Started playing with ideas to make a fan edit of the ‘Revenge of the Sith’ novelization.
This OP is going to have to be kind of quick to start off, because I technically have other stuff to do, but I had an itch to discuss a particular line.
On page 160, Anakin says the following line, which is also used in the movie; I have always felt it sounds awkward and barely rolls off the tongue well.
“I wish that were so,” he says, “but the fighting will continue until General Grievous is spare parts.”
The fighting will continue until Gen. Grievous IS spare parts? Not only does it sound awkward, it’s downright unimaginative.
I played around with ideas and decided on this for now.
“I wish that were so,” he says, “but the fighting will continue until General Grievous is sliced and diced into spare parts.”
I feel like using verbs to describe HOW Grievous can become spare parts really gives the line more life.
Other ideas were “reduced to spare parts” and “cut down to spare parts;” also, “blown up into spare parts.”