I like it - the mouth sync was a bit soft in the prequels with Jar Jar and Watto anyway, so I’m not sure it’s a dealbreaker. I’d suggest moving the Huttese line to earlier, when he first mentions Cleig Lars, then Anakin’s “I’d like to know,” then “he married her.”
I’ve tried it that way around. The audio cuts are a little squiffier than in the original but I just wanted to see what people think about this ordering. Now I’ve watched it a few times I feel like we may need to repurpose some of the lines from earlier to “Believe it or not, I heard he … married her” to pad it out a little.
edit: Here are both versions with the “believe it or not”.
edit2: realized that I probably needed to more than move some shots around. We now have redundant line near the end. This is what I get for trying to do this while also running around after a toddler! Will fix it in a bit. But at least it’s good for seeing the new placement.
edit 3: Here is another go for both versions and an attempt to remove the redundant lines near the end of the second version. Audio is now far from perfect but, again, this is more of a proof of concept. I think the “believe it or not” doesn’t work in the first version so I’ve removed it there but kept it in the second.