Status updates for V2:
Things I need to do next:
- Wait for more things to do.
Receive and credit ChernobylLiquidator86 for new Portuguese subtitles
Slight tweak so Rey is shown contemplating before asking 3PO to consider going through with a memory wipe
Depict Kylo’s TIE with a different color stripe after the first one is destroyed on Pasaana (poppasketti)
Add a subtle sound of Leia vocalizing as she drops her headphones (JarJar Bricks)
Replace Luke’s line “a thousand generations live in you now,” with “We’ll always be with you” (MoviesRemastered, NeverarGreat, and ThisIsCreation)
Remove line, “They sold you to protect you.”
Add two shots of Coruscant to the conference room scene (poppasketti)
Recolor the quick light sequence on Rey’s lightsaber during the final scene to nod to Luke and Leia’s sabers by having a blue and purple light sequence (Burbin)
Fold in a few more audio submissions to the civilian fleet (contributions from ThisIsCreation, CaptainFaraday, Sherlockpotter, and Richard G)
Alter Kylo’s line to, “We’ve become a dyad in the Force” (sherlockpotter)
Adjust placement of the Leia medal insert shot, as well as lighting (sherlockpotter)
Remove Finn’s line, “He wanted her alive.” Remove Palpatine’s two lines, “I never wanted you dead, I wanted you here,” and, “…for my grandchild to come home.” This makes Palpatine’s machinations a little more intuitive.
Replace the Imperial shuttle (used in V1 to replace the regular TIE fighter Kylo took to Exegol at the climax) with Vader’s TIE due to popular demand. (I still prefer the shuttle.)
Remove line, “from the Southern shore” from 3PO’s translation in order for the mystical whisper effect of the blade to be more needed without the compass plot element.
Slightly restructure the Exegol space battle’s beginning (DominicCobb)
Remove the single time either of Rey’s parents address her by name (so we can still imagine that she named herself)
Remove two instances of the Sith dagger evoking flashbacks of Rey’s parents
User sherlockpotter’s and axlanian’s redub for the troopers who introduce the Knights of Ren
Implement new dialogue from axlanian for the 3PO and stormtrooper scene
Add Palpatine’s spinny-scream from ROTS as he explodes (Cinefy idea)
Remove “and” from Rey’s answer to Finn about who she saw on the throne of the Sith (is now just simply “Me” rather than she and Ren both). Along with this, remove “and take the throne” from Kylo’s proposition at the end of the hangar scene. (RogueLeader idea)
More of a note to self: change nl0428 to Master Lawdog in writeup
Add a small line from the young actor who played Sors Bandeam in ROTS to the Jedi voices sequence (mediated by CaptainFaraday)
Things being considered:
Change “attacking” to “silencing” in opening crawl.
Depict Kijimi as more rebellious by comping in graffiti and/or adding audible ‘resisting’ of the First Order by the populace
Add Sith eyes to ‘evil Rey’ when she appears in the DSII, or at the very least remove the milky eyes that appear in Rey’s vision (either normal or Sith eyes)
Remove Leia sensing the death of her son at the end of her Jedi path. (ideally “birth of her son,” though no audio has been identified - truncating it to “sensed the end of her Jedi path” doesn’t sound right)
If it comes out fairly seamless, change Rey’s climactic line from “I’m all the Jedi” to simply “I am a Jedi.” (Sherlockpotter spearheading)
Change poppasketti’s “You were right” to Jar Jar Brick’s “I see them.”
Things waiting on others:
Pasaana puppet show to depict Luke’s feats at the Battle of Crait (at least RogueLeader working on puppets, poppasketti and MoviesRemastered provided relatively clean backdrops, and ThisIsCreation has done a vocal dub)
Further extend the Mustafar sequence to slow the pacing (currently features work from poppasketti, MoviesRemastered, NeverarGreat, and 21C Peasant; hoping to augment and include footage from the recent ‘Biomes’ short - unassigned)
Depict the Skywalker lightsaber fizzling out at a critical moment in the DSII duel (waiting on MoviesRemastered; may be finished)
Depict both sabers as fizzling out or sparking after the climax on Exegol (waiting on MoviesRemastered; may be finished)
Correct glitches on jonh’s first pass on giving Luke a haircut, then hand this to NeverarGreat in order to reapply his work to depict Ach-To experiencing sunrise)
Depict the Skywalker saber as ‘cracked,’ with an unstable blade reminiscent of Kylo’s (kewlfish completed some of the shots needed, as have Luka Frik and MoviesRemastered)
Update the four ghosts with new tweaks and improvements from jonh
Change Hux’s designation from General to ‘Captain.’ (RogueLeader doing audio work)
Running time is about 138 minutes.
