TFA: A Gentle Restructure (Released) — Page 39

Yeah, that oscillator shot is too short, so I did some trickery with lipsync, but it’s still jarring to have that shot

https://vimeo.com/221674605
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I still think Ackbar’s, and I can’t put enough quotes around what follows, “lip sync” works better without reversing that shot.

The audio needs to be shifted forward almost a full second to work in this case.

That’s all I’m gonna be able to do today, but I’m happy with this new take on the X-wing scene.
I’m not optimistic for the Snoke and friends scene, so I invite anyone who is capable to try to weave together something. I wasn’t able to get it sounding anything but awful! But, I might just be out of my element due to being tired at this point; will try again later.

Wish I could do more than crummy mockups but I’m away from the data tapes for a few days.

No, no. Mockup is great! Making it seamless as a real thing to be published… is a different beast. 😛

Hal 9000 said:

https://vimeo.com/221674605
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I still think Ackbar’s, and I can’t put enough quotes around what follows, “lip sync” works better without reversing that shot.

It kind of bugs me that it’s the same reaction shot of the female pilot that was used in the firing sequence. Also, I think the Poe looking out the side window shot would work better after Ackbar, though it might be too short.

Thanks, Ridley. I’ve got some BB8 motor sounds at present, but we’ll see if these can’t make it better. I think it works well without any 3PO sounds, but I will see what can be done!

Also, minor note: the female pilot reaction shot during the firing sequence has been replaced with a now unused shot of Poe craning his neck to look at something off to one side.

And I invite anyone to try their hand at a scene between Snoke and Hux to depict them planning to rearm and target the Resistance base. I’m afraid my methods yield YouTube Poop levels of sentence mixing. 😛

The version where Hux says ‘The Resistance…it is wreckage’ was the result of taking it into Audacity and manipulating the pitch. It’s a weird sentence structure but it’s the best I can think of using Hux’s limited lines. The problem is that he almost never says anything in the past tense, always ‘we’ll soon have it’, ‘We will destroy the government that supports’, etc. Perhaps this is something that will have to wait until V3 of this project, after The Last Jedi gives us more to work with.

They haven’t been implemented (yet?).

Part of why I tried to extend the Starkiller firing to fit the full cue was in an attempt to make room for a government transmission offering belated assistance. Of course that idea would use some different shots, but in either case the Resistance scene would need to be manufactured. After doing the basic montage, people seemed to like that on its own so I didn’t go further in the idea of the transmission.

Perhaps the transmission could be added by removing the pilot reactions and instead inserting the ‘are you seeing this’ line. I just really like the wordless nature of the montage as it is, and the transmission would have to be quite good to be worth it.

But don’t let that stop anyone from trying this out - the attitude of the Republic is still the most problematic aspect of this edit in my mind, and something should be done to make it more helpful to the Resistance.

Yes, the two biggest missing scenes are Leia trying to warn the Republic during their assault, and the First Order preparing to rearm and target the Resistance base afterward.

If it can be, but it remains to be seen.

A real attempt at bringing ‘all craft’ in line with the rest of the dialogue:
https://vimeo.com/223086082
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I figured taking out all the dialogue of the other pilot helps to simplify the scene, and if we can make the Snoke scene fit after the Oscillator breach this scene will fit right back in where it used to be.

The reason I removed the whole thing was that I still felt the absence of the first half of his line. But I think it works equally well with the whole, half, or absent line, so I’ll leave it to someone with stronger feelings to decide 😉

Could you pass along just the modified, “All craft,” audio clip?

Here is the original line taken from the central channel of Despecialized, and also the final version which has been slowed down and filtered to remove most of the music and give it a radio sound:
https://mega.nz/#F!qAMwSDhS!OzuT_qoynTS0j3fH_e7UbQ

Here’s a candidate for that scene:
https://vimeo.com/223159154
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It’s really good!

The only issue I sense is with the music cutting from the space battle to Finn and Rey, since there are two similar chords right next to each other. Even though the music overlaying the distant shot of the Oscillator is correct, it feels off in this short scene and the transition just makes it worse. Would it work to use the music from the Ackbar shot and simply extend that through the rest of the scene? The ‘weapon will fire in 2 minutes’ dialogue is of similar length to what replaces it.