kypo

That book 3 montage at the end- looks great! I am really glad that this worked in the edit. No further comments 😃

For book 4-
2:23 and 2:33 - The awesome soundtrack drops, then comes back at these time stamps. Something about this audio is slightly off. Like it needs a drop/rise sound effect layered on the rise up. I am not a sound guy, but it’s noticeable to me so those more experienced here could likely weigh in.
The current setup for the end of scene dialogue:
MUSIC RISES- “Show yourself” MUSIC STOPS “JEDI”
I wonder how this would sound with this order: Music rises on a dramatic shot (no dialogue)… MUSIC STOPS “Show yourself…” saber ignites “Jedi.”
OR - MUSIC STOPS “show yourself, Jedi” SABER IGNITES
In either case- the dialogue happens during the music swell and it undercuts her badass line instead of accentuating it.

1:14:00 - The music change for Bill Burr and Mando being saved by the Imperials. I like this song choice WAY MORE than the Mando flute theme (which absolutely doesn’t work… Disney should have known this). However, the song chosen is a bit too somber for explosions.
Check out the 10:50 to 12:00 mark (or 11:06 onwards) in the following video for an alternative that has some rises.
Additionally, the low part after 4:15 may make a good foreboding theme inside the complex at some point.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=10KSz8gU9-8&list=PLrP3nOWYvlDmL6TNIQF113was6zCmFFn_&index=3

Or try Krennec’s Imperial theme from this video:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z65MUqQcZ4A&list=PLrP3nOWYvlDmL6TNIQF113was6zCmFFn_&index=6

(Trying to come to you with solutions, not problems, but you can use what works as you see fit!)

The Officer showdown is a lot better on this edit. Thanks for putting in time here, it’s one of the big moments of the show so it will have extra scrutiny from everyone who watches it.

1:29:58 - DAMN this works better with Boba’s theme. Great sync up to the action here.

Cara Dune’s gun having a BASS THUMP is so good. It really hammers in the payoff for her previous elevator scene. There are a couple frames where the sound doesn’t match her firing, but it’s real close (Firing to the left half of the screen in her opener volley, and the final volley on the bridge). I am only noticing it from watching a couple times.

I don’t like the somber music during the Luke arrival sequence. At 1:54:34 when that door opens the music is just too slow for me. But that’s what Disney thinks is best 😄

Solid upgrades here. My suggestions are pretty minor and I saw a lot of the scene transitions have been hammered out. Great work, ACBagel!

Acbagel said:

I believe everyone who asked for the new version has it now, but let me know if I missed you!

I am working through the Book 2 update right now. The main task was to get more of a balance with Din scenes in Act 1, and possibly make some better “connective tissue” between the transitions and story beats with Boba. So I had the main benefit of being able to get Din’s Sorgan landing sequence in this film instead of Book 1, but I also wanted to extend that out a little more for pacing balance. I have a little mock up scene here (still unpolished in A/V editing) that helps lengthen the landing sequence rather than having Din immediately make it into the fishing village for lodging like my previous Book 2. Let me know If you think any of this works and I’ll finish it up!

This occurs ~6 minutes into the film after Boba is dragged away by the Tuskens for the first time.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1saXqaYV0VQfxkviqTs54D2g6yheM_2IF/view?usp=sharing

I like this addition. The AI is pretty good here and it makes total sense for this stage of the story. This addition lets the characters breathe, and the double night scenes with Boba helps show time pass for every story thread. It sounds like the bounce back and forth will help hold tension on Boba’s narrative.

Great work, ACBAGEL!

ACBagel- I love this- perfect concept. My only criticism is the line itself. The word count is way too high for the scene it is placed. He says 2 sentences and we have a couple cuts, a standup, etc. It brushes past impact and makes it stand out. Maybe do a play/reverse/play on the helmet talking portion- or some other clever editing.

I think you’ve got the right idea, and the discussion about the voice tone CAN be tightened up as discussed above!

I sent a DM on my thoughts here in full- glad to see you are back!

And an example of fan improved deepfake:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wrHXA2cSpNU&ab_channel=Shamook

Something to consider-

An example of the Force Theme used during the S2 Finale is this vid (which incorporates the Mando theme as well, connecting them)

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b-mXHJsAfWA&t=202s&ab_channel=ALPHA

This video is a little muddy at the end, but this would be a huge improvement over the default soundtrack.

