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If I made some edits, whats the best way to share them?
I trimmed all the bits of Rey and Leia talking. Not only eliminating some odd performances, but also clarifying things (at least to me).
Now when Rey comes back from her training session it goes (Im paraphrasing)
- Didnt finish the training course, got distracted
- I know it looks like Im making excuses…
- Leia looks at Rey
- Rey hands back saber
- from offscreen, “General” line comes in
- Then Leia delivers her line “Dont tell me what things look like, tell me what they are.”
- Then Leia walks off and Rey says “Yes master”
- No lines about droids or being tired.
- Nothing about earning the saber. Clearly Leia is the one holding onto the saber most of the time as Rey hands it back to her twice.
I also removed the entire sequence of Finn asking Rose if she wants to come. It’s established that she is accustomed to working behind pipes, not one to go running around blasting people. Felt unnecessary.
I trimmed the best I could the Nambi Gima scene so that right after Rey says “I’m Ray” she hears cannon blasts and turns away.
Trimmed out Rey and Finn being surprised Poe can hotwire. They’ve been running together for awhile now, they shouldn’t be surprised by this.
When the crew meets Zorii, I trimmed it down so Zorri doesnt say she likes Rey. Instead they have a stare down, then Rey extends her hand in friendship.
Added a flash of Chewy when Rey realizes he’s alive. She has visions all the time, felt like a more impactful way to show the audience instead of just telling.
Removed Ren talking about them being a Dyad. Now, Palpatine realizes it himself at the end. The puzzle of why the are so connected is held until the final climactic moment now.
When Jannah and Finn are talking, I cut it right after Finn says his code number and Jannah goes “you?!”. To me this hints that she had heard of him, like how Rose had heard of him in the previous movie.
Trimmed some of Mas Canadas lines about Leia to make it a little less on the nose.
Trimmed a little bit of Luke’s dialogue to Rey.
Probably a few other little things, but wondered if anyone wanted to watch and see if any of these would make it into a final cut. I didnt know how to get proper audio splits, so that was my biggest issue.