Video specs (for 1080 BluRay-compliant version):
H.264, 1920x1080, 23.976 fps.
Audio specs (for 1080p BluRay-compliant version):
5.1 AC3, 448 kbps
Fan Editor’s Commentary track
Subtitles (English, Spanish, French, Italian, Dutch)
Tagline: Every saga has an end…
Synopsis: Star Wars: The Rise of Skywalker gets an overhaul to serve as a conclusion to the Star Wars saga. Pacing, character journeys, and story continuity are improved via an unprecedented fan editing collaboration. A layer of polish and care applied to a relentlessly fast-paced film. Subtle character tweaks. And a few new surprises.
Intention: To improve upon this film as the series conclusion to the degree possible, from a constructive perspective. This project does not seriously alter the story, but enhances it.
Everyone at OriginalTrilogy.com who contributed, including:
poppasketti (voice, audio and visual FX)
jonh (visual FX)
skenera (visual FX)
DominicCobb (clips provided)
Sir Ridley (visual FX)
axlanian (KoR voice project)
krausfadr (KoR voice project)
RogueLeader (voice and audio work)
ChainsawAsh (DTS encode)
snooker (visual FX)
Burbin (English, Spanish, and French subtitles)
IlFanEditore (Italian subtitles)
nevertellmetheodds (Dutch subtitles)
LILLIAN02230 (audio work)
Chase Adams (3PO dialogue)
Cinefy (music mockups)
sade1212 (video help)
idir_hh (video help)
Luka Frik (video help)
Octorox (video help)
mrbenjamino (audio work)
bbghost (audio work)
MaláStrana (help proofreading French subtitles)
act on instinct
Dexter Jettster’s Lab
Jar Jar Bricks
Knight of Kalee
(Special thanks to the following legends for help recuperating from computer failure: MMP, poppasketti, Catsailor73, ChainsawAsh, EddieDean, Josanael, RogueLeader, and Neerb)
Cuts and Additions:
Overall color correction using LUTs provided by skenera
Added a new opening crawl, thanks to Sir Ridley:
THE RISE OF SKYWALKER
Flames of rebellion burn across the galaxy. The tyrannical First Order has retaliated by attacking any planetary system that supports their enemy.
As Rey, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training, General Leia Organa sends her brave agents across the stars to unite the disparate worlds in the name of Resistance.
Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has traveled to Mustafar, chasing whispers of a hidden power that would allow him to destroy any threat to his rule…
Added a Wilhelm scream, somewhere in the film…
Added a new establishing shot to the opening Mustafar sequence to slow the pacing slightly (visual FX from poppasketti and audio assistance from LILLIAN02230)
Added a subtle call from Palpatine, saying “Find me,” as Kylo Ren picks up the Wayfinder
Replaced the vat of cloned Snokes with cloned Palpatine’s (FX by poppasketti)
Removed the slight electrical crackle as Palpatine reveals his hands (FX by skenera)
Moved Palpatine describing spirit transfer into his first scene, turning it into a warning to Kylo Ren and setting up stakes for later (RogueLeader idea)
Reordered opening scenes for a more logical progression and better pacing (Kylo Ren meets Palpatine > Rey trains > Falcon mission > Returning to base)
Moved the scene with Chewie, Poe, and Finn playing holochess to the end of the movie, with a shot having been modified here to depict dropping out of hyperspace (FX by poppasketti)
Replaced Finn’s now first line “Artoo” with “Look sharp” (dgraham414 idea)
Removed lightspeed skipping sequence. It made no sense given how hyperspace has always been depicted, as quick travel, not teleportation. Now, the Falcon bursts through the ice wall while jumping to hyperspace, and the pursuing TIEs peel off, ending the scene (visual FX by poppasketti)
Only because he has no proper introduction and would appear suddenly due to other changes made, removed Klaud from a few shots (FX by poppasketti)
Moved Rey’s repeat of “nothing’s impossible” to after Leia hands her the saber to make it feel more endearing (Movies Remastered change)
The vision Rey experiences while training with the remote has been heavily modified to better establish her apprehension about the Sith throne, and separated from Kylo’s vision (by DominicCobb)
Replaced Poe’s lines, including “Somehow, Palpatine returned,” with part of the Emperor’s speech being played, implied to be part of the gathered intel
Removed a line of dialogue establishing an unnecessary 16-hour ‘ticking clock’ to the plot
Kylo now has a vision separate from Rey’s, before reforging his mask, better establishing his motivation for doing so (by DominicCobb)
Added a few lines of dialogue throughout the film to the Knights of Ren (sourced from project by axlanian and krausfadr, with voice recordings submitted by axlanian, krausfadr, Ben, axlanian’s wife, poppasketti, DG)
Removed Poe’s use of the word ‘random.’
