Revenge Of The Cut - Star Wars: Revenge Of The Sith (* unfinished project *) — Page 11

I think it looks great the way it is... With the exception of R2 in the middle of the droid bodies... I would wonder how he got there, and then the cut right before he activates the pods is way to abrupt.... I'd try to find a shot of R2 right there at the door. Otherwise, it's great.

I think R2 flying out of the pile of droids and him being at the terminal should be separated.  Put him at the terminal between Anakin running over to Obi-Wan and Palpatine saying "leave him".

Hey, I was going through your clips again, and I noticed something in the Anakin Dream one.

When he wakes up from his nightmare, he sits up with his hands to his head and only at thát exact moment (in the original) you hear the robotic gears of his arm. You've duplicated that sound when he puts on his robe, but it's exáctly the same as the first one.

Besides, I'd rather have no sound at all OR (all kinds of) gear sounds at every move the robot arm makes in that sequence. Can you tell me whether you will adjust this further?

Let me finish by saying I'm still eagerly awaiting the final edit (+ OST!) :)

Cutter, you've got 3 Private Messages though it's a trilogy and I ask you to take them as one (very, very) long message

This becoming something special. Let me know if you need any help.

greenpenguino said:

How about a shot where you see the droid ship blow up. Similar to the final shot of the death star in the original star wars? So after Anakin and Co escape the ship blows up and you transition to the meeting thing between palpatine and the others.

Yes I will do that

before I wanted to keep at all costs the sequence with the ship falling to Coruscant, that's why I didn't make the ship explode...but it does not work well because when they leave with the pod, the ship is at horizontal 

mrbenja0618 said:

and then the cut right before he activates the pods is way to abrupt....

rpvee said:

I think R2 flying out of the pile of droids and him being at the terminal should be separated.  Put him at the terminal between Anakin running over to Obi-Wan and Palpatine saying "leave him".

 good idea, it works well

Loconut said:

You've duplicated that sound when he puts on his robe, but it's exáctly the same as the first one.

 

ah ah you got me !

Loconut said:

no sound at all OR (all kinds of) gear sounds at every move the robot arm makes in that sequence. Can you tell me whether you will adjust this further?

yes it can be fix- maybe a different sound, more subtle

tmrbenja0618 said:

This becoming something special. Let me know if you need any help.

 thanks, what's your speciality ?

Here is an idea I just had :

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EM2-cuj4whE

feedback are welcome

The Cutter said:

I think R2 flying out of the pile of droids and him being at the terminal should be separated.  Put him at the terminal between Anakin running over to Obi-Wan and Palpatine saying "leave him".

 good idea, it works well

Let's see it! :D

I like it!!  Star Wars-up the shot and it'll be great.  I think you should slow down that establishing shot of the balcony though, it's too quick.  I'm also trying to decide if I like the music at the end, but I guess it's good.  If you are creating new music though, try some kinda mix of Leia's theme and Across the Stars for the Alderaan shots, I think that'd be neat.

How are you establishing Padme taking refuge?

A little color correction to match the sunset colors, a longer establishing shot of the balcony, and this could work brilliantly.  Perhaps the background behind Padme could be made more futuristic looking as well.  I like the music as is, though I'm sure you could do a nice mix that might suit it better.  I wonder how you'll deal with the scene where Bail says he'll take Leia? 

If you are doing away with dying in childbirth, maybe it might be possible to change Anakin's dream so that he just sees her death and not how it happens.  That way it is still a self-fulfilling prophecy.  If you are doing away with his vision then you just have to cut it so Anakin says "You died." instead of "You died in childbirth."

All he would have to do is have that fade out after the balcony scene, then have an abrupt cut in from that black with Anakin sitting up.

Never posted before in here but I have been following this edit.

I am so glad you are thinking of doing away with the death of Padme. It has annoyed me to no end that she dies of a broken heart. I mean seriously, we all know 100s of people that have ended relationships and no one has died from it.

Padme living at the end works fine. We as the audience don't need to know what happens to her. Just that she goes into hiding on Alderaan. In ROTJ we are told she died when Leia was very young. Thus it works and does not contradict the OT.

So thank you cutter, I hope you can make it work.

I don't think you need to cut Anakin saying "you died in childbirth". As a wise Jedi Master once said.. "always in motion is the future".

Matticon

The Cutter said:

tmrbenja0618 said:

This becoming something special. Let me know if you need any help.

 thanks, what's your speciality ?

Sometimes I'm adaptable... What's your need?

Just saw your clip of Padme... I may be able to work something out for you.... Are you working in NTSC, or PAL?

Maybe Qui-Gon's voice could come in here saying that he can protect her for a short time which would explain why Vader and Palpatine appear to be clueless as to Leia's identity.

I'm not sure about seeing them on Alderaan as it blows any chance of keeping Leia as at least one secret in your cut but it is your cut.

rpvee said:

How are you establishing Padme taking refuge?

I will upload this soon

gobalicious said:

I wonder how you'll deal with the scene where Bail says he'll take Leia? 

 

Coming soon

gobalicious said:

I wonder how you'll deal with the scene where Bail says he'll take Leia? 

If you are doing away with dying in childbirth, maybe it might be possible to change Anakin's dream so that he just sees her death and not how it happens.  That way it is still a self-fulfilling prophecy.  If you are doing away with his vision then you just have to cut it so Anakin says "You died." instead of "You died in childbirth."

I create a new dream sequence, using Padme's funeral scene

krloz said:

I think that it would be better if Padme dies because I think it's more impactful. You could redub the medical droid that tells obi wan that she's dying because she lost the will to live and put something like that the babies got hit when anakin choke her. It wouldn't make any sense that Padme stayed with leia and gave luke to uncle owen and aunt beru. Sorry for bad english

everything about this is explained by Obi-wan in the Return of the Jedi...but this aspect is very badly made and poor in ROTS...

I understand your point, it's more impactful and the funeral sequence is beautiful, but it doesn't fit with OT :

Leia : "she died when I was very young"

very young can't mean the day of my birth !! ^_^

mrbenja0618 said:

Just saw your clip of Padme... I may be able to work something out for you.... Are you working in NTSC, or PAL?

 I am working with the PAL dvd right now, but it's temporary, I am waiting for the blu-ray

what do u suggest ? you have video fx skill ?