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So, it’s another prequel fan edit thread. There’s just something about these movies that makes them so tantalising. You can tell there’s a compelling story in there somewhere, but yet the way they reached theatres they’re almost painful to watch. I’ve seen a lot of prequel fan edits and I think a common problem people face is what exactly to do with the phantom menace? often I see this has been solved by just tacking the duel with darth maul onto the beginning of a fanedit and then forgetting about it. But there are at least some endearing moments in the film and I wanted to see if they could be kept in a way that not only makes them better but that makes the rest of the film its included with better as well. With that in mind I decided that if I wanted to see this edit I would have to make it myself.
I must admit this is my first post here (hello!) and also my first edit of this kind of length or complexity, so it may be a little amateurish when finished, but I hope it will satisfy my own desires at least when finished and maybe inspire other (more skilled) editors in their own projects. I have a rough work print almost finished, and hopefully will be able to add some screenshots and clips from that in the next few days (though I’m about to go back to uni and that has a habit of getting in the way). With that said, here is my draft outline for STAR WARS: AN EMPIRE DIVIDED. comments and feedback would be greatly appreciated.
STAR WARS
AN EMPIRE DIVIDED
It has been a thousand years of peace since the JEDI KNIGHTS of the GALACTIC REPUBLIC defeated the evil SITH EMPIRE. Now, following restrictions on droid labor in the provinces in favour of clones, a SEPARATIST Rebellion of industrial worlds has risen led by rogue JEDI Count Duku.
Using their CONTROL CODE to the Republic’s Droid Armies the greedy Trade Federation has joined the separatists, taking hostage the Princess of Al Abaddon.
With the Senate deadlocked on the use of a CLONED HUMAN ARMY against the droids, the remaining Jedi are powerless to act. Disobeying their orders, Jedi Masters Qui-Gon Gin and Obi Wan Kenobi race to retrieve the control code and rescue the Princess…
Opening of TPM cut to be a bit snappier. Qui-gon and Obi-wan attacking the trade fed fleet (dubbed in new sirens and lasers). Straight to the droids opening the smoke filled hangar, jedi cutting down droids (mirroring ANH opening). Close on TF bridge door as it begins to melt away.
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TPM Senate scene. Vote of no confidence in Valorum by QUEEN OF NABOO (no longer Amidala). Palpatine’s intro as scheming senator
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Plane bombing from opening of AOTC. Introduction of senator PADME AMIDALA.
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Establishing scene of Obi-wan and Qui-Gon Cut from the opening sequence “be mindful of the living force”. Sneaking past the droids in the hangar “Rendezvous on the planet” (Al abbadon, not Naboo)
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Palpatine and Queen of Naboo office meeting, Palpatine’s candidacy “I will be chancellor”. Queen returns to besieged Naboo.
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Jedi rescue the princess from occupied ‘Al abbadon’ (Naboo in TPM) (again not Amidala or the princess but a third character. Make up and voice/actor changes between scenes and within the original films help pull this off).
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Battle in the naboo hangar and escaping the blockade fleet. Astromechs save the ship, but it’s suffered damage. They have just enough power to get to Geonosis, where the separatists have taken the code. (new dialogue here may be an issue, possibly inserting obi wans “follow the code” from TPM, panaka “you cant take her royal highness there!”)
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Padme addresses the senate deleted scene. Senators spoiling for war, padme emplores them to see reason.
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Palpatines conference with the Jedi, MACE WINDU and YODA. The Dark side is introduced “clouding everything”. Padme enters, palpatine suggests jedi protection; “perhaps master skywalker, who guarded you during the blockade crisis” (some historical event in this continuity)
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The Jedi and co land on Geonosis, a dark, inhospitable desert planet. Conversation between obiwan and quigon about the broken hyperdrive.
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Padme and ANAKIN SKYWALKER disembark from a bus on the way to corruscant space port. This way Anakin is introduced in a han solo-esque fashion midway into the film.
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Qui gon and obi wan explore the city on geonosis. (Echoes of obi wan sneaking around on the death star) The two jedi overhear Duku’s conversation with the separatist leaders (and maybe some of duku’s conversation with captured obiwan from aotc).
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Anakin and Padme on the refugee ship, discussing the orthodoxy of the jedi council “Are you allowed to love?”
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Anakin and Padme arriving on ALDERAAN (naboo + alderaan establishing shot from rots)
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A shadowy figure arrives on Geonosis in a TIE-esque spacecraft. He sends out probe droids in search of the jedi.
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Padme’s parents house deleted scene (minus anakin and dad) focusing on padme and her relationship with her parents. Talking to her mum about anakin.
