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The foreign market and kids have provided a net for producers. It’s seems to be creating a new sort of laxity. Non-Anglophones are accustomed to everything not making perfect sense to them and some things lost in translation. Children will eat Chocolatey Coated Sugar Bombs. The industry is too concerned with producing things these groups are willing to swallow.

They are allowing pandering and signaling to a miniscule fraction determine the nature of the characters and how they are presented. I can guarantee that FAR more are turned off by that. Homosexuals are more than represented in the independent art house circuit.

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I started writing a story for a “final” Star Wars movie set hundreds of years beyond the real films. I called it Episode C just to pick a number.

I stalled after writing one scene because I realized it was utter garbage, just like everything else I’ve ever tried to write.

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Like they said of Aubrey Hepburn’s character in BREAKFAST AT TIFFANY’S “She’s a phony, but she’s a genuine phony.”

Movies are phony, but the ones that truly strike a chord are genuine in expressing and exploring some aspects of the human condition.

WONDER WOMAN did a fine job of this. Without seeing it, I would wager that THE MUMMY fell short.

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WONDER WOMAN RECONSIDERED:

This will serve as my spoiler review as well, so…

SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS

It was wonderful, but even the best has a little room for improvement. What would we do?

Certainly leave the cast as-is. they were perfect for the task. The WWI setting as well. It was clever though dark. The basic story and direction were great. Quibling about for something to improve…

Dial the Lewisian allegory up to 11! Bury the needle! It was by far the finest aspect of the story. Paradise until the Devil corrupted man, a war between the Devil and his angels and the Heavenly Host, Devil cast out to wander and corrupt… In the process, expand foreshadowing for Aries and the final confrontation and tighten-up the final confrontation a bit.

The queen and her sister tell their legendary tales. Aries and Hades and gods and demigods attack Olympus, who are greater in numbers but not furious determination, we learn that Zeus draws out all the powers of the gods including the fury thrown at him and in the form of lightening and in one last effort to prevent overrun rises up releases descends drained then withdraws from the world of men except to give life to Diana, Aries and his host fall, near death, might have died or brought back by Hades to wander very weak to rebuild strength that will become full before the next great fight,

Peace Pol offers help to Trever to convince council that it’s too dangerous without immediate armistice due to gas weapon, gives money but no office use and tells Trever that he will have Chief and the Serbian boy meet them at the Front. Chief tells Diana his story and Serb tells of being a boy in Sarajevo and being abused by soldiers and telling other Serbians (Diana learns that war was started by assassination of just one man earlier), Serb tells Trever Peace Pol doesn’t want gala interfered with, Diana horrified that men would continue after killing Luden says Amazons were right mankind doesn’t deserve help it will just perpetuate evils and great suffering, Trever takes sword up to his breast and says he should have what he deserves first if it is about what humanity deserves, Aries in form of Serb and PP and weakened form of original self, Lasso and we see images of Aries through the ages too weak to fight but as Chinese counselor to warlords and other shapeshifting forms whispering to great leaders for more war and for domestic strife American Confederate demonstrator…, needs to join power with Diana for greater world without humans, Dr Poison told Lude earlier that plane gas was on a timer so will cause great death even if doesn’t reach destination chief overhears, very brief talk Trever and WW can’t hear Aries rising in background it’s “gotta go I save today you can save the world I love you” and runs as WW has to turn back to Aries, WW asks Dr P if she can destroy all knowledge of gas and she nods yes, Diana absorbs power like lightening rises and releases and collapses drained of power like Aries was, In a non-descript office she says she used to want to save the world but learned humanity must want it and do it themslves or efforts mean nothing, Wayne security leaves past sign CAMPAIGN FOR HUMANITY AND JUSTICE, we see flashback montage she spent the last century without power going to peace conferences and truce talks whispering encouragement for peace to leaders and generals, until she is strong once again for the great approaching fights sees emergency on tv and jumps off building to swelling romantic orchestral very vaguely like WW theme

More thoughts later…

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Muslim experienced in tracking German gas warfare units. Says if hydrogen gas explodes on ground most will be pushed across the surface and must take out to sea or high in the air to disperse. Trevor asks them to clear his path to plane. Confused German shoots out engine trying to stop Trevor. Engine on fire Trevor realizes he won’t reach sea.
WW and Aries spiral together up into sky lightning power frying WW, Aries says only god can kill a god and now he will send her to Hades, WW says then we will go there together, last of her strength crashes gauntlets.

WW never a Roid Rangerette. Set apart from Amazons and accentuates female. No lesbo-homo-Baphomet-eroticism.

