I was finally able to watch your edit, starting with Chapter 1. I wanted to say that overall I loved this edit, and thought you did a very good job. Though I do have a few criticisms that I hope come across as constructive! As the positives far outweigh any of the negatives.
Awesome, thanks so much. This seems like exactly the type of feedback I’m looking for when I go back through to release a v2.
A Small one that I had was the removal of Mando learning how to ride the Blurg. I didn’t have an issue with this from a story perspective, just that for me from where the scene was cut it felt like… the viewer was missing something. Perhaps it’s cause I’m used to the original, but it felt a bit too much like the scene cut halfway through the middle of a scene to me.
I took another look and I do agree with you on the scene feeling like something was missing, so I reworked the transition with the visuals and audio. The problem was the abruptness at which Din was walking in the next scene indicating that something had occurred to agitate him, so by changing the shot and soundtrack between the events we no longer see that agitation and feel like we missed something.
Let me know if that looks better to you!
Similarly to this, I liked the idea of the Mudhorn scene change, though this one didn’t work as well for me. It seemed like the Mudhorn “spawned” out of nowhere almost, and some of the cuts have Mando all muddied and beat up, and the next cut has Mando looking clean and uninjured. Perhaps there would be a way to show more of the Mudhorn scenes without the entire Jawa subplot to avoid these few issues mentioned.
In the same way, I have tried to reconstruct some of the shots around here to make the appearance of the Mudhorn more ominous and happen in a way that seems less like it “spawned”. I think the back and forth cuts I added in here help us see that Din notices it first so the viewer has a better clue that something is approaching them offscreen until we see the beast ourselves. I also adjusted all scenes to keep consistency with the armor damage. Again, let me know if this looks better to you.
The next issue I personally found was on the farm world. I LOVE the idea of what you did here, and it worked 90% of the time for me. It’s possible I just missed what the scene was trying to say. But with the new added context, or I guess removal of context that Mando is supposed to be defending the town, it felt very weird to me that Mando seemed to randomly ask the two men who approached him at night at the Razor Crest for their credits for no reason other than to bring Cara Dune along. It just felt weird that he was able to ask for their credits with nothing in return.
That’s a good point, I have adjusted the shots and voicelines in this scene to rectify that. It now should appear as though Din is more proactive in his request both to the villagers for housing, and for bringing Cara along as extra protection for Grogu while also giving her the refuge she desires as well. He pays her with his own credits now.
I also found it a bit odd that the Widow at the farm told Mando “thank you” as he finally left. As from what we saw (unless I’m missing something) he didn’t do anything except take payment to lie low there for awhile? and never did anything for them.
Another good catch, thanks. This scene is easily fixed by simply removing that dialogue and letting them look at each other, wondering what life they could’ve had together. Glad to know this whole village idea worked in general though and with these couple touch ups it should play out without a hitch now!
Final thing, maybe I’m crazy but it almost feels like there’s some sort of filter over the video itself. I could just be seeing things, or it could be because the file size. I’m unsure but it seems like the colors are different than what’s on Disney+, as well as it seems there’s some Aliasing on small lines.
I didn’t do anything with the colors or anything like that, but I can try for a higher quality render next time and see if that does it.
- a very small thing that’s not really a big issue. Is the credit cards at the end reference now cut scenes. Not a big deal but thought I’d mention everything I could think of.
Yep, I’m aware of some inconsistency of credits/intro cards throughout each chapter and will be going through all of those to unify the technical presentation in the v2’s.
I hope nothing came across as too critical, as besides those few things I loved every other change and thought it was seamless. I’m especially looking forward to Chapter 2 now!
Not at all, that feedback was very helpful and I hope the fixes look better. I’ll finish up Chapter 4 soon and then render this v2 once a couple other people leave reviews too.