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What do you want to happen in the the rest of the ST? — Page 10

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dahmage said:

BillionaireHobo287 said:

Look at the title! This is completely on-topic! In three or more pages, barely has a guy posted his idea for the ST, so unless somebody else starts doing what I’m doing, It’s going to be this way, sorry.

yeah, look at the post above this rant. I TRIED to bring this back on topic. if we were voting, i would vote you don’t post any more scripts in this thread. we are not voting.

What you and I are doing is ontopic, but the Force Awakens answered your question. The Jedi are myths. In Bloodlines, Luke makes sure that the Jedi Academy is so secret that not even his closest friends know about its location or teachings. The Sith is a religion long since lost and dead, and the Knights of Ren are desperate preservers (think Despecialized Edition but evil).

In my version, Supreme Leader Snoke does not think of himself as a Sith because he is so ancient that there is no way he could not notice and utilize the dark side of the Force. The Force flows and penetrates everything and everyone, so how could he not notice it? Since normal people have a shorter lifespan, they are less likely to notice the Force. Kylo Ren can’t learn enough to be a truly faithful Sith because Luke’s Jedi Academy actively destroyed Sith artifacts.

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TV’s Frink said:

BillionaireHobo287 said:

Frank your Majesty said:

This thread is called what do you want to happen not how you want it to happen. Just list the main plot points of your script here and the whole thing in the proper subforum. I know it’s not frequented that much, but that’s probably because most people don’t want to read the walls of text that such stories usually are. Forcing these walls of text on us here is highly annoying.

Same thing. I actually already did that though. Sorry. If somebody critiques my third draft (which I’ve edited to hell) and tells me how to improve my writing, I will never post stories here again

This is like my daughters promising to go to bed if I give them a second dessert.

Third draft sucks. No more fanfiction.

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HansiG said:

TV’s Frink said:

BillionaireHobo287 said:

Frank your Majesty said:

This thread is called what do you want to happen not how you want it to happen. Just list the main plot points of your script here and the whole thing in the proper subforum. I know it’s not frequented that much, but that’s probably because most people don’t want to read the walls of text that such stories usually are. Forcing these walls of text on us here is highly annoying.

Same thing. I actually already did that though. Sorry. If somebody critiques my third draft (which I’ve edited to hell) and tells me how to improve my writing, I will never post stories here again

This is like my daughters promising to go to bed if I give them a second dessert.

Third draft sucks. No more fanfiction.

This is to both HansiG and Frink. I have a right to post ontopic material, and I keep doing it because everybody ignores it! If I post it in Script Writing and Rewriting, I sacrifice all chance for feedback, which is exactly why I’m here.

Saying it sucks isn’t constructive. One post telling me how to write better, and I won’t post here even to shout F-bombs to Frink. Seriously, you aren’t any better than me, Frink. You repeatedly post here saying the exact same thing: your fanfiction sucks and stop posting. While my story is fanfiction, there is no romance to be seen anywhere in the plot, so don’t be biased and stereotype it, and all scenes play out very differently than both the first and second drafts.

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dahmage said:

One thing that i just thought of that i would like to see in the ST:

Explore what role Jedi should play in the world.

In the OT, Jedi were just relics of the past, so this wasn’t really explored much, and even in ROTJ Luke only was in partial jedi master mode.

In the PT, Jedi were very bureaucratic / whatever you want to call it.

In the ST, ??. Will they be outside / above the law? will they be like Samurai? Will they manipulate world/universe events from the shadows?

I would like to see this explored.

BillionaireHobo287 said:

[…] the Force Awakens answered your question. The Jedi are myths. In Bloodlines, Luke makes sure that the Jedi Academy is so secret that not even his closest friends know about its location or teachings. The Sith is a religion long since lost and dead, and the Knights of Ren are desperate preservers (think Despecialized Edition but evil).

I disagree that TFA answered my Question. The Jedi were myths. but what will they be in the next two movies. Surely Luke resurfacing and interacting with Rey and possibly Kylo Ren will be the answer, but we don’t know what the answer will be as those movies aren’t out.

Personally, i think i am hoping for something like a lone Samurai or medieval knight. Jedi working mostly individually, going where the force will take them, and finding adventures on their ways.

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This is not what I had originally intended for this thread…but I should have expected something like this coming to pass.

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BillionaireHobo287 said:

HansiG said:

TV’s Frink said:

BillionaireHobo287 said:

Frank your Majesty said:

This thread is called what do you want to happen not how you want it to happen. Just list the main plot points of your script here and the whole thing in the proper subforum. I know it’s not frequented that much, but that’s probably because most people don’t want to read the walls of text that such stories usually are. Forcing these walls of text on us here is highly annoying.

