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The Mandalorian Episode I: The whole season as a classical Star Wars movie (WIP) — Page 6

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The only good thing about making it tatooine would be merging that sequence with Fennic’s. Story wise, that doesn’t quite work though. Finnic has to be after he decides to keep the child, which would make combining the planets awkward.

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Hal 9000 said:

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I feel Tattooine has been done to death in the ever shrinking SW galaxy. It’s refreshing with a new location.

Just my opinion of course

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Chase Adams said:

Honestly what were they thinking when they made TROS and The Mandalorian BOTH feature a new desert planet. At least making it Tatooine eliminates one of them.

I mean, aren’t desert planets more likely to exist? As sand is just tiny rocks?

That aside, the reason is because it evokes the imagery of A New Hope. Both were incredibly nostalgic, though in very different ways. That nostalgia is a big reason why though.

It’s also cheaper to shoot on a “desert” because there’s less likely to be any real world interference, and there are less set pieces to believably recreate (bringing trees into the Stagecraft set is harder than some sand…)

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JakeRyan17 said:

Chase Adams said:

Honestly what were they thinking when they made TROS and The Mandalorian BOTH feature a new desert planet. At least making it Tatooine eliminates one of them.

I mean, aren’t desert planets more likely to exist? As sand is just tiny rocks?

I mean, you’re right. Most of the planets in real life that aren’t gas giants are probably just desert planets, but I don’t see anyone complaining about that. I can picture the angry Reddit comments already:

“Astronomers just discovered a new exoplanet, and it turns out it’s ANOTHER desert planet. Seriously God, get some originality! The planets just haven’t been the same since Neptune was discovered, now it’s all just lame copies!”

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StarkillerAG said:

JakeRyan17 said:

Chase Adams said:

Honestly what were they thinking when they made TROS and The Mandalorian BOTH feature a new desert planet. At least making it Tatooine eliminates one of them.

I mean, aren’t desert planets more likely to exist? As sand is just tiny rocks?

I mean, you’re right. Most of the planets in real life that aren’t gas giants are probably just desert planets, but I don’t see anyone complaining about that. I can picture the angry Reddit comments already:

“Astronomers just discovered a new exoplanet, and it turns out it’s ANOTHER desert planet. Seriously God, get some originality! The planets just haven’t been the same since Neptune was discovered, now it’s all just lame copies!”

That’s hilarious, and yeah… I think the tough thing is that for each filmmaker it’s nostalgic. But as a viewer, we’ve been subjected to each of their nostalgia. It’s far more repetitive for us than them.

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Sooooooo… its finished!!!

Just in time to render a HQ version to take on holiday with me next week and study the final product.

Should be set for an early August release.

Here is the final alterations list:

Classical Star Wars Opening Crawl and Pan sequence.

Chapter 1
Cut first 21 minutes of Chapter 1…. includes Mytherol bounty capture scene and all scenes on Nevarro.
Crawl pans to manufactured Razorcrest hyperspace exit merging into the approach to Arvala-7.
Arvala-7 approach re-scored using “Face to Face”.
Cut head-on shot of Mando in the cockpit to add impact to his “reveal” exit from the Razorcrest.
Trimmed Razorcrest exit sequence to speed up pacing.
Extended Mando/Kuill hut scene by reversing a shot of Kuill and adding in “you are a Mandalorian, your ancestors rode the great Mythosaur’. This line now cuts to Mando mounting and riding the Blurg.
Cut all but last 10 seconds of the ‘learning to ride Blurg’ scene.
Trimmed scene of IG getting shot as the CGI looks too animated.
Cut exchange between IG and Mando where IG runs a diagnostic.
Cut Mando shooting enemy as they enter the building.
Used a reversed shot to extend the pause between the blaster shot and IG falling to the ground.
Re-scored the child reveal using “Farewell” to give a more natural transition into the first scene of chapter 2.