Even more Notes! I know you are editing these to fit with your revamped Book 5… so as usual take what works here and discard what you don’t need!

Book 4:

Ahsoka fight is awesome. Music works well with the tone you set, and the fight is quickly paced.

“Surrender…” cut seems sudden. Consider slightly slowing down the witch’s reaction to extend by a few frames.

Has Ahsoka been color-corrected here? She’s way more orange than in her own tv show. Looks more like the cartoon (in a good way).

I hate to say it but I miss the downtrodden townsfolk that Mando originally interacted with. They helped showcase the dathomir witch as evil, our new character (Ahsoka) as good, and our protagonist as conflicted (we are in Kurosawa territory, after all). This version does not demonstrate that as clearly. We might not need the whole B story- but just seeing that guy in the stocks helps our heroes journey. (And gives us a 1-second explanation of that guy getting a jacket once the town is liberated as that scene was kept)

6:18 - this cut is too rapid. Took me out of it. It’s a fast cut to a stopped door, which doesn’t work for some reason.

46:15 - Fennec is trapped, Mando hops in (with flute). We don’t see her get surrounded, so the buildup of these troops running is unclear. So the first reaction we see Fennec is that she’s surrounded is immediately when Mando drops in. This pacing doesn’t give us time to breath so the save does not feel earned. (I rarely critique the fight edits, but this one needs mentioning)

Music for Bill Burr and Mando arriving at the base: Hate it. Could we use a more imperial/foreboding sound? They are safe but still in danger. Even triumphant imperial music could work! Anything but the Mando victory song.

1:14:56 The cutaway from Mando at the terminal is too rapid, the audio seems weird, and is one of the few times I can tell this is an edit.

I do not like the shortening of the drink with an officer scene. This may be one of the best scenes in the ENTIRE show.
^^^
I had a big paragraph rant about this- but I looked at your response to similar comments- and you make a great point. This is saving the face reveal for the finale. In a show this works great- but in our film we see Mando’s face in like 15 minutes. It DOES undercut your film climax and for that reason, I can see why you made the choice you did.

So that being said- the more of this scene we can keep the better. This scene absolutely drips with character and world building, and for the first time in a while it makes us fear the power of the Empire. Plus the idea of raising a toast with such a scumbag is visceral and well acted. BUT WE CAN’T USE MANDO’S FACE!.. So I have a suggestion:
How can I convince you to CG that helmet back on Mando’s head to salvage more of this scene? (The same way you edited out Grogu 😄 )

1:22:08 - The transition is weird- the circle doesn’t seem to fully close during the wipe?

Boba Fett says “that planet has been turned to glass” and Bo Katan’s response “You are a disgrace to your armor” doesn’t seem to match. Writing is weird here. VO opportunity to have Boba Fett drop a MUCH nastier, old school Boba line.

When Boba Fett hijacks the shuttle it plays the Mando theme. This should be the Boba theme to stay consistent with our multiple hero narrative.

SOUND EFFECT! When Cara Dune enters with the machine gun it sounds SOOOO underwhelming. Full on weak. This gun should drop the bass.

You made some minor cuts in the finale like Gideon being disarmed before being knocked out. I agree it’s a little weird in choreography- but it’s very obvious where it was cut. Additionally- this DOES remove two important notes on these characters. Gideon would rather die than bring satisfaction to his enemy, and Cara’s lines have been about taking him alive. This brief interaction actually helps both characters.

In this deep into the finale- I don’t think I would cut a single thing.

What about the force theme for Luke? I’ve seen some SOLID edits here, and they would add a ton to the mythical element of this part of the film. We are witnessing a WIZARD save the day- so let’s have it be magical.

Any way to use better deepfake fanedits for Luke? There are a variety out there.

The final shot is a good ending moment.

More Notes! I am writing so much that there is no way all of my ideas will be addressed or considered, but I have to throw stuff out there to help these edits. I’ll throw in my screenplay writer tips where possible.

Book 3:

Film theory time- Opening shots and closing shots are vital for setting a film narrative (ties into theme). Opener is Grogu and Mando walking in a dark alley, facing away from the camera and moving right (pair of heroes facing danger). A normal film would counter this with the same 2 facing the camera as the closing shot (as they have grown closer from their journey) or separate (if they have grown apart). The closing scene is the magic stick shift ball turning. They aren’t tied together IN VISUAL which would be points against a feature film script. (Films still get made with this exception- but it’s one of the things scripts get processed by)

We DO have a thesis line this time- excellent: “Wherever I go, he goes.” To bring it full circle- we would want a confirmation line near or after the climax affirming this statement.