Same thing. I actually already did that though. Sorry. If somebody critiques my third draft (which I’ve edited to hell) and tells me how to improve my writing, I will never post stories here again

This is like my daughters promising to go to bed if I give them a second dessert.

Third draft sucks. No more fanfiction.

This is to both HansiG and Frink. I have a right to post ontopic material, and I keep doing it because everybody ignores it! If I post it in Script Writing and Rewriting, I sacrifice all chance for feedback, which is exactly why I’m here.

Saying it sucks isn’t constructive. One post telling me how to write better, and I won’t post here even to shout F-bombs to Frink. Seriously, you aren’t any better than me, Frink. You repeatedly post here saying the exact same thing: your fanfiction sucks and stop posting. While my story is fanfiction, there is no romance to be seen anywhere in the plot, so don’t be biased and stereotype it, and all scenes play out very differently than both the first and second drafts.

I don’t care if your fanfiction sucks or is the greatest thing since the Godfather (I don’t know, is that a good example?). The point is there is a place for fanfiction, this is not it, and you posting it here because no one cares about it when posted in the proper place should not be our fucking problem.

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I do feel a little bit sorry for the guy. Not enough to say that he should keep posting here, but a little bit.

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yhwx said:

I do feel a little bit sorry for the guy. Not enough to say that he should keep posting here, but a little bit.

I don’t disagree with this, but I do agree that his approach is wrong.

This site isn’t really a fan-fiction-oriented site, so looking for writing help here (unless you can get a hold of yotsuya and his team of professional writer friends) seems like it’s kind of a waste of your time, BillionaireHobo.

I can write, sure, but I don’t know the first thing about writing natural dialogue or how to write a compelling romance subplot or action scene. I can’t critique your work because mine would be just as amateur, and I’m willing to bet most of the people here are the same way, which is why the Script Rewrite thread is so barren all the time.

Coming to the main Star Wars board and holding a thread hostage is going to get you more visibility, yeah, but what do you want from us? This isn’t a writing help community, man. And trying to force a community of non-writers and people who (obviously) aren’t interested in fan fiction is only going to garner the reactions seen in these last few pages.

Keep Circulating the Tapes.

END OF LINE

(It hasn’t happened yet)

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yhwx said:

I do feel a little bit sorry for the guy. Not enough to say that he should keep posting here, but a little bit.

Here are all the fucks I give about his fanfiction:

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Here’s my script for Episode 8:

[Begin scene with slow zoom-in to Coruscant, into bustling TV studio. A lounge band is on stage playing the “Star Wars” theme.]

BILL MURRAY
[singing]
Ah… Star Wars! Nothing but Star Wars! Gimme those Star Wars… don’t let them end! Ah… Star Wars! If they should bar wars… please let these Star Wars stay-ay! And, hey! How about that nutty Star Wars bar? Can you forget all those creatures in there? And, hey! Darth Vader in that black and evil mask - did he scare you as much as he scared me-e-e-e? Star Wars-s-s-s!

[Audience erupts into applause, camera zooms in onto Bill Murray. He looks deadpan into the camera before suddenly shouting:]
LIVE FROM NEW YORK, IT’S SATURDAY NIGHT!

END.

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TV’s Frink said:

BillionaireHobo287 said:

I know this is all seems trivial to you, but I want to see if I have writing talent. I want to know if the last months of my life thinking about stories were wasted. I mean, come on, I don’t mean to be annoying. I’ll look at as many alligator pictures as you want if you just give the third draft a quick read and a 1-10 rating.

I’m sorry to break this to you, but I simply don’t care about fanfiction at all, and the point of this thread is not to spam it with yours. Fanfiction belongs in the other subforum, and you can’t make people care about it if they aren’t interested.

In all honesty, I completely agree with Frink.

Return of the Jedi: Remastered

Lord of the Rings: The Darth Rush Definitives

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Tyrphanax said:

yhwx said:

I do feel a little bit sorry for the guy. Not enough to say that he should keep posting here, but a little bit.

I don’t disagree with this, but I do agree that his approach is wrong.

This site isn’t really a fan-fiction-oriented site, so looking for writing help here (unless you can get a hold of yotsuya and his team of professional writer friends) seems like it’s kind of a waste of your time, BillionaireHobo.

I can write, sure, but I don’t know the first thing about writing natural dialogue or how to write a compelling romance subplot or action scene. I can’t critique your work because mine would be just as amateur, and I’m willing to bet most of the people here are the same way, which is why the Script Rewrite thread is so barren all the time.

Coming to the main Star Wars board and holding a thread hostage is going to get you more visibility, yeah, but what do you want from us? This isn’t a writing help community, man. And trying to force a community of non-writers and people who (obviously) aren’t interested in fan fiction is only going to garner the reactions seen in these last few pages.

