Hi everyone, I was watching latest workprint and I have some loose thoughts about minor improvments to consider.
First,maybe cut just a few almost still frames from that shot of icy moon that once was Fores Moon of Endor? Just before Falcon shows up. It still has the vibe of: “you know that place, but we’re going somewere else”. But we’re now really going to Forest Moon, and this icey moon means nothing.
Secondly, Reys added(?) line “the Death Star” sound unnatural, not fitting the rest of her sentence about old wars.
Then, trailer fotage of medal. I have a feeling that reordering just 2 short shoots, first Leia laying down, then medal close up may flow better.
Great work with restructuring Luke and Rey talk. Could we try to have a line: “… don’t face your fear”, instead of “Palpatine”? That could strenghten the message that Luke and Leia learned from mistakes of Jedi of the past, and they weren’t hiding Reys heritage, and Luke gives her quest to fight her own weeknes, not to kill her family.
I would also add more R2 and 3PO prequel theme, it’s nice piece of music. And maybee, if Chewie has to survive, maybe 3PO will have his memory permanently deleted? After that his role in the film is very limited. It wouldn’t require much work to make it beliviable I think.
Another one is cutting Finn line: “Lando will send a distress signal”. If they didn’t respond to Leia they will not respond to Lando. It could flow better this way:
“…take the Falcon to the Core systems.
-We have friends there”
Like people are already fighting there and need just leader to unite them and show way to Methanol. Exagol. Not to encourage them to start fighting. There were already some changes in this direction and it could strenghten that message.
And two last thing, bigger but they rather don’t pass.
Silent duel is realy slow and blank. Putting Samuel Kim mashup of Battle of the Heroes and Duel of the Fates is realy lighting it up.
And there is no chance to have this cute look from Poe to Finn instead of Zori? 😃
Great work all of You guys. We are on the verge of greatness. We are this close.