.” It might just be his delivery but it is the one spot it might a feel not epic enough. I don’t really have an issue with him describing where her parents came from. It feels like he is basically spitting in her face and driving it home how pathetic her lineage is.

I will consider making the cut though and welcome others opinions on this idea. I love your suggestions for fanedits Neverar so keep em coming, the one about the flashback with Luke and Kylo still has me thinking 😉

I am still stuck on the Leia scene. Is it enough to just show her on the stretcher or do we need to see more? I can’t really find any suitable footage to add.

darthrush said:

NeverarGreat said:

darthrush said:

Kylo Pleads to Rey Rescoring - UPDATED

https://vimeo.com/265136372

I tried to build upon many suggestions when I got to finetuning this rescoring.

-Firstly, the music now fades out when we cut to the bridge with Hux. I was able to bridge the rising drums between two points at the end of the piece to do so and it flows pretty well.
-The music has been turned down a notch so that the dialogue can stand out more.
-The music now starts earlier and fades in more gradually.
-The dialogue audio has been polished up.

Please tell me how you all like the updates to the scene!

This is a rare case of rescoring with a prequel theme that actually works for me. In fact, I kind of love it.

There’s just one thing that bugs me. Now that the music is so much more dramatic, Kylo’s lines about her parents being ‘filthy junk traders’ sounds a bit quotidian and out of place. This is also a result of Rian’s penchant for having characters overexplain things, so I’d really like to hear a version where Kylo is silent after Rey says ‘They were nobody’. Maybe just skip right to ‘You have no place in this story’, and maybe show her reaching out to take Kylo’s hand before cutting to the cruiser turning around.

This would also avoid the confusion of Rey’s vision where she clearly sees a ship flying away from Jakku.

The only place I see a little disconnect between the music and dialogue is when Kylo says “You come from nothing, your nothing.” It might just be his delivery but it is the one spot it might a feel not epic enough. I don’t really have an issue with him describing where her parents came from. It feels like he is basically spitting in her face and driving it home how pathetic her lineage is.

I will consider making the cut though and welcome others opinions on this idea. I love your suggestions for fanedits Neverar so keep em coming, the one about the flashback with Luke and Kylo still has me thinking 😉

You’re welcome to use that or any other ideas I throw around 😃

About the lines being out of place, it feels like for a Star Wars movie less is more where dialogue is concerned. Some of the best scenes in Star Wars have no dialogue at all, allowing the audience to imagine the specifics of the scene. So when Kylo beats Rey over the head with her nonexistent lineage, it’s giving the audience information that would be better left to the imagination (especially since the details of this information don’t quite fit with what we already know).

I know there have been many versions of this change but here’s my take on removing the prank phone call between Hux and Poe. I am in the camp of removing it all together, so this specific cut only applies if you are fine with the entire joke being gone.

https://vimeo.com/265904489

-Brought forward music after Poe says “Happy beeps”
-Sped up Poe hitting a button to imply that he is hitting it to boost his X-wing forward.

Someone on FE.org asked about what deleted scenes I will be using so I thought it would be a good idea to paste my response here. The user, samspider (an awesome faneditor), was asking if I would include the caretaker deleted scene for context of my response.

"In regards to deleted scenes, I have taken a close look at all of them and think I will only be using one of them and that would be Luke Mourning. I am not sure yet where I will use it since I think it can go in a number of places but I will use it for sure.

The reason for not including the Caretaker scene is a few reasons:

1. I really like us seeing a ray of hope for Luke and Rey at the end of their second lesson and then its sadder to see that it doesn’t work out. I think this was one of Rian Johnson’s own reasons for cutting it.
2. It portrays Luke in an unfashionable light. In the second lesson, we see Luke very broken and sincere. He opens up to Rey and seems to grow more understanding of the need for him. The deleted scene shows Luke straight up lying to Rey and laughing it off. I think it kinda shows us that Luke will let nothing change his mind. Whereas in the theatrical cut, you get the sense that he was close to changing his mind at the end of the second lesson.
3. Lastly, just for pacing reasons. It is a very long scene and since I don’t like it very much for reasons above, it just makes sense to keep it out of the film to keep the pacing at a nice brisk flow."

Crait Battle

I present my new and refined Crait sequence. The edited sequence shown below goes from the moment that the Falcon shows up to when speeders start getting picked off one by one. Full list of cuts below video link.

https://vimeo.com/266178659

-Cut Porg screaming in Falcon cockpit
-Cut Finn yelling “They hate that ship!”
-Cut Porgs flying around in Falcon when it is being chased
-Cut Rose saying “Now that’s a big gun.”
-Cut Hux repeating Kylo’s orders.

New Yoda Transition

https://vimeo.com/266242506

-Used OST for transition

Both of those worked really well, nice!