DCEU: RECONSIDERED

No SM:MOS, drop everyone into action ANH style in BvS, let them figure out with little expo drops that world is just now discovering SM, chaos and Metropolis(Manhattan) is being ripped apart in fight, Bats comes from Gotham(Bronx Kings Queens establishing shot at the beginning), Supes origin flashback recording at Fortress and Bats origin while drinking in cave, no Lois yet, mysterious brunette keeps appearing at odd moments, Supes was trying to stop destruction, everyone questions, Young Lex superindustrialist and Joker world’s supercriminal meet to discuss implications philosophy future twisted jokes they hit it off partnership, Examine ship, Joker only able to get a little Kryptonite powder Lex transforms it into inhaled poison for Supes that affects his mood and reduces his powers and makes it all erratic agitated, Lex plants false info about Bats and Joker plants false info about Supes escalating distrust and fear. Lex and Joker capture WW and tie her with Lasso explain plan, While BvS fight Lex and Joker see about creating Doom something goes wrong and Doom unleashed more quickly than expected, WW gets loose and tries to stop Doom but needs help runs and stops fight just before sink on Supes, says come with me or I will kill both of you, helps Supes up and leads them to Doom. Lex and Joker captured in neighboring cells, WW regaining strength Supes greatly weakened Bats trying to control his demons.

Well, I think I’m done with DC stuff for foreseeable future. Anyone else have thoughts?

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The PLANET OF THE APES TRILOGY

WOW! THIS is how you do a trilogy.

A brilliant premise with an ingenious twist in WAR. Everyone did a great job. Of course, special mention for Serkis and the ape FX crew.

SPIDERMAN HOMECOMING and the Raimi films…

TH was a great 15 year old Peter. It was fun and effective. I liked it a lot.

I didn’t see 1 or 2 in theaters. I went to see 3 in theater after hearing the high praise for 1 and 2 and found it a little meh. I saw large parts of 1 on cable.

In spite of being a big fan from 7 to 11, I made a point of avoiding this series. It was the basic characterization of Peter. They completely missed the mark of what he represents.

You could have given me a million years to think of possible new and interesting ways to present Peter Parker, and I never would have thought of turning him into a body-horror spine-chilling mutant who spews sticky bug goo out of his veins and grows grotesque little arachnid spikes on his hands and feet. A great part of the appeal of Peter/Spidey was that he was an ingenious young inventor who could create and build his own webcasters and a suit that helps his finger and toe strength. Why mess with that???

Don’t get me wrong. I like Tobey Maguire. I think he is a talented actor with his own special sort of slightly geeky presence and charm. I could appreciate seeing him in any number of roles. I understand that they were going for the ‘slightly awkward and geeky young underdog overcomes and gets the HAWT chick’ sort of thing and why that story line is appealing. Trouble is, that is a COMPLETE SUBVERSION of what Peter/Spidey represents. By accident or design (I’m guessing design), the story of Peter is allegory and metaphor for an idealized passage from gangly and awkward adolescent boyhood to strong handsome confident funny capable young man. Harsh motivation aside, Peter is everything boys hope to become.

If I had been casting those films or any before or after, there is no question about what I would have done. I would have gone through every HS yearbook and contacted every HS drama coach in the English speaking world. Criteria would have been boys 16-19 who: have classic comic book features and good-looks, are very lean and cut, very well proportioned, 5’10" to 6’ tall, blue or hazel eyes and are likely to retain these qualities through the series. In other words, I would have been looking for Peter Parker. Why would anyone go looking for anyone else??? I would have had the 500-1000 likeliest candidates send in a 10 minute audition video wherein I would be looking for those with the greatest natural acting ability, presence, humor and charm.

TH was a terrific 15 year old Peter just discovering and beginning to cope with his new powers. They bought a lot of good will in HOMECOMING and I’m happy to take this ride until the next iteration in a few years.

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I hate to post in this thread just because of its creator, but whatever. I just got an idea for a horror movie. Tell me if it’s worth its shit or if it’s stupid as hell and I’m just working out some daddy issues:

When a family loses a close relative, the father claims that God told him this would happen, and it isn’t long before this father begins killing others in the family to fulfill prophecies he thinks he’s been given.

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It’s not an original idea, but it’s what you do with it that matters.

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Yeah, except I’m certainly not a good enough writer to do anything worthwhile with it. The idea came to me as I was thinking about a time a few years ago when my grandmother died and my dad bragged that he knew it would happen that day because Jesus told him or some sanctimonious bullshit like that, and I got re-pissed about it.

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