Chapter 2
Rebuild sound mix to remove music from Trandoshan scene.
All Jawa scenes cut.
Transition straight from Trandoshan scene to Mando walking to Mudhorn valley.
Rescored transition using “The Hangar” and “The Egg".
Mudhorn scene re-cut so that Mudhorn is out of the cave as Mando walks into the valley.
Slo-motion edits when Mando is dazed have been cut.
Mudhorn scene cuts to scene where Mando is repairing himself and his armour.
Altered soundtrack of Mando repairing scene to transition better into the walking montage.
Transition to Kuill homestead scene.
Audio rebuilt to allow add in of discussion between Kuill and Mando about the child’s force ability (added from cut Jawa-related scene).
Cut child eating creature scene.
End of scene rescored using “Celebration”.
Transition from Kuill’s camp to Razorcrest.
Rebuilt audio of Mando leaving Arvala to allow a re-score of the scene - rescored with “Trashed Crest”.
Cut to Kuill-IG reprogram scene from Chapter 7. Audio rebuilt to remove Kuill narration and score extended using “Reprogram”. Reprogram scene upto the point where IG awakens is used, rest is cut.

Chapter 3
Added Razorcrest cockpit shot of hyperspace exit from chapter 6 and immediately cut to hyperspace exit shot from chapter 3.
Cut Grief Carga line “I don’t know if he wants to eat it or hang it on his wall, but he’s getting very ansy”.
Cut transition wipe as Mando walks through town.
When Mando meets the Client added “Beskar?” and “Go ahead, its real” from Chapter 1.
Added scene from Chapter 1 where Mando leaves the Client’s office including the line “the Beskar belongs back into the hands of a Mandalorian……”. Shots reused to hide the fact that Mando doesn’t have a beskar pauldron.
Rebuilt audio to allow smooth music transition to Mando walking back through town.
Added armourer lines from Chapter 1 “this is from the great purge… it is good it is back from the tribe”.
Cut Armourer “This would be in order for your station”.
Cut Mando “That would be a great honour”.
Insert Armourer/Mando “has your signet been revealed….not yet” from Chapter 1.
Cut Mando/Armourer exchange about whistling birds.
Cut whistling birds from the armour sequence.
Add Cantina patron scene from Chapter 1 to Cantina intro sequence.
Add Grief Carga/Mando exposition dialogue from Chapter 1…. referring to Bounty hunter guild using cuts from Chapter 3.
Cut section of stormtrooper search “We’ll flush him out”.
Cut scene where Mando is captured inside the client’s office and uses whistling birds.
Removed wipe before tracking fobs activate.
Shortened Grief Carga/Mando final confrontation scene to shorten the 2 excessive pauses.
Re-scored the Razorcrest escape using “Nightriders” to increase tension.
Cut the flying Mandalorian next to the Razorcrest.
Cut the Mando passing the ball to the child.
Added clip from Chapter 6 of “In cockpit hyperspace jump”.
Added clip from Chapter 6 of Mando handing the ball to the child so it now happens with the Razorcrest in hyperspace.
Moved Grief Carga survival scene to here to give a tense escape from Nevarro and to provide a bridge scene between the Razorcrest entering and exiting hyperspace.

Chapter 4
Added Hyperspace exit from Chapter 6.
Cut opening Raiders scene.
Cut line “I’m gonna need one more thing, give me those credits”.
Cut training montage.
Cut Cara line “I hope the plan worked”.
Trimmed AT-ST arrival scene to speed things up.
Cut Cara line “Its stopped”.
Cut Mando line “you got this”.
Cut the villager attack “its now or never” clip.
Cut child eating a frog scene.
Cut Mando “world travels fast”.
Recut Mando/villager kissing scene to show that Mando wants to stay and that he was about to let the villager remove his helmet until the gunshot.
Trim end scene to transition before dramatic music starts.

