The dialogue is worse than the original screenplays. For example, consider the following passage:

GRIEVOUS
Two of our spies on Dxun have been killed, your Highness. The Mandalorian presence on the moon is stronger than ever. They have enough firepower to make a landing on –

AMIDALA
Withdraw all surviving personnel.

GRIEVOUS
It will be done, your Highness. Your Highness…

AMIDALA
Yes, General?

GRIEVOUS
If I may make a suggestion…We have the technology at our disposal, I propose we build an army to defend Onderon…

AMIDALA
Cloning for military purposes would be a direct contravention of Republic law!

GRIEVOUS
But your Highness, the Mandalorians –

AMIDALA
I will not condone an action that will lead us to war!

GRIEVOUS
As you wish, your Highness…

This dialogue is poor. Your characters interrupt each other far too much. Although individuals interrupt each other frequently in real life, characters should rarely interrupt each other on screen so many times in swift succession.

Good dialogue is always wittier and more intelligently argued than in real life. Good dialogue is a highly selective imitation of real speech – without the unnecessary interruptions and pauses.

Posting a comment in a thread that hasn’t been active since 2005 to a poster who hasn’t posted since 2008?

WORST

NECROBUMP

EVER

And it’s not even in the right subforum. Which is not the fault of the OP since that subforum didn’t exist back then, but it drives the point home that this was a shitty bump.