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majoras_wrath

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#1362029
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The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (WIP)
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Octorox said:

Personally I’d rather C3PO’s memories not be restored at all. Someone posted a mock-up a ways back and it definitely needed some work but showed promise.

Imo, it’s more unbelievable that they WOULDN’T have backups of 3PO’s memories. He’s a droid. I’m sure everyone here maintains up-to-date backups of their computers and/or phones, so why would droids in Star Wars be treated any differently?

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#1361855
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (WIP)
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Hal 9000 said:

Anyone have any ideas for dialogue for the troopers speaking with 3PO? The 3PO line is currently “Excuse me, sir, might you direct us to—-“

Need two brief lines, neither in direct 3PO’s unfinished question.

Maybe omething from Fallen Order could work?

(Exasperated) “I’m never gonna get promoted…”
(Annoyed) “What, you want a medal?”
(Exasperated) “I knew I should’ve joined the Brood…”
(Impatient) “Go talk to the quartermaster droid!”
(Angry) “Stop it! It’s getting on my nerves!”

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#1359786
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The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (WIP)
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Neerb said:

majoras_wrath said:

IMO, I think if you leave out the transports landing, but go straight to the interior shot of the stormtroopers disembarking and then charging into battle, it looks good. I also think muting the Battlefront footage would help, if you were to keep it in.

Strongly agree here. Not that I’m a big fan of the Battlefront stuff, but the landing is the worst part due to the odd speed and camera angle, and there shouldn’t be any voices when they leave so that it flows a bit better into Kylo’s reveal.

I threw together a SUPER rough cut in the default Windows editor of how this would look.

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#1359643
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (WIP)
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Hal 9000 said:

Here’s how it would be with just the TIEs shot.

https://vimeo.com/434216027

If you’re set on leaving out the Battlefront footage, this is the way to go.

IMO, I think if you leave out the transports landing, but go straight to the interior shot of the stormtroopers disembarking and then charging into battle, it looks good. I also think muting the Battlefront footage would help, if you were to keep it in.

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#1359592
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (WIP)
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Hal 9000 said:

Very interesting. I like the idea of “A day of revenge, a day we all can share” or whatever, then Poe saying “He’s been planning his revenge,” then “The Final Order begins” and Poe saying “He calls it the Final Order… in 16 minutes attacks on all three worlds begins.”

I think you need some sleep, Hal!

Anyways, as I’ve said before, anything is better than Poe’s line. I was also wondering if it would be possible to move Ackbar Jr.’s line “It cannot be! The emperor is dead!” earlier so that it seems like he’s reacting to hearing Palpatine’s voice.

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#1359493
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (WIP)
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Neerb said:

I’d recommend more restraint on the all-caps. There aren’t actually that many all-caps words in the old title crawls. The new films have overexagerrated it, especially the awful, awful original IX crawl, but I’d prefer a new one reign it in a bit.

IV: “DEATH STAR”
V: none
VI: “GALACTIC EMPIRE”
I: none
II: “ARMY OF THE REPUBLIC”
III: none
VII: “FIRST ORDER” “REPUBLIC” “RESISTANCE”
VIII: “FIRST ORDER” “RESISTANCE”
IX: “REVENGE” “EMPEROR PALPATINE” “GENERAL LEIA ORGANA” “REY” “FIRST ORDER” “KYLO REN”

Well, damn, today I learned. Honestly thought all the films had emphasized words. Good to know!

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#1359396
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (WIP)
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krausfadr said:

Hal I was working on my crawl in Blender using jackpumpkinhead’s Custom Crawl Creator v2 and I also did a test of your crawl (tweaking the 2nd line slightly).

Here’s what your crawl looks like rendered in blender with custom kerning, chromatic aberration and all that good stuff…
https://streamable.com/n3jiom

The text:
Flames of rebellion burn across the galaxy. The tyrannical First Order has retaliated by attacking any planetary system suspected of supporting their enemy.

As Rey, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training, General Leia Organa sends her brave agents across the stars to unite the disparate worlds in the name of Resistance.

Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has traveled to Mustafar, chasing whispers of a hidden power that would allow him to destroy any threat to his rule…

EDIT: I just corrected the star field in my template so now its perfect. If anyone would like a crawl rendered for their edit, let me know.

Wow, that looks great. My only nitpick is that the crawls usually have certain words in all caps for EMPHASIS. I would recommend capping FIRST ORDER, REY, and KYLO REN. Maybe RESISTANCE and/or MUSTAFAR as well, but those might be too close to the other capped words.

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#1359320
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (WIP)
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Neerb said:

I think if the “Somehow, Palpatine has returned” bit is going to be replaced with the group listening to something, a big fancy broadcast isn’t the way to go. Instead, we should hear Palpatine speaking with Pryde, distorted enough to sound like a secret recording but clear enough to recognize their voices. This places emphasis on the spy subplot and foreshadows both that someone high-ranking is the spy, as well as that Pryde’s loyalty lies with the Emperor and not the Supreme Leader. It also potentially works as a red herring. If we hear Richard Grant speaking in the spy message and then later see him as a new character in the First Order meeting, he and Hux eyeing each other suspiciously from across the table, then an observant audience member will likely come to one of two assumptions: either Hux is the spy (now foreshadowed instead of a random twist), or Pryde is (a red herring, making Hux’s reveal and death a bigger twist).

Edit: if we want to split Palpatine and Pryde’s conversation from later in the movie, and do a bit of sentence-mixing, we could do it like this:

Spy recording on Ajan Kloss:
Palpatine: “Send the ships to a world they know. Let it burn. The Final Order begins.”
Pryde: “Yes, my lord.”

This gives context to Poe’s line, “He calls it the Final Order. In 16 hours, attacks on all free worlds begin.”

Then in the meeting after Leia’s death:
Palpatine: “The princess of Alderaan has disrupted my plan, but her foolish act will be in vain. Come to me on Exegol, General Pryde.”
Pryde: “As I served you in the old wars, I serve you now.”
Palpatine: “She will come. Her friends will follow.”
Pryde: “Yes, my lord.”

This is the same “Yes, my lord” used twice, but it’s far enough apart and appropriate enough for the situation that I bet a casual audience member wouldn’t notice.

I think this is the best idea I’ve heard so far, if it can be done. The Fortnite message is a bit cheesy, admittedly, so this seems like a better alternative.

I just cannot stand “Somehow…Palpatine returned.” It sounds like something out of a fan fic.

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#1359002
Topic
The Rise of Skywalker: Ascendant (WIP)
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krausfadr said:

idir_hh said:

Yes, if you listen closely, my version of the broadcast kinda adds more context to the events of the ST in general.
“At last the work of generations is complete. The great error is corrected.Skywalker is Dead. The Republic has been destroyed. The day of victory is at hand. The day of Revenge. The days of the Sith”
https://vimeo.com/404134108

Wouldn’t this placement eliminate the briefing of the spy intel which is a needed scene to advise the Resistance they must find Exegol.

If Hal were to implement it, I don’t think so. After showing Kylo, one could easily just cut to Rose saying “Do we really believe this?” and continue the scene as normal.

Personally, I am all for including at least part of the broadcast. Anything is better than “Somehow… Palpatine returned.”