Chapter 5
Removed

Chapter 6
Removed

Chapter 7
Cut Grief Karga line “I guess we can call it even”.
Added in space battle scene from start of Chapter 5, but cut the severe engine damage from the sequence, removed Mando “that’s my line” and cut any image of Tatooine.
Cut down approach to Arvala-7.
Cut IG reprogram scene… first part edited and used between Chapters 2 and 3.
Kut Kuill “or whom I should serve”.
Cut Grief Karga “It appears introductions are in order. It appears we have both brought a security detail”.
Cut Grief Karga “I’m glad this matter will be put to test once and for all”.
Cut some sitting around the campfire.
Cut Grief Karga lines about the child being a carnivore and the Empire paying a King’s ransom.
Trimmed Bird attack scene.
Cut Grief Karga line “he’s trying to eat me”.
Cut Mando line to Kuill about engaging ground security protocols.
Trim Mando/Cara/Karga approach to biker scouts.
Move Mando reposte “on your wall” until after they are allowed passage through the checkpoint.
Cut Grief Karga “go with it”.
Cut First Kuill on Blurg clip.
Cut Client “libation” line.
Cut Client line “we all will be quiet”.
Cut Cara “you said 4” line.
Cut Client line “Currently it is sleeping” and Gideon line “you might want to check again” so that when the client says he has the child he is immediately shot.
Cut third Kuill on Blurg clip so that the Gideon arrival scene is uninterrupted.
Trim Kuill v Biker scout death clips just to reveal Kuill lying on the ground

Chapter 8
Cut entire Biker Scout scene.
Cut Mando Line “I’m out of charges”.
Cut Gideon proposal. Now plays out as though Gideon thinks the child is there.
Trim scene of IG coming through the town.
Cut Mando asking Cara to leave him.
Cut intro shot of Flametrooper.
Cut Mando saying he’s not going to make it.
Cut the Mando/IG “get it over with” exchange.
Trim searching in the sewers scene.
Cut Mando line “you go, I can’t leave it like this”.
Cut first part of flashback scene.
Cut Mando “you wish me to train this thing”.
Cut armourer “it is too weak, it would die”.
Add in “I was once a foundling…… I know” lines from Chapter 1.
Cut Cara line about an escape plan.
Cut dialogue where Armourer gives Mando directions to the lava river.
Cut Mando line about staying.
Remove transition wipes either side of armourer v stormtroopers scene.
Cut Grief Karga line “There’s the larva river”.
Remove wipe as boat travels along larva river.
Cut Mando Line “That supersedes your manufacturer’s protocol… right”.
Cut IG-88 line “This is correct”.
Cut Mando line “Grab a blaster and help us shoot our way out”.
Cut Mando line “No, we need you”.
Cut IG Line “There is nothing to be sad about, I’ve never been alone”.
Cut Mando line “I’m not sad”.
Cut IG Line “yes you are, I’m a nurse droid. I’ve analysed your voice”.
Added Razorcrest entering space clip from Chapter 3 to extend exit sequence.
Used Score from Chapter 3 to merge into Star Wars theme for the classical “Iris Out” transition to credits.
Cut Moff Gideon survival reveal scene and added as post credits scene.

Current Project: The Mandalorian Episode 1 - A Vergence in the Force

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I wasn’t happy with the opening crawl, so I’ve been playing around with it. I’ve settled on this. Any comments?

Following the Battle of Endor the NEW REPUBLIC has restored peace to the core systems, but a power vacuum has plunged the outer rim into chaos.

IMPERIAL REMNANTS have formed in the shadows. They have taken control of distant worlds as they search for a mysterious asset that could return them to power.

Commissioned by the Bounty Hunter Guild and given only the asset’s age and the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches its last known location…

Current Project: The Mandalorian Episode 1 - A Vergence in the Force

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smudger9 said:

I wasn’t happy with the opening crawl, so I’ve been playing around with it. I’ve settled on this. Any comments?

Following the Battle of Endor the NEW REPUBLIC has restored peace to the core systems, but a power vacuum has plunged the outer rim into chaos.

IMPERIAL REMNANTS have formed in the shadows. They have taken control of distant worlds as they search for a mysterious asset that could return them to power.

Commissioned by the Bounty Hunter Guild and given only the asset’s age and the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches its last known location…

I’d adjust the opening paragraph to focus on the Imperial Remnant. You don’t want to focus on the New Republic since they’re absent from the story.

Following the death of EMPEROR PALPATINE at the Battle of Endor, the IMPERIAL REMNANT has splintered with various war lords casting shadows over systems throughout the galaxy.

