This is the first script of the first episode of my PT rewrite. It is the first script I do, so it's hard to pass the summary into script.
I will try to post every week, constructive criticism and advice is always welcome.
Star Wars: Episode I - The Clone Wars Takes place 22 BBY.
EXT . SPACE - TITLE CARD
A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away....
A vast sea of stars serves as the backdrop for the main title, followed by a rollup, which crawls into infinity.
EPISODE I THE CLONE WARS
We are in a period of galactic war. The Mandalorians, a race of warriors believed extinct by the Galactic Republic, have discovered the secret of cloning and created an army of clones to overthrow the Republic.
In response the Galactic Senate has created THE GRAND ARMY OF THE REPUBLIC an army of volunteers led by the Jedi Knights, the guardians of peace and justice in the galaxy.
The agents of the Republic have obtained information on the possible location of the main plant cloning, the Jedi Council has sent a Jedi Knight to investigate the planet....
PAN DOWN
Mandalorian ships block appears around a blue planet. Suddenly from hyperspace appears a Jedi Starfight Red, which is detached from its base and heads toward the planet appears. In the cokpit this Obi-Wan Kenobi, 33 years old, has has medium blonde hair, beard, pale skin, and blue eyes.
INT. JEDI STARFIGHT RED - COCKSPIT
OBI- WAN
There it is , R4. Kamino in its right place . R4 enable stealth mode.
EXT. SPACE
Having activated the stealth fighters Mandalorians can not detect Kenobi and this passes through the blockade.
The Jedi Starfighter of Obi -Wan descends down to the atmosphere of the planet.
EXT. KAMINO
The fighter lands on the outskirts of what appears to be a city-factory. Obi- Wan leaves and goes to the city-factory.
INT. PLANT CLONING - KAMINO
Inside the plant is full of similarly clad soldiers with the armor of Boba Fett. They all go to town, other men sitting at computers and Commander Reelan , is a man in his nearly 40 years of age. This inspecting all screens. A soldier is surprised by something.
CLONE TROOPER 1
Commander Reelan, we detected anormal readings in blocking movement.
Reelan approaches.
REELAN
It was one of our fighters?
CLONE TROOPER 1
No, sir. None of us has been authorized to enter or leave the system.
A red light starts flashing on a keyboard.
CLONE TROOPER 2
Commander Reelan , an incoming call by Lord Sidious.
REELAN
Pass it on .
A hologram appears in the center of the operating tabl . The hologram is a figure covered in a black robe, he looks just the chin and mouth.
REELAN
What is it, Lord Sidious ?
SIDIOUS
Increase the security of the planet, Commander.
REELAN
Why, if I may to ask?
SIDIOUS
I have learned that a Jedi Knight from Coruscant has been sent to investigate the planet.
REELAN
That's impossible, my lord. The Jedi do not know of the existence of this planet.
SIDIOUS
(intimidating)
You are suggesting that I am wrong ?
REELAN
(scared)
No sir, i give the alarm right now and put men to look for the Jedi.
SIDIOUS
I hope so, Commander for his own good. If the Jedi discover the plant cloning and carries the information to Coruscant, we will have a big problem.
REELAN
Yes, Lord Sidious.
The hologram fades. Reelan approaches a clone trooper .
REELAN
Give the order to all troops to search that Jedi Knight, warns that he must be eliminated.
CLONE TROOPER
Yes , Commander.
I really like the script...In this script the way your molding the characters is excellent. I'm waiting for second episode.
Thanks
EXT. PLANT CLONING
Obi-Wan clones dodging patrols guarding outside the facility and get to what looks like a large factory.
Obi-Wan takes a binoculars and placed on the eyes.
OBI-WAN
These facilities are as the cloning plants we've seen. But this is much bigger.
Obi-Wan zooms and looks towards the patrols are gathering in plant cloning.
OBI-WAN
I have a bad feeling about this.
The clones begin to scatter, making it impossible Kenobi enter the plant. Obi-Wan is saved binoculars and begins to recede.
EXT. OUTSIDE PLANT CLONING
Obi-Wan is directed back to your ship. When he was going to mount a squad of clone troopers will discover him.
CLONE TROOPER
There it is!
The clone troopers open fire on Obi-Wan. Obi-Wan manages to get onto your ship and take off under fire from the clones.
CLONE TROOPER
Inform Commander Reelan the Jedi goes to the blockade.
EXT. SPACE - KAMINO
Obi-Wan's Jedi fighter leaves the planet Kamino and heads toward the Mandalorian blockade formed with large ships and small coming out of them.
