The first shot inside the deathstar control room with tarkin facing the screen would be better to remove Alderaan entirely and outer space have a graphic or readouts… The reason being if Alderaan is on the screen why is Leia so surprised when he says “home planet of Alderaan” as if it was not there already. This was meant to be a “reveal” Leia looks stupid. It’s not your fault but it could be better to hear the sound of screen changing then cut to viewscreen with Alderaan in orbit.
I don’t this that would fix the issue as Admiral Motti litterally says they have entered the Alderaan system quite clearly as Leia walks up to Tarkin. I also don’t feel like she is surprised by them being at her “home planet of Alderaan” I think its more the “I have chosen to test this station’s destructive power on your home planet of Alderaan” bit, that she was upset about.
Personally I don’t this is an issue the way it already is.
Point taken but you know the control room shot during battle of yavin has Motti in the background which preceeds him walking up while Tarkin is looking at the screen. And his footsteps sound effects are on the tail end of that establishing shot used for the white uniform imperial officer instead walking out the shot. It’s a chopped up sequence audio and video and literally that establishing shot of the viewscreen could literally have meant to have been for the final battle or go somewhere else. But it does do a good job of showing us the control room. If you listen to the radio drama it plays out as I said like a “reveal”. Try to picture Motti saying “we’ve reached the Alderaan system” with his footstep sounds restored too and then cut away to the viewscreen with a graphic then Leia appearing instead after that insert so it would not feel so all at the same moment and she was not present and privy to that comment by Motti.
There is of course also if Alderaan is on the screen why does Tarkin need Motti to tell him also.
One more point regarding the chess game inserts of R2D2 in death star armory room above docking bay…
These 2 shots I think were meant to be the deleted chess pieces animation shown in the special effects documentary. Especially telling because it would seem R2D2 takes another of chewbaccas pieces triggering han to say “pulling peoples arms out of their sockets when they lose” I appreciate that could be tricky to pull of given the quality of the footage but they could easily be luma keyed as elements in of themdelves and there is also the blank chess board shot is also presented in the documentary. So it’s doable but probably not very good quality. Or alternatively it went with “now be careful R2” after the warning they were given by ~Han,
The first chess shot is the character bashing another over the head. Problem in that though I’m not sure if the reciving character animation is shown. My memory is not good on this.
Now even though this is a TV 4:3 presentation observe how it’s cropped to oust the backdrop also on the R2S2 shots.
Anyway Would be good to use Lukes muffled audio from radio drama for “with the blast shield down how am i supposed to fight”