Hal 9000 said:
I wonder if introducing the idea in the crawl that all or certain systems are being silenced would help with the “making you think you’re alone” element.
“…by silencing any planetary system that supports their enemy.”
“…by cutting off any planetary system…”
“…by silencing communication between planetary systems that…”
Like I’ve said before, I would be hesitant to introduce “communications blackouts” into the story if we don’t have a satisfying way of showing that, or of resolving that. But I do really like the idea of changing “attacking” to “silencing.” You have the same thing, which implies that the First Order is trying to prevent a new alliance from forming (as opposed to “attacking” them in retaliation); but it’s not as specific or as mechanical as “cutting the telephone lines.”
Hal 9000 said:
I do agree with changing the third paragraph to imply Kylo is tracking down a rumored threat to his rule rather than a macguffin that would allow him to destroy any unspecified threats to his rule.
I also really like this angle too! Enough with the McGuffins, film lol. My only concern would be - if there were rumors in the galaxy about something that could challenge Kylo’s rule, wouldn’t the Resistance be all over that? It could change the tide of the war! Leia would have sent Finn and Poe to investigate the rumor directly, not rendezvous with some random informant. So we would have to word it very carefully…
So, perhaps something like this?
THE RISE OF SKYWALKER
Flames of rebellion burn across the galaxy. As worlds rise, inspired by LUKE SKYWALKER’S sacrifice on Crait, the tyrannical First Order has begun silencing any planetary system that supports their enemy.
As Rey, sole heir to the Jedi, continues her training, General Leia Organa sends her brave agents across the stars to unite the disparate worlds in the name of Resistance.
Meanwhile, having sensed a new power rising in the shadows, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren has traveled to Mustafar, determined to quell any threats to his rule…