samo21

EddieDean said:

samo21 said:

In the scene where they find the empty crate on Satine’s ship, I wonder if there’s a way to clean it up so we don’t hear a description of what’s (not) in the box twice within about 10 seconds?

This is OK, isn’t it? In the first call, Anakin tells Obi-Wan ‘yes, there’s a danger’, and in the second call, he’s saying ‘assassin probe coming your way’. That’s just responsible guard duty, isn’t it? Giving key information as soon as it comes up! Or have I missed something?

That reminds me - if everyone could try to include timestamps with feedback where possible that’d be super useful, since it saves me looking over minutes of clip at a time to investigate things like this! Thanks!

Sorry - specifically I was referring to when the trooper says “Well, what do we have here? Looks like the contents of this box are missing?” Anakin then says “Or got up and walked away”. He then tells the troops to fan out etc and that he will call Obi. Then Obi he tells Obi “There’s a large open container and the contents are missing.”

It just felt repetitive on first watch. I’m not sure there’s anyway around it, though. Only think I can think of is if after “Well, what do we have here?” you stretch the moment somehow (?) where they are looking at the crate, then cut to Anakin directing the troops to fan out and saying he’s going to call Obi? This isn’t a big deal, just something that popped out to me.

Also - totally get where you’re coming from with the end credits song. I still feel like the end theme from the Mandalorian has a sort of energy or momentum that leaves me pumped about what just happened and also for the next episode. I can see why that would be tonally off from what you are going for. Maybe something exists that can kind of accomplish both or meet in the middle?

Hi there, just watched THE DEATH WATCH.
I found this to be overall quite enjoyable and definitely along the lines of what I always wished TCW was, a tight and focused show focused on quality story telling and not padding episode count or length. I appreciate your efforts to make this a reality!

I think most of my thoughts have already been covered by others, but have a couple notes I don’t think I saw:

In the ‘crawl’, maybe it should say “thousands of worlds remain neutral” instead of REPUBLIC worlds, as these systems are neutral and not aligning with the Republic or Separatists.
Also - should “Council of Neutral Systems” perhaps be capitalized in some way? It seems like a proper organization.

In the scene where they find the empty crate on Satine’s ship, I wonder if there’s a way to clean it up so we don’t hear a description of what’s (not) in the box twice within about 10 seconds?

The music over the end credits is fine but I kind of miss the somewhat up beat or exciting theme that plays in the Mandalorian. Wondering if there’s something from the clone wars we could put here instead?

Maybe something like the first track in this video?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=70CJDNLrkdg