There are synchronization issues in S4E05 Family Reunion as well.
Quite noticeable around the 0:34 mark.
around 200 ms audio delay
I don’t want to copy Eddies formatting… so maybe I’ll limit myself to one capitalisation per screen of text limited to important people/faction/location.
For example:
Yes, I think that’s a good call.
Looking forward to see your additions
Toastb, I’d love to hear what you think about this potential rework of the text in the first episode.
Toastb, I’d love to hear what you think about this potential rework of the text in the first episode.
Great! It’s a definitive improvement in my opinion.
Though I’d try to generally aim for fewer, longer sentences instead of a of shorter ones.
Not sure how I feel about the capitalization. I know Eddie did that, but only for the first time a new place or major character is introduced.
On another note, I love your custom helmet intro.
Writing the opening crawls is the element I’ve found the most challenging and every new revision I’ve tended to change or tweak them.
What have you thought about the quality of them in the V4?
I’ve tried to avoid a more grand view of what’s going on. Rebels is a much quieter and smaller scale affair then Clone Wars so I’m not sure that suggestion would suit it. But I’m always open to reworking them 😃.
When you describe the font, I’m not sure what feedback you’re giving. Were you saying you prefer Eddie’s font and setup over mine? (That’s how I’m reading it but I’m not 100% sure).
I understand. I’m no writer but I can imagine it’s tough writing something in a completely foreign style.
Not sure how the quality of v4 compares to v3, since I have no comparison at hand. For season 1 I’ve been watching your recolour v4 and I can’t really see a difference in writing to v3 of season 2 and onwards. Most of the time the issues are repeated words, at the beginning of sentences/paragraphs, which should be avoided at all cost.
I would also completely remove any mentions of what characters are thinking. Intentions are debateable, since it is, as you said, on a smaller scale than clone wars, but thoughts of a character should be omitted.
Overall I do like them and I think they are needed for additional information or to explain things that might have been cut, although the writing style does not remind me of Star Wars and immediately brings me out of the immersion.
Out of interest, I put your first opening into ChatGPT and told it to rephrase it in a style similar to the star wars opening crawls:
Original:
"The Empire has ruled the Galaxy for 14 long year.
As each year passes, the Empire expands it’s territory to more and more systems.
The Empire consistently abuses and subjugates the people who occupy their planets.
On Lothal, a planet located in the outer rim, a young boy Ezra Bridger lives alone.
His mother and father were taken from him by the Empire for speaking out against them.
He has stolen and scavenged to survive. He grows tired of Imperial control."
Chat GPT:
"In a galaxy gripped by the iron fist of the Empire, a reign of dominance has endured for a grueling period of 14 years.
With each passing year, the Empire relentlessly extends its reach, annexing system after system. Amidst this oppressive regime, the Empire ruthlessly exploits and subjugates the inhabitants of its conquered planets.
On the distant world of Lothal, nestled within the outer rim, a solitary figure emerges from the shadows - a young boy named Ezra Bridger. Bereft of family, his parents cruelly snatched away by the Empire for daring to voice dissent, Ezra survives through pilfering and scavenging. Yet, a growing weariness festers within him, a weariness born from the shackles of Imperial control."
The 2nd version reads a lot more “Star Wars”-y. It does embellish quite a lot, is rather long (and should be shortened) but in my mind it sounds more like something the Clone Wars narrator would say.
Regarding the font: Eddie’s font is a bit smaller and more narrow. In my opinion it looks a lot better on a TV screen from afar, compared to your bigger and bit thicker font. Though that’s probably entirely up to preference.
Episode 3 of season 1 “Old Masters”: The audio is not in sync with the video, not sure by how much but it was a few ms behind. Had to correct it manually.
I had some time to check the audio and it seems fine to me. Are there any points in the episode where it stands out? And like I mentioned above, do you know what version and which release? 😃
Odd. I’m pretty sure it’s a few ms out of sync. The episode is fairly action-heavy, so it’s mostly noticable at the start of the episode during the lightsaber training on the ship. I have a 4k recolour v4 of that episode dated 26/07. Not sure how recent that is.
Currently at Season 3 and I really liked what you did with the Maul episodes.
First of all, thank you for your work, g00b!
I don’t really like Rebels, but your edit is making it much more enjoyable to watch. Most of your changes are well received, though one thing needs a major rework in my opinion:
The opening crawls at the moment are worded very odd and sometimes amateurish when compared to how the official crawls are usually written. Lines and/or words are repetitive, subject changes frequently, and they are often too personal or contain information that should rather be omitted.
Episode s2e7 crawl:
“The Ghost Crew have been sent on an assignment […]
The Ghost Crew is in great danger […]
Desperate and alone, the Ghost flies adrift in space.”
Just one of a few examples.
In comparison, the writing style of Eddie Dean’s Clone Wars Refocused crawls is more refined and in line with the official movie crawls.
It narrates a grander view of things from an outsider perspective, rarely addresses individual character actions directly and does not describe intentions or thoughts of specific characters (“X bides his time…, Y thinks that…, Z is still lurking…”). More “star wars like” so to speak.
The sleeker font is also much more pleasing to the eye and I think better suited for the big TV.
Not sure if Eddie already gave a review but maybe you can contact him for suggestions.
Regarding subtitles: I agree that the >> when characters speak are very distracting. I watch without subtitles anyway but this would have been a major turn off for me.
Episode 3 of season 1 “Old Masters”: The audio is not in sync with the video, not sure by how much but it was a few ms behind. Had to correct it manually.
Other than that great job, I like it. You cut much needed junk from the show so far and kept the essential parts while keeping character interactions intact. Though I’m still not done, only at the end of S2 so far.
Sorry for this long winded wall of text.
Cheers
