I like the Palps line, but I don’t quite like it while he’s frying the fleet. To me there’s a disconnect between currently electrocuting them (present tense) and saying this “will be your undoing” (future tense). I also get a weird implication where “coming together” is only bad because it means he can Chain Lightning them at once. If it’s possible, I think it works better where DZ suggested: “The life force of your bond, a dyad in the Force. A power like life itself. Unseen for generations. Your coming together will be your undoing. And now, the power of two restores the one true Emperor.”
There simply isn’t enough room to fit that line in there, trust me I’ve tried.
Besides, I’ve also tried cleaning up the line, and quite frankly it’s far from perfect. Perhaps there is some wizard out there who could do better than me but I isolated it to the one audio track with him speaking AND applied a filter to remove background music and it still didn’t turn out right.
I would say it’s best to drop this topic. It was a fun idea I had but clearly isn’t worth the effort.