TFA: A Gentle Restructure (Released) — Page 4

Yes, exactly. I really like the clip you’ve shown but I presume it isn’t the final form. Whenever you have it how you think it should be, upload it at full quality and let me know. But it’s not like I see it as obviously unfinished or anything.

I had the chance to watch the workprint myself tonight. If I may say so, I felt it worked remarkably well.
I did, however, feel like one thing was missing: Leia reporting that the weapon was about to be used, to explain the apparent urgency as the Resistance prepares to head to SKB. So, I went back and took another look at the briefing scene. I was able to pull something off that I feel solves this issue:
https://vimeo.com/171864217

You’ll notice that I am unable to have her identify the target. However, this may be a good thing, since it would help explain why she didn’t attempt to warn the Republic. We see Hux tell his side that they’re targeting the Senate, and we even saw he and Snoke decide on this. But, Leia appears to only know that they are preparing to fire at all.

I think the happy nature of the post-SKB destruction is justifiable in terms of movie sensibilities, but I did a super quick mockup of removing the fighters’ celebratory shots, shortening the following shot so the music matches up. You can still hear some of the vocals; this was just a quick mock up to get the idea across, and it will be easy to polish later:
https://vimeo.com/171864218

Correct. One goal, which carries a necessary second:
Move Hosnian Prime’s destruction to after Han’s death.
Do the little things to make it work (clean up the mess).

I think I may cheat slightly by also removing Threepio’s line, “It is very unlikely that R2 would have the rest of the map in his backup data.”

Eh, I think not mentioning it at all does best to avoid awkward questions without raising new ones. If they thought he probably did, why aren’t they doing more to try to wake him up or extract it from his memory? If they don’t suspect he does have it (like Threepio makes awkwardly clear), it makes sense he would wake up and surprise everyone.

I may as well show you all the rough attempt at showing the fighters react to SKB firing. It’s obviously slowed down, and sort of looks like hot garbage. I do not plan on using this.
https://vimeo.com/171935900

Skipped to the halfway point and watched it through the end. Much better to have events unfold like this. It gives a greater sense of urgency to the attack, even though I know the original through and through, the idea that maybe they’ll get the job done before SKB fires makes for a more engaging experience IMO. Always thought the Hosnian Prime destruction being visible was dumb. Watching this the very first time in the theater I left thinking SKB should have fired just before it was destroyed. Now if you can make Leia hug Chewie…lol I can definitely see the finished edit being my preferred way to watch this and definitely the way I’d show it to anyone watching for the first time if such people exist.

Hal 9000 said:

I may as well show you all the rough attempt at showing the fighters react to SKB firing. It’s obviously slowed down, and sort of looks like hot garbage. I do not plan on using this.
https://vimeo.com/171935900

Like the idea. Looks like some cockpit reaction reshoots are in order ala Adywan 😉

And just see Finn’s gums flapping afterward?

I’m not declaring “final cut” yet or anything, but it looks like we can wrap this project up sooner rather than later. It sounds like Jackpumpkinhead will be supplying the four FX shots needed (Hux exiting the room, two TIE shots, and unmasking Ren).

We gotta come up with a name for this thing. The name of the film won’t be changed, so maybe just a tagline like “Lone Star Edition” or something.
If anyone wants to, once we have a name, put together some cover artwork, that would be extremely helpful. My graphical skills like that are totally crap. I’m open to suggestions, but I think the same three distribution methods I used for my prequel edits will do (DVD5, 720p mp4, 1080p mkv). So, DVD and even BR covers would be fantastic. I’m in the process of doing a write up for the fan edit listing that can be used.

I’ll also have to grab a calculator and do chapter stops and subtitles. I’ll prepare English subtitles, and anyone is welcome to take these and do their own translations. If they can be finished reasonably soon afterward, I can include them in the release. If not, I can link to them the way I had to for subtitles produced after the prequel edits were released.

Then, we can book appearances on various talk shows and plug the edit. But it seems like this can be a gloriously short-term project for once!

If you’re looking for just general TFA art that could work as a cover, I created this yesterday:

There’s another that I made with a two color scheme.
http://originaltrilogy.com/topic/The-Episode-7-Fan-Posters-Thread/id/15196#957885

Cool stuff. The sunspot one would be appropriate. Could you still modify the text on it to feature something like “The Force Awakens… Lone Star Edition,” and maybe a list of screen names in tiny bottom-of-the-poster type print. If possible, could you adapt it so the star closeup covers a wider, DVD or BR cover width? Just looking ahead.

Totally serious title idea: Hosnian Shot Last

Thanks, TK251. And there can certainly be multiple covers and posters. A modification of the real theatrical poster with our moniker could be included, but a cool teaser style trailer with the Sun closeup would be great to have as the main avatar.
Anyone have any other good name suggestions? I’m not married to “Lone Star Edition.”