The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE] — Page 102

I watched S01E09 & E10 of this edit yesterday and I have to say it really is excellent to see the story presented like that. Fantastic season 1 finale, really enjoyed myself. Thanks again for your hard work editing this show Eddie.

Hi Eddie, I originally watched your edits back in 2022 and left a number of feedback posts, though they were right before you took a break from the project. I’ve recently gotten on a Star Wars kick again and decided to take another look at your edits, since there seem to have been changes since I last saw them.

Are you still looking for feedback, or do you consider this project to be fully wrapped up?

Hi! I’m currently at season 2 episode 4 and I’ve been enjoying a lot the series so far. It truly is a refocused of the original series, your edits make it feel more like a seasonal series with a real progression in the story and the character development. It still feels like an anthology but with more sense and not just stories scattered like the original. I’m really a fan of the text introductions, helps a lot to fill the voides between the episodes.
My thoughts of season 1:

Best episode: S01E08 Children of Night. Great pacing, it didnt feel like a very long episode.

Best editing: SO1E09 & S01E10. Very well done season finale, the intercuts of the different stories where great. Nothing felt out of placed, I’ve seen the original episodes and I can say that it works much better the way it’s presented in your edit, without all the Ziro stuff.

Could be better: S01E01 The New Padawan. I know the episodes (and movie) based off where bad but the first minutes felt disconnected from the rest of the episode. I loved to see the Ventress Introduction but it felt so quick and unncesary for the rest of the episode. Maybe for a future edit it could be well to add more context or scenes for that.

As I said, im currently at season 2. Im not done with the season but i must say that the S02E03 is the episode I havent enjoyed as much from all the series so far. This episode does feel like a combination of a lot of things that dont intertwined perfectly. Like, why the intro says that Ahsoka is secreatly teaching in Mandalore but in the rest of the episode everyone knows. And suddenly Padme doesn’t appear without explanation and then comes to show again for the ending scene, which felt unnecesary to me. I think is the episode that most need of a re-edit (at least till this episode which is the last one i saw)

Anyway, the series its very well done, Im impressed with all the work, improves a lot the structure of the clone wars, and some episodes that were bad originally but with a good plot were improved with your edit. Looking forward to see what comes next for me in the series.

P.S. English is not my mother tongue. Sorry if I made some mistakes in my review. Btw, the english subtitles for the series has helped me a lot, thank you all for that.

Ok, well I’ll just jot my thoughts down as I watch some of the episodes (I’m jumping around a bit). I’ll mainly be commenting on parts where the seams of the edit is noticeable in one way or another:

The New Padawan:

I thought this overall looks great. A lot of the problems I had with the version from early 2022 look fixed. The only small thing that stuck out to me is that at 18:07 you can tell that Yoda’s lips keep moving to finish the sentence after “Then go with you she will…”. I’m not sure if it’d be possible to cut away to make it less noticeable.

Children of the Night

At 5:26, it feels a bit unnatural for the conversation to cut off suddenly like that. Even though I don’t really remember the original episode, I could tell there was supposed to be another beat of “But sir, we’d hit Ventress”. It’s a minor point, and mainly rooted in script writing convention rather than editing itself.

By cutting out Asajj telling the salvagers to bring her to Dathomir, and their response of “nothing there but witches”, the audience is left not knowing where they are or who these people are when Asajj goes there. I assume this was intentional to build mystery, but generally it’s good to know the name of the planet we’re on or at least a general idea of who the people we’re seeing are. That brief intro makes sure the viewer doesn’t think they’re supposed to already know who/what they are. I assume that’s why the original episode included those lines. The twist is still preserved for the few minutes before we realize that Asajj is one of them.

It’s jarring to go straight from the Dathomir brother selection to the final test. The dialog/pacing feels unnatural (“let the game begin” isn’t so much of a phrase as “let the games begin”, and you have one scene end with the word “begin” immediately followed by the next scene beginning with the same word.) I see in the notes that you wanted to focus more on just Savage and Feral, but I think something is lost by not showing them making their way through the trials. Them being the only ones selected is a bit too coincidental, plus the trials themselves are just really fun.

Retribution:

It’s a little awkward at first having Kit Fisto showing up be Asajj’s doing, since nothing in the episode proper references it, only the opening text (which most people gloss over). It’s not until you edit in the dialogue later that a connection is established. The feel very separate. I don’t know if there’s anything that could realistically be done to remedy that; is there any reason in particular you felt it worked better here rather than as its original place as the follow up to Assassin?

4:55 If the new plot is that Asajj leaked Grievous’ lair, then why does Fisto not realize until later that that’s what this place is?

11:20 There is a noticeable difference in sound quality where you insert Dooku’s voice referencing Asajj; I assume that it was taken from a clip where he’s in person instead of over a holocall. Adding a bit of distortion might make it fit in better.

15:55 Similar problem as above

The clip of Savage at the end creates a weird pacing issue where we haven’t heard about him at all, and then at the very end of an episode focused on the sisters we suddenly see him again with barely any context. I think it fits far better as the intro to Brothers, as that episode’s focus is on him.

The music at the end over Dooku’s monologue that leads into the credits feels tonally out of place

Monsters:

I guess my only real comment is that by cutting out the episode Bounty, you miss a lot of important character development for Asajj.

whoops Sorry @EddieDean I made the same private topic twice u can ignore the one sent at 10-Apr-2025, 6:27 AM, & rely on the one I sent at 10-Apr-2025, 6:25 AM, thank you.

Sadly it will not be the canned Clone Wars Arc.

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=vyVINMIl3kU

This animated preview of Son of Dathomir could be something to pay attention to as it could be very relevant for this edit.