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Star Wars: A Cloak of Deception

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Old Poster: http://tinyurl.com/jn7evzl

In-progress edit of The Phantom Menace

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List of Changes:

  • Renamed Movie to Naboo Deception
  • Changed Opening Crawl
  • Beginning of the movie is quicker and action-er (is that the right word?)
  • Cut dialogue between droids
  • Queen Amidala’s voice is more squeaky
  • Jedi’s now use short-range teleport on the Droid Control Ship, not Force Speed
  • Removed Obi-Wan’s line “The negotiations were short”
  • Removed several scenes of Gunray on the ship
  • Removed scene of Gunray informing the droids about Jedi
  • Trimmed Jar Jar Binks’s dialogue
  • Removed Jar Jar’s salto into the water
  • Trimmed in-between droid conversation
  • Shortened entrance to Gunga City
  • Shortened dialogue between Qui-Gon and Gungan leader
  • Removed most of the in-unobongo scenes while travelling to Naboo
  • Trimmed Gunray’s dialogue to Amidala
  • Greatly trimmed Jar Jar’s stupid shit during the movie
  • Added one-liner to Obi-Wan when ambushing the droids to compensate for Jar Jar: “Let’s throw these girls a Jedi surprise party”
  • Removed scene of Qui-Gon throwing two droids at a wall
  • Shortened dialogue after droids are taken care off
  • Trimmed dialogue between Qui-Gon and Droid in Hangar
  • Removed Jar Jar scenes during the escape
  • Removed R2D2 being named and commended
  • Removed dialogue between Jar Jar and Padmé
  • Removed all scenes with Darth Sidious
  • Removed Jar Jar stepping in shit
  • Trimmed slapstick in Watto’s shop
  • Anakin’s surname isn’t said anymore throughout the movie
  • Removed mention of Watto being imunne to mind tricks because of his race
  • Removed “Yipee” and trimmed dialogue between Ani and Watto
  • C3PO isn’t reffered by name anymore, nor was he built by Ani
  • Trimmed dinner room dialogue
  • Removed “ITS WORKING, ITS WORKINGGGG”
  • Removed all dialogue spoken by kids on Tatooine
  • Anakin isn’t a virgin birth, but a non-marital birth.
  • Added backdrop music to the hangar scenes
  • Shortened the pod race greatly
  • Less in-pod views during the race
  • No announcer interruptions during the race
  • Removed slapstick during race
  • Added up-beat music to the pod-race
  • Removed Jabba the Hutt
  • Trimmed Anakin’s dialogues with Shmi after winning pod race
  • Removed Anakin talking to C3PO when packing his stuff
  • Re-added a deleted scene to explain why Qui-Gon and Ani are running
  • Trimmed all scenes on Coruscant
  • Removed mentions of midichlorians
  • Removed scene on Anakin being tested, to keep it mystery how Jedi order works.
  • Removed line about Anakin being too old
  • Gungan Leader now rejects Naboo when they ask him for help
  • Radically trimmed Gungan VS Droid battle
  • Anakins actions during finale are no longer accidents, but deliberate
  • Trimmed space battle
  • Darth Maul duel was pieced together, and in turn, made faster and more exciting
  • Obi-Wan kills Darth Maul quicker
  • Trimmed dialogue between Padmé and Gunray
  • Trimmed the ending celebration
  • Digitally replaced every character with Jar Jar Binks
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Are you done yet? It would suck if we all died before you finished.

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Suggestion: Don’t use the same title as Hal. Someone might accidentally download yours and come to this forum to complain.

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The first two items in the list made me laugh. Wish I had considered that second one for my edit. Would have been pretty easy in Audacity.

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I thought you meant our two posts and was looking forward to seeing my suggestion implemented in Audacity.

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towne32 said:

Suggestion: Don’t use the same title as Hal. Someone might accidentally download yours and come to this forum to complain.

I know I’ve made some very poor decisions recently.

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Didn|t notice someone is already using it 😄 sorry. Will change it as soon as I come up with a new title.

Edit: If anyone knows how to edit a title that is

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A workprint is scheduled to release 30th February ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

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The entire thing is now complete, after some mistake-hunting it will be here.

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Awesome. My death got moved up a week so I feared the worst.

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Frink, you slay me. Been nice knowin’ ya.

I know I’ve made some very poor decisions recently.

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New crawl was added, I fixed all of the mistakes (hopefully). The only thing remaining is to render it.

Which might take a while cause im a lazy shit.

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My looming demise doesn’t want excuses, it wants results.