Cut Rey saying “that’s an excellent name.” This statement felt overly modern.
After Kylo Ren says “I will find you,” cut him saying “…and turn you to the dark side.” It’s implied that he will try to do that once he finds her, but why say it aloud? He should be trying to seduce her to the dark side and masking his intentions.
Moved the scene forward in which Rey’s necklace is reported to be traced to Pasaana aboard the Star Destroyer, for better pacing. Trooper line modified not to show him reporting Rey and company’s identities. (Ziggyonice idea)
Used a foreign language dub for a milder delivery of Lando’s chauffeur’s one line
Removed the “they fly now” gag
Removed Finn telling Rey he “never told you—“ while the heroes sink in the quicksand, as well as two subsequent references to it
Extended the confrontation between Rey and Kylo’s TIE in the desert using footage from the trailer (by DominicCobb)
Removed the explosion of Kylo Ren’s TIE, though it still rolls after being sliced by Rey
Added new shot of Ochi’s ship taking off with the heroes as Kylo Ren watches in order to slightly slow the pace (visual FX by poppasketti)
Removed part of Poe’s line about their efforts being for nothing, allowing 3PO’s statement later to feel original to him
Chewie is not revealed to be alive until Rey senses him from Kijimi, and not seen until he is rescued by Poe and Finn. The reveal with Hux and Pryde has been replaced with the telepathic Palpatine-Kylo conversation from later. (Help and brief color correction from ziggyonice)
Replaced Kylo Ren’s line “I never lied to you” with “You were right” for more intuitive and precise continuity with TLJ even as the scene retcons it. In that film, it is Rey herself who supplies the information that her parents “were nobody.” (Voice and audio work by poppasketti)
Zorri gives Poe a cold stare, muting her line about seeing his brains in the snow
Removed dialogue referencing R2 backing up 3PO’s memory, which immediately destroyed any weight his sacrifice had before it had even happened, practically stating to the audience what will later happen
Extended the “squeaky wheel” sequence in order to slow the pace using footage from the bonus disc (audio help from LILLIAN2330, visual FX by poppasketti)
Replaced 3PO line starting with “Whoever this Chewie person is…” due to being one of a few clunky reminders that he had his memory erased (alternate line provided by Chase Adams)
Removed Finn yelling “POE!”
Removed line from Rey’s mother, “She’s not on Jakku, she’s gone.” This paints Ochi as a moron not to have found Rey, and appears to have been included to explicitly harmonize with TLJ describing Rey’s parents as being buried on Jakku. This is clunky and unnecessary, all the moreso because that line was omitted from this editor’s TLJ project.
Replace 3PO/trooper dialogue to depict 3PO somewhat out of his element (by RogueLeader)
Removed single line “You are a Palpatine.” The rest of the scene works well enough without this heavy-handed line.
The moon containing the wreckage of the second Death Star has been recontextualized as Endor, replacing what was Endor with an ice moon during the space establishing shot and moving the Ewok snippet up from the film’s climax. (Visual FX by poppasketti and snooker)
Replaced the obtuse reminder that 3PO had his memory erased in the form of a line “Is everyday like this for you people?” (alternate line provided by Chase Adams)
Removed Rey using the dagger as an impossible compass while surveying the wreckage of the second Death Star. ‘Sith whispers’ have been added strategically to imply the dagger mystically guiding her to the Wayfinder.
Added a brief musical allusion to ‘Duel of the Fates’ during the duel on the Death Star using music from Maul’s scene in Solo (idea and help from Cinefy)
Trimmed Finn’s final whimper of “Rey!” during the duel
Worked in the shot of Leia holding Han’s medal from the trailer, which makes it clearer that she promoted Kylo’s memory and sets up Chewie receiving it later which felt like it came out of nowhere (help from sade1212 and idir_hh)
Reordered the sequence of dialogue and action as Rey heals Ben’s wound
Extended the establishing shot of Kylo during the Han scene by a few seconds to slow the pace (thanks to Luka Frik and Octorox)
Completely removed the destruction of Kijimi and the Resistance’s reaction. This helps us imagine the Final Order as an Imperial stockpile since it was the only glimpse into them before the First Order arrives to help. It avoids yet another planet destruction, and generally smooths things over.