Intro is strong, less silly. Seems brutal. I love it.

No frog person- great cut. More organic flow, great edit here.

Great transitions on Ice planet. Nothing felt missing.

As always- I approve of these combat scenes. Much more streamlined and tense. You’ve got a great eye for cutting the BS.

Gideon is alive with the shadow council- an excellent early reveal. Turned that S3 turd into an actual story-relevant detail. Now our long-term villain is behind the scenes and gives the audience time to BREATH with this threat. A+ addition.

Boba hires the mercs- he wants his stuff back. OUTSTANDING. Edit was smooth. Only thing missing is his sidekick Fennec with him (maybe also watching with her scoped rifle), but there may be nothing to use to add to this. Also, it may be better to add a shot of Boba watching during the fight or immediately after. A reaction to his plan failing (if we see Fennec with him- then her having a fail reaction shot would work too if short on content footage).
His turn at the end seemed serviceable, but a little bit off. I wonder if there is a better shot to use here.

Cuts of Mechanic dialogue are great. She’s still comic relief but WAY more on tone for the rest of the series.

Oh there is frog lady. These cuts are good, and while I don’t mind the egg eating it is prime for a show- not a feature film.

Minor note- maybe I missed this but why is Mando’s ship damaged when entering orbit? Didn’t he just get repairs on Navarro and Tatooine? If it’s said it didn’t come across to me as an audience member and may need a change.
Since the recent repairs are from droids- this could be a good time to include a VO line cursing faulty droid work.

1:36:18 - Editing error: He says the same line twice “Get ready for landing”

Honestly, the deeper we go into the show the more the aliens need a new voiceover. I wrote out a paragraph suggestion on the quarrian at the docks- but after considering it there isn’t much to be done here and I like how you have this scene. You tightened it and we HAVE to give Bo the badass character intro (She’s ruthless) to setup her one minded character motivations as they intersect with Mando very soon. This scene is fine- but as the show continues on and Disney+ quality dips- we can repurpose ANY alien dialogue to Huttese grunts and subtitles to make it fit what your edit needs (and you lose NOTHING of value!).

1:49:44 - This transition is VERY rapid. Seemed jarring.

1:49:20 - The thrice-stabbed trooper drops with ZERO damage. Come on, Disney.

Overall, I liked this one. It suffers from being a “middle” episode- no big villain showdown and the big discoveries are paid off in future films. Not much to be done here- that is a middle film issue. (Better story direction from Disney would have saved this- Bo Katan should have been an antagonist in S3, with them reuniting or her redeeming herself. That would have made THIS buildup great- they worked together…but not anymore. Oh well can’t fix that)
This edit succeeds in shorting these episodes into their most important pieces, and removes the BAD. I am excited to keep watching!

As far as changes go- the ending seems rapid. This type of middle film could benefit from some Act 2 screenplay maneuvers. For example, at the end it would be great to see what each of the characters is doing, perhaps over a music montage. This is a BUILDER episode- so let’s see our characters build. Brainstorming here- something like showing Grogu play with the metal ball as music builds, briefly showcase Vance peaceful in the desert, Fennec and Boba (especially Boba) on his spaceship nodding, perhaps some happy Tuskens, INTERSPERSE THE BALL SPINNING AND MANDO LOOKS AT GROGU, Bo Katan on her new ship looking stoic, Cara Dune in her town…etc. Even an evil shot of Gideon would be good to include (he is building too). End with Grogu and Mando together. This film showed SO MANY CHARACTERS so a small musical denouement of “victory poses” can show the characters as “in progress” for what is about to come in the next Book 4.
This is tough though- there is no galactic victory to tie everyone together, so they are tied in PURPOSE (theme).
This suggestion is also not very traditional STAR WARS and may be seen as kind of cheesy- so take that as you see best.

WtarSars said:

I’ve not finished your book 2 as yet so can’t compare but one thing in the BoBF that bothered me was that Boba left Fennec to sort out the person involved with killing his tusken family at the end of the show, then she anticlimactically just leaves through the door. I addressed that with an alternate ending idea which might interest you.

