Great work on this, Hal.
Watched workprint 6.1. It looks really good, and my feedback is minimal.
- For the edit in the desert scene, the cut at 23:40 is pretty obvious. I suggest using the clip at 24:02 and placing it at 23:40 as a break, THEN cut to them running.
I can try that.
- Would you consider putting in a couple establishing shots of Ahch-To at 1:26:28? It’s such a hard cut here and it’s our first time seeing the island in this movie, and doesn’t give much context. Is there a shot or two from TFA or TLJ that could flesh out this sequence a little more? In my dreams, I’d love to see a wipe to seeing Ren’s TIE fighter fly toward the planet, and THEN establishing shot of the island, and THEN Rey burning the TIE.
As it is I stuck with the original music and used the corresponding (but different) moment in the OST for the original establishing shot used later. I like that the new shot isn’t a repeat of a shot from before, but I do agree it’s one of many abrupt cuts in the movie as it was.
- In Kylo Ren’s mask montage, Rey says, “You’re a creature in a mask” at 18:08. But it’s hard to hear over the music. It’s an important line. Could it be moved just a second or two later so it is more audible?
If DominicCobb could make that change I’ll use it. I have the entire scene as a single clip so I couldn’t modify it. I could probably find which channels the line is in, and raise the volume slightly for that line.
- I’m a big fan of the Knights of Ren dialogue. I do think you should consider adding one of the lines in the helmet rebuilding scene, but that’s just my opinion.
I really think a subtle approach to their added voices works better in the final film, but I also like all their added lines in the demo reel.
If you’re reading, Burbin, the first chance idea would only affect sync for two or three subtitled lines. So if you sync them to the current workprint, I can easily just readjust those couple lines once you get me the subtitle files.