At least just give this a read: http://originaltrilogy.com/topic/BillionaireHobo-Sequel-Trilogy-and-more/id/50736 then a 1-10 rating. I also deleted most of the stuff I wrote here besides this draft since either nobody apprieciates it anymore(people went from praising it in page five to being too annoyed to even read it), or everybody just jumped on the Frink bandwagon. Seriously, yhwx seems to mold his opinion based on anybody who comes before him. I admit the second draft might be terrible out of context of the cut scenes, but I cut out ALL the initial Kylo Ren scenes from the first and second drafts.

Maybe you really do think all my work sucks and have read it, but for the other people, man up and have a fucking opinion! I don’t deserve being harrassed like this, and while my story-posting could almost be considered harassment, it’s not intentional. I asked for a simple 1-10 rating before, but HansiG set the example by just stating that it sucks.

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BillionaireHobo287 said:

Maybe you really do think all my work sucks and have read it, but for the other people, man up and have a fucking opinion!

Which of these words is causing you the most difficulty?

  • We
  • Don’t
  • Care

I don’t deserve being harrassed like this

Yes you do.

and while my story-posting could almost be considered harassment

It is.

it’s not intentional.

Of course it is…you keep doing it! Does your finger keep slipping or something?

Man up and stop posting about this.

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TV’s Frink said:

BillionaireHobo287 said:

Maybe you really do think all my work sucks and have read it, but for the other people, man up and have a fucking opinion!

Which of these words is causing you the most difficulty?

  • We
  • Don’t
  • Care

I don’t deserve being harrassed like this

Yes you do.

and while my story-posting could almost be considered harassment

It is.

it’s not intentional.

Of course it is…you keep doing it! Does your finger keep slipping or something?

Man up and stop posting about this.

The first. You can’t generalize everyone.

Why?

At the end of the day, what am I doing? I’m posting stories here and asking for feedback. I’m not repeatedly ignoring a person’s work, seemingly irrationally saying that it sucks, and (albeit unintentional) practically alienating him from everyone by starting a bandwagon!

How can it not be unintentional? It’s not my fault you decided to post here with your usual snarky remarks instead of answering the title question of this thread!

I want to stop, but you don’t, and I have to respond because you manage to be so fucking aggravating every time(even when I try to be nice! I reposted this on Script Writing and Rewriting without responding to ANYBODY’S insults on page 8; THAT PAGE IS PURE HARRASSMENT; I could report a lot of people just based on that page, but I don’t do it). There’s a new thread for this stuff, so you man up and stop posting.

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The lack of feedback suggests that people aren’t interested in your “work”, the only reason people started to say it’s shit is that you kept asking for a reaction.

Ceci n’est pas une signature.

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BillionaireHobo287 said:

TV’s Frink said:

BillionaireHobo287 said:

Maybe you really do think all my work sucks and have read it, but for the other people, man up and have a fucking opinion!

Which of these words is causing you the most difficulty?

  • We
  • Don’t
  • Care

I don’t deserve being harrassed like this

Yes you do.

and while my story-posting could almost be considered harassment

It is.

it’s not intentional.

Of course it is…you keep doing it! Does your finger keep slipping or something?

Man up and stop posting about this.

The first. You can’t generalize everyone.

Why?

At the end of the day, what am I doing? I’m posting stories here and asking for feedback. I’m not repeatedly ignoring a person’s work, seemingly irrationally saying that it sucks, and (albeit unintentional) practically alienating him from everyone by starting a bandwagon!

How can it not be unintentional? It’s not my fault you decided to post here with your usual snarky remarks instead of answering the title question of this thread!

I want to stop, but you don’t, and I have to respond because you manage to be so fucking aggravating every time(even when I try to be nice! I reposted this on Script Writing and Rewriting without responding to ANYBODY’S insults on page 8; THAT PAGE IS PURE HARRASSMENT; I could report a lot of people just based on that page, but I don’t do it). There’s a new thread for this stuff, so you man up and stop posting.

I’m not sure what you’re not getting here. This is not the place for fan fiction hence why everyone is ignoring it.

The insults are coming because you won’t stop cluttering this thread with stuff no one cares about.

In case you still don’t get it, NO ONE WANTS YOU TO POST YOUR FAN FICTION HERE. PLEASE STOP DOING THAT AND PLEASE STOP COMPLAINING ABOUT PEOPLE NOT GIVING YOU FEEDBACK EVEN THOUGH WE’VE MADE IT ABUNDANTLY CLEAR WHY.

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This is undoubtedly off topic for this thread. This is a sort of wish list, not a script rewriting club. Go to the appropriate place for that.

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Jay said:

Temp ban for image-only posts outside Off Topic.

This is the straw that broke the camel’s back? Lol