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(Maybe the meadows scene?)
ANAKIN’S VISION
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Dream/vision sequence, shots of fire and anakin’s childhood. (quigon’s funeral?/vaders funeral/ obi-wan on mustafar?) dub over with Anakin’s conversation with shcmi as she dies, ending w “I love you”. Shmi and qui-gon, implying quigon may be Anakin’s father. Shmi suffering.
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Anakin wakes up. Conversation with Padme, “I have to go”
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Obi and Quigon return to the ship, sandstorm scene.
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Probe droids return to maul, and he takes off.
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Anakin and Padme arrive on Tatooine and talk to clieg, owen and beru, Anakin goes after Schmi. Montage sequence. Schmi’s death (minus dialogue) no tusken slaughter. R2 recieves a communication from obiwan. Anakin returns. Garage scene minus the admission of murder. “I hate them!” Padme comforts him “I’m a jedi, I should do better” (setting up how the jedi repression ends up screwing Anakin up) Schmi’s funeral.
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Anakin and padme relay the communication from obiwan to corruscant. “We’ve tracked the code to a planet called geonosis”. (cut out obiwans face so its not as weird that he looks completely different, basically only need to hear this line anyway) The communication is cut off by laser fire. Mace tells anakin and padme to stay put but they go off to rescue obiwan and quigon anyway.
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Mace and Yoda watch as Palpatine’s emergency powers are proclaimed and the army is officially formed. Mace will go to Geonosis.
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Anakin and Padme arrive on Geonosis, are quickly captured after a cutdown factory scene. Padme and Anakin are taken to confront duku (AOTC deleted scene). Duku tries to convince them of the legitimacy of his cause. “The republic is broken, we must start again”. They’re having none of it. They will be executed in the Geonosian games.
Geonosian games
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Cut down pod race scene showing the barbarity of the games. We follow sebulba who almost wins but is killed in a fiery and violent crash. Echoes of ben hur/50s sword and sandle epics.
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Anakin and padme wait in the staging area before being led to the arena. Padme “I love you”. anakin looks shocked and confused. Duku addresses the crowd. Arena scene minus obiwan (thanks george lucas, as all the actors appear to be filmed separately against green screen its ridiculously easy to remove obiwan entirely from this whole scene with simple cutting) Anakin and padme get the upper hand but then are surrounded by droids.
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Mace windu arrives “this party’s over”. Star destoyers jump into orbit and the jedi reveal themselves around the arena. Jedi army clashes against the droids. Republic fighters (naboo fighters) clash aganst federation base ships (from TPM end battle)Yoda and the Clones arrive, trash the droids and escape with the surviving jedi. Duku leaves as the republic troops fly away.
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Obi wan and Quigon (implied to be rescued by maces jedi offscreen) clash in hangar bay with droid troops. R2 and pilots load up into fighters and take off.
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Various geonosis battle scenes.
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Duku in rebel command center takes the control code (death star plans from AOTC)and flees.
R2 in the space battle attacking the rebel baseships.
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Jedi encounter Maul in the hangar “we’ll handle this” they fight maul into the power station.
Duku flees to the landing platform pursued by Anakin.
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R2 flies into the rebel baseship and destroys it from the inside. On the surface, the clones destroy the fleeing baseships.
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Maul duel continues to where the forcefield doors close. there is a moment of quiet.
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Anakin confronts count Duku in the landing hangar.
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The two duels continue intercutting from maul/quigon to Anakin/Duku. Suddenly, quigon is cut down. Obi wan screams “Nooooooo!” as Anakin likewise loses his arm. A moment of quiet as Duku contemplates what he’s done.
Obiwan stares down Maul, then the final battle begins as obiwan gives in to his anger. He almost defeats Maul but then loses his lightsabre and is pushed over the edge, narrowly clinging on.
Yoda comes to Anakin’s rescue. Duku drops a column on Anakin and flees. Yoda stops the column but Duku escapes as Padme arrives.
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Obiwan force pulls qui gons lightsabre and kills maul, then rushes to his friend’s side as he dies. Palpatine arrives on Naboo and congratulates Naboo Queen. Promises of Peace and Prosperity for the republic.
(Yoda and obiwan discuss anakins training?)
Quigon’s funeral. “Its no doubt the mysterious warrior was a sith” “Always two there are… a master, and an apprentice…” pan over to palpatine (imply that palpatine is the apprentice perhaps?).
Anakin and Padme’s wedding.
On coruscant clone troopers await deployment to the new war, loading onto waiting star destroyers. (Cut to the martial music from the medal ceremony in ANH) As the destroyers fly away, we cut to credits.
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