INT. JEDI FIGHTER - COCKPIT
OBI-WAN
Active shields, R4.
Beeps R4.
EXT. SPACE - KAMINO
The Mandalorian ships start shooting at Obi-Wan is going at full speed down the block.
Mandalorian ships leaving several commanders ships and chasing Obi-Wan.
Obi-Wan begins to make evasive maneuvers and several ships are destroyed by their own ships.
Obi-Wan gets out of the lock, but a Mandalorian ship gives chase.
INT. JEDI FIGHTER - COCKPIT
OBI-WAN
We'll have to risk it, R4.
Obi-Wan goes to a nearby asteroid.
The Mandalorian ship follows.
EXT. SPACE - ASTEROID FIELD
Obi -Wan and the Mandalorian ship are dodging asteroids.
INT. MANDALORIAN SHIP - COCKPIT
CLONE PILOT
You will not get away so easily, Jedi.
EXT. SPACE - ASTEROID FIELD
He releases a charge wich drifts toward Obi-Wan. As te charge approaches Obi-Wan's fighter, R4 beeps.
INT. JEDI FIGHTER - COCKPIT
OBI- WAN
Sonic charges... Stay alert.
EXT. SPACE - ASTEROID FIELD
Obi-Wan avoids charge then burden on an asteroid hits , causing a big explosion and several asteroids smashing into pieces.
OBI-WAN's fighter dives into the asteroid belt followed by the Mandalorian ship.
Obi-Wan flies through a narrow tunnel in one of the largest asteroids.
OBI-WAN comes out of the asteroid and the Mandalorian ship emerges, chasing after him.
INT. MANDALORIAN SHIP - COCKPIT
CLONE PILOT
I got you, Jedi.
EXT. SPACE - ASTEROID FIELD
The Mandalorian ship shoots against the Jedi fighter.
The flip, roll , ships and spin at an incredible speed, dodging, weaving and firing. They fall from near misses.
INT. JEDI FIGHTER - COCKPIT
OBI-WAN
Oh blast! This is why i hate flying.
EXT. SPACE - ASTEROID FIELD
Bits fly off Obi -Wan fighting as one of the Mandalorian ship missiles gets through.
In the cabin of the Mandalorian ship , the pilot continues to bombard the Jedi clone Hunting laser fire. Obi -Wan deftly dodges but is hit and causing a small explosion.
INT. Mandalorian SHIP - COCKPIT
CLONE PILOT
Now I finish you.
EXT. SPACE - ASTEROID FIELD
The clone pilot pressed a few buttons to open an exterior door Hull and guided aerial torpedo launches . The torpedo follows closely Obi-Wan's fighter.
In the cockpit of Obi -Wan, his skill is pushed to the limit as he throws the ship from one side to another, avoiding large rocks and the torpedo. Then a huge asteroid falls on his way. There seems no wayhe can avoid it.
INT. JEDI FIGHTER - COCKPIT
OBI-WAN
R4, let go containers of spare parts. Drop them!
EXT. SPACE - ASTEROID FIELD
In the cockpit clone is a huge explosion that dwarfs the ship Obi-Wan appears to have hit the asteroid.
INT . MANDALORIAN SHIP - COCKPIT
CLONE PILOT
Jedi neutralized. Repeat , the Jedi has been neutralized . I return to the fleet.
EXT. SPACE - ASTEROID FIELD
The Mandalorian ship turns around and goes to Kamino.
A huge chunk of rock tumbles slowly, thorugh the asteroid belt. Camera Closes, to discover Obi-Wan's fighter hidden in a blasted-out area on the pitted back side of the great rock.
INT. JEDI FIGHTER - COCKPIT
OBI-WAN
Well, R4. Looks like think he bought it.
(he sees the screen'ship and a warning)
We seem to be losing power. Make an full analysis of the damage.
Beeps R4.
Is displayed on the screen of the ship a number of drawings and data .
OBI-WAN
It seems that the hyperdrive is damaged, do not have enough energy to return to Coruscant. We'll have to stop to repair the ship. Do a search of the closest planets, R4.
R4 beeps again.
Three planets appear in the monitor. Obi-Wan watches the monitor and start squeezing the finger at the planets. He stops at one.
OBI- WAN
The closest is Tatooine, it's small, out of the way, poor... the clones has no presence. Upload coordinates , R4. We headed to Tatooine.
R4 beeps again.
EXT. SPACE - ASTEROID FIELD
Obi-Wan's fighter moves out of the back of the asteroid and heads away from the asteroid field.