Softened the stark sound effect slightly as Luke catches the lightsaber, since he is immaterial
Added an additional establishing shot breaking up the Rey on Ahch-to scenes so it doesn’t seem like she only spends a couple minutes on the island (modeled after DominicCobb’s clip)
A porg sound continues to trail off after their single shot, to help them feel like they were really there
Heavily reduced the bluish color to Luke’s ghost on Ach-To (FX by Skenera)
Removed talk about Leia (and possibly Luke, depending on one’s interpretation of the scene) having known about Rey being a Palpatine. In this version, Luke essentially tells Rey, “So what if you’re a Palpatine?” It also seems to make a great deal more sense to assume they did not know this during the events of TFA and TLJ, with Luke learning this postmortem.
Leia’s lightsaber blade has been recolored to purple throughout. Carrie Fisher expressed a preference for this color of saber in a TFA-era interview, and it is more visually striking in the Exegol setting which helps the audience track which saber is which, particularly following a restored Leia line before Rey prominently uses her saber. (FX by skenera)
Added R2 and 3PO’s prequel theme briefly during the memory restoration scene (Cinefy idea)
Removed the line about the Holdo maneuver. If it is something legitimate then someone who lives in that universe shouldn’t have the same misconception as we may.
Removed the subtitle for Nien Nunb’s one line. He was never subtitled in the past and it’s not needed.
Removed Finn telling BB8 “great job, buddy” during the mounted attack in order to preserve a sense of tension or seriousness
Replaced the Imperial TIE Kylo took to Exegol with an Imperial shuttle, because ANH had made a point to establish that TIEs don’t have hyperdrives, whereas shuttles have been depicted onscreen as using them. (FX by poppasketti)
Trimmed a moment when Ben seems to wait for the Knight to hit his saber (David_B idea)
Added a small bit of score from ROTS as Palpatine absorbs the power of Rey and Ben’s friendship (Cinefy idea)
Added a cacophony of voices to the appearance of the civilian fleet to the battle. Several craft can be heard signing in via comm, and a few cheer “For Skywalker!” during the charge in order to tie into Luke’s Inspiring act at the Battle of Crait (thanks to axlanian for help mixing, and to the few dozen contributors who sent in recordings: poppasketti, AbramPT, Wesyeed, mrbenjamino, KieranKhalid, alastair, Anakin Skywalker, JKMaxx, Cinefy, Knight of Kalee, Chase, jonh, tobar, Doubleofive, Dana Domenick, nl0428, Harmy, brewzter, Blake, Justin W, Reylochriso, Elia97963000, EllaLisa15, JediTwilight, deefayy, joelkarnold, AnEnemyAnemone, sixtailedcat, and 5footwonderful)
Extended a space exterior shot using an ILM demo clip in order to remove Poe’s line, “Every [underbelly cannon] we knock out is a world saved.” (Visual FX to remove watermark by Sir Ridley, audio FX assisted by mrbenjamino)
Since Kijimi isn’t destroyed, there’s no need for Babu Frik to pop up only to show he’s alive
Added Leia concluding the Jedi voices with “always,” taken from the trailer.
The ghostly visages of Yoda, Obi-Wan, Anakin, and Luke appear behind Rey and assist with overpowering the Emperor (incredible visual FX work from jonh)
Because the first Ewok shot was used earlier, Coruscant and Naboo have been added in its place in the planetary celebration montage (Coruscant FX by poppasketti, and Naboo FX by snooker and skenera)
The holochess scene between Chewie, Finn, and Poe has been moved to Tatooine
Added a subtle double rainbow to the first shot of the Lars homestead, originally inspired by a similar phenomena at that filming location as seen on the bonus material, rationalized into a deep cut reference to Leia’s infantile destination of Alderaan, which sports a double rainbow in ROTS. (FX by poppasketti)
The ghostly visage of a redeemed Ben Solo now accompanies the Skywalker twins during the final scene (visual FX by jonh)
Rey’s delivery of her final line has been swapped with one from the behind the scenes bonus material that appeared more emotionally resonant, with the background modified to match the finished film (visual FX by poppasketti)
The final shot has been replaced with the Falcon taking off, flying toward the suns, and jumping to hyperspace. (FX by snooker and poppasketti)
The musical cue leading into the credits has been replaced with something more fitting that does not reuse the cue from the end of TFA (audio help from bbghost)
Well done. I will disengage self-destruct initiative.