Just finished watching this, very nice indeed! I didn’t even notice most of the cuts and restructuring.
Obviously the Mudhorn is a sticking point, but I don’t see a good way out of that, but I had a couple of notes for the forest planet Sorgan in case you ever felt like revisiting this project:
Move fighter attack on Mando to just before he goes to Sorgan
Cut AT-ST plot point and extended battle, instead just show a brief battle on the raider building which ends with the explosive.
Have Mando receive transmission telling of final mission before he lifts off from Sorgan to prevent the quick trip back. This may take some creative editing to make it seem like he’s still on the ground.
Anyway, great job all around!
Thanks for the feedback. Much appreciated. Just curious as to how you found the re-scored music transitions. I find it really difficult to self assess re-scored segments after I’ve listened to them so many times during the editing process.
In terms of your points:
I totally agree with the idea of having the Karga transmission on Sorgan. The footage is there to do it… establishing shot of the Razor on Sorgan, shot of Mando putting the child into bed from episode 5, shot of Mando entering the cockpit and sitting down. However, I don’t have the program, skill and patience to rotoscope out the space background from the scene and replace it with a Sorgan background.
If I had been able to do that then I would definitely have moved the space battle to before Sorgan.
I put it between the Sorgan scenes for 2 reasons. Firstly to give a spacer scene between Mando leaving Sorgan and returning. Secondly, his decision to return to Nevarro is one of the 2 major plot points in the series (the other being the rescue of the child), and I wanted to give him a better reason for agreeing to go back into the lion’s den other than the word of Karga. I feel the way I’ve structured it suggests that he wasn’t going to return, but changed his mind after the space attack.
The Sorgan scenes I messed around with a lot, going from heavily edited and shortened, to no editing at all. at first, like you, I wanted to shorten it as much as possible. However, when the whole movie is viewed the structure doesn’t feel right. Chapter 4 has a lot of weight on it because it represents the middle act. When you consider that the first act is half of chapter 1, half of chapter 2 and all of chapter 3, and the final act is chapters 7 and 8. If you edit out half of chapter 4 it just feels too short. It’s not the best episode in the series, but in terms of development of our main characters its pretty important and it hs slower pace to it. Hence I left in as much as I could tolerate.