I Have my own edit that frames Cad Bane as the one who was hired to kill the tuskins, which is why he takes so much pride in taunting boba about it. I altered the convo so go as follows:

Boba: “I will only negotiate with the head of the Pyke Synidcate.”

Cad: NEW AI LINE “You mean the one who hired me to murder your tuskin family”.

This way Boba gets his vengeance and ties Cad into the main story.

I love this. Way better. Can you PM me a link?

Another GENERAL suggestion:

Have you considered editing the soundtracks for these movies? The main themes are absolute CLASSICS- but it sometimes feels stifled as we really only have a few songs spread over 5 movies. This is also reinforced by the use of the leitmotif’s being recycled frequently, and the musical spikes hitting every time our character does something cool (great in a show format where we return each week, less valuable in a movie format where we haven’t left). IE Mando steps into the room *FLUTE THEME PLAYS (you know what I’m talking about!)

Some suggestions would be to include more varied versions of these songs to stretch what we have further:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k5Itg9zpFB8&ab_channel=SamuelKimMusic

Or perhaps a Daimyo Boba theme for later to show a character growth/transition:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YsZhlycORwE&ab_channel=SamuelKimMusic

Or include something similar but different like The Hu (already a canon band referenced in Jedi: Fallen Order and Jedi: Survivor):
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oJZfEh3EciU&ab_channel=EAStarWars
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UjtOUwErXyo&list=RDUjtOUwErXyo&start_radio=1&rv=UjtOUwErXyo&t=2&ab_channel=VariousArtists-Topic

In fact all of the songs on this list are “canon” in-universe songs from Jedi: Survivor. Check the time stamps to play with certain sounds/vibes as there is a good variety here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=c9eswsCLLr4&ab_channel=MinstrelChief

ACBagel my friend you are not restricted to my suggestions above by any means. There is a wide variety of music we could fit in here- our goal is to raise our movie production value here and this is one area we could improve!

kypo said:

Also- Have you ever considered adding other fanedit material- like this salvaged Jango Fett scene from Attack of the Clones? Could be a good way to “add” to some of these flashback scenes.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5Gbh08F061A&ab_channel=vanilla

Kypo, first gotta say, absolutely killer reviews. Thank you so much for taking the time to do that. I’ll get back to responding to them in detail when I can. As far as the flashback, is there a certain place you’d recommend that? I believe all my Boba memory scenes are in Book 2, are you suggesting putting this clip somewhere in there?

I am glad to help! I should have 3 and 4 reviews up shortly. I am really having fun with your awesome work!

As for this particular scene- it could potentially fit right at the start of Book 2 when we see young Boba hold Jango’s helmet. Shorten this deleted scene as needed to fit the tone- it’s a dream so you have editing freedom here. It would strike the audience that this is what they remember- but it’s different. That’s a great feeling for a fanedit to impart on the audience at the start of a new movie.

If not there- perhaps a later flashback/bacta tank (flashbacta LOL) could be inserted. Boba does wake up from nightmares occasionally- and could help extend some of the Daimyo Boba content. (I’m not done with the other movies yet so I do not have a more specific answer)

I don’t remember the creator of this restored scene- but they used deleted stunt scenes for Jango’s death and added the special effects to make it sit in AotC. They shared it on the fan edits reddit for anyone who might use it.

RogueLeader said:

Kypo, love your professional perspective on a screenplay’s thesis and theme lines!
Speaking of which, if this is something Acbagel is interested in, we have been experimenting with voice AI for another edit project, so I wonder if we could do something similar with this.

If you could come up some potential theme lines, and Acbagel was interested in using it, I could try to make the lines. Something that can be said off camera by an actor, or said by character with a helmet, would be preferable.

Speaking of which, Acbagel, if there are any other spots where you have caught yourself saying, “Man, it would be great if we had a line here to explain this”, feel free to reach out because I’d be more than happy to generate some lines for you. I had already been wanting to remake Luke’s dialogue in Mando and BOBF to make it sound more natural and like Mark Hamill. It would be a good opportunity to alter his lines to fit your interpretation of the character, if you felt this version of Luke shouldn’t follow the “attachments” rule, for example. Just let me know!

Thank you! Absolutely- I would love to work with you all here. There are so many small changes that could be made with all of these helmets. This would be a great way to bring tiny adjustments to the script!

