kane1138 said:
I think your voice fits pretty well, HAL.
Me too, although I can certainly understand that he'd prefer to hear *someone else's* voice on his version.
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Anyway Hal, I thought I better chime in with my thoughts on this, seeing as you ended up using the We cannot say how long she will survive wording I proposed.
Your re-recording sounds pretty good I reckon, but seeing as I know how much effort you've put into your prequel edits, I thought I'd better bring up a very *little* thing that struck me after I listened to your clip a couple of times. As I previously mentioned, I haven't checked out any of your versions yet...so I didn't know you were *also* including the medical droid then saying the words We are preparing to deliver the babies immediately afterwards...and you hadn't mentioned that line in your comments at the time.
So here's the thing I wanted to point out. You might be 100% happy with how all three lines now sound, but I kinda think that the droid saying We at the start of *both* those sentences sounds a bit 'off' somehow, and doesn't flow as well as it could. So seeing as you are using that third line too, my slight alteration to what I suggested would be this instead -
She has sustained severe injuries. I cannot say how long she will survive. We are preparing to deliver the babies.
As I say, it's a very little thing indeed, and you'll just have to decide for yourself if you prefer this more 'flowing'-sounding alteration using the I instead of the first We, or if you prefer the still correct, but slightly more 'stilted'-sounding current wording from the droid.
You've done some good stuff, either way.
(Thankfully I won't have this kind of wording problem to begin with...as unlike yourself, The Cutter, Q2, and eventually adywan too...I'm keeping Padme *dead as a dodo* for what I have in mind for myself - regardless of what Leia says in ROTJ - as I'm including certain footage that I prefer where that's concerned - although it *won't* be due to her 'losing the will to live'!) :)
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Final thought concerning your dialogue - would the words I cannot say how long she might survive be better or not, do you think?