I actually really like Version B because of the model look, and all it needs to match the aesthetic of these movies is some atmospheric distortion and an engine glow which is larger and more blue.
But either one is really good, though there’s something about Snooker’s original concept shot that I really like:
It’s that little slowdown of the Falcon as it reorients itself to go to Hyperspace, along with the punchy Hyperspace sound placed just so in the space between musical notes and the speed of its acceleration. It just feels right to me, though I do like your take on the path.
I wonder if it would be cool to see the Falcon flying directly toward the yellow sun as if it were going to fly into it, but then turn at the last moment and jump into Hyperspace.