(My own personal, selfish, dream would be a line where Din Djarin hints that he saw the mythosaur as well… or a better dialogue between Boba and Mando before they fight the Pikes)

Also- Have you ever considered adding other fanedit material- like this salvaged Jango Fett scene from Attack of the Clones? Could be a good way to “add” to some of these flashback scenes.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5Gbh08F061A&ab_channel=vanilla

BOOK 2 NOTES:

Omg. I am so glad I am watching this. BOBA FETT ALREADY?! I love it!

The tiny cuts during his capture make a LOT more tension. I am blown away.

Boba is NOT awake during Jawas- these are the kind of small touches that go a long way. Great cut.

EVERY choice you made for Boba to be standoffish, less lines, etc works brilliantly. I am so happy with this. I am convinced this is a guy who would wear a wookie braid on his armor and hunt people for money.

It feels like it takes a long time to reach Mando- (14 minutes). Perhaps starting the Mando in the village scene earlier could help. A good earlier segue point would be when Boba arrives at the raider camp. If we add a Mando cut here, we see a tighter similarity in Mando “Moving in” to the village, as Boba is “moving in” to the slave camp. It would also mean where your second cutaway would land is now when Mando is “fitting in” as Boba is “fitting in”- tightening the two halves of our story.

I would also love to see even a glimpse of Boba in his nighttime chains to extend the perception of time to the audience. Or a glimpse of the dog at night (as his failed escape sequence is cut altogether). It helps add to your addition of him intimidating the dog later in the daytime. (Connected thread = 1- dog is scary. 2- Boba is scarier!)

“I’m sorry” and Mando replies “This is the way”. My suggestion here would be to cut Mando’s line and use his silence as a response. TitW doesn’t seem to fit here (This could also be my overreactive response to Season 3’s abuse of this line LOL)

Cara Dune’s intro/dialogue seems a little rushed. Not sure how to improve- it was just a little weird to me when we jump back to Cara and she is whiskey/spatchka buddies with Mando.
I also notice you cut before he removes his helm for dinner. Fans were so mad at this when it happened but I just assumed he was in a spot where he couldn’t be seen 😃

The transition around 45:20 of Mando leaving but Boba staying- OUTSTANDING. Wonderful joint storytelling here. However, the audio seems a bit off in the transition.

No lizard quest/spirit journey? Will this be reused later in a future flashback?

The scene of Boba passing the mechanic right after her introduction- Outstanding. The stories are passing so close and it makes me as an audience member completely hyped for when they intersect!

Ohhhhh Boba is scouting for his ship as a tool to wipe out the bikers. Holy crap way better storytelling.

Night time shots of Fennec etc are a little dark and hard to see. Is color correction possible here?

I read your notes on the bounty hunter/Fennec/dewback betrayal scene. The betrayal seems too quick and unclear. Her confident lean back just doesn’t work with finding her dead next. SHE has the card in her sleeve, not this expendable chump bounty hunter. The manipulation by Fennec (that was cut) is actually a great introduction to HER as a character. I am sad to see this go as she will be around for much more of the story but now she lacks a proper introduction. It makes her come across as flat in later scenes- we don’t KNOW how smart or clever she is. We know she can shoot, and that’s about it. I see what you are going for here in your notes- but I don’t think the edit as it currently stands accomplishes this goal.

1:14:02 - Should the Mechanic be reversed in her reaction shots here? Her spacing to Grogu looks a little weird to me like she’s looking at a different object. (Disney error, not yours)

Later transitions are great- the pacing of Mando gathering crew and Boba scouting are so tightly paced.

I would love to get just a little more of Fennec’s droid, we jump immediately to the droid returning. It’s minor but a scene separation or slightly additional footage of its exploration might help here.

THANK YOU for removing the kitchen droid. Such a waste of time that serves no purpose other than to infantilize Boba Fett.

When they sneak into the bay- they are caught immediately. It seems really quick. A second or two of sneaking before this would be good to imply they have gone undetected for a bit- but I don’t know what footage you even have for this!

“Kuilil do you copy” - I think the pan up would go to his body for the most efficient storytelling. We can infer Grogu is with the scouts.

LOL I forgot Grogu stopped a great big fireball in this episode… man Season 3 is running out of ideas more than I thought.