Despite their victory, the newly formed GALACTIC REPUBLIC doesn’t have the strength or numbers to bring peace to the entire galaxy. Many have turned to BOUNTY HUNTERS to enforce justice.

Commissioned by THE GUILD, bounty hunters are given an age and tracking beacons to the chain codes of targets. With the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches the last known location of his prey…

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Or:

Following the death of EMPEROR PALPATINE at the Battle of Endor, a power vacuum has plunged the galaxy into chaos. The IMPERIAL REMNANT have become war lords ruling over the splintered galaxy.

The newly-formed GALACTIC REPUBLIC has failed to bring any but the core systems to order, leaving the rest of the galaxy without hope of justice. Many have turned to BOUNTY HUNTERS to enforce being about order to the Outer Rim.

Commissioned by THE GUILD, bounty hunters are given an age and tracking beacons to the chain codes of targets. With the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches the last known location of his prey…

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JakeRyan17 said:

Or:

Following the death of EMPEROR PALPATINE at the Battle of Endor, a power vacuum has plunged the galaxy into chaos. The IMPERIAL REMNANT have become war lords ruling over the splintered galaxy.

The newly-formed GALACTIC REPUBLIC has failed to bring any but the core systems to order, leaving the rest of the galaxy without hope of justice. Many have turned to BOUNTY HUNTERS to enforce being about order to the Outer Rim.

Commissioned by THE GUILD, bounty hunters are given an age and tracking beacons to the chain codes of targets. With the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches the last known location of his prey…

Too many capital letters for me but in general I like it 😉

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JakeRyan17 said:

Or:

Following the death of EMPEROR PALPATINE at the Battle of Endor, a power vacuum has plunged the galaxy into chaos. The IMPERIAL REMNANT have become war lords ruling over the splintered galaxy.

The newly-formed GALACTIC REPUBLIC has failed to bring any but the core systems to order, leaving the rest of the galaxy without hope of justice. Many have turned to BOUNTY HUNTERS to enforce being about order to the Outer Rim.

Commissioned by THE GUILD, bounty hunters are given an age and tracking beacons to the chain codes of targets. With the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches the last known location of his prey…

Thanks for that, some great ideas.

But don’t forget that they normally get more than a target’s age…

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Here’s a mashup:

Following the death of EMPEROR PALPATINE at the Battle of Endor, the NEW REPUBLIC has restored peace to the core systems, but a power vacuum has plunged the outer rim into chaos.

IMPERIAL REMNANTS have formed in the shadows. They have taken control of distant worlds as they search for a mysterious asset that could return them to power.

Commissioned by THE GUILD, bounty hunters are only given tracking beacons and the age of the target. With the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches the last known location…

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I still would wait to mention the New Republic until the second paragraph. The Imperial Remnant is the prime antagonist, and The Mandalorian is the protagonist. They are who should be in the first and third paragraph, with other elements of the setting between. The New Republic is too anecdotal to the story, even with the whole season. I think you should, like story does, kinda brush off the New Republic as insignificant.

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JakeRyan17 said:

I still would wait to mention the New Republic until the second paragraph. The Imperial Remnant is the prime antagonist, and The Mandalorian is the protagonist. They are who should be in the first and third paragraph, with other elements of the setting between. The New Republic is too anecdotal to the story, even with the whole season. I think you should, like story does, kinda brush off the New Republic as insignificant.

Exactly. We dont need to exain too much the situation in the Galaxy in the opening crawl.

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szopman said:

JakeRyan17 said:

I still would wait to mention the New Republic until the second paragraph. The Imperial Remnant is the prime antagonist, and The Mandalorian is the protagonist. They are who should be in the first and third paragraph, with other elements of the setting between. The New Republic is too anecdotal to the story, even with the whole season. I think you should, like story does, kinda brush off the New Republic as insignificant.

Exactly. We dont need to exain too much the situation in the Galaxy in the opening crawl.

I think the state of the galaxy is necessary, but the focus should be more on establishing the imperial remnant, explaining why no one else is around, then introduce the bounty hunters and specifically the Mandalorian.

