Jar Jar Bricks said:
Hey there! tx for your feedback. At this stage it definitively is a picture lock though. I put some thought through all the feedbacks I’ve received during the last weeks and try to see the one that apply, regarding my angle and my style of editing. I’d like to react to your points below though 😉
Just watched v2 and I’d like to give some feedback before I write a formal review elsewhere:
- I would have removed the brief line where Sol reveals that Torbin killed himself with the poison. I think it’s better to leave this up to viewer interpretation because in this edit he is not the one entirely at fault for storming the coven, so he shouldn’t feel that guilty. Perhaps even remove the brief mention that he hasn’t spoken to anybody in 10 years. Heck, they even blame Mae for killing him later on, so it’s just a really random line at this point.
Good point. That might be a subtle change without promoting it in the future, when I output an upscale version with subtitles! lol - like Lucas did several times!!!
- The lines from Mother Anasaya over when Osha has the helmet on feel out of place. Silence works better here because of the similarities to Darth Vader’s breathing.
Agree to disagree. ;-p I “did wanted” to get rid of the similarities with Vader, and give a sense of purpose or intention slowly burgeoning in Osha’s psyche…
- The line “What did I do?” from Mae in the ending appears to have been chopped off abruptly.
It suits me fine, to my ears, and others’. But I get your point. We are biased by the fact that we know the series, almost by heart, and it plays against our expectation. People who haven’t watch the series and watch my cut didn’t seem to bother at that moment…
- The ending could use some touch ups. Without any prior knowledge of the show, it appears that Osha and Quimir betrayed her sister and mind wiped her without her consent. Was this your intention? It just feels weird that they are crying in each other’s arms a second before Osha abandons her like this.
It is left for interpretation indeed, but this scene needed to be cut down, since Sol is dead, we don’t really care about the twins. However, during the interview I put back a shot where Mae nods giving her consent… If you blink you don’t see it! lol. And I love to play with “show and don’t tell” principle, and then let the viewer play along.
- As an aside, your change also makes the mind wiping ability incredibly overpowered, since it assumably could work on anybody. The idea that the person has to accept the memory manipulation is the only reason it was believable originally imo.
Q’mir is overpowered in this show… hahaha… And I kept the lines where Q’mir makes allusion to mind wipe during his first encounter with Sol.
Other than those things, I think this was a solid movie. The show is something I’d never rewatch again, but your edit has proven to me that there is a watchable movie buried within it.
Thank you man! The story of The Acolyte is interesting, and adds to the lore just fine! But the execution is not! Editing is where we can rewrite the “storytelling” - it is the third step after the writing, the shooting…
Looking forward to read your formal review! ;-p Tx!!