“I am not a living thing” Thank you for shortening the most obvious line of all time! LOL
However, I think the story would be stronger if we kept the rest of the scene. It is powerful and shows Mando’s transition as a character. His hatred of droids is one of his first growth archs, and it makes IG’s sacrifice later in this movie more meaningful. Why does Mando care in the lava without US seeing his change? The audience sees this change in the actor’s eyes. Aside from the powerful acting- we see his confusion and uncertainty. All around a win of a scene that works for this movie.
Also, it ties into Bill Burr’s comments in Season 2 when he questions the logic of the creed.
If I can’t convince you to keep it- please at least consider making the transition moment a few frames later when the helmet starts to come up. This will have the bonus of teasing the audience for the eventual reveal.

The enclave edits and arrangement are top-notch.

I kinda wish we had the “I need one of those” line to bring his jetpack acquisition full circle. I don’t really see any way to add the scene earlier in the film, unfortunately!

“Brains and muscle- you have both” - Fennec hasn’t displayed brains to the audience. Would be improved with the inclusion of her interaction with the young bounty hunter earlier where we see her manipulate his actions.

Boba’s resolute control of his campfire speech is SO MUCH BETTER. I can’t believe this is the same show.

I also loved the inclusion of the credits/artwork and other tiny details. It goes a long way in feeling like a full release!

Hey! I want to introduce myself and share some of my feedback. I have written multiple screenplays, and I’ve worked on small productions for stunt acting. I am certainly no expert so take all of my feedback for what it is- my enthusiastic SUGGESTIONS to help you improve your awesome project. All of my notes come from a fellow big Star Wars fan who loves and appreciates your edits!!

I have never checked out your edits as I am a big fan of S1 and S2 of Mandalorian and felt that I personally do not NEED a shorter edit. Then Boba Fett came out. Then S3. Then Kenobi (thanks PixelJoker!). This led me to your edits, and the way you assembled the story requires that I watch ALL of them. So I will watch all of them and give my input as a fellow film enthusiast. Not all of my notes will be actionable, but sharing is the least I can do!

BOOK 1 EDIT

One of the things that makes movies FEEL like movies is a THEME LINE in the early parts of the movie. It’s one of those classic screenplay rules that belong in the first 5 pages of a script. It operates like a thesis in an essay- what statement of belief will be challenged by our hero’s experience? This is a tough thing to accomplish as the shows you are working with do not necessarily give great lines to an overall plot structure (They are building a short episode, not a full film). In Book 1, a theme line would happen around his talk with Greef Karga. Unfortunately, he doesn’t really deliver a line that works. Then our protagonist receives the “quest” from THE CLIENT. No thesis. Then the Armorer, but here it’s very late in the story… and while she offers wisdom the lines are geared at exposition, not giving theme to our movie. I am not sure how to improve it as you’ve only got what you got. Perhaps a new V.O. with the Armorer stating Book 1’s thesis more clearly when she accepts his payment- but I don’t know how feasible this option is. Or perhaps a new MANDO line to The Client stating his intent to always travel alone.

The Fight scene edits = A+
I can see these fight scenes are punchier, shorter, quicker, and have less chaff getting shot by good characters to help raise the stakes. Fewer misses at the good guys. More tension is kept. Great work here!

Small suggestion- perhaps after the Warm or Cold line you can cut to carbonite in the face blast. Could be a shorter/punchier scene to jump straight to the ship.

Overall, I am very impressed. The problem to me personally is this cuts from the show when its at it’s best. Later Books in this series will have the advantage of cutting garbage (Looking at you, S3!). This book has the disadvantage of cutting relatively successful material. Much harder to do!! (And I am very impressed at what you created here!)
This gives me a LOT of hope for these next chapters and I cannot wait to review them.

pableve said:

Regarding your Book 6 plans.
I belive it would be better to make 2 books out of your plan. So the Book 6 would be pretty muvh what you have in act 1 but with all the usable 70 min of Book of Boba fett footage and then have it intersect with Bo katan training Mandalorians.

And then have Book 7 be what you have planed in act 2 and act 3 of your current Book 6 plan.

I think that would be better and insted of having 1 nearly 3h film you end up with 2 films around 1h 40min.

I second this! This will help your pacing for both chapters and improve the “movie” story arcs without having too much going on in one film.

Wow! I would love some links to check out this edit. I am very curious to see how S3 can be improved!