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JakeRyan17 said:

szopman said:

JakeRyan17 said:

I still would wait to mention the New Republic until the second paragraph. The Imperial Remnant is the prime antagonist, and The Mandalorian is the protagonist. They are who should be in the first and third paragraph, with other elements of the setting between. The New Republic is too anecdotal to the story, even with the whole season. I think you should, like story does, kinda brush off the New Republic as insignificant.

Exactly. We dont need to exain too much the situation in the Galaxy in the opening crawl.

I think the state of the galaxy is necessary, but the focus should be more on establishing the imperial remnant, explaining why no one else is around, then introduce the bounty hunters and specifically the Mandalorian.

Couldnt agree more 😉

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Would be cool to do something in the style of Solo’s crawl. "It is a lawless time…

Peace is a lie
There is only passion…

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I find smudger’s text abosult fitting, so I only changed it slightly.
Here is my suggestion:

Five years have passed since the death of the Emperor.
The newly-formed GALACTIC REPUBLIC has restored peace to the core systems, but a power vacuum has plunged the outer rim into chaos.

IMPERIAL REMNANTS have formed in the shadows. They have taken control of distant worlds as they search for a mysterious asset that could return them to power.

Commissioned by the Bounty Hunter Guild and given only the asset’s age and the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches its last known location…

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smudger9 said:

I wasn’t happy with the opening crawl, so I’ve been playing around with it. I’ve settled on this. Any comments?

Following the Battle of Endor the NEW REPUBLIC has restored peace to the core systems, but a power vacuum has plunged the outer rim into chaos.

IMPERIAL REMNANTS have formed in the shadows. They have taken control of distant worlds as they search for a mysterious asset that could return them to power.

Commissioned by the Bounty Hunter Guild and given only the asset’s age and the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches its last known location…

I would suggest maybe changing “imperial remnants have formed in the shadows” to either linger in the shadows or dwell in the shadows… I think it sounds a little more sinister & menacing

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smudger9 said:

I wasn’t happy with the opening crawl, so I’ve been playing around with it. I’ve settled on this. Any comments?

Following the Battle of Endor the NEW REPUBLIC has restored peace to the core systems, but a power vacuum has plunged the outer rim into chaos.

IMPERIAL REMNANTS have formed in the shadows. They have taken control of distant worlds as they search for a mysterious asset that could return them to power.

Commissioned by the Bounty Hunter Guild and given only the asset’s age and the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches its last known location…

I would suggest maybe changing “imperial remnants have formed in the shadows” to either linger in the shadows or dwell in the shadows… I think it sounds a little more sinister & menacing

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Cut Moff Gideon survival reveal scene and added as post credits scene.

doesn’t this sort of blow the whole “classic Star Wars” vibe you’re going for all by itself?

It seems sort of jarring to adhere so strongly to main saga convention and then make a Marvel gimmick the last thing anyone sees.

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Broom Kid said:

Cut Moff Gideon survival reveal scene and added as post credits scene.

doesn’t this sort of blow the whole “classic Star Wars” vibe you’re going for all by itself?

It seems sort of jarring to adhere so strongly to main saga convention and then make a Marvel gimmick the last thing anyone sees.

I feel like you could put it after Mando & crew fly off, but before they say their goodbyes to each other. Give it a similar placement/feel to Vader spinning off in A New Hope or Dooku delivering the Death Star Plans in Attack of the Clones.

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Excited for this, I’ve only seen one episode of The Mandalorian and it was the Bill Burr bottle episode so I plan to take in the season through this edit first as soon as it’s released, thanks for all the work everyone put in so far!

“The ability to destroy a planet is insignificant next to the power of the Force.” - DV

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Broom Kid said:

Cut Moff Gideon survival reveal scene and added as post credits scene.

doesn’t this sort of blow the whole “classic Star Wars” vibe you’re going for all by itself?

It seems sort of jarring to adhere so strongly to main saga convention and then make a Marvel gimmick the last thing anyone sees.

Not at all. It’s removal means that the end scene is Much more like a classical Star was movie with a long, music driven closing scene. I was originally intending to cut it completely. Putting it at the end is just a way of keeping it in the movie In some form. When I view it